TOEFL Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the professor's lecture illustrates the concept of a conservation-reliant species.

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）：3

• 语言使用（Language Use）：3

• 话题发展（Topic Development）：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。建议练习更流畅、自然的语音表达，以便在考试中更好地展示自己的英语水平。此外，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解你的观点。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有条理的，但可以进一步优化。建议在描述保护区和围栏设施方面提供更多细节，以便更好地说明这些措施如何帮助鸟类生存。同时，在提到成本问题时，可以给出具体的数字或例子，以增强说服力。总之，在准备托福口语考试时，要确保充分利用时间来组织和阐述观点，并提供充足的支持和例证。

5.语言使用

Original: Conservation-reliant species refers to animals whose survival relies on the conservation of people to their habitats. Stop of these conservation can lead to extinction of these animals. The professor give an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forest of Hawaii. Due to the introducing of domestic pigs and goats and their escaping to the forest, the vegetation environment of these birds living in has been destroyed greatly. In that case, people started their preservation of these birds by setting specific areas that keep the pigs and goats outside. This is very effective in some area but also very expensive due to the high cost of establishing equipments and repairments. However, if these efforts were stopped, then these kind of birds are likely to extinct.

Corrected: Conservation-reliant species Conservation-dependent species (用词更准确) refers to animals whose survival relies on the conservation of people human conservation efforts (表达更自然) to their habitats. Stop of these conservation Discontinuation of these efforts (语法更准确) can lead to extinction of these animals. The professor give gives (动词形式错误) an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forest of Hawaii in Hawaii(表达更自然). Due to the introducing introduction (词形错误) of domestic pigs and goats and their escaping to the forest, the vegetation environment of these birds living in has been destroyed greatly severely damaged (表达更自然). In that case, people started their preservation conservation (用词更准确) of these birds by setting specific areas that keep the pigs and goats outside. This is very effective in some area areas (单复数错误) but also very expensive due to the high cost of establishing equipments and repairments equipment and repairs(词形错误). However, if these efforts were stopped, then these kind of birds are likely to extinct. of birds would likely become extinct.(语法更准确)

Revised (140 words): Conservation-dependent species refers to animals whose survival relies on human conservation efforts to their habitats. Discontinuation of these efforts can lead to the extinction of these animals. The professor gives an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forests in Hawaii. Due to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats and their escape into the forest, the vegetation environment that these birds live in has been severely damaged. To address this issue, people started conserving these birds by establishing specific areas that keep the pigs and goats out. This approach has been very effective in some areas but also very expensive due to the high cost of setting up equipment and repairs. However, if these efforts were discontinued, these kinds of birds would likely become extinct.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-dependent species
  - Definition
  - Human conservation efforts

- Example: Hawaii's forests
  - Bird species struggling for survival
  - Introduction of domestic pigs and goats
  - Damage to vegetation environment

- Conservation efforts
  - Establishing specific areas
  - Effectiveness and cost

- Potential extinction
  - If efforts discontinued

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答内容基本清晰，但有些地方需要改进。例如，可以尝试提高语速和减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。建议多加练习，提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的。但是，在解释教授讲座中保护依赖物种的概念时，可以更详细地描述野猪和山羊如何破坏鸟类栖息地以及保护措施如何帮助这些鸟类生存。此外，可以强调这些鸟类在没有人类干预的情况下很难生存。建议在练习时关注提供更充分的支持和例子来丰富回答内容。

