TOEFL TPO 40 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how the proposal discussed in the lecture would solve the specific challenges described in the reading passage.
舊制TOEFL格式下的使用者歷史範例與AI評估結果。
共 32 份歷史使用者範例
舊制TOEFL題型
本題目來自TOEFL考試的舊版本。目前的TOEFL已採用不同的考試架構。這些歷史範例僅作為練習參考保留。
題目概覽
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Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible.First, atmospheric pressure at Venus’ surface is at least 90 times greater than the pressure at Earth’s surface. This means that a force of 100 kilograms is pressing down on every square centimeter of surface. All spacecraft that have landed on Venus have been crushed by this extreme pressure within an hour of landing. Almost anything humans might land on Venus would be crushed as well.Second, as far as we know, there are no reservoirs of water on Venus’ surface, and the planet’s atmosphere, made up mostly of carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, contains hardly any oxygen or water vapor. Water and oxygen would therefore probably have to be supplied to Venus from Earth. The idea of ensuring a regular supply of water and oxygen from Earth is impractical in the extreme and would probably defeat the purpose of establishing a permanent station on Venus.Third, very little sunlight reaches the planet’s surface. About 60 percent of the sunlight that hits Venus is reflected back into space by the thick clouds that fill the atmosphere, which means that only 40 percent of the sunlight can get through the clouds. Below these clouds is a dense layer of carbon dioxide, which blocks even more light, so very little light reaches the surface. The lack of light would prevent the use of solar power cells, so humans could not get electricity to power their machines and equipment.
題目
Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how the proposal discussed in the lecture would solve the specific challenges described in the reading passage.
使用者範例與評估結果
1考生範例 #1
Both the reading and listening passage discuss the possibility of people living in Venus, the writer from the reading passage feels it is impossible a...
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考生範例 #1
Both the reading and listening passage discuss the possibility of people living in Venus, the writer from the reading passage feels it is impossible a...
考生範例
Both the reading and listening passage discuss the possibility of people living in Venus, the writer from the reading passage feels it is impossible and provides with three further explanations to support his perspective with which the speaker from the listening passage disagrees. Firstly, the writer argues that atmospheric pressure at Venus’ surface is at least 90 times greater than the pressure at Earth’s surface. In such a tough situation, almost anything humans might land on Venus would be crushed, which means no one could land leading to living in Venus improbable. However, the speaker effectively counters this issue by stating a floating station fifty kilometers above the surface would have pressure equal to the normal one on Earth. Hence, it is highly possible that people can live on Venus and make living there suitable . Secondly, the writer asserts that there is no existing water and oxygen in Venus, meaning that extra water and oxygen supplies must be delivered from Earth to the Venus, which costs numerous money and time making it impractical. Conversely, the speaker strongly refutes this idea made by suggesting that people can make use of existing compounds in the Venus’ atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, combining with modern technique, making it possible to create water and oxygen people need. Thirdly, the writer indicates that little sunlight will reaches the Venus’ surface since 60 percent of the sunlight is reflected back into space due to the thick clouds on Venus. Consequently, it may cause that people fail to get electricity power gaining from solar power. In contrast, the speaker opposes this point that a floating station, mentioned previously, where the clouds are not thick, people can receive a large proportion of sunlight to power the station. Furthermore, those sunlight reflected by the lower clouds will be back to the station functioning as a extra supply of power.
評分結果
1.子项得分 任务完成度:4 组织:4 连贯与衔接:4 语言使用:3
2.预估分数
25. 3.任务完成度
这篇文章基本上满足了托福iBT综合写作Task1的要求,概括了听力部分的观点,并解释了如何解决阅读部分提出的挑战。但是,文章在某些地方可以更加明确和详细。例如,在讨论如何利用金星大气中的化合物制造水和氧气时,可以提供更多关于这个过程的具体信息。
改进建议示例:
- 原文:“people can make use of existing compounds in the Venus’ atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, combining with modern technique, making it possible to create water and oxygen people need.” 改进后:“people can make use of existing compounds in Venus' atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid, through chemical processes like electrolysis to produce water and oxygen for human needs.”
4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织基本上是清晰的,包括引言、正文和结论。每个段落都集中在一个特定的观点和支持细节上。然而,在段落之间可以使用更明确的过渡词或短语来增强连贯性。
改进建议示例:
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原文:“Firstly, the writer argues... However, the speaker effectively counters this issue by stating...” 改进后:“Firstly, the writer argues... In contrast, the speaker effectively counters this issue by stating...”
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原文:“Secondly, the writer asserts... Conversely, the speaker strongly refutes this idea made by suggesting...” 改进后:“Secondly, the writer asserts... On the other hand, the speaker strongly refutes this idea by suggesting...”
