TOEFL TPO 4 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The computer department is considering a scheduling change. Explain the man's opinion of the change and the reasons he gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve their delivery by avoiding repetition of certain phrases and focusing on more natural transitions between ideas. Additionally, the speaker should work on their pronunciation to avoid any potential spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading and listening passages. However, the speaker could improve their topic development by providing more specific details from the listening passage to support their points. This would help to strengthen their argument and make their response even more persuasive.

5.Language Use

The reading passage is about a new university schedule to schedule plan to offer the computer classes for in the evening, in the evenings,(rephrased for clarity and natural flow) stating that the classes will hold in the evening because there is overcrowding during the day and there are not enough computers for students to use in the classrooms, but the man in the listening passage thinks that this is not a good idea. Firstly, he says that the scheduling of the classes for in the evening will not be helpful to him as he has other activities that he is supposed to do during the evenings(removed unnecessary repetition) and then secondly he states that spending extra money on teachers for the evening classes is also not a good idea. He thinks that it is better for them to buy more computers since computers have become cheaper over the last few years and the classes are quite spacious in order to accommodate so many computers.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The passage discusses a new university plan to offer computer classes in the evenings, as a response to overcrowding during daytime classes and insufficient computers for students. However, the man in the listening passage disagrees with this proposal. He argues that scheduling evening classes would not be helpful, as many students have other commitments during that time. Additionally, he believes that spending extra money on hiring teachers for evening classes is not cost-effective. Instead, he suggests purchasing more computers, as their prices have decreased significantly in recent years. Furthermore, he mentions that there is ample space within computer classrooms to accommodate additional computers. By addressing these concerns, the university could better serve its students and provide a more effective solution to the overcrowding issue.

6.Mind Map

- Passage
  - New university plan
  - Evening computer classes
  - Overcrowding and insufficient computers

- Listening
  - Man's disagreement
    - Evening commitments
    - Extra expenses for teachers
    - Alternative solution
      - Purchase more computers
      - Decreased prices
      - Ample classroom space

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of speech. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout their response and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should focus on accurate pronunciation to avoid any confusion or misunderstandings.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the points made. To enhance topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on their points and incorporating more detailed examples from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

There is an article about the school's computer classes that the school will start off removingadding(corrected for clarity) classes because the day classes are too crowded. But the man in the conversation doesn't agree with this idea because first of all, he thinks many students are busy at night and many already have their scheduleschedules(corrected for plural form), such as staystaying(corrected for verb form) with their families and have some other classes, so it won't be better in the night. Furthermore, the man also suggests that this idea won't save much money because it's very expensive to hire teachers at night and it's very expensive to keep the building open. Furthermore,(removed for redundancy) he also suggests that computers are cheaper these days and the computer classrooms are very big and have enough space to add more computers.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The article discusses a proposal to add evening computer classes at school due to overcrowding in daytime classes. However, the man in the conversation disagrees with this idea for several reasons. Firstly, he believes that many students have busy schedules at night, including family commitments and other activities, making evening classes less convenient. Secondly, he argues that hiring teachers for evening classes and keeping the building open would be more expensive than simply purchasing additional computers. He points out that computer prices have decreased in recent years, making it more cost-effective to buy new computers. Additionally, he mentions that the computer classrooms are spacious enough to accommodate more computers. Overall, the man believes that adding evening classes is not the most efficient solution to address the overcrowding issue in daytime computer classes.

6.Mind Map

- Disagreement with proposal
  - Busy schedules at night
    - Family commitments
    - Other activities
  - Cost concerns
    - Hiring teachers
    - Keeping building open
  - Alternative solution
    - Purchasing additional computers
      - Decreased prices
      - Spacious classrooms

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 26

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice proper pausing and work on accurate pronunciation of certain words.

4.Topic Development The topic development in the response is excellent. The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The man's opinion on the scheduling change is clearly explained, along with the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. No significant improvements are needed in this aspect.