5.语言使用

Conservation-reliant species means a type of species which depends on human's conservation efforts for survival. Conservation-reliant species refer to those that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. (修改了句子结构，使其更自然) And in the professor's example, he says that there are a lot of bird species that are struggle for survival and close to extinct, and they need to eat mass amount of vegetation for survival. In the professor's example, he mentions numerous bird species struggling to survive and being on the verge of extinction, requiring a large amount of vegetation for sustenance. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使其更自然) Therefore, conservationists keep wilds out from the forests and build fences around the forests and keep repairing them, which undoubtedly is quite expensive. As a result, conservationists exclude wild animals from the forests by building and maintaining fences around them, which is undoubtedly costly. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使其更自然) However, if the conservationists stop the program, it's really difficult for these bird species to survive without human's effort. Nonetheless, if conservationists cease their efforts, it would be extremely challenging for these bird species to survive without human intervention. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使其更自然)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Conservation-reliant species refer to those that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. In the professor's example, he mentions numerous bird species struggling to survive and being on the verge of extinction in Hawaii's forests, requiring a large amount of vegetation for sustenance. The introduction of domesticated pigs and goats, which escaped into the forests and destroyed the birds' habitat by consuming massive amounts of vegetation, exacerbated the situation. As a result, conservationists exclude wild animals from the forests by building and maintaining fences around them, which is undoubtedly costly. These efforts have proven effective in some areas, but they require continuous financial support. Nonetheless, if conservationists cease their efforts, it would be extremely challenging for these bird species to survive without human intervention.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Depend on human conservation efforts

- Professor's example
  - Bird species in Hawaii's forests
    - Struggling to survive
    - On the verge of extinction
  - Pigs and goats
    - Destroying bird habitat
    - Consuming vegetation

- Conservation efforts
  - Building and maintaining fences
  - Costly but effective

- Challenges
  - Continuous financial support needed
  - Difficulty in survival without human intervention

7.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

Estimated Score: 23

3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流利，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在适当的地方加入适当的停顿，以便让听众更好地理解内容；2) 注意发音准确性，避免因发音不准确而导致的拼写错误。通过改进这些方面，发言者可以使表达更加清晰流畅。

4.话题发展

The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from the lecture. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker could have elaborated more on the specific challenges faced by the bird species and the conservation efforts undertaken to protect them. Additionally, the speaker could have emphasized the importance of human intervention in maintaining the habitat for these conservation-reliant species. By incorporating these points, the speaker's response would be more comprehensive and better aligned with the lecture content.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the lecture, the professor uses the example of bird species to illustrate the concept of a conservation-reliant species. In the lecture, the professor illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species using the example of bird species. (调整了句子结构，使表达更自然) For instance, in a forest, many bird species are close to extinct because of the introduction of domesticated goats and pigs, which destroyed the forest where bird species live. For instance, in a forest, many bird species are on the verge of extinction due to the introduction of domesticated goats and pigs that have destroyed their habitat. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达) To give them a chance to recover, the conservationists build fences to keep goats and pigs out. To aid their recovery, conservationists construct fences to exclude goats and pigs. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达) As a result, in some areas, those fences are quite effective, however, they are very expensive because they cost a lot to build and repair when they break down. Consequently, in some areas, these fences prove effective; however, they are costly due to construction and maintenance expenses. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达) The conservationists also find out, if they stop building and repairing those fences, it will be difficult for the bird species to survive. Conservationists also discover that if they cease constructing and maintaining these fences, the bird species' survival becomes challenging. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the lecture, the professor illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species using the example of bird species. For instance, in a forest, many bird species are on the verge of extinction due to the introduction of domesticated goats and pigs that have destroyed their habitat. To aid their recovery, conservationists construct fences to exclude goats and pigs. Consequently, in some areas, these fences prove effective; however, they are costly due to construction and maintenance expenses. Conservationists also discover that if they cease constructing and maintaining these fences, the bird species' survival becomes challenging. By emphasizing the importance of human intervention in preserving habitats for conservation-reliant species and elaborating on specific challenges faced by these birds, the speaker's response can achieve a higher score and better align with the lecture content.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Example: Bird species in Hawaii
    - Threat: Domesticated goats and pigs
      - Habitat destruction
  - Conservation efforts
    - Fences to exclude goats and pigs
      - Effectiveness in some areas
      - Costly construction and maintenance
  - Importance of human intervention
    - Continuous efforts for species survival