- 语法批改
Both the reading and listening passage discuss the possibility of people living in Venusliving on Venus(Collocation: live in/on planet), the writer from the reading passage feels it is impossible and provides with three further explanations to support his perspective with which the speaker from the listening passage disagrees.
Firstly, the writer argues that atmospheric pressure at Venus’ surface is at least 90 times greater than the pressure at Earth’s surface. In such a tough situation, almost anything humans might land on Venus would be crushed, which means no one could landland,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) leading to living in Venusliving on Venus(Collocation: live in/on planet) improbable. However, the speaker effectively counters this issue by stating a floating station fifty kilometers above the surface would have pressure equal to the normal one on Earth. Hence, it is highly possible that people can live on Venus and make living there suitable
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Secondly, the writer asserts that there is no existing water and oxygen in Venus, meaning that extra water and oxygen supplies must be delivered from Earth to theto(Detects potentially wrong usage of "to the") Venus, which costs numerous money and time making it impractical. Conversely, the speaker strongly refutes this idea made by suggesting that people can make use of existing compounds in the Venus’ atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, combining with modern technique, making it possible to create water and oxygen people need.
Thirdly, the writer indicates that little sunlight will reachesreach(Non-infinitive verb after modal verbs) the Venus’ surface since 60 percent of the sunlight is reflected backreflected(return back (return)) into space due to the thick clouds on Venus. Consequently, it may cause that people fail to get electricity power gaining from solar power. In contrast, the speaker opposes this point that a floating station, mentioned previously, where the clouds are not thick, people can receive a large proportion of sunlight to power the station. Furthermore, those sunlightthis sunlight('this' vs. 'these') reflected by the lower clouds will be back to the stationstation,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) functioning as aan(Use of 'a' vs. 'an') extra supply of power.
6.文章修订
Both the reading and listening passages discuss the possibility of human habitation on Venus. The author of the reading passage contends that it is impossible, providing three supporting explanations, while the speaker in the listening passage disagrees and offers counterarguments.
Firstly, the author argues that the atmospheric pressure on Venus' surface is at least 90 times greater than Earth's surface pressure, making it highly improbable for humans to survive there as any landed equipment would be crushed. In contrast, the speaker effectively counters this issue by proposing a floating station situated fifty kilometers above Venus' surface, where the pressure is equivalent to Earth's normal atmospheric pressure. This solution eliminates the danger of crushing and makes human habitation feasible.
Secondly, the author asserts that there are no existing water and oxygen sources on Venus, implying that these essential resources would have to be transported from Earth at great expense and effort, rendering it impractical. On the other hand, the speaker refutes this claim by suggesting that chemical processes can be employed to create water and oxygen from compounds present in Venus' atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid. This innovative approach negates the need for importing resources from Earth.
Lastly, the author indicates that minimal sunlight reaches Venus' surface due to thick clouds reflecting 60 percent of sunlight back into space. Consequently, harnessing solar power for electricity generation might prove challenging. However, the speaker opposes this notion by explaining that a floating station located above thinner cloud layers would receive a considerable amount of sunlight for power generation. Additionally, reflected sunlight from lower clouds could serve as an auxiliary power source.
In essence, while both passages present differing perspectives on human habitation on Venus, it is evident that innovative solutions like floating stations can address challenges mentioned in the reading passage. By utilizing available resources in Venus' atmosphere and harnessing sunlight effectively for power generation, maintaining a permanent human presence on Venus becomes a viable possibility. (327 words)
7.文章批改
Both the reading and listening passages discuss the possibility of human habitation on Venus. The author of the reading passage contends that it is impossible, providing three supporting explanations, while the speaker in the listening passage discuss the possibility of people living in Venus, the writer from the reading passage feels it is impossible and provides with three further explanations to support his perspective with which the speaker from the listening passage disagrees. disagrees and offers counterarguments. (This sentence was revised to clarify the subject of both passages and emphasize their contrasting views.)
Firstly, the writer author argues that the atmospheric pressure at Venus’ on Venus' surface is at least 90 times greater than the pressure at Earth’s surface. In such a tough situation, almost anything Earth's surface pressure, making it highly improbable for humans might land on Venus to survive there as any landed equipment would be crushed, which means no one could land leading to living in Venus improbable. However, crushed. In contrast, the speaker effectively counters this issue by stating proposing a floating station situated fifty kilometers above the surface would have Venus' surface, where the pressure equal to the is equivalent to Earth's normal one on Earth. Hence, it is highly possible that people can live on Venus and make living there suitable ¶ . atmospheric pressure. This solution eliminates the danger of crushing and makes human habitation feasible. (The phrase "In contrast" was added to create a smooth transition between opposing ideas.)
