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TOEFL TPO -1 Academic Discussion Writing Sample: Section 1 of 1 Your professor is teaching a class on public policy.Write a post responding to the professor'squestion.

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題型概述

Professor

This week,we will be discussing a shortage ofaffordable housing that exists in many countries.In these places,housing—both apartments (flats)and houses—are expensive,because populationsare growing faster than new housing is beingbuilt.Now,think about places in your country thathave a housing shortage.In your post,I would likeyou to indicate the most effective way for thegovernment to address a housing shortage inyour country.Please explain why you think so.

Student A

In my country,there is a lack of affordable housing in the bigcities.Low-cost housing exists in areas outside of the cities,butthat means workers have long commutes to reach their jobs inthe cities.I recommend that my government create initiativesto encourage the construction of large buildings with manyaffordable apartments in cities.

Student B

Claire's recommendation is fine,but many people prefer to livein a house rather than an apartment,even if they have longercommutes.Living in a house can be quieter and more private.So,I believe my government should give subsidies or tax reliefto construction companies to build small,affordable single-family houses on unused land that surrounds many cities.

考生範例與評分結果

考生範例

From where I stand, taxing on citizens who have houses more than one is the best solution for government to address the housing shortage problem in a country.   To begin with, reasonable taxation can reduce the real estate speculation efficiently. Some people who bought house more than one may use the houses as the financial investors, instead of living. These houses will be sold at a higher price than original price, which lead to a fact that the houses are so expensive that more people who need a house to live can't afford it. And this situation will enhance the housing shortage. However, if the government property taxes on those investors, the price of houses will be down, which means that more people can have a house to live. Due to this, the vacancy houses will be less, the utilization of houses will be incress. So, the housing shortage problem can be released.   Besides, the government can use the money which collection from the taxes to build more houses. One reason that causes the housing shortage is the number of population has been grown so fast, but the number of houses can't keep a balance, which cause the housing shortage problem. So, to solve this problem, government need money to build more houses. And collecting taxes will be incress the financial revenue of government, which can be used in the houses building. In conclusion, the number of houses will be increassed, the problem of housing shortage will be solved.    

評分結果

1. 子项得分

  • Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5

  • Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0

  • Language Use and Grammar: 4.0

2. 预估分数

26. 3 任务完成度

总体来说,你的文章在回应问题和讨论方面做得很好。然而,有一些建议可以帮助你更好地完成任务:

  1. 在提出观点时,可以更具体地解释为什么认为这是最有效的方法。

  2. 可以考虑对其他学生的观点进行评论或者比较,以便更好地参与讨论。

示例:

  1. "To begin with, reasonable taxation can reduce the real estate speculation efficiently." 可以改为 "To begin with, reasonable taxation can reduce the real estate speculation efficiently by discouraging investors from buying multiple properties for profit."

  2. "Besides, the government can use the money which collection from the taxes to build more houses." 可以改为 "Additionally, by comparing this approach to Student A's suggestion of constructing large apartment buildings in cities, taxing multiple property owners provides a more sustainable solution as it addresses both demand and supply issues."

4. 文章结构与组织

文章的结构和组织方面基本上做得很好。然而,有一些建议可以帮助你进一步改进文章结构:

  1. 在引言部分简要介绍其他学生的观点,使读者更容易理解讨论背景。

  2. 在段落之间使用更明确的过渡词或短语,以便更清晰地展示思路。

示例:

  1. "From where I stand, taxing on citizens who have houses more than one is the best solution for government to address the housing shortage problem in a country, compared to Student A's suggestion of constructing large apartment buildings and Student B's idea of providing subsidies for single-family houses."

  2. "In addition to reducing real estate speculation, another advantage of this approach is that..."

5. 语法批改

From where I stand, taxing on citizens who have houses more than one is the best solution for government to address the housing shortage problem in a country.   To begin with, reasonable taxation can reduce the real estate speculation efficiently. Some people who bought house more than one may use the houses as the financial investors, instead of living. These houses will be sold at a higher price than original price, which lead to a fact that the houses are so expensive that more people who need a house to live can't afford it. And this situation will enhance the housing shortage. However, if the government property taxes on those investors, the price of houses will be down, which means that more people can have a house to live. Due to this, the vacancy housesof houses(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'of' is missing in a sentence.) will be less, the utilization of houses will be incressingress(misspelling). So, the housing shortage problem can be released.   Besides, the government can use the money which collection from the taxes to build more houses. One reason that causes the housing shortage is the number of population has been grown so fast, but the number of houses can't keep a balance, which cause the housing shortage problem. So, to solve this problem, government need money to build more houses. And collecting taxes will be incressingress(misspelling) the financial revenue of government, which can be used in the houses building. In conclusion, the number of houses will be increassedincreased(misspelling), the problem of housing shortage will be solved.    