7.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答内容较为清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作调整。建议练习更流利、自然的发音和语调，以便在考试中更好地展示自己的英语水平。同时，注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。

4.话题发展

从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上符合要求，但可以进一步完善。首先，在引入教授讲座例子之前，可以简要介绍一下保护依赖物种的概念。其次，在描述夏威夷森林中鸟类的保护措施时，可以提供更多具体细节和例子，以增强论证的说服力。最后，在总结部分，可以强调人类保护行动对这些物种生存的重要性，并指出如果保护措施停止，这些物种可能会面临灭绝的危险。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Conservation-reliant species refer to animals whose survival depends on human conservation effort of their habitats. Conservation-reliant species are animals that depend on human conservation efforts to protect their habitats for survival. (保护依赖物种是指依赖人类保护行动来保护其栖息地以生存的动物。) If these efforts are discontinued, it may result in the extinction of these animals. If these efforts cease, these animals may face extinction. (如果这些努力停止，这些动物可能会面临灭绝。)

The professor gives an example of the bird species struggling to survive in Hawaiian forests. Owing to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats and their subsequent escape into the forest, the living environment of these birds has been significantly damaged. As a result, people initiated a conservation effort to these bird species by designating protected areas and excluding pigs and goats. This strategy is highly effective but also very costly as it requires significant investment into the equipment installation and maintenance. However, if these efforts were to cease, the birds might face extinction.

Revised Answer (140 words):

Conservation-reliant species are animals that depend on human conservation efforts to protect their habitats for survival. If these efforts cease, these animals may face extinction. The professor illustrates this concept with an example of bird species in Hawaiian forests struggling to survive due to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats. These animals have escaped into the forest, causing significant damage to the birds' habitat. To address this issue, people initiated conservation efforts by designating protected areas and excluding pigs and goats from these regions. This strategy has proven effective but is also costly, requiring significant investment in equipment installation and maintenance. If these conservation efforts were to cease, the bird species might face extinction, highlighting the importance of continued human intervention for the survival of conservation-reliant species.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species

  • Definition
  • Dependence on human efforts
  • Risk of extinction

• Professor's example

  • Hawaiian forests
  • Bird species
  • Introduction of pigs and goats
  • Habitat destruction

• Conservation efforts

  • Designating protected areas
  • Excluding pigs and goats
  • Effectiveness and cost
  • Importance of continued intervention

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 回答中的语言表达较为清晰，但仍有部分地方可以改进。建议在发音和语速方面加强练习，以便更流畅地表达观点。同时，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解所表达的内容。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了阅读和听力材料中的关键信息，并对保护依赖物种的概念进行了解释。但在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待加强。建议在回答时尝试使用更多的过渡词汇，如“首先”、“其次”、“因此”等，以使回答更加连贯。同时，在提供支持或举例时，可以尝试提供更具体的信息，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: Conservation-reliant species refers to animals whose survival depends on human conservation efforts to their habitats. Conservation-reliant species are animals that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival in specific habitats. (保护依赖物种是指依赖人类保护努力在特定生境中生存的动物。)

Discontinuation of these efforts can lead to extinction of these animals. If these efforts are discontinued, it may result in the extinction of these animals. (如果停止这些努力，可能导致这些动物的灭绝。)

The professor gives an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forest in Hawaii. The professor cites an example of bird species struggling to survive in Hawaiian forests. (教授举了夏威夷森林中鸟类努力生存的例子。)

Due to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats into Hawaii and their escaping into the forest, the vegetation environment of the birds living in has been destroyed significantly. Owing to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats in Hawaii and their subsequent escape into the forests, the birds' habitat has been significantly damaged. (由于家猪和家山羊被引入夏威夷并逃入森林，鸟类的栖息地受到了严重破坏。)