Secondly, the writer author asserts that there is are no existing water and oxygen in sources on Venus, meaning that extra water and oxygen supplies must implying that these essential resources would have to be delivered transported from Earth to the Venus, which costs numerous money and time making at great expense and effort, rendering it impractical. Conversely, On the other hand, the speaker strongly refutes this idea made claim by suggesting that people chemical processes can make use of existing be employed to create water and oxygen from compounds present in the Venus’ Venus' atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen, dioxide and sulfuric acid, combining with modern technique, making it possible to create water and oxygen people need. acid. This innovative approach negates the need for importing resources from Earth. (The phrase "On the other hand" was added for better transition between contrasting points.)
Thirdly, the writer Lastly, the author indicates that little minimal sunlight will reaches the Venus’ Venus' surface since due to thick clouds reflecting 60 percent of the sunlight is reflected back into space due to the thick clouds on Venus. space. Consequently, it may cause that people fail to get harnessing solar power for electricity power gaining from solar power. In contrast, generation might prove challenging. However, the speaker opposes this point notion by explaining that a floating station, mentioned previously, where the clouds are not thick, people can station located above thinner cloud layers would receive a large proportion considerable amount of sunlight to for power the station. Furthermore, those generation. Additionally, reflected sunlight reflected by the from lower clouds will be back to the station functioning could serve as a extra supply of power.an auxiliary power source. (The word "However" was added to emphasize the contrast between the author's and speaker's views.)
In essence, while both passages present differing perspectives on human habitation on Venus, it is evident that innovative solutions like floating stations can address challenges mentioned in the reading passage. By utilizing available resources in Venus' atmosphere and harnessing sunlight effectively for power generation, maintaining a permanent human presence on Venus becomes a viable possibility. (This sentence was revised to provide a concise summary of the main points and emphasize the potential for human habitation on Venus.)
8.思维导图
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Introduction
- Reading passage: impossibility of human habitation on Venus
- Listening passage: counterarguments for habitation feasibility
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Atmospheric Pressure
- Reading: extreme pressure on Venus' surface
- Listening: floating station solution, normal pressure at 50 km above surface
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Water and Oxygen Resources
- Reading: lack of resources, impractical to import from Earth
- Listening: chemical processes to create water and oxygen from Venus' atmosphere compounds
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Sunlight and Solar Power Generation
- Reading: minimal sunlight due to thick clouds, challenging solar power generation
- Listening: floating station above thinner clouds, direct and reflected sunlight for power generation
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Conclusion
- Innovative solutions address challenges in reading passage
- Human habitation on Venus becomes viable possibility
9.关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
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| habitation | /ˌhæbɪˈteɪʃən/ | noun | The act of living in a place | 居住 | Human habitation on Venus is a topic of debate among scientists. |
| contend | /kənˈtɛnd/ | verb | To argue or state that something is true | 声称,主张 | The author contends that it is impossible for humans to live on Venus. |
| atmospheric | /ætməˈsfɛrɪk/ | adjective | Relating to the Earth's atmosphere | 大气的 | The atmospheric pressure on Venus is much higher than that on Earth. |
| feasible | /ˈfiːzəbl/ | adjective | Possible to do easily or conveniently | 可行的 | The floating station solution makes human habitation on Venus feasible. |
| compound | /ˈkɒmpaʊnd/ | noun | A substance formed from two or more elements chemically united in fixed proportions | 化合物 | Water and oxygen can be created from compounds found in Venus' atmosphere. |
| harness | /ˈhɑrnɪs/ | verb | To control and make use of a natural resource, such as energy or time | 利用 | Solar power cells can harness sunlight for electricity generation. |
| auxiliary | /ɔːgˈzɪləri/ | adjective | Providing supplementary or additional help and support | 辅助的 | Reflected sunlight from lower clouds could serve as an auxiliary power source. |
| innovative | /ˈɪnəveɪtɪv/ | adjective | Featuring new methods; advanced and original | 创新的 | Innovative solutions like floating stations address the challenges on Venus. |
| viable | /ˈvaɪəbl/ | adjective | Capable of working successfully; feasible | 可行的 | Maintaining a permanent human presence on Venus becomes a viable possibility. |
| counterargument | /ˈkaʊntərˌɑrgjumənt/ | noun | An argument or set of reasons put forward to oppose an idea or theory developed in another argument. | 反驳论点 | The speaker in the listening passage offers counterarguments for habitation feasibility. |
2考生範例 #2
In the reading material, the author cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that the conditions on Venus are too extreme and inhospitable, which ...