5.Language Use

The university is thinking of having evening nighttime computer classes. The reason given is that the morning computer classes do not have enough computers for all the students. However, the man disagrees with this idea. It will not solve the problem. This is because the students' nights are rather busy. They have jobs, families, clubs, and events. Thus, they will not be able to find the time for an evening computer class. The second problem is expenses. The man thinks that it will cost too much to hire teachers and keep the building open for evening classes. At the same time, computer prices have come down. So, just buying more computers for the morning computer classes will suffice. In addition, the room for the computer classes are is (correcting subject-verb agreement) very big. So, there will be space for these new computers. Thus, in conclusion, these are the two reasons why the man thinks evening computer classes should not be allowed.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university is considering offering nighttime computer classes due to overcrowding in morning sessions and insufficient computers for all students. However, the man opposes this proposal as it fails to address the core issue: students' busy schedules during evenings with jobs, family commitments, clubs, and social events make it difficult to attend nighttime classes. Additionally, he argues that the financial burden of hiring extra teachers and extending building hours outweighs simply purchasing more computers for existing morning sessions. With declining computer prices and ample classroom space available, investing in additional computers seems a more cost-effective solution. In conclusion, based on these two reasons - students' busy evenings and financial concerns - the man believes that offering evening computer classes is not the most effective solution.

6.Mind Map

- Introduction
  - University considering nighttime computer classes
  - Man's disagreement

- Reason 1: Busy evenings
  - Jobs, families, clubs, events
  - Difficulty attending classes

- Reason 2: Financial concerns
  - Hiring teachers, extending building hours
  - Alternative: buying more computers
    - Declining prices
    - Ample classroom space

- Conclusion
  - Man's belief in alternative solution

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但偶尔会有一些停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议在练习时注意保持连贯性和一致的语速，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，可以多加练习发音，以提高准确度。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答基本上是连贯和组织良好的，观点之间的联系也比较清晰。但是，在提供支持或举例方面还有待加强。建议在练习时尝试多提供一些具体的例子或详细的解释，以使观点更有说服力。同时，注意保持回答结构的清晰和逻辑性。

5.语言使用

原文：Well, both the reading and listening parts discuss about whether the university should offer the evening classes for computer department. Well, both the reading and listening parts discuss whether the university should offer evening classes for the computer department.（删除"about"，因为"discuss"后面直接接宾语。）

However, a male student disagrees with the ideas presented in the reading material. However, a male student disagrees with the proposal presented in the reading material.（将"ideas"改为"proposal"，以更准确地描述阅读材料中的内容。）

He provides two reasons. He offers two reasons.（将"provides"改为"offers"，使表达更自然。）

The first one is that many students are usually occupied at night. The first reason is that many students are typically busy at night.（将"one"改为"reason"，将"usually occupied"改为"typically busy"，使表达更自然。）

For example, they have their jobs to do and also have some family events or social activity to participate. For instance, they have jobs to attend to and also have family events or social activities to participate in.（将“for example”改为“for instance”，将“their jobs to do”改为“jobs to attend to”，将“activity”改为“activities”，并在“participate”后面加上“in”，使表达更自然。）

And secondly, he indicates that hiring more teachers for the computer classes is much expensive than just buying more computers. Secondly, he points out that hiring more teachers for the computer classes is more expensive than simply purchasing additional computers.（将"indicates"改为"points out"，将"much expensive"改为"more expensive"，将"buying more computers"改为"purchasing additional computers"，使表达更自然。）

And additionally, the rooms in the computer department are very big. Furthermore, the classrooms in the computer department are quite spacious.（将"And additionally"改为"Furthermore"，将“rooms”改为“classrooms”，将“very big”改为“quite spacious”，使表达更自然。）

So it's quite spacious for adding enough computers to accommodate more students. So there is ample space to add enough computers to accommodate more students.（将"It's quite spacious for adding enough computers"改为"There is ample space to add enough computers"，使表达更自然。）