Therefore, people started their conservation of the bird species by setting specific areas and keep the pigs and goats out. As a result, people initiated conservation efforts for these bird species by designating protected areas and excluding pigs and goats. (因此，人们通过划定保护区并排除猪和山羊来保护这些鸟类。)

This strategy is very effective but also expensive due to the high cost of establishing equipments and repairs. This strategy is highly effective but also costly, as it requires significant investment in equipment installation and maintenance. (这种策略非常有效，但由于设备安装和维护成本高昂，也很昂贵。)

However, if these efforts were stopped, then the birds can become extinct. Nonetheless, if these efforts were to cease, the birds could face extinction. (然而，如果这些努力停止，鸟类可能面临灭绝。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Conservation-reliant species are animals that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival in specific habitats. If these efforts are discontinued, it may result in the extinction of these animals. The professor cites an example of bird species struggling to survive in Hawaiian forests. Owing to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats in Hawaii and their subsequent escape into the forests, the birds' habitat has been significantly damaged. As a result, people initiated conservation efforts for these bird species by designating protected areas and excluding pigs and goats. This strategy is highly effective but also costly, as it requires significant investment in equipment installation and maintenance. Nonetheless, if these efforts were to cease, the birds could face extinction.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species

  • Definition
  • Dependency on human efforts

• Example: Hawaiian forests

  • Bird species struggling to survive
  • Introduction of pigs and goats
  • Habitat destruction

• Conservation efforts

  • Designating protected areas
  • Excluding pigs and goats
  • Effectiveness and cost

• Potential extinction

  • If efforts cease

7.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，说话者的语言流畅度和语速较为稳定，仅有少量停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议说话者注意在适当的地方停顿，以及提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展

从话题发展方面来看，说话者的回答内容较为连贯和有组织，观点之间的联系清晰，并提供了一定的支持和例子。为了进一步提高话题发展能力，建议说话者在回答中加入更多具体细节和例证，以使观点更加充分和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The concept of conservation-reliant species refers to that if a human focuses on recreating and maintaining original habits for some of the species, they will become dependent on human conservation, and without human's assistance, these species may become extinct. The concept of conservation-reliant species implies that when humans focus on recreating and maintaining the original habitats for certain species, these species become dependent on human conservation efforts, and without such assistance, they may face extinction.（将“refers to that if a human”改为“implies that when humans”，使句子更自然；将“habits”改为“habitats”，修正单词错误；将“human's assistance”改为“such assistance”，使句子更通顺。）

And a professor in the lecture mentions that in some of the forests where bird species lived there originally, when some other species like sheep or cows are brought there, they destroy their habitats. The professor in the lecture mentions that in certain forests where bird species originally lived, the introduction of other species like sheep or cows leads to the destruction of their habitats.（将“in some of the forests where bird species lived there originally”改为“in certain forests where bird species originally lived”，使句子更自然；将“when some other species like sheep or cows are brought there”改为“the introduction of other species like sheep or cows”，使句子更通顺。）

So human beings make fences to keep out these species to recover birds' habitats. As a result, humans construct fences to exclude these invasive species and help restore the birds' habitats.（将“make fences”改为“construct fences”，使用更高级的词汇；将“to keep out these species to recover birds' habitats”改为“to exclude these invasive species and help restore the birds' habitats”，使句子更自然。）

However, although the measure is really expensive but also effective, when the measure is seized, the birds may become hard to survive. However, while this measure is costly yet effective, if it were to be discontinued, the birds might struggle to survive.（将“although the measure is really expensive but also effective”改为“while this measure is costly yet effective”，使句子更自然；将“when the measure is seized”改为“if it were to be discontinued”，修正语法错误；将“the birds may become hard to survive”改为“the birds might struggle to survive”，使句子更通顺。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The concept of conservation-reliant species implies that when humans focus on recreating and maintaining the original habitats for certain species, these species become dependent on human conservation efforts, and without such assistance, they may face extinction. The professor in the lecture mentions that in certain forests where bird species originally lived, the introduction of other species like sheep or cows leads to the destruction of their habitats. As a result, humans construct fences to exclude these invasive species and help restore the birds' habitats. However, while this measure is costly yet effective, if it were to be discontinued, the birds might struggle to survive.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species

