TOEFL 라이팅 2026: 채점된 샘플 답안이 포함된 완벽 가이드

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명확성과 전개

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언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 138단어

I firmly advocate for the government to prioritize offering free job training to unemployed individuals rather than providing them with direct financial support. While Kelly's argument that direct financial assistance empowers people to make their own choices holds merit, the long-term benefits of free job training outweigh the short-term relief of monetary aid. Allocating funds to support every unemployed person would place a significant financial burden on governments, whereas investing in job training programs is a more cost-effective approach. Furthermore, equipping individuals with in-demand skills through job training not only boosts a country's workforce productivity but also increases tax revenue and benefits businesses. As Andrew pointed out, acquiring new skills enhances employability and fosters healthy competition within the job market. Ultimately, free job training serves as a sustainable solution that empowers individuals and contributes to overall economic growth.

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The essay effectively addresses the specific requirements of the task by expressing a clear opinion, supporting it with relevant arguments, and contributing to the discussion in a meaningful way. The essay could be improved by providing more concrete examples or statistics to further strengthen the argument for free job training. Additionally, considering potential counterarguments and addressing them would make the essay more persuasive.

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The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. The organization is logical, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point and supporting details. However, transitions between ideas could be improved for better coherence.

관련성 및 기여도

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명확성과 전개

4.0 / 5

언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 136단어

In my opinion, I prefer free job training rather than directly giving the unemployed money as it provides updated living skills with long term benefits. Job training programs which teach the unemployed how to use document editing and online communication prepare them with sufficient and important skills in the job market. People who learn document editing can contribute to office job and involve in customer support service if they are capable of essential knowledge about online communication. As a result, those unemployed have smoothly adapted to current technological working environment and gotten comfortable with working stuffs and challenges. While some argues that direct unemployment compensation enables people to make personalized decisions, this approach might motivate people to stay unemployed as they can share the benefit of monetary sponsorship without any efforts, leading to inactiveness and laziness.

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The essay addresses the specific requirements of the task by expressing an opinion and contributing to the discussion with relevant arguments. However, there is room for improvement in elaborating on the viewpoint and providing more specific examples or details to support the argument. Additionally, addressing counterarguments more thoroughly would strengthen the essay.

구성에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it could benefit from better transitions between ideas and paragraphs to improve coherence.

관련성 및 기여도

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명확성과 전개

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언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 142단어

I highly recommend government should give job hunter enough money to live them on until they find new jobs. In my point of view, most western countries have subsidy to compensate unemployed people to overcome such hard time and decrease unstable of whole society, because if too many people do not have job, how do they can afford themself, and don't have sufficient money to cover daily spend, in hence , may appear some violent event sometimes like rob that may hurt somebody cause. But government give them who is suffer from the transforming of the job market for enough money support, will reduce unstable event happened. Also training programs is a good idea too , but most people do not really need this especially to these who are old hands. In all, I think give money is better than training program.

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The essay addresses the task requirements by expressing an opinion and providing reasons for that opinion. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples or details to support the viewpoint. Additionally, the language used in the essay is sometimes unclear or ungrammatical, which makes it difficult to understand the ideas being presented.

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The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the organization could be improved by focusing on one main point per paragraph and using clear transitions between ideas.

관련성 및 기여도

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명확성과 전개

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언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 143단어

I wholeheartedly agree with Claire’s idea that there may be no appropriate task for the whole family to work together, while conflicts may also occur in an unpleasant cooperation. I would also like to add that, sharing stories or experience regularly would help enhance the family bond more effectively. Above all, by sharing some excellent or depressed experience, family members could get a chance to know the day-time to-day life of others, and understand their feelings and corresponding background where their emotions stem from, which thus deepen the sympathy among the whole family. Besides, it is an absolutely more convenient and practicable as only a few minutes in the evening are enough for such a kind of talking, and having the benefits of advanced technologies, like video-call and real-time message, geographic location would no longer be an obstacle for the connection of hearts.

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The essay does a good job of addressing the task requirements by expressing an opinion and contributing to the discussion with a unique perspective. However, there is room for improvement in elaborating on the viewpoint and providing more specific examples or details to support the argument. To enhance your response, consider discussing more practical examples of how sharing stories or experiences can strengthen family bonds.

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The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it could benefit from better transitions between ideas and paragraphs to create a smoother flow throughout the text. Additionally, organizing your thoughts into separate paragraphs for each main point will help improve clarity.

관련성 및 기여도

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명확성과 전개

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언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 122단어

While I acknowledge Claire's point regarding the potential conficts generated from cooperation, I firmly believe that working together can actually strengthen relationships among family members, as those practices deepen our understanding of each other, and broaden our perspectives as well. As Andrew mentions that collective experience create happy memories , I also perceive those activities can help family members understand each other as they working together engaging in discussions and incorporating everyone's opinion in a project. Last summer holiday, my and my family planed a traveling together. Indeed, we had a lot of disagreement in the beginning ,but as time goes by , not only we can have healthier debates over different opinions but also had more extensive acknowledge of other members.