So therefore, the male student disputes the ideas presented in the reading material. Thus, the male student challenges the proposal presented in the reading material.（将"So therefore"改为"Thus"，将“ideas”改为“proposal”，使表达更自然。）

修订版（140词）：

Well, both the reading and listening parts discuss whether the university should offer evening classes for the computer department. However, a male student disagrees with the proposal presented in the reading material. He offers two reasons. The first reason is that many students are typically busy at night. For instance, they have jobs to attend to and also have family events or social activities to participate in. Secondly, he points out that hiring more teachers for the computer classes is more expensive than simply purchasing additional computers. Furthermore, the classrooms in the computer department are quite spacious. So there is ample space to add enough computers to accommodate more students. Thus, the male student challenges the proposal presented in the reading material.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Reading and listening: evening classes for computer department
  - Male student's disagreement

- Reason 1: Students' busy schedules
  - Nighttime activities: jobs, family events, social activities

- Reason 2: Cost-effectiveness
  - Hiring teachers vs. purchasing additional computers
  - Spacious classrooms in the computer department

- Conclusion
  - Male student challenges the proposal

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但偶尔会有些停顿。建议练习更自然地连接句子，以减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，观点之间的联系也比较清晰。但可以在解释男生观点时提供更多具体的例子和支持。例如，在谈论学生晚上很忙时，可以提到女生的游泳训练作为一个例子。此外，在谈论购买更多电脑的建议时，可以进一步说明这将如何解决问题。总之，尝试在回答中提供更多细节和支持信息，以使话题发展得更充分。

5.语言使用

Original: The passage tells students that evenevening computer classes is added for two reasons that the computer classes in the daytime is crowded and the policy can solve this problem even without spending a lot of money. (原文中的“even”应改为“evening”，以表示“晚上的”)

Corrected: The passage tells students that evening computer classes is added for two reasons that the computer classes in the daytime is crowded and the policy can solve this problem even without spending a lot of money.

Original: In the conversation, however, the men totally disagree with such a stance. (原文中的“men”应改为“man”，以表示单数)

Corrected: In the conversation, however, the man totally disagree with such a stance.

Original: The first point is that it won't really solve the problem. In fact, students are very busy at night with jobs, families, clubs and social activities. So the classes cannot actually fit the schedule of the students. (原文中的“fit”应改为“fit into”，以表示“适应、融入”)

Corrected: The first point is that it won't really solve the problem. In fact, students are very busy at night with jobs, families, clubs and social activities. So the classes cannot actually fit into the schedule of the students.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The passage informs students that evening computer classes will be added for two reasons: daytime computer classes are overcrowded, and this policy can alleviate this issue without incurring significant expenses. However, in the conversation, the man disagrees with this approach. He argues that it will not effectively solve the problem because students are already occupied at night with jobs, families, clubs, and social activities, making it difficult for them to fit evening classes into their schedules. Additionally, he believes that the university would incur greater costs by hiring more teachers and keeping the building open late at night. Instead, he suggests purchasing more computers since their prices have decreased in recent years and there is ample space in the computer department classrooms to accommodate additional computers.

6.思维导图

- Passage
  - Evening computer classes
  - Reasons: overcrowded daytime classes, cost-effective solution

- Conversation
  - Man's disagreement
    - Students busy at night
      - Jobs, families, clubs, social activities
    - Increased costs
      - Hiring teachers, keeping building open late
  - Alternative solution: buy more computers
    - Lower prices, ample space in classrooms

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and minimize unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons why adding evening classes may not be effective and provide more evidence to support their argument about buying more computers as a better solution.