  • Human conservation efforts
    • Recreating and maintaining original habitats

• Example: Hawaiian forests

  • Bird species
    • Destruction of habitats by introduced species (sheep, cows)

• Solution: Fences

  • Exclude invasive species
  • Restore bird habitats

• Cost and effectiveness

  • Expensive yet effective measure
  • Discontinuation leads to struggle for survival

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，答案的语言流畅度和语速基本一致，偶尔出现停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意正确的发音和自然的停顿。同时，可以多参加一些口语练习活动，以提高口语表达的自信和流利度。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，答案内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但在解释教授讲座如何说明保护依赖物种概念时，可以更详细地描述夏威夷森林中野猪和山羊对鸟类栖息地的影响以及保护区如何帮助鸟类生存。此外，在提供支持或示例时，可以尝试使用更多具体的信息，以使回答更有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The passage talks about conservation reliant, which means that one species is dependent on people's conservation for survival. If without people's conservation, they may die out. The passage discusses conservation-reliant species, which refers to a species that depends on human conservation efforts for survival. Without these efforts, the species may face extinction. (将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅，并使用了更高级的词汇。)

For example, in US forests, there are a lot of bird species. For instance, numerous bird species inhabit forests in the United States. (改进了句子结构和词汇选择。)

However, due to human's destroyment, a lot of birds have taken a risk of dying out. However, due to human destruction of their habitats, many birds face the risk of extinction. (修正了语法错误，并改进了词汇选择。)

So people create certain areas for birds' habitat. As a result, people establish protected areas for these birds' habitats. (改进了句子结构和词汇选择。)

They build a lot of fences and stop people going into these areas. They construct fences to prevent human intrusion into these areas. (改进了句子结构和词汇选择。)

However, this action is very expensive, since people need to spend a lot of money in building and repairing these fences. Nonetheless, this approach is costly, as it requires significant funds for building and maintaining these fences. (改进了句子结构和词汇选择。)

If this action is stopped, it is very difficult for birds to thrive. If these efforts cease, it would be challenging for the bird populations to flourish. (改进了句子结构和词汇选择。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The passage discusses conservation-reliant species, which refers to a species that depends on human conservation efforts for survival. Without these efforts, the species may face extinction. For instance, numerous bird species inhabit forests in the United States. However, due to human destruction of their habitats, many birds face the risk of extinction. As a result, people establish protected areas for these birds' habitats. They construct fences to prevent human intrusion into these areas. Nonetheless, this approach is costly, as it requires significant funds for building and maintaining these fences. If these efforts cease, it would be challenging for the bird populations to flourish.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species

  • Definition
  • Dependence on human efforts

• Example

  • US forests
  • Bird species
  • Human destruction of habitats

• Solution

  • Protected areas
  • Fences to prevent intrusion

• Challenges

  • Costly approach
  • Building and maintaining fences
  • Consequences of ceasing efforts

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在回答中，发音大部分清晰，但有时会出现停顿。为了提高发音的准确性，请注意练习发音和语调。此外，尝试在讲话时保持稳定的速度，以便更自然地表达观点。

4.话题发展 The response provides a coherent and well-organized explanation of the concept of conservation-reliant species using the example from the lecture. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details and examples from the listening passage. For instance, mentioning the impact of domesticated pigs and goats on the bird species' habitat and how their introduction led to the birds becoming conservation-reliant would strengthen the response. Additionally, try to use more transition words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly and improve overall coherence.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the lecture, the professor uses the example of bird species to illustrate the concept of a conservation-reliant species. For instance, in a forest, bird species are close to distinct because of the introduction of a sort of pig, and the pig completely destroyed the forest where the bird species live to prevent the bird species from dying out. The conservationists decided to give a chance to the forest to recover by building the fences to keep pigs from going out. As a result, in some areas, the fences are quite effective. However, they are very expensive because they cost a lot to build and repair. However, conservationists find out if they stop building and repairing the fences, it will be difficult for bird species to survive.