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考生範例 #2
In the reading material, the author cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that the conditions on Venus are too extreme and inhospitable, which ...
考生範例
In the reading material, the author cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that the conditions on Venus are too extreme and inhospitable, which makes permanent human presence on Venus impossible. Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that construction of floating station 50 km above the surface of Venus would overcome the challenges, and opposes the points in the reading material. First and foremost, the author argues that the atmospheric pressure on Venus is 90 times that of Earth and will crush any spacecraft that land on it. However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that although the atmospheric pressure is too high on the surface of Venus, it is much low at a high altitude - 50 km above surface. At this level, the pressure is about the same as that on Earth, and poses no danger. In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author’s another reason that there is no water on the surface or in the atmosphere of Venus (so the purpose of a permanent station is defeated as water and oxygen need to be supplied from Earth), demonstrating that water and oxygen can be made out of chemical compounds from Venus’s atmosphere. Compounds such as carbon dioxide and a certain acid can be processed to make oxygen and water - no need to import them from Earth. Finally, the author’s third reason that little sunlight reaches Venus’s surface (blocked by thick clouds and carbon dioxide) makes generating electricity from solar power cells impossible is also counteracted by the lecturer who points out that at 50 km above Venus’s surface, cloud is not as thick as on the surface. In addition, at this height there is also more reflected light from clouds above and below. Therefore, adequate electricity can be generated to power the floating station.
評分結果
1.子项得分 任务完成度:5 组织:4 连贯与衔接:4 语言使用:4
2.预估分数
27. 3.任务完成度
整体来说,这篇文章很好地完成了任务要求,对阅读和听力材料中的观点进行了总结,并解释了演讲者如何解决阅读材料中提到的具体挑战。但是,可以尝试更详细地解释听力材料中提到的某些技术或方法,以便更好地支持论点。
示例1: 原文:“Compounds such as carbon dioxide and a certain acid can be processed to make oxygen and water - no need to import them from Earth.” 改进:“Compounds such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid can be processed through chemical reactions to make oxygen and water, eliminating the need to import them from Earth.”
示例2: 原文:“In addition, at this height there is also more reflected light from clouds above and below.” 改进:“In addition, at this height, there is more reflected light from clouds above and below, which would allow solar power cells to capture both direct sunlight and reflected sunlight for generating electricity.”
4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织基本上是清晰的,包括引言、正文和结论。每个段落都集中在一个具体的观点和支持细节上。然而,在段落之间加入更明确的过渡词或短语可以使文章更连贯。
建议1:在引言部分,可以使用更具体的过渡词或短语来引出听力材料中的观点。 示例:“Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that construction of a floating station 50 km above the surface of Venus would overcome the challenges and opposes the points in the reading material.” 改进:“On the contrary, the lecturer in the listening material presents a proposal for constructing a floating station 50 km above Venus's surface, which would effectively address and overcome these challenges mentioned in the reading passage.”
建议2:在正文部分,可以使用更明确的过渡词或短语来连接各个段落。 示例:“In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on...” 改进:“Furthermore, by addressing another concern raised in the reading passage, the lecturer casts doubt on...”
5. 语法批改
In the reading material, the author cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that the conditions on Venus are too extreme and inhospitable, which makes permanent human presence on Venus impossible. Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that construction of floatinga floating(This rule identifies whether the article 'a' is missing in a sentence.) station 50 km above the surface of Venus would overcome the challenges, and opposes the points in the reading material.
First and foremost, the author argues that the atmospheric pressure on Venus is 90 times that of Earth and will crush any spacecraft that land on it. However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that although the atmospheric pressure is too high on the surface of Venus, it is much lowmuch lower(Superfluous article before 'much', e.g. 'a much work') at a high altitude - 50 km above surfacethe surface(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.). At this level, the pressure is about the same as that on Earth, and poses no danger.
In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author’s another reason that there is no water on the surface or in the atmosphere of Venus (so the purpose of a permanent station is defeated as water and oxygen need to be supplied from Earth), demonstrating that water and oxygen can be made out of chemical compounds from Venus’s atmosphere. Compounds such as carbon dioxide and a certain acid can be processed to make oxygen and water - no need to import them from Earth.
Finally, the author’s third reason that little sunlight reaches Venus’s surface (blocked by thick clouds and carbon dioxide) makes generating electricity from solar power cells impossible is also counteracted by the lecturer who points out that at 50 km above Venus’s surface, cloud is not as thick as on the surface. In addition, at this heightheight,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) there is also more reflected light from clouds above and below. Therefore, adequate electricity can be generated to power the floating station.