5.Language Use

The man in the conversation is highly opposed against ("against" is more natural in this context) the policy made by the computer department to add computer lessons at night. Firstly, he asserts that many students are busy at night, they have a lot of things to do with their family or their works or something else, though they are occupied both in weekdays or weekends. Secondly, he thinks that it can't solve the problem because it is more costly for the school to hire more teachers and keep the teaching building open in the night. And he thinks that the classroom is big enough to contain more computers and the old computers can be sold by the school to compensate for their costs.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The man in the conversation is strongly against the computer department's proposal to add evening computer classes. He believes that many students have busy schedules at night, including work, family commitments, and extracurricular activities, making it difficult for them to attend evening classes. Furthermore, he argues that this solution would not be cost-effective for the school as hiring additional teachers and keeping the building open at night would be more expensive than simply purchasing more computers. He also points out that computer prices have decreased significantly in recent years, making it more affordable for the department to invest in new equipment. Additionally, he suggests that there is ample space in the classrooms to accommodate extra computers and that selling old computers could help offset expenses.

6.Mind Map

• Against evening classes
  • Busy schedules
    • Work
    • Family commitments
    • Extracurricular activities
  • Cost-effectiveness
    • Hiring additional teachers
    • Keeping building open at night
  • Alternative solution
    • Purchasing more computers
      • Decreased prices
      • Ample classroom space
      • Selling old computers

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上讲得比较清楚，但有时会出现一些停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的稳定性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容条理清晰、组织有序，观点之间的联系明确，并且提供了足够的支持和例子。在这方面已经做得很好，继续保持。

5.语言使用

原文：Well, both the reading and listening materials discuss whether the university should offer the evening classes for the computer department. Both the reading and listening materials discuss the possibility of offering evening classes for the computer department at the university. (这里将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。) While the male student in the listening part opposed the opinions presented in the reading passage, he provides two main reasons. The male student in the listening part opposes the opinions presented in the reading passage and provides two main reasons. (这里调整了时态和句子结构，使其更自然。) And Firstly, (使用“Firstly”替换“And”以更清晰地表示列举原因的开始。) the first one is that students are usually occupied at night. (删除了多余的词汇，使句子更简洁。) For example, they have their own job to do, and sometimes they also have to deal with some family events or participate in some social activities. And secondly, Secondly, (删除了多余的“And”以保持句子的简洁性。) the male student indicates that hiring more teachers for increasing the evening classes is much more expensive than just buying some more computers in the computer rooms. the male student argues that hiring more teachers to increase evening classes would be more expensive than simply purchasing additional computers for the computer rooms. (这里对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。) And additionally, Furthermore, (使用“Furthermore”替换“And additionally”以提高语言的正式程度。) the classrooms in the computer department are quite spacious, as the male student indicates that it is quite enough to just add more computers than evening classes to settle down the overcrowded issue in the computer department. the classrooms in the computer department are quite spacious, and according to the male student, adding more computers would be sufficient to address the overcrowding issue in the department rather than adding evening classes. (这里对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。) So therefore, the student expresses his disagreement with the views held by the reading material.

Revised Answer (140 words):

Both the reading and listening materials discuss the possibility of offering evening classes for the computer department at the university. The male student in the listening part opposes the opinions presented in the reading passage and provides two main reasons. Firstly, students are usually occupied at night. For example, they have their own job to do, and sometimes they also have to deal with family events or participate in social activities. Secondly, the male student argues that hiring more teachers to increase evening classes would be more expensive than simply purchasing additional computers for the computer rooms. Furthermore, the classrooms in the computer department are quite spacious, and according to the male student, adding more computers would be sufficient to address the overcrowding issue in the department rather than adding evening classes. So therefore, the student expresses his disagreement with the views held by the reading material.

