TOEFL TPO 69 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the announcement. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses. To improve the delivery, the speaker should focus on proper punctuation and phrasing to avoid awkward pauses. Additionally, working on accurate pronunciation of words can help eliminate spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker should focus on providing more specific details from the listening passage to support their points. Additionally, the speaker could work on paraphrasing the information from the reading and listening passages more effectively to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.

5.Language Use

The article announces a change in the campus university policy, which the principal Dean of Students is going to let the ungraduates undergraduates use graduate study log Perkins Lounge, a graduate study space. However, the woman in the lecture disagrees with this announcement. She goes on to say that the graduate study log lounge is a quiet place for the graduate to study, which they can spread books on the table. It is especially good for researching projects. Furthermore, it is not a noisy place for them to study. Also, she talks about that when the ungraduate undergraduate doesn't have much space to study, she suggests that the principal to make more extra place for them to study. Also, she suggests that the principal can make another building for them to study.

(Changed "campus" to "university policy" for clarity; changed "principal" to "Dean of Students" as mentioned in the reading passage; changed "ungraduates" to "undergraduates" for correct spelling; changed "graduate study log" to "Perkins Lounge, a graduate study space" for accuracy and clarity; changed "log" to "lounge" for correct terminology; changed "ungraduate" to "undergraduate" for correct spelling.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The article announces a change in the university policy, in which the Dean of Students plans to allow undergraduates to use Perkins Lounge, a graduate study space. However, the woman in the lecture disagrees with this announcement. She argues that the graduate study lounge is a quiet place for graduate students to study, where they can spread out their books on the table and work on research projects. Furthermore, it is not a noisy environment for them to concentrate. She also mentions that when undergraduates lack sufficient study space, she suggests that the university should create additional spaces specifically for them. For instance, she proposes that the university could include a study area in the new dormitory being built, allowing Perkins Lounge to remain exclusive for graduate students.

6.Mind Map

- University policy change
  - Perkins Lounge
    - Graduate study space
    - Open to undergraduates

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagreement
  - Reasons
    - Quiet environment for graduate students
    - Spacious for research projects

- Suggestion for undergraduates
  - Create additional study spaces
  - Example: New dormitory study area

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较为稳定，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高语言流畅度。此外，发言者需要注意准确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 The speaker provided a coherent response, summarizing the plan and stating the woman's opinion. However, the response could be better organized by clearly separating the summary of the plan and the woman's opinion, as well as providing more specific examples from the listening material to support her opinion. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on creating a clear structure and incorporating more details from the listening material to strengthen their argument.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, there is a proposal that the school should open the lounge room for all students for the reason that there are also lots of graduate students learn in that room and there is no sufficient room for undergraduate students to study. The university has proposed opening the lounge room to all students because it is underutilized by graduate students, and there isn't enough study space for undergraduates. (修改了句子结构，使表达更清晰) However, in the listing material, the women hold a negative opinion about this proposal for the reason that, first of all, it is a quiet space for the graduate students to do some research. In the listening material, the woman expresses her disagreement with this plan because it provides a quiet space for graduate students to conduct research. (修改了句子结构和词汇，使表达更自然) They can do the research here, don't worry, don't need to worry to be disturbed. They can work without worrying about being disturbed. (简化了表达，使语言更流畅) And if the undergraduate students are allowed, it's not a good thing for the graduate students. Allowing undergraduates would negatively impact graduate students. (简化了表达，使语言更流畅) Another reason is that the school should explore another space for the undergraduate students such as the dormitory for them to learn. She also suggests that the university should find alternative spaces for undergraduates, like study areas in dormitories. (修改了句子结构，使表达更清晰)

Revised Answer (140 words): The university has proposed opening the lounge room to all students because it is underutilized by graduate students, and there isn't enough study space for undergraduates. In the listening material, the woman expresses her disagreement with this plan because it provides a quiet space for graduate students to conduct research. They can work without worrying about being disturbed. Allowing undergraduates would negatively impact graduate students. She also suggests that the university should find alternative spaces for undergraduates, like study areas in dormitories. This would help address the issue of insufficient study space for undergraduates without disrupting the quiet environment that graduate students currently enjoy in Perkins Lounge. Overall, the woman believes that maintaining a separate study area for graduate students is essential and that other solutions should be explored to accommodate undergraduate needs.

6.思维导图

- University Proposal
  - Open lounge room to all students
  - Underutilized by graduate students
  - Insufficient study space for undergraduates

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagreement with the plan
  - Quiet space for graduate research
  - Negative impact on graduate students

- Alternative Solution
  - Find other spaces for undergraduates
  - Study areas in dormitories
  - Address study space issue without disrupting graduate students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的语速较为稳定，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意保持流畅的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和内容支持方面还有待加强。建议在练习时注意明确地陈述观点，并提供充分的理由或例子来支持观点。此外，尝试使用更多的连接词和短语来使回答更加连贯和有条理。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The university plans to open graduate study lounge to all students, which is disagreed by the woman in the listening. The university plans to open the graduate study lounge to all students, a decision that the woman in the listening disagrees with. (添加了定冠词，调整了句子结构使其更自然)