Section title: 6.文章修订
The reading passage presents the argument that establishing a permanent human presence on Venus is impossible due to extreme and inhospitable conditions. However, the lecture contends that by constructing a floating station 50 km above Venus's surface, these challenges can be overcome, effectively refuting the points made in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading passage states that the atmospheric pressure on Venus is 90 times greater than on Earth, making it impossible for any spacecraft to survive on its surface. In contrast, the lecturer explains that while this may be true at Venus's surface, at an altitude of 50 km above it, the pressure is similar to that on Earth and would not pose a threat to a floating station.
Secondly, the author of the reading passage asserts that there are no sources of water or oxygen on Venus and supplying them from Earth would be impractical. The lecturer counters this point by explaining that chemical compounds present in Venus's atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid, can be processed to produce water and oxygen. This eliminates the need for importing these essential resources from Earth.
Lastly, the reading passage claims that insufficient sunlight reaches Venus's surface due to thick clouds and carbon dioxide layers blocking it, making solar power generation unfeasible. The lecturer disputes this point by stating that at an altitude of 50 km above Venus's surface, clouds are not as dense and more sunlight can penetrate through them. Furthermore, solar power cells could also capture reflected sunlight from clouds both above and below this altitude. Consequently, sufficient electricity could be generated to power a floating station above Venus's surface. (276 words)
In the reading material, the author cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that the conditions on Venus are too extreme and inhospitable, which makes Section title: 6.文章修订
The reading passage presents the argument that establishing a permanent human presence on Venus impossible. Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that construction of is impossible due to extreme and inhospitable conditions (changed for clarity and conciseness). However, the lecture contends that by constructing a floating station 50 km above the surface of Venus would overcome the challenges, and opposes Venus's surface, these challenges can be overcome, effectively refuting the points made in the reading material. passage (rephrased for better flow).
First and foremost, the author argues Firstly, the reading passage states that the atmospheric pressure on Venus is 90 times that of Earth and will crush greater than on Earth, making it impossible for any spacecraft that land on it. However, to survive on its surface. In contrast, the lecturer offers explains that while this may be true at Venus's surface, at an opposite stand that although the atmospheric altitude of 50 km above it, the pressure is too high on the surface similar to that on Earth and would not pose a threat to a floating station (revised for better flow and clarity).
Secondly, the author of Venus, it is much low at a high altitude - 50 km above surface. At the reading passage asserts that there are no sources of water or oxygen on Venus and supplying them from Earth would be impractical. The lecturer counters this level, the pressure is about the same as that on Earth, and poses no danger. ¶ In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author’s another reason that there is no water on the surface or in the atmosphere of Venus (so the purpose of a permanent station is defeated as water and oxygen need to be supplied from Earth), demonstrating that water and oxygen can be made out of point by explaining that chemical compounds from Venus’s atmosphere. Compounds present in Venus's atmosphere, such as carbon dioxide and a certain acid sulfuric acid, can be processed to make oxygen and produce water - no and oxygen. This eliminates the need to import them for importing these essential resources from Earth. Earth (rephrased for better flow).
Finally, the author’s third reason that little Lastly, the reading passage claims that insufficient sunlight reaches Venus’s Venus's surface (blocked by due to thick clouds and carbon dioxide) makes generating electricity from dioxide layers blocking it, making solar power generation unfeasible. The lecturer disputes this point by stating that at an altitude of 50 km above Venus's surface, clouds are not as dense and more sunlight can penetrate through them. Furthermore, solar power cells impossible is could also counteracted by the lecturer who points out that at 50 km above Venus’s surface, cloud is not as thick as on the surface. In addition, at this height there is also more capture reflected light sunlight from clouds above and below. Therefore, adequate both above and below this altitude. Consequently, sufficient electricity can could be generated to power the a floating station.station above Venus's surface (revised for better flow and clarity).
