TOEFL TPO 73 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the letter writer's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking with a consistent pace and minimize pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their ideas and incorporating more evidence from the reading and listening materials.

5.Language Use

In the letter, a student suggests that the university should invite the new jazz band to play free concerts on the open lawn. But in the conversation, the woman doesn't agree with this idea for two reasons. First of all, she doesn't think it's the best time because students have no time sitting to sit (corrected verb form) and resting in the afternoon. And she thinks that evening would be better after a long day of work and study. Secondly, she thinks that the situation of the lawn would be changed if students start hanging out on the lawn because they will walk on the lawn and the grass would be trampled and dyed trampled and die (corrected word choice). So based on these two reasons, she doesn't think it's a good idea.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the letter, a student proposes that the university invite a newly-formed jazz band to perform free concerts on the open lawn near the student center. However, in their conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, she believes that afternoons are not an ideal time for such events since students are usually busy studying and attending classes during this period. She suggests that evenings might be more suitable as they offer an opportunity for relaxation after a long day of academic activities. Secondly, she expresses concern about potential damage to the recently improved lawn area due to increased foot traffic from concert attendees. The trampling of grass could eventually lead to its death and turn the area into mud. Based on these concerns, she does not support implementing this proposal as it currently stands.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Open lawn

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagreement
  - Reasons
    - Time of day
      - Afternoon vs. evening
    - Lawn damage
      - Trampling grass
      - Deterioration of area

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details and elaborating on the reasons given by the woman in the conversation. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice expanding on their ideas and providing more in-depth explanations to better support their points.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: A student proposed a free concert on the lawn near the student center for students to relax and enjoy themselves, but the woman disagreed with the idea because she thinks it's not the best time in the afternoon to give the concert because it will be distracting and the student cannot focus themselves on studying and reading. A student proposed a free concert on the lawn near the student center for students to unwind and enjoy themselves. However, the woman disagreed with this idea, arguing that an afternoon concert would not be ideal as it would distract students from their studies and reading. (Changed repetitive phrases and improved sentence structure)

If it's in the evening, it will be better for students to relax themselves from the studying. An evening concert might be more suitable, allowing students to unwind after a day of studying. (Improved sentence structure and word choice)

Second, the woman thinks it will be better if it is located indoors because a lot of audience will be crowded and will turn the glass land into mud. Additionally, she believes an indoor venue would be preferable to prevent overcrowding and protect the grassy area from turning into mud. (Improved sentence structure, vocabulary, and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): A student proposed a free concert on the lawn near the student center for students to unwind and enjoy themselves. However, the woman disagreed with this idea, arguing that an afternoon concert would not be ideal as it would distract students from their studies and reading. She suggested that an evening concert might be more suitable, allowing students to unwind after a day of studying. Additionally, she believes an indoor venue would be preferable to prevent overcrowding and protect the grassy area from turning into mud. By considering these factors, the university could create a more enjoyable and less disruptive event for the students while preserving the campus's appearance.

6. Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Free concert
  - Lawn near student center

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons
    - Afternoon distraction
    - Evening alternative
    - Indoor venue preference
      - Overcrowding prevention
      - Grassy area protection

7. Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，这位考生的发言相对清晰，语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。建议考生在练习时注意提高语言流利度，减少不必要的停顿，并注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, summarizing the proposal and stating the woman's opinion about it. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific examples or details from the listening passage to support the woman's opinion. Additionally, the speaker should work on making clearer connections between ideas to enhance the overall coherence of the response.

5.语言使用

Original: In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with it because there are some problems. First, the woman said the best time should not be in the afternoon because the students will be reading and studying in the afternoon and it's really distracting if there is music. But she thinks that evening would be a good time. Second, the concert should be indoor because the lawn is a great area but if there are more and more students hanging out there, the grass will die and finally that place will turn into mud so the environment will get worse. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with this letter.

Corrected: In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with it the proposal because there are some problems. First, the woman said she mentions that the best time should not be in having concerts during the afternoon because is not ideal as students will be reading and studying,; it's really distracting if there is music. But she thinks that evening would be a good time. Second, the concert should be indoor an indoor venue would be better for concerts, because although,; the lawn is a great area,; if there are more and more students hanging out there, the grass will die and eventually,; that place will turn into mud,; so the environment will get worse. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with this letter.