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The essay does a good job of expressing and supporting an opinion, as well as contributing to the discussion with personal experiences. However, there is room for improvement in terms of grammar and language use. Some sentences are unclear or contain grammatical errors, which can be distracting for the reader.

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The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the organization could be improved by focusing on specific points in each paragraph and providing supporting details.

관련성 및 기여도

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명확성과 전개

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언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 154단어

I wholegeartedly concur with Claire's perspective that it is difficult to finding tasks that are insteresting to everyone. I would add that they should have a TV program they can watching togather. This approach Not only upgrade their social and communicate levels but also improve relationship with whole family mebers.

Although it is true that families feel more connected while working together, as Andrew mentioned, he does not consider that parents have to work and also have busy task. If they arrange extra program to do, they can't have enough time to finishing their job, even cause more serious problems. Consequently, it is scarcely possible to address or improve this situation through Andrew's approach. Apparently, this concept does not hold water

Taking everything into account, I definitely believe that it is difficult to arrenge the task which adapting everyone's lifestyle. Therefore,they should arrange a TV time to connected with others, just as Claire asserts.

과제 완성도에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay addresses the topic of family bonding, but it could be improved by providing more specific examples and details to support the viewpoint. Additionally, the essay should focus on expressing a clear opinion and making a unique contribution to the discussion.

구성에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay has an introduction, body, and conclusion; however, it could benefit from clearer organization and transitions between ideas.

관련성 및 기여도

4.5 / 5

명확성과 전개

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언어 사용 및 문법

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제출된 그대로의 답안 · 135단어

I concur with Claire's perspective that journal writing is important. This is because it's an efficient way for teachers to make sure students fully comprehend what teachers have taught, making the teaching valuable. For instance, at a university in Taiwan, every student is asked to write a term journal paper at the end of the semester. The research subjects are those taught in the class. Students need to illustrate the pros and cons of the methodology they choose and use some examples to support their idea. They also need to design experiments to prove their claim and hypothesis. In addition, they need to critically think and analyze the survey they get in the experiment. Teachers can gauge whether students totally be familiar with ideas taught in class by whether they can handing a complete report.

과제 완성도에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay effectively addresses the task requirements by expressing an opinion and supporting it with relevant examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of elaborating on the viewpoint and providing more specific details related to the discussion.

구성에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it could benefit from clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

관련성 및 기여도

4.5 / 5

명확성과 전개

4.0 / 5

언어 사용 및 문법

3.5 / 5

제출된 그대로의 답안 · 161단어

Education, the cornerstone of a high-quality life, has been valued and even sparks a heated debate over whether students in primary and secondary school should be assigned with journal writing. In my opinion, I firmly believe that this task is essential for the future learning. While I understand Paul's concern over ponderous schoolwork beyond a lot of materials, I maintain that journal writing contributes to enhancement for critial thinking and open-mindedness. To explore deeper, when students recall what they learned in class, they refined those knowledge by second thinking. Instead of rigid listening or memorization, they would catch the opportunity to doubt some theorems' accuracy and bridge the gap between application and theory. For instance, when children are taught the concept of circle in their primary school, they may solely memorize the calculation formula of the circular area. Neverthelss, when they reflect on their mind again, it is possible for them to write down the analogy or question relevant to circle.

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The essay does a good job of addressing the specific requirements of the task, expressing a clear opinion on journal writing in primary and secondary schools. The writer supports their viewpoint with relevant examples and reasoning. However, there is room for improvement in terms of grammar, vocabulary, and sentence structure.

구성에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs that focus on specific points, and a conclusion. However, transitions between ideas could be improved for better flow.

관련성 및 기여도

3.5 / 5

명확성과 전개

3.0 / 5

언어 사용 및 문법

3.5 / 5

제출된 그대로의 답안 · 258단어

To respond today's discussion, I agree the to-do list is a beneficial to learning and working. Because to-do list can help us manage the time and make everything easier. My reasons are as follows.

Firstly, to-do list can improve the working and studying efficiency. By scheduling all the arrangements and important events in the list, the possibility of forgetting doing significant things such as meeting big clients or missing the deadline to hand in the paper can be declined, especially when we have been under a great pressure for a period of time. Additionally, after doing the list, we can cut it out from the paper and carry it with us to alarm us the things should be done as soon as possible. Thus, with to-do list, never will we cannot catch up with the time, all the works and studying can be complete on time.

Secondly, to-do list can help us save time and enrich our daily lives. Doing to-do list can make it possible for us to visualize the interval time we waste between handling different things every day. Only the to-do list can help us recognize and rearrange the interval time, so the time saved can be used to do more intriguing activities to enrich our lives experience. For example, a commuter can use smart phone to read several pages of novels in the subway to achieve the daily reading task, so after arriving home, he or she can use the saved time supposed to read to do physical exercise or play a musical instrument.

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The essay does not directly address the professor's question about the effectiveness of journal writing in supporting learning. Instead, it focuses on the benefits of to-do lists. To improve task fulfillment, the essay should be rewritten to focus on journal writing as a learning tool, as per the given prompt.

구성에 대한 채점기 코멘트(기록된 그대로)

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, since the content does not directly address the given prompt, reorganizing the essay is necessary to focus on journal writing instead of to-do lists.