8. Mind Map
1. Introduction
- Reading passage argument
- Lecture counterargument
2. Atmospheric Pressure
- Reading passage: high pressure on Venus's surface
- Lecture: lower pressure at 50 km altitude
3. Water and Oxygen Sources
- Reading passage: no sources, impractical to supply from Earth
- Lecture: processing chemical compounds in Venus's atmosphere
4. Solar Power Generation
- Reading passage: insufficient sunlight due to clouds and CO2 layers
- Lecture: more sunlight at 50 km altitude, capturing reflected sunlight from clouds
5. Conclusion
- Refuting reading passage points with lecture information
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
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| inhospitable | /ɪnˈhɒspɪtəbl/ | adjective | (of an environment) harsh and difficult to live in | 不适宜居住的 | The extreme temperatures make the desert an inhospitable environment for humans. |
| altitude | /ˈæltɪtjuːd/ | noun | height above sea level or the Earth's surface | 海拔 | The mountain climbers reached an altitude of 8,000 meters before setting up camp. |
| atmospheric | /ætməˈsfɛrɪk/ | adjective | relating to the Earth's atmosphere | 大气的 | Atmospheric pressure decreases as you ascend higher into the sky. |
| compound | /ˈkɒmpaʊnd/ | noun | a substance formed from two or more elements | 化合物 | Water is a compound made up of hydrogen and oxygen. |
| sulfuric acid | /ˈsʌlfjʊrɪk ˈæsɪd/ | noun | a strong acid that is used in many industrial processes | 硫酸 | Sulfuric acid can be dangerous if not handled properly due to its corrosive properties. |
| solar power | /ˈsoʊlər ˈpaʊər/ | noun | electricity generated from sunlight | 太阳能 | Solar power is an environmentally friendly alternative to fossil fuels. |
| dense | /dɛns/ | adjective | closely compacted in substance | 稠密的 | The forest was so dense that it was difficult to see more than a few feet ahead. |
| penetrate | /ˈpɛnɪtreɪt/ | verb | to pass into or through something | 穿透 | The sunlight could barely penetrate the thick canopy of leaves above us. |
| electricity | /ɪlɛkˈtrɪsɪti/ | noun | a form of energy resulting from charged particles | 电力 | Electricity powers most of the devices we use in our daily lives. |
| floating station | /ˈfloʊtɪŋ ˈsteɪʃən/ | noun | a structure suspended above a planet's surface | 悬浮空间站 | A floating station above Venus's surface could overcome the challenges posed by its harsh conditions. |
3考生範例 #3
The reading states that it's impossible to maintain a human presence on Venus because of three reasons. However, the professor argues that those three...
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考生範例 #3
The reading states that it's impossible to maintain a human presence on Venus because of three reasons. However, the professor argues that those three...
考生範例
The reading states that it's impossible to maintain a human presence on Venus because of three reasons. However, the professor argues that those three issues can all be solved so that it's possible for human to establish homes on Venus. The first issue the reading believes is that the atmosphere pressure at Venus' surface is over 90 times greater than that at the Earth's surface, so humans will be crushed within an hour of landing on Venus. In contrast, the professor mentions a solution that humans can build stations above the surface, in the floating air. For example, the pressure at 50 kilometers above the Venus surface equals to the pressure at the surface of Earth, as the higher the altitude is, the lower the pressure will be. Therefore, building stations in the air can help people avoid being crushed. The second reason the reading gives is that there are no reservoirs of water and oxygen for people to survive on Venus, and transporting oxygen and water from earth to Venus regularly is impractical. The professor holds an opposite opinion, saying that Venus has carbon dioxide and nitrogen, so that water and oxygen can be generated through chemical processing of these materials. Thus, it's not necessary to import oxygen and water from earth. Last, the reading contends that very little sunlight can pass through the thick cloud and the dense carbon dioxide layer of Venus. Because of the lack of sunlight, people can not get electricity to meet daily needs. However, the professor says that the clouds on the Venus are not very thick, leading to enough sunlight pass through them. Besides, the stations in the upper air can receive both the sunlight from the above and the sunlight below reflected by the carbon layer. Therefore, people live in the stations will get sufficient sunlight to power the stations and for daily usage.
評分結果
1.子项得分 任务完成度:4 组织:4 连贯性和衔接:4 语言使用:4
2.预估分数
25. 3.任务完成度
整体来说,你的文章在任务完成度方面表现得相当不错。你成功地总结了听力中提到的解决方案,并说明了这些解决方案如何克服阅读材料中提到的具体挑战。然而,为了更好地完成任务,你可以更详细地解释听力材料中提到的一些具体信息,以便更清楚地说明这些解决方案是如何克服挑战的。
示例1: 原文:“The professor holds an opposite opinion, saying that Venus has carbon dioxide and nitrogen, so that water and oxygen can be generated through chemical processing of these materials.” 改进:“The professor holds an opposite opinion, saying that Venus has carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid, which can be used in chemical processes to generate water and oxygen for human survival.”
示例2: 原文:“However, the professor says that the clouds on the Venus are not very thick, leading to enough sunlight pass through them.” 改进:“However, the professor says that at 50 kilometers above Venus' surface, the clouds are not very thick, allowing a considerable amount of sunlight to filter through.”