Corrected Answer: In the lecture, the professor uses the example of bird species (鸟类) to illustrate the concept of a conservation-reliant species. For instance, in a forest, bird species are close to extinct (灭绝) because of the introduction of domesticated pigs and goats (家猪和山羊), which completely destroyed their habitat. The conservationists decided to give a chance for the forest to recover by building fences to keep pigs and goats from entering. As a result, in some areas, these fences have been quite effective. However, they are very expensive due to their construction and maintenance costs. Conservationists have realized that if they stop building and repairing these fences, it will be difficult for the bird species to survive.

Revised Answer (140 words): In the lecture, the professor illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species using the example of bird species in Hawaiian forests. These birds are close to extinction due to the introduction of domesticated pigs and goats, which have destroyed their habitat. To protect the birds and help their habitat recover, conservationists have built fences to keep these invasive animals out. In some areas, this strategy has been effective in preserving the bird species. However, constructing and maintaining these fences is expensive, and if conservation efforts cease, it would be difficult for the bird species to survive. This example demonstrates how human intervention is necessary for the survival of certain species, making them conservation-reliant.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Bird species in Hawaiian forests
    - Close to extinction
      - Introduction of domesticated pigs and goats
        - Habitat destruction
  - Conservation efforts
    - Building fences
      - Keep pigs and goats out
      - Habitat recovery
    - Effectiveness and challenges
      - Expensive construction and maintenance
      - Necessity for survival of bird species

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some areas where the speech could be improved. The speaker should focus on pronouncing words more accurately to avoid spelling errors and work on using appropriate pauses to improve punctuation. Practicing speaking aloud and listening to native English speakers can help improve these areas.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading passage and the lecture. However, the speaker could further develop their response by providing more specific details from the lecture, such as mentioning the impact of pigs and goats on the bird species' habitat. Additionally, the speaker could emphasize the importance of human intervention in maintaining the conservation efforts for these birds. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice summarizing key points from both sources and integrating them into a cohesive response.

5.Language Use

Original: The reading passage introduces the concept of conservation-reliant species, which refers to the certain animal species that are dependent on humans' conservation for survival. In the lecture, the professor gives the example of a bird species in Hawaii. The bird species needed to compete for food with the domesticated goats and pigs, which eat massive amounts of vegetation in the area. To conserve these birds, humans build conservations to let the vegetation recover. However, these birds can seldom live if the conservation actions stop.

Corrected: The reading passage introduces the concept of conservation-reliant conservation-dependent species ("conservation-reliant" is less commonly used), which refers to certain animal species that are dependent on human conservation efforts for survival. In the lecture, the professor provides an example of a bird species in Hawaii. These birds must compete for food with domesticated goats and pigs, which consume vast amounts of vegetation in their habitat. To protect these birds, humans construct conservations conservation areas (improved word choice) to allow the vegetation to recover. However, these birds may struggle to survive if conservation efforts cease.

Revised (140 words): The reading passage introduces the concept of conservation-dependent species, which refers to certain animal species that rely on human conservation efforts for survival. In the lecture, the professor provides an example of a bird species native to Hawaii's forests. These birds face competition for food resources with domesticated goats and pigs, which consume vast amounts of vegetation in their habitat, leading to its destruction. To protect these endangered birds, humans construct conservation areas to allow the vegetation to recover and maintain the birds' natural habitat. These efforts have proven effective in some areas, but they are also expensive and require continuous maintenance. The lecture emphasizes that these bird species may struggle to survive if conservation efforts cease, illustrating the concept of conservation-dependent species and the importance of ongoing human intervention for their survival.