Section Title: Addressing Housing Shortage through Taxation

In my opinion, imposing taxes on individuals who own multiple properties is the most effective solution for governments to tackle the housing shortage issue in a country.

Firstly, implementing reasonable taxation can efficiently curb real estate speculation. Some individuals purchase multiple properties as financial investments rather than for residential purposes. Consequently, these houses are often sold at higher prices than their original value, making them unaffordable for many people in need of housing. This situation exacerbates the housing shortage. However, if the government levies property taxes on such investors, house prices will decrease, enabling more people to afford homes. As a result, vacant properties will diminish and housing utilization will increase, thereby alleviating the housing shortage problem.

Furthermore, governments can utilize the revenue generated from these taxes to construct additional houses. A significant factor contributing to the housing shortage is the rapid population growth that outpaces the availability of residential properties. To address this issue, governments require funds to build more houses. Collecting taxes from property owners with multiple homes increases government revenue which can then be allocated towards housing development projects. Ultimately, this approach leads to an increased number of available houses and resolves the problem of housing shortages in a country. (210 words)

From where I stand, taxing Addressing Housing Shortage through Taxation

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Furthermore (to provide a smooth transition), governments can have a house to live. Due to this, the vacancy houses will be less, the utilization of houses will be incress. So, utilize the revenue generated from these taxes to construct additional houses. A significant factor contributing to the housing shortage problem can be released. ¶ Besides, the government can use the money which collection from the taxes is the rapid population growth that outpaces the availability of residential properties. To address this issue, governments require funds to build more houses. One reason that causes the housing shortage is the number of population has been grown so fast, but the number of houses can't keep a balance, which cause the housing shortage problem. So, to solve this problem, Collecting taxes from property owners with multiple homes increases government need money to build more houses. And collecting taxes will be incress the financial revenue of government, which can then be used allocated towards housing development projects. Ultimately (to emphasize the conclusion), this approach leads to an increased number of available houses and resolves the problem of housing shortages in the houses building. In conclusion, the number of houses will be increassed, the problem of housing shortage will be solved.a country.

Title: 8 思维导图


1. Addressing Housing Shortage through Taxation
   ├── 1.1 Imposing taxes on multiple property owners
   │   ├── 1.1.1 Curb real estate speculation
   │   └── 1.1.2 Decrease house prices
   ├── 1.2 Increase housing utilization
   │   └── 1.2.1 Alleviate housing shortage problem
   └── 1.3 Utilize tax revenue for housing development
       ├── 1.3.1 Construct additional houses
       └── 1.3.2 Resolve housing shortages problem

Title: 9 关键词

WordPhonetic SymbolPart of SpeechEnglish definitionSimplified Chinese translationSample sentences
taxation/tækˈseɪʃən/nounthe process of collecting taxes税收Imposing taxes on individuals who own multiple properties is an effective solution to tackle the housing shortage issue in a country.
speculation/ˌspɛkjʊˈleɪʃən/nounthe act of investing in something with the hope of making a profit, especially in property or stocks and shares投机Implementing reasonable taxation can efficiently curb real estate speculation.
residential/ˌrezɪˈdenʃəl/adjectiverelating to where people live居住的Some individuals purchase multiple properties as financial investments rather than for residential purposes.
unaffordable/ˌʌnəˈfɔːrdəbl/adjectivetoo expensive for most people to buy买不起的These houses are often sold at higher prices than their original value, making them unaffordable for many people.
vacant/ˈveɪkənt/adjectivenot filled or occupied空缺的As a result, vacant properties will diminish and housing utilization will increase.
revenue/ˈrɛvənju/nounmoney that a government receives from taxes收入Governments can utilize the revenue generated from these taxes to construct additional houses.
population growth/pɒpjʊˈleɪʃən ɡrəʊθ/nounthe increase in the number of people living in a particular area, country, or region人口增长A significant factor contributing to the housing shortage is the rapid population growth that outpaces the availability of residential properties.
funds/fʌndz/nounmoney that is collected and saved for a particular purpose资金To address this issue, governments require funds to build more houses.
housing development/ˈhaʊzɪŋ dɪˈvɛləpmənt/nounthe process of building new houses住房开发Collecting taxes from property owners with multiple homes increases government revenue which can then be allocated towards housing development projects.

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