TOEFL TPO 71 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific theories presented in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 Task fulfillment: 4 Organization: 4 Coherence and Cohesion: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，这篇文章较好地完成了任务要求，但在一些细节方面还有待改进。首先，在描述听力中提到的反驳观点时，应更明确地指出这些观点是如何质疑阅读材料中的理论的。此外，在表达时应尽量避免重复使用相同的词汇和表达。

示例1（改进前）：Nevertheless, the professor in the listening disputes these theories, pointing out that all of them are not convincing. 示例1（改进后）：However, the lecturer casts doubt on these theories by providing counterarguments that challenge their validity.

示例2（改进前）：As a result, the theory of improving sense of smell is impossible. 示例2（改进后）：Consequently, the notion that the crests enhanced the sense of smell is implausible.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织方面基本符合要求，但仍有一些可以改进的地方。首先，可以在引言部分更明确地指出听力材料是如何质疑阅读材料中的理论的。其次，在每个段落中，应使用更清晰的过渡词或短语来连接不同的观点和细节。

示例1（改进前）：Firstly, the author asserts that the dinosaurs might use the crests for the purpose of improving the sense of smell. 示例1（改进后）：To begin with, the reading passage posits that the crests might have served to enhance the dinosaurs' sense of smell.

示例2（改进前）：The professor in the listening, though, counters this theory by arguing that not all the dinosaurs have good ability to hear about each other. 示例2（改进后）：Nonetheless, the lecturer refutes this claim by pointing out that not all species of dinosaurs possess a strong capacity for hearing.

5. 语法批改

In the reading passage, the author presents three theories to interpreteinterpreted(misspelling) the possible function of the large bony crests which are on top of the dinosaurs' heads. Nevertheless, the professor in the listening disputes these theories, pointing out that all of them are not convincing.

Firstly, the author asserts that the dinosaurs might use the crests for the purpose of improving the sense of smell. However, the professor maintains that it is impossible due to the structures of the brains. As is widely believed, it is a specific region of the dinosaurs' brain that master the smelling ability. If the crests are successful to enhance the sense of smell, the regarding region in the brain will be well-developed. By contrast, that region in the dinosaurs' brain has been proved under-developed and alsealso(misspelling) remains small. As a result, the theory of improving sensethe sense(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) of smell is impossible.

Secondly, while the author claims that crests might be used for cooling, the professor in the listening offer a different perspective. He posits that the difference between lambeosaurs[No Replacement Word Found](misspelling) and other kinds of dinosaurs can not be ignored. The dinosaurs like stegosaursstegosaurus(misspelling) add many bony crestlike plates together and thus fulfill the function of cooling. The member of the lambeosaurs[No Replacement Word Found](misspelling), instead, only owns one crest, which is too small to allow the heat to escape and prevent overheating.

Thirdly, according to the reading, the author puts forward that the dinosaurs make sounds through the crests. The professor in the listening, though, counters this theory by arguing that not all the dinosaurs have good ability to hear about each other. It has been proved that all the dinosaurs have crests. Therefore, if the crests are used for hearing, all the dinosaurs will have a good hearing skill. On the contrary, there is no evidence that other dinosaurs, except the lambeosaurs[No Replacement Word Found](misspelling), are good at hearing. In a nutshell, the crests can not be functioned as means of hearing.

Section Title: 6. Article Revision

In the reading passage, the author presents three theories to interpret the possible function of the large bony crests on top of lambeosaurs' heads. However, the professor in the listening disputes these theories, pointing out that all of them are not convincing.

Firstly, the author asserts that lambeosaurs might have used the crests to improve their sense of smell. However, the professor maintains that this is unlikely due to the structure of their brains. It is widely believed that a specific region in an animal's brain governs its smelling ability. If the crests were successful in enhancing lambeosaurs' sense of smell, this region would be well-developed. In contrast, evidence suggests that this region in lambeosaurs' brains was underdeveloped and small. As a result, it is improbable that the crests served to improve their sense of smell.

Secondly, while the author claims that crests might have been used for cooling, the professor offers a different perspective. He posits that differences between lambeosaurs and other kinds of dinosaurs cannot be ignored. Dinosaurs like stegosaurs have many bony crest-like plates which increase body surface area and thus fulfill a cooling function. Lambeosaurs, on the other hand, possess only one crest which is too small to allow sufficient heat escape and prevent overheating.

Thirdly, according to the reading passage, it is suggested that lambeosaurs may have used their crests to make sounds for communication purposes. The professor counters this theory by arguing that not all dinosaurs with crests had good hearing abilities. If crests were indeed used for communication through sound production, all dinosaurs with such structures should possess good hearing skills as well. Contrarily, there is no evidence supporting good hearing abilities in other dinosaur species besides lambeosaurs with highly developed inner ears. In summary, it is unlikely that crests functioned as a means of hearing or communication through sound production. (313 words)

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8. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Essay structure
  • Lecture points

• Theory 1: Improved Sense of Smell

  • Author's claim
  • Professor's counterargument
    • Brain structure evidence

• Theory 2: Cooling Function

  • Author's claim
  • Professor's counterargument
    • Comparison to stegosaurs
    • Insufficient surface area for cooling

• Theory 3: Sound Production and Communication

  • Author's claim
  • Professor's counterargument
    • Inconsistency in hearing abilities among dinosaurs with crests

9. Keywords

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