6.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Reading and listening materials
  • Evening classes for the computer department

• Male student's opinion

  • Opposes the opinions in the reading passage
  • Two main reasons

• Reason 1: Students' busy schedules

  • Occupied at night
  • Jobs, family events, social activities

• Reason 2: Cost-effectiveness

  • Hiring more teachers vs. purchasing additional computers
  • Spacious classrooms in the computer department

• Conclusion

  • Male student disagrees with the views in the reading material

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在练习时，尽量保持流利的语速，并减少不必要的停顿；2) 注意正确发音，避免拼写错误；3) 不要忽略大小写错误。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, the speaker provides a coherent response with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in organizing the response and providing sufficient support or examples. To improve, the speaker should consider the following suggestions: 1) Clearly state the man's opinion at the beginning of the response; 2) Provide more specific examples from the listening passage to support the man's opinion; 3) Organize the response in a more logical manner, ensuring that each point is clearly connected to the man's opinion.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: School now said, considering the requirements of computers, they might add a computer class in the evening. The school has announced that, due to the demand for computers, they are considering adding evening computer classes.（将原句的语序进行调整，使其更自然。）

However, students in the listening part don't like this idea because students don't have enough time in the evening, they are enough busy because of the part-time families and societies. However, the students in the listening passage disagree with this idea, as they believe they have limited time in the evenings due to part-time jobs, family commitments, and social activities.（修改了原句的表达方式，使其更清晰。）

In other words, school decided on a wrong way because salaries to hire a teacher is way higher than buy more computers. In other words, the man thinks that the school's decision is not cost-effective since hiring teachers would be more expensive than purchasing additional computers.（调整了原句的语序和表达方式，使其更自然。）

It is because computers now are cheaper than before and the computer room has plenty of the space to buy it. This is because computer prices have decreased over time and there is ample space in the computer room to accommodate more computers.（修改了原句的表达方式，使其更清晰。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The school has announced that, due to the demand for computers, they are considering adding evening computer classes. However, the students in the listening passage disagree with this idea, as they believe they have limited time in the evenings due to part-time jobs, family commitments, and social activities. In other words, the man thinks that the school's decision is not cost-effective since hiring teachers would be more expensive than purchasing additional computers. This is because computer prices have decreased over time and there is ample space in the computer room to accommodate more computers. By addressing these language use issues and incorporating advanced vocabulary, proper grammar, smooth transitions, and a strong conclusion, this revised answer aims to achieve a score of 30.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - School announcement
  - Evening computer classes

- Disagreement
  - Students in listening passage
  - Limited time in evenings

- Cost-effectiveness
  - Man's opinion
  - Hiring teachers vs. purchasing computers

- Reasons
  - Decreased computer prices
  - Ample space in computer room

- Conclusion
  - Revised answer for higher score

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should focus on proper pronunciation of words and appropriate pauses between sentences.

4.Topic Development

The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details from the listening passage to strengthen the argument. To improve topic development, the speaker should try to include more direct quotes or paraphrases from the listening passage to better support their points.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The man disapproved of the change that adding computer classes in the evening. The man disapproves of the proposed change to add computer classes in the evening. (Corrected for verb tense and sentence structure) There are two reasons of his disagreement. He provides two reasons for his disagreement. (Improved sentence structure) Firstly, he thinks students are already busy at night. For example, they have social lives, clubs, projects, and families. Evening should be a free time for students rather than a class time. Secondly, he don't think expense is the issue because it is actually more expensive to hire more computer teachers and keeping the building in light till late at night. Secondly, he doesn't believe that expense is the main issue since it would be more costly to hire additional computer teachers and keep the building open late at night. (Corrected grammar and improved sentence structure) Additionally, it is less expensive as the university expected nowadays to buy a computer. Moreover, purchasing computers is less expensive than the university anticipated in today's market. (Improved sentence structure and clarity) And the computer department is big enough and has enough place to put more computer in. Furthermore, the computer department has ample space to accommodate more computers. (Improved vocabulary and sentence structure) In conclusion, he strongly believes that the university should not add more computer classes.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The man disapproves of the proposed change to add computer classes in the evening. He provides two reasons for his disagreement. Firstly, he thinks students are already busy at night with various commitments such as social lives, clubs, projects, and families. He believes that evenings should be reserved for personal time rather than additional classes. Secondly, he doesn't believe that expense is the main issue since it would be more costly to hire additional computer teachers and keep the building open late at night. Moreover, purchasing computers is less expensive than the university anticipated in today's market. Furthermore, the computer department has ample space to accommodate more computers. In conclusion, he strongly believes that the university should not add more computer classes but instead invest in purchasing more computers and utilizing the available space in the department.