4.文章结构与组织 从文章结构和组织的角度来看,你的文章已经相当不错。有明确的引言、主体和结论部分,每个段落都集中在一个特定的观点和支持细节上。然而,为了进一步改进文章的结构和组织,你可以更明确地使用过渡词或短语来连接不同的想法和段落。
示例1: 原文:“In contrast, the professor mentions a solution that humans can build stations above the surface, in the floating air.” 改进:“In contrast, the professor mentions a solution to this problem: humans can build stations above the surface, in the floating air.”
示例2: 原文:“The professor holds an opposite opinion, saying that Venus has carbon dioxide and nitrogen, so that water and oxygen can be generated through chemical processing of these materials.” 改进:“However, the professor holds an opposite opinion and provides a solution: Venus has carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid, which can be used in chemical processes to generate water and oxygen for human survival.”
5. 语法批改
The reading states that it's impossible to maintain a human presence on Venus because of three reasons. However, the professor argues that those three issues can all be solved so that it's possible for human to establish homes on Venus.
The first issue the reading believes is that the atmosphere pressure at Venus' surface is over 90 times greater than that at the Earth's surface, so humans will be crushed within an hour of landing on Venus. In contrast, the professor mentions a solution that humans can build stations above the surface, in the floating air. For example, the pressure at 50 kilometers above the Venus surface equals to the pressure at the surface of Earth, as the higher the altitude is, the lower the pressure will be. Therefore, building stations in the air can help people avoid being crushed.
The second reason the reading gives is that there are no reservoirs of water and oxygen for people to survive on Venus, and transporting oxygen and water from earth to Venus regularly is impractical. The professor holds an opposite opinion, saying that Venus has carbon dioxide and nitrogen, so that water and oxygen can be generated through chemical processing of these materials. Thus, it's not necessary to import oxygen and water from earth.
Last, the reading contends that very little sunlight can pass through the thick cloud and the dense carbon dioxide layer of Venus. Because of the lack of sunlight, people can not get electricity to meet daily needs. However, the professor says that the clouds on the Venus are not very thick, leading to enough sunlight passto pass(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'to' is missing in a sentence.) through them. Besides, the stations in the upper air can receive both the sunlight from the above and the sunlight below reflected by the carbon layer. Therefore, people live in the stations will get sufficient sunlight to power the stations and for daily usage.
Section Title: 6.文章修订
The reading passage asserts that maintaining a human presence on Venus is impossible due to three main challenges. However, the lecture contends that these issues can be addressed, making it feasible for humans to establish a presence on Venus.
Firstly, the reading claims that the atmospheric pressure on Venus' surface is 90 times greater than Earth's, causing any human or spacecraft to be crushed within an hour of landing. In contrast, the lecturer proposes a solution involving the construction of floating stations 50 kilometers above Venus' surface. At this altitude, the atmospheric pressure is equal to that on Earth's surface. Consequently, building stations at this height would prevent humans from being crushed.
Secondly, the reading argues that there are no reservoirs of water and oxygen on Venus and supplying them from Earth would be impractical. The lecturer counters this by stating that Venus has an abundance of carbon dioxide and nitrogen which can be chemically processed to produce water and oxygen. As a result, importing these resources from Earth would not be necessary.
Lastly, the reading suggests that insufficient sunlight reaches Venus' surface due to its thick cloud cover and dense carbon dioxide layer, making it impossible for humans to generate electricity using solar power cells. However, the lecturer explains that clouds at 50 kilometers above Venus' surface are not very thick, allowing a considerable amount of sunlight to filter through. Furthermore, floating stations could capture both direct sunlight from above and reflected sunlight from below. This would provide more than enough electricity for daily use and powering the station.
In conclusion, despite the challenges presented in the reading passage, the lecture offers viable solutions for each issue, demonstrating that establishing a permanent human presence on Venus is indeed possible. (293 words)
Revised essay: Section Title: 7.文章批改
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Secondly, the reading argues that there are no reservoirs of water and oxygen on Venus and supplying them from Earth would be impractical. The lecturer counters this by stating that Venus has an abundance of carbon dioxide and nitrogen which can build stations above the surface, in the floating air. For example, the pressure be chemically processed to produce water and oxygen (revised for clarity). As a result, importing these resources from Earth would not be necessary.