Firstly, she thinks in such condition it's pretty perfect for graduate students since it is very quiet so they can just spread their book on the desks, especially during the research project. Firstly, she believes that under such conditions, it's ideal for graduate students because it is very quiet, allowing them to spread their books on the desks, especially during research projects. (调整了句子结构，使其更自然流畅；使用了更高级的词汇)

Secondly, she thinks since graduate students are pretty busy, so they can avoid noises and crowded in such condition. Secondly, she thinks that since graduate students are quite busy, they can avoid noise and crowdedness in such an environment. (调整了句子结构，使其更自然流畅；使用了更高级的词汇)

What is also mentioned is that undergraduate students don't have sufficient room to study. Well, even though that is true, as the woman says, there are room in the new dormitory which can be assigned by the university and just leave space to graduate students. It is also mentioned that undergraduate students don't have sufficient study space. However, even though that is true, as the woman suggests, there is room in the new dormitory that can be designated by the university, leaving the lounge exclusively for graduate students. (调整了句子结构，使其更自然流畅；使用了更高级的词汇)

Revised Answer (140 words): The university plans to open the graduate study lounge to all students, a decision that the woman in the listening disagrees with. Firstly, she believes that under such conditions, it's ideal for graduate students because it is very quiet, allowing them to spread their books on the desks, especially during research projects. Secondly, she thinks that since graduate students are quite busy, they can avoid noise and crowdedness in such an environment. It is also mentioned that undergraduate students don't have sufficient study space. However, even though that is true, as the woman suggests, there is room in the new dormitory that can be designated by the university, leaving the lounge exclusively for graduate students.

6.思维导图

- University's Plan
  - Open graduate study lounge to all students

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the plan
  - Reasons
    - Quiet environment for graduate students
      - Spread books on desks during research projects
    - Avoid noise and crowdedness for busy graduate students
  - Suggestion
    - Designate room in new dormitory for undergraduates
    - Keep lounge exclusive for graduate students

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development

The topic development in the response is well-done, as it provides a coherent and well-organized summary of the plan and the woman's opinion. The speaker also effectively explains the reasons behind her opinion. To further improve, the speaker could consider adding more specific examples or details from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The university plans to allow undergraduates to use the graduate study lounge. This is because it's underutilized now and there is a sufficient study area for undergraduates. However, the woman disagreed with the following reasons. First, she believes that now the study lounge is perfect because it's never packed. In this way, graduates can have a quiet and nice place to spread books on the table and work on the research project. In addition, to address the insufficient study area problem, the university should designate another place for undergraduates to study, like adding a new study place in a new dormitory. In this way, both undergraduates and graduate students can benefit from this new policy.

Corrected Answer: The university plans to allow undergraduates to use the graduate study lounge. This is because it's underutilized currently underused ("underutilized" is not incorrect, but "currently underused" sounds more natural) now and there is a sufficient lack of adequate (to clarify that there is not enough space for undergraduates) study area for undergraduates. However, the woman disagreed with the following reasons. First, she believes that now the study lounge is perfect because it's never packed. In this way, graduates can have a quiet and nice comfortable ("comfortable" is more specific than "nice") place to spread books on the table and work on the their (to specify that it's their own research projects) research project. In addition, to address the insufficient study area problem, the university should designate another place for undergraduates to study, like adding a new study place in a new dormitory. In this way, both undergraduates and graduate students can benefit from this new updated ("updated" sounds more natural than "new" in this context) policy.

Revised Answer (140 words): The university plans to allow undergraduates to use the graduate study lounge because it is currently underused and there is a lack of adequate study space for undergraduates. However, the woman disagrees with this plan for several reasons. Firstly, she believes that the study lounge is perfect as it is since it is never crowded, allowing graduates to have a quiet and comfortable place to spread out their books and work on their research projects. Additionally, she suggests that the university should designate a separate space for undergraduates to study, such as adding a new study area in an upcoming dormitory. By doing so, both undergraduate and graduate students can benefit from an updated policy that addresses their respective needs for study spaces.

6.Mind Map

• University plan

  • Allow undergraduates to use graduate study lounge
  • Reasons: underused, lack of adequate study space for undergraduates

• Woman's disagreement

  • Current state: perfect, not crowded
    • Benefits: quiet, comfortable, space for research projects
  • Suggestion: designate separate space for undergraduates
    • Example: new study area in upcoming dormitory

• Revised policy benefits

  • Address needs of both undergraduate and graduate students

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。为了提高发言的流畅性，建议发言者在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对于计划的总结和女士的观点表述得较为清楚，但在解释女士观点原因时，可以进一步完善。例如，在提到女士认为研究生需要一个安静、不拥挤的空间时，可以补充她担心开放给本科生后这种环境将受到影响。此外，在提到学校应该为本科生指定额外的学习空间时，可以详细说明女士提出的建议，如在新宿舍中增设学习空间。总之，在话题发展方面，建议发言者在解释观点原因时更加具体和详细。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, in the latter, the school decided to add more study space where it is initially used by graduate students, but the women feel a little disappointed about this idea. In the announcement, the university plans to open the graduate study lounge to undergraduates as well, but the woman feels disappointed about this decision.（在原文中，应使用“announcement”而不是“latter”，并将“the women”改为“the woman”。此外，为了使句子更自然，可以使用“feels disappointed about this decision”替换“feel a little disappointed about this idea”。）