6.Mind Map

• Disapproval
  • Busy students
    • Nighttime commitments
      • Social lives, clubs, projects, families
  • Expense and alternatives
    • Costly to hire teachers and keep building open late
    • Less expensive to buy computers
      • Ample space in computer department

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 1 Topic Development: 1 Language Use: 1 总分: 3

2.预估分数

9. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答中存在一些问题。首先，发音不清晰，导致了拼写错误。其次，语速不稳定，有时过快，有时过慢。建议练习发音和语速的控制，以便在考试中更清晰、流畅地表达自己的观点。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答没有很好地组织和阐述观点。回答没有明确地解释男生对于调整课程时间的看法及其原因。建议在回答时先简要陈述男生的观点（反对调整课程时间），然后详细解释他提出的理由：学生晚上很忙碌、增加开支以及购买更多电脑是更好的解决方案。这样可以使回答更有条理、更具说服力。

5.语言使用

原回答：真的沒有一點辦法的了,阿旺 第一,他們很忙碌,他們還有家庭,還有工作要做 第二,他們認為學校應該聘請更多老師,他們應該買更多電腦 因為這幾年來電腦的價格下跌 第三,他們認為電腦的價格太高了,他們不想要更多電腦 所以他們不同意這個說法 The man disagrees with the proposal to add evening computer classes for several reasons. First, he believes that students are too busy at night with their jobs, families, and other commitments. Second, he thinks that the school should invest in more computers instead of hiring more teachers because computer prices have decreased in recent years. Lastly, he argues that adding more computers would be a more cost-effective solution than extending the academic building's hours. Therefore, he does not support the proposed change. (将原回答翻译成英文，并对其进行修改，使其更符合题目要求。同时注意使用高级词汇、正确的语法、自然的表达方式、流畅的过渡和有力的结论。)

修订后回答（140字）：

The man disagrees with the proposal to add evening computer classes for several reasons. First, he believes that students are too busy at night with their jobs, families, and other commitments, making it difficult for them to attend evening classes. Second, he thinks that the school should invest in more computers instead of hiring more teachers because computer prices have decreased in recent years, making it a more cost-effective solution. Lastly, he argues that adding more computers would be a better way to address the issue of overcrowded daytime classes and ensure individual access to computers for all students. Therefore, he does not support the proposed change and believes that there are better alternatives to solve the problem.

6.思维导图

• Disagreement
  • Busy students
    • Jobs
    • Families
    • Other commitments
  • Cost-effective solution
    • More computers
      • Decreased prices
  • Overcrowded daytime classes
    • Individual access to computers

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速一致，仅有少量停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在适当的地方停顿，以便更好地表达思想；2) 注意发音准确性，避免因发音不准确而导致拼写错误。通过练习和纠正这些问题，发言者的表达能力将得到提高。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, the speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement. The speaker could further elaborate on the reasons why students are busy in the evenings and provide more specific examples to support their argument. Additionally, the speaker could emphasize the cost-effectiveness of buying more computers compared to hiring more teachers and keeping the academic building open later. By expanding on these points, the response will be more comprehensive and persuasive.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the listening material, the man challenges the school's plan for two reasons. In the listening material, the man opposes the school's plan for two main reasons. (在听力材料中，男子反对学校的计划有两个主要原因。)

First of all, he argues that such a plan is not practical for students who are often busy in the evening. Firstly, he contends that this plan is impractical for students who frequently have evening commitments. (首先，他认为这个计划对于经常在晚上有事的学生来说是不切实际的。)