Lastly, the reading suggests that insufficient sunlight reaches Venus' surface due to its thick cloud cover and dense carbon dioxide layer, making it impossible for humans to generate electricity using solar power cells. However, the lecturer explains that clouds at 50 kilometers above the Venus Venus' surface equals to the pressure at the surface of Earth, as the higher the altitude is, the lower the pressure will be. Therefore, building stations in the air can help people avoid being crushed. ¶ The second reason the reading gives is that there are no reservoirs of water and oxygen for people to survive on Venus, and transporting oxygen and water from earth to Venus regularly is impractical. The professor holds an opposite opinion, saying that Venus has carbon dioxide and nitrogen, so that water and oxygen can be generated through chemical processing of these materials. Thus, it's not necessary to import oxygen and water from earth. ¶ Last, the reading contends that very little sunlight can pass through the thick cloud and the dense carbon dioxide layer of Venus. Because of the lack of sunlight, people can not get electricity to meet daily needs. However, the professor says that the clouds on the Venus are not very thick, leading to thick (revised for accuracy), allowing a considerable amount of sunlight to filter through. Furthermore, floating stations could capture both direct sunlight from above and reflected sunlight from below (revised for clarity). This would provide more than enough sunlight pass through them. Besides, the stations electricity for daily use and powering the station.
In conclusion, despite the challenges presented in the upper air can receive both the sunlight from the above and the sunlight below reflected by the carbon layer. Therefore, people live in the stations will get sufficient sunlight to power the stations and for daily usage.reading passage, the lecture offers viable solutions for each issue (revised for conciseness), demonstrating that establishing a permanent human presence on Venus is indeed possible.
8. Mind Map
- Introduction
- Reading passage: human presence on Venus impossible
- Lecture: solutions to challenges
- Challenge 1: Atmospheric Pressure
- Reading: crushing pressure on surface
- Lecture: floating stations at 50 km altitude
- Challenge 2: Lack of Water and Oxygen
- Reading: no reservoirs, impractical to supply from Earth
- Lecture: chemical processing of CO2 and nitrogen to produce resources
- Challenge 3: Insufficient Sunlight for Electricity Generation
- Reading: thick cloud cover and dense CO2 layer block sunlight
- Lecture: sunlight available at floating station altitude, direct and reflected sunlight captured for electricity generation
- Conclusion
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation (if needed) | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| atmospheric pressure | /ætməˈsfɪrɪk prɛʃər/ | noun | the force exerted by the weight of the atmosphere on a given area | 大气压力 | The atmospheric pressure on Venus is much higher than that on Earth. |
| reservoirs | /ˈrɛzərvwɑrz/ | noun | a large natural or artificial lake used as a source of water supply; a place where fluid collects, especially in rock strata or in the body | 水库;贮藏所;蓄水池;储藏器官(或组织);储液器官(或组织);蓄水层;贮藏层;储集层 | There are no reservoirs of water and oxygen on Venus. |
| impractical | /ɪmˈpræktɪkəl/ | adjective | not sensible or realistic; not useful or workable in practice | 不切实际的;不现实的;行不通的;无用的;不能实行的 | Supplying water and oxygen from Earth to Venus would be impractical. |
| chemically processed | /ˈkɛmɪkəli ˈprəʊsɛst/ | adjective + verb (past participle) | treated or altered using chemicals | 化学处理过的 | Carbon dioxide and nitrogen can be chemically processed to produce water and oxygen. |
| floating stations | /ˈfloʊtɪŋ ˈsteɪʃənz/ | noun (compound) | structures that are designed to float above a planet's surface, typically for scientific research or human habitation purposes | 漂浮站(科研或人类居住用途) | Floating stations could be built at an altitude of 50 kilometers above Venus' surface. |
| altitude | /ˈæltɪtjuːd/ | noun | the height of an object or point in relation to sea level or ground level; the vertical elevation of an object above a surface, such as the Earth's, as defined by the local horizontal plane perpendicular to the direction of gravity at that point. 离地面或海 平面的高度;高地;海拔;高度,海拔高度(尤指飞行器离地面或海平面的垂直距离) | The floating stations would be constructed at an altitude where atmospheric pressure is equal to that on Earth's surface. | |
| insufficient | /ˌɪnsəˈfɪʃənt/ | adjective | not enough; inadequate | 不足的;不够的;不充分的;不适当的;不能胜任的 | The reading suggests that there is insufficient sunlight on Venus' surface for electricity generation. |
| solar power cells | /ˈsoʊlər ˈpaʊər sɛlz/ | noun (compound) | devices that convert sunlight into electricity, typically using photovoltaic technology | 太阳能电池板;太阳能电池组件;太阳能电池片;太阳能电池阵列;太阳能发电装置(或设备) | Humans could generate electricity on Venus using solar power cells. |
| reflected sunlight | /rɪˈflɛktɪd ˈsʌnlaɪt/ | noun (compound) | sunlight that has been bounced off a surface, such as a planet's atmosphere or ground, and is then available for capture by solar power cells or other devices designed to harness the sun's energy 反射光,反射日光,反射阳光(如地球大气层或地面反射出来的日光) | Floating stations could capture both direct sunlight from above and reflected sunlight from below. |