6.Mind Map

- Conservation-dependent species
  - Definition
  - Dependence on human conservation efforts

- Example: Bird species in Hawaii
  - Competition with domesticated goats and pigs
  - Destruction of habitat (vegetation)

- Human intervention
  - Construction of conservation areas
  - Vegetation recovery
  - Expense and maintenance

- Consequences of discontinued efforts
  - Struggle for survival
  - Importance of ongoing intervention

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意掌握自然的语速和节奏，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答基本上是连贯和有条理的，但在某些地方可以更加明确地表达观点。例如，在描述夏威夷森林中鸟类的问题时，可以更具体地说明鸟类面临的困境。此外，在讨论保护措施的有效性和成本时，可以提供更多详细信息和例证。总之，在练习时要注意提高观点的清晰度和论证的充分性，以便更好地回答问题。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading is about conversation-related species. The reading discusses conservation-reliant species. (将“conversation”改为“conservation”，因为这是正确的词汇。) It states that human beings will help some specific species to recover their habitats to make sure they can survive there. The professor used specific examples. In Hawaii, there were birds living in a forest. However, when pigs and goats moved there and became domestic there, the forest was damaged drastically. So those birds lost their families. To help those birds living there, humans just built some fences to prevent those pigs and goats out of the habitats of birds. To assist the birds, humans constructed fences to keep the pigs and goats away from the birds' habitats. (改进了句子结构，使其更自然。) However, the issue is this program is very expensive because people have to build the fence and also keep the fence. So it's hard to see that it's good or not.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading discusses conservation-reliant species, which are dependent on human efforts for their survival. The professor provides a specific example of bird species in Hawaii's forests that are struggling due to habitat destruction caused by invasive pigs and goats. To assist these birds, humans have constructed fences to keep the pigs and goats away from the birds' habitats, allowing them to recover. However, this conservation program faces challenges due to its high cost, as building and maintaining the fences require significant financial resources. As a result, it is difficult to determine whether this approach is truly effective or sustainable in the long run. Overall, the professor's example illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species and the challenges associated with implementing and maintaining such conservation efforts.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species
  • Human efforts for survival
  • Example: Hawaii's forests
    • Bird species struggling
    • Habitat destruction by invasive pigs and goats
  • Conservation program
    • Fences to protect bird habitats
    • High cost and maintenance challenges
  • Effectiveness and sustainability concerns

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 2

2.Estimated Scores

Estimated Score: 15

3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery could be improved. The speech is not very clear and fluid, with some awkward pauses and word choices. Additionally, there are some pronunciation issues that lead to spelling errors in the written response. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more clearly and at a consistent pace, with fewer pauses. They should also work on their pronunciation to avoid confusion with similar-sounding words.

4.Topic Development

The topic development in the response is not well-organized or coherent. The speaker does mention the example of birds in Hawaii's forests and the issue with pigs and goats destroying their habitat. However, the connections between ideas are not clear, and there is a lack of sufficient support or examples to illustrate the concept of conservation-reliant species. To improve, the speaker should focus on organizing their response more effectively and providing clearer connections between ideas. They should also include more specific details from the lecture to better support their explanation of conservation-reliant species.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: Well, the conservationists rely on species just as some species rely on certain habitats. But if the conservation is built, they may depend on the environment. Once the condition is discounted, the animal may not make it to survive. One example given in the laboratory is the birds in the white forest. They are close to extinction because the peacocks have a lot of vegetation and destroy the forest they live in. So to maintain their survival, people build some fences around certain areas of the forest to prevent the ghosts from attending. So once it was effective, and it also is very expensive because it will pay a lot to keep remaining it. But once the fence was struck out and the birds survived.