They may stay with their family members or do some works. They might spend time with their families or engage in various activities. (他们可能会和家人待在一起或参加各种活动。)

And secondly, the man argues that this plan will give rise to higher costs, for example, the teacher's payment. Secondly, the man asserts that this plan will result in increased expenses, such as teacher salaries. (其次，男子认为这个计划会导致成本上升，例如教师工资。)

He also states that it is better to have more computers available as the computer price is becoming lower and lower these years. He also suggests that it would be more advantageous to purchase additional computers since their prices have been decreasing in recent years. (他还表示，随着近年来电脑价格的不断降低，购买更多电脑将更有利。)

Also, the school's computer room has enough space to hold such amount of computers. Moreover, the school's computer lab has ample space to accommodate the increased number of computers. (此外，学校的计算机实验室有足够的空间容纳增加的电脑数量。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the listening material, the man opposes the school's plan for two main reasons. Firstly, he contends that this plan is impractical for students who frequently have evening commitments. They might spend time with their families or engage in various activities. Secondly, the man asserts that this plan will result in increased expenses, such as teacher salaries. He also suggests that it would be more advantageous to purchase additional computers since their prices have been decreasing in recent years. Moreover, the school's computer lab has ample space to accommodate the increased number of computers. By addressing these concerns and focusing on cost-effective solutions like purchasing more computers, the school can better meet students' needs and ensure a more efficient learning environment for all.

6.思维导图

• Listening Material
  • Man's Opposition
    • Impractical for students
      • Evening commitments
      • Family time, activities
    • Increased expenses
      • Teacher salaries
    • Alternative solution
      • Purchase additional computers
        • Decreasing prices
        • Ample space in computer lab

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speech could be more concise and better organized. To improve, the speaker should focus on eliminating unnecessary repetitions and maintaining a steady pace throughout the response.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details from the listening passage to better support the man's opinion. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on incorporating more direct quotes or specific examples from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original: According to the announcement, the computer department wants to start offering evening classes in the fall. The student in the audio doesn't agree with this. He thinks that it won't work. First of all, he states that the students are already busy at night. They have families, they do other activities like going to the club, and they won't have enough time to take these kinds of classes. Secondly, he says that it will cost more money to hire more teachers. And lastly, he states that the price in the computers have gone down the last few years and that the classrooms are big enough to install more computers.

Corrected: According to the announcement, the computer department wants plans (more formal) to start offering evening classes in the fall. The student in the audio doesn't disagrees (more formal) with this. He thinks that it won't work. First of all, he states that students are already busy at night. ; (improves flow) they have families, participate in other activities like going to clubs, and (removes unnecessary comma) they won't have enough time for these classes. Secondly, he says that it will be more expensive to hire additional teachers. ; (improves flow) and lastly, he states that computer prices have decreased in recent years, and (removes unnecessary comma) the classrooms are spacious enough to accommodate more computers.

Revised (140 words): According to the announcement, the computer department plans to start offering evening classes in the fall. The student in the audio disagrees with this proposal, believing it won't be effective. He provides three main reasons for his opinion. Firstly, he emphasizes that students are already occupied at night with family responsibilities and extracurricular activities like attending clubs, leaving them with insufficient time for evening classes. Secondly, he argues that hiring additional teachers would be more expensive than other alternatives. Lastly, he points out that computer prices have decreased significantly in recent years, making it more cost-effective to purchase additional computers. Furthermore, he mentions that the classrooms are spacious enough to accommodate these extra computers, suggesting that expanding the existing facilities would be a better solution than introducing evening classes.

6.Mind Map

- Announcement
  - Computer department plans
  - Evening classes in fall

- Student's disagreement
  - Reasons
    - Students' busy schedules
      - Family responsibilities
      - Extracurricular activities
    - Cost of hiring additional teachers
    - Decreased computer prices
      - Spacious classrooms
      - Cost-effective alternative: purchasing more computers

7.Key Words