TOEFL TPO 67 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example from the professor's lecture illustrates goal displacement.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve their pronunciation to avoid confusion. For example, the word "displacement" was not mentioned in the response, which is essential for answering the question. To improve delivery, the speaker should focus on pronouncing key terms correctly and ensuring that all necessary information is included in their response.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the response does not directly address the concept of goal displacement as asked in the question. To improve topic development, the speaker should ensure that they fully understand the question and address it directly in their response. In this case, they should explain how the ants' behavior of constantly moving to find food for baby ants demonstrates goal displacement.

5.Language Use

Original: Nomadic phase is a continuous move of a type of insect. The nomadic phase involves the continuous movement of certain insects. (Rephrased for clarity and natural language flow) Typically, this happens because they have some temporary needs to be satisfied, and they just keep moving to find a way to satisfy their need. This typically occurs when they have temporary needs that must be met, prompting them to constantly search for resources. (Improved sentence structure and vocabulary) And once their need has been satisfied, they will settle down. Once their needs are met, they settle in one location. (Simplified sentence structure)

Revised answer (140 words):

The nomadic phase involves the continuous movement of certain insects. This typically occurs when they have temporary needs that must be met, prompting them to constantly search for resources. For example, a particular type of ant lives together in a colony. When baby ants are present in the colony, they require a significant amount of food for proper nutrition. To ensure the baby ants receive enough sustenance, the entire colony moves from one location to another in search of food. This process continues until the baby ants mature and no longer require as much nourishment. At this point, the ant community can settle in one location and establish a new underground nest. The ants' behavior demonstrates goal displacement as they temporarily shift their focus from maintaining their nest to finding food sources for the baby ants, ultimately returning to their original goal of nest maintenance once the baby ants' needs are met.

6.Mind Map

• Nomadic phase

  • Continuous movement
  • Temporary needs

• Ant colony example

  • Baby ants' nutrition
  • Moving for food resources

• Goal displacement

  • Shifting focus
  • Returning to original goal

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

总分：23

3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔出现停顿。标点问题是由于不恰当的停顿造成的。所有拼写错误都是由于发音不准确造成的。忽略大小写错误。建议发言者继续练习发音和语言连贯性，以提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展

从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，观点之间关系明确，有足够的支持和例子。但仍有提升空间，建议在练习中尝试更多地展开论述，提供更详细的解释和例证，以使回答更加丰富和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: This passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, in which an entire group of a species moves in search of additional resources, and once this need is met, they settle down again. In the lecture, the professor elaborates on this concept using the example of a particular ant species. These ants live in underground nests and must gather food daily. However, once they have larvae, their nutritional needs increase, requiring them to find more food for the larvae's growth. During this period, the entire colony leaves the nest in search of food resources. When one food source is depleted, they move to another, continuing this process until the larvae mature, at which point they cease moving and establish a new nest.

Corrected Answer: This passage introduces thea concept of the nomadic phase(将“the”改为“a”，使语言更自然), in which an entire group of a species moves in search of additional resources(删除“and”，使句子结构更清晰). Once this need is met, they settle down again. In the lecture, the professor elaborates on this concept using the example of a specific ant species(将“particular”改为“specific”，词汇更丰富). These ants live in underground nests and must gather food daily. However, once they have larvae, their nutritional needs increase, necessitating them to find more food for the larvae's growth(将“requiring”改为“necessitating”，词汇更丰富). During this period, the entire colony leaves the nest in search of food resources. When one food source is depleted, they move to another, continuing this process until the larvae mature. At this point, they cease moving and establish a new nest(在句子末尾加上“at this point”，使句子更连贯).