First off, she thinks that graduate students should have a space to do a lot of work and research, like writing the books on the desk, and they need a place that won't be noisy and crowded. Firstly, she believes that graduate students should have a dedicated space for extensive work and research, such as having ample room for their books on desks, and they require an environment that is quiet and not crowded.（为了使句子更自然，可以使用“believes”替换“thinks”，并将“a lot of work”改为“extensive work”。同时，将“writing the books on the desk”改为“having ample room for their books on desks”，并将“won't be noisy and crowded”改为“is quiet and not crowded”。）

This is because it's good for graduate students to concentrate on themselves, and the school should add other space from other places to study. This is because such an environment allows graduate students to focus better, and the university should allocate additional study spaces elsewhere for undergraduates.（为了使句子更自然，可以将“concentrate on themselves”改为“focus better”，并将“add other space from other places to study”改为“allocate additional study spaces elsewhere for undergraduates”。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the announcement, the university plans to open the graduate study lounge to undergraduates as well, but the woman feels disappointed about this decision. Firstly, she believes that graduate students should have a dedicated space for extensive work and research, such as having ample room for their books on desks, and they require an environment that is quiet and not crowded. This is because such an environment allows graduate students to focus better. She also suggests that the university should allocate additional study spaces elsewhere for undergraduates, like in the new dormitory being built. By doing so, it would address the issue of insufficient study space for undergraduates without affecting the graduate students' preferred study environment.

6.思维导图

• Announcement

  • Open graduate study lounge to undergraduates

• Woman's opinion

  • Disappointed

• Reasons

  • Dedicated space for graduate students
    • Extensive work and research
    • Quiet and not crowded environment
  • University should allocate additional study spaces elsewhere for undergraduates

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）：3

• 主题发展（Topic Development）：3.5

• 语言使用（Language Use）：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速较为清晰和流畅，但偶尔会有停顿。建议在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，以提高语言表达的连贯性。同时，注意纠正发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，能够简要概括计划，并说明女士对计划的看法及原因。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化，例如在提到女士的观点时，可以更明确地指出她反对这个计划。此外，在给出女士建议时，可以更详细地描述她提出的替代方案。总体来说，需要在组织结构和论据方面进行一些改进，以使回答更加有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The announcement is about a change of the policy in a study lunch, The announcement is about a change in the policy of a study lounge,（将“a change of”改为“a change in”，将“study lunch”改为“study lounge”，使句子更自然。）which was reserved only for graduate students, but now it is also available for additional undergraduate students. which was previously reserved only for graduate students, but now it has been opened to undergraduate students as well.（在描述计划变化时，使用更准确的词汇和表达。）

This is mainly because the enrollment of undergraduate students has started to increase for the last few years. This is mainly due to the increasing enrollment of undergraduate students over the past few years.（将“has started to increase for the last few years”改为“over the past few years”，使句子更自然。）

However, in a conversation, the woman disagreed with the announcement because of two main reasons. However, during the conversation, the woman expressed her disagreement with the announcement for two main reasons.（将“in a conversation”改为“during the conversation”，使句子更自然。）

The study lunch can be not perfect anymore because there are more students, The study lounge may no longer be ideal due to an increased number of students,（将“can be not perfect anymore”改为“may no longer be ideal”，使句子更自然。）

so less rooms can be used for the graduate students to spread their book out for doing some research. thus reducing the space available for graduate students to spread out their books and conduct research.（将“less rooms can be used”改为“reducing the space available”，使句子更自然。）

In addition, the study lunch will be noisy and crowded, Additionally, the study lounge may become noisy and crowded,（将“In addition”改为“Additionally”，使句子更自然。）

so the woman suggests that the university should use the spare areas in the dormitory as study rooms for undergraduate students. so the woman suggests that the university should designate spare areas in the dormitory as study spaces specifically for undergraduate students.（将“use”改为“designate”，使句子更自然。）

修订后的回答（140词）：

The announcement is about a change in the policy of a study lounge, which was previously reserved only for graduate students, but now it has been opened to undergraduate students as well. This is mainly due to the increasing enrollment of undergraduate students over the past few years. However, during the conversation, the woman expressed her disagreement with the announcement for two main reasons. The study lounge may no longer be ideal due to an increased number of students, thus reducing the space available for graduate students to spread out their books and conduct research. Additionally, the study lounge may become noisy and crowded, so the woman suggests that the university should designate spare areas in the dormitory as study spaces specifically for undergraduate students.

6.思维导图

- Announcement
  - Change in policy
  - Study lounge
  - Open to undergraduate students

- Reason for change
  - Increasing enrollment of undergraduate students

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagreement with the announcement
  - Reasons for disagreement
    - Reduced space for graduate students' research
    - Noisy and crowded study lounge

- Woman's suggestion
  - Designate spare areas in dormitory as study spaces for undergraduate students

7.关键词