(将“it”改为“the proposal”，使句子更清晰。将“the woman said”改为“she mentions”，使语言更自然。将“the best time should not be in”改为“having concerts during”，使句子更简洁。将“because”改为“is not ideal as”，使句子更连贯。在逗号处添加分号，使句子结构更清晰。将“the concert should be indoor”改为“an indoor venue would be better for concerts,”，使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with the proposal due to several concerns. Firstly, she mentions that having concerts during the afternoon is not ideal as students will be reading and studying; it would be really distracting if there is music playing. Instead, she believes that evenings would be a more suitable time for such events. Secondly, she argues that an indoor venue would be better for concerts; although the lawn is a great area, if more students start hanging out there, the grass will eventually die and turn into mud, resulting in a deteriorated environment. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with the letter's proposal for these reasons.

6.思维导图

- Letter Proposal
  - Jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Afternoon

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Concerns
    - Afternoon concerts: distracting for studying students
    - Evening concerts: more suitable
    - Indoor venue: better for concerts
      - Lawn area issues:
        - Grass damage
        - Environmental deterioration

- Conclusion
  - Woman disagrees with letter's proposal due to concerns

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may have resulted from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more support or examples to strengthen the argument. To improve topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons for their opinion and providing more specific examples to support their points. This will make the response more persuasive and engaging for the listener.

5.Language Use

A student suggests the university should have some concertsperformances ('performances' is a more advanced vocabulary word) on the lawn near the student center in the afternoon, but the womenwoman (correcting grammar: singular form) in the conversation have some concerns about this proposal. Firstly, she points out that maybe afternoon is not the best time of the day to have the concerts because students may not have time to sit down and relax. They are busy doing their studies or readings, but the loud noise in there would disrupt them from studying. Maybe evening is a better time for students after a long day studying. They may get some relax in there. Secondly, she thinks that indoor location would be better because a lot of students will trample on the lawn.

Revised Answer (140 words):

A student suggests that the university should host some performances on the lawn near the student center during afternoons. However, the woman in the conversation expresses concerns about this proposal. First, she believes that afternoons might not be an ideal time for such events, as students are often preoccupied with their studies and readings. The loud music could potentially distract them from focusing on their academic tasks. She proposes that evenings could be a more suitable time for these performances, allowing students to unwind after a long day of studying. Second, she recommends considering an indoor venue instead of an outdoor one to prevent damage to the lawn caused by numerous students walking and gathering on it during these events.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Afternoon performances
  - Lawn near student center

- Woman's concerns
  - Timing
    - Afternoons not ideal
    - Students busy studying
    - Evening alternative
  - Venue
    - Indoor location preferred
    - Lawn damage prevention

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 26

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高交付得分，建议在练习时注意自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，能够总结提案并说明女士对提案的看法及原因。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化。建议在描述女士的观点时使用更清晰的连接词，如“首先”和“其次”，以帮助听众更好地理解观点之间的关系。此外，在解释原因时可以尝试提供更多具体的例子或细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The student in the letter proposes that the university should invite Jay's band to play some free concerts on campus. The letter suggests that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts on campus. (修改了句子结构，使其更自然；更正了乐队名称) In the listening, the woman disagrees with this idea, because firstly, it's not the best time. In the listening, the woman disagrees with this idea, stating that firstly, it is not an ideal time. (使用了更高级的词汇，改进了语法) Students won't be able to sit or relax there because they have some classwork, like studying or reading, so the music would be distracting for them. Students would be unable to sit or relax there due to their academic responsibilities, such as studying or reading; thus, the music would serve as a distraction. (改进了句子结构，使用了更高级的词汇) But if a concert is in the evening, that would be great. However, if the concert were held in the evening, it would be more suitable. (使用了更自然的表达方式，改进了语法) And secondly, she thinks the concert should be indoor, because if it's on a low, Secondly, she believes the concert should be held indoors, as if it were on a lawn, (改进了句子结构，更正了拼写错误) so many people will walk by, so that would be crowded. it would attract a large number of people, resulting in overcrowding. (改进了句子结构，使用了更高级的词汇) Then the grass will die, the area will turn into mud. Consequently, the grass would be trampled, and the area would become muddy. (使用了更自然的表达方式，改进了语法)

修订版（140词）：

The letter suggests that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts on campus. In the listening, the woman disagrees with this idea, stating that firstly, it is not an ideal time. Students would be unable to sit or relax there due to their academic responsibilities, such as studying or reading; thus, the music would serve as a distraction. However, if the concert were held in the evening, it would be more suitable. Secondly, she believes the concert should be held indoors, as if it were on a lawn, it would attract a large number of people, resulting in overcrowding. Consequently, the grass would be trampled, and the area would become muddy.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Invite jazz band
  - Free concerts on campus

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees
  - Reasons
    - Not ideal time
      - Academic responsibilities
      - Distraction
    - Indoor venue preferred
      - Lawn issues
        - Overcrowding
        - Grass damage and mud

7.关键词