Revised Answer (140 words): The passage introduces a concept of the nomadic phase, wherein an entire group of a species moves in search of additional resources to fulfill their needs. Once these needs are met, they settle down again. In the lecture, the professor elaborates on this concept by providing an example of a specific ant species that exhibits this behavior. These ants live in underground nests and gather food daily. However, when they have larvae, their nutritional needs increase significantly, necessitating them to find more food for the larvae's growth and development. Consequently, the entire colony leaves the nest in search of food resources. They continuously move from one location to another as food sources are depleted until the larvae mature. At this point, they cease moving and establish a new nest, signifying the end of their nomadic phase and resuming a more settled lifestyle.

6.思维导图

- Nomadic Phase
  - Concept
  - Species movement
  - Resource search

- Lecture Example
  - Specific ant species
  - Underground nests
  - Larvae's nutritional needs
  - Colony movement
  - New nest establishment

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 回答中的表达大部分清晰流畅，但有些地方可能需要稍作调整。建议在练习时注意以下几点：1）尽量保持语速一致，避免不必要的停顿；2）注意发音准确性，以免出现拼写错误；3）在回答中适当使用连词和过渡词，使句子更加通顺。通过多加练习，相信你的表达能力会得到进一步提高。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论证方面还有待加强。建议在练习时注意以下几点：1）明确回答的主题，确保内容紧扣题目要求；2）在回答中使用恰当的过渡词和连接词，使观点之间的联系更加明显；3）提供充分的支持和例证，以增强说服力。通过多加练习和总结经验，相信你的话题发展能力会得到进一步提高。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Nomadic phase is that the entire group will continue to moving from one places to another to meet to enable their life. The nomadic phase occurs when the entire group continuously moves from one place to another to sustain their lives. (将“Nomadic phase is that”改为“The nomadic phase occurs when”，使句子更自然；将“continue to moving”改为“continuously moves”，使动词形式正确；将“one places”改为“one place”，使名词单复数正确；将“to meet to enable”改为“to sustain”，使句子更简洁。)
The professor take a kind of specific ants as example. The professor uses a specific type of ant as an example. (将“take”改为“uses”，使动词时态一致；将“a kind of specific ants”改为“a specific type of ant”，使表达更准确。)
These ants live together and they collecting food on the ground. These ants live together and collect food on the ground. (将“they collecting”改为“collect”，使动词形式正确。)
However, breeding baby ants need more nutrition and there will not be enough food on the ground. However, baby ants require more nutrition, and there is not enough food available on the ground. (将“breeding baby ants need”改为“baby ants require”，使表达更准确；将“there will not be”改为“there is not”，使时态一致；添加“available”使句子更自然。)
So they have to carry these baby ants from their original location to another places to find fresh food continually until these baby ants become mature and they don't need so much food. Therefore, they must transport the baby ants from their original location to other places in search of a continuous supply of fresh food until the baby ants mature and no longer require as much nourishment. (将“so”改为“therefore”，使过渡词更准确；将“carry”改为“transport”，使动词更准确；将“another places”改为“other places”，使名词单复数正确；将“find fresh food continually”改为“in search of a continuous supply of fresh food”，使表达更自然；将“they don't need so much food”改为“no longer require as much nourishment”，使表达更准确。)
And they started to settle down and group new colonies. Finally, they settle down and establish new colonies. (将“And they started to”改为“Finally, they”，使句子更自然；将“group”改为“establish”，使动词更准确。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The nomadic phase occurs when the entire group continuously moves from one place to another to sustain their lives. The professor uses a specific type of ant as an example. These ants live together and collect food on the ground. However, baby ants require more nutrition, and there is not enough food available on the ground. Therefore, they must transport the baby ants from their original location to other places in search of a continuous supply of fresh food until the baby ants mature and no longer require as much nourishment. Finally, they settle down and establish new colonies.

6.思维导图

Nomadic Phase
├── Definition
│   └── Continuous movement for sustenance
├── Example
│   ├── Specific type of ant
│   ├── Live together and collect food
│   └── Baby ants require more nutrition
├── Solution
│   ├── Transport baby ants to other places
│   ├── Continuous supply of fresh food
│   └── Until baby ants mature
└── Result
    └── Settle down and establish new colonies

7.关键词