Corrected Answer: Well, conservationists work with species just as some species depend on specific habitats. However, if conservation efforts are implemented, these species may rely on human intervention. Once these efforts are discontinued, the animals might struggle to survive. One example provided in the lecture is about birds in Hawaii's forests. They are close to extinction because pigs and goats consume large amounts of vegetation and destroy their habitat. To ensure their survival, people construct fences around certain areas of the forest to prevent these animals from entering. This approach has been effective but is also very expensive due to maintenance costs. If the fencing program were to stop, it would be difficult for these birds to survive. (Reasons for corrections: Improved sentence structure, clarified vocabulary, corrected grammar errors)

Revised 140-word Answer:

Conservationists work with species that depend on specific habitats for survival. However, when conservation efforts are implemented, these species may become reliant on human intervention for their survival. If such efforts are discontinued, these animals might struggle to survive. The lecture provides an example of birds in Hawaii's forests that are close to extinction due to pigs and goats consuming large amounts of vegetation and destroying their habitat. To ensure the birds' survival, people construct fences around certain areas of the forest to prevent these animals from entering. This approach has been effective but is also very expensive due to maintenance costs. If the fencing program were to stop, it would be difficult for these birds to survive. This example illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species, as their survival depends on ongoing human intervention and conservation efforts.

6.Mind Map

• Conservation-reliant species

  • Human intervention
  • Discontinuation of efforts
  • Struggle for survival

• Example: Birds in Hawaii's forests

  • Pigs and goats destroying habitat
  • Fencing program
    • Effectiveness
    • High cost
    • Potential consequences if discontinued

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速适中，仅有少量停顿。但是，有些标点符号的使用不当，可能导致了发言者在某些地方停顿不当。此外，部分拼写错误可能是发音不准确所致。建议发言者在练习发音和语调方面多加练习，以提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 The speaker provided a coherent and well-organized response, explaining the concept of conservation-reliant species and using the example from the professor's lecture to illustrate the concept. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details about the bird species and their habitat in Hawaii, as well as elaborating on the challenges faced by conservationists in maintaining these efforts. To enhance topic development, the speaker could practice incorporating more relevant information from the lecture and reading passage, while ensuring that the response remains focused and well-structured.

5.语言使用

Original: The concept of a conservation-reliant species is when animals are dependent on humans' conservation efforts for their survival. The concept of conservation-reliant species refers to animals that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. (将句子结构调整为更自然的表达方式)

Original: For instance, the professor illustrated an example from Hawaii's forests. For example, the professor discussed a case study involving the forests in Hawaii. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

Original: Many bird species are close to extinction, and it was all due to the farm animals that have destroyed the forests there. Numerous bird species are on the brink of extinction, primarily due to the destruction of their habitats by invasive farm animals. (使用更高级的词汇，改进句子结构和语法)

Original: Now, the researchers are trying to erect new fences in order to keep out the farm animals, and the habitats have recovered since then. Currently, researchers are constructing fences to exclude these farm animals, leading to habitat recovery in some areas. (使用更自然的表达方式，改进句子结构)

Original: However, there are a downside to this. However, there is a downside to this approach. (修正语法错误)

Original: The downside is that these sort of conservation efforts are very expensive, because the conservationists have to repair and build these fences. The drawback is that such conservation efforts are costly, as they require the construction and maintenance of these fences. (使用更高级的词汇，改进句子结构)

Original: But it will also be difficult for the animals to survive if they stop erecting these fences. Moreover, discontinuing the erection of these fences would make it challenging for the animals to survive. (使用更自然的表达方式，改进句子结构)

Revised Answer (140 words): The concept of conservation-reliant species refers to animals that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. For example, the professor discussed a case study involving the forests in Hawaii. Numerous bird species are on the brink of extinction, primarily due to the destruction of their habitats by invasive farm animals. Currently, researchers are constructing fences to exclude these farm animals, leading to habitat recovery in some areas. However, there is a downside to this approach. The drawback is that such conservation efforts are costly, as they require the construction and maintenance of these fences. Moreover, discontinuing the erection of these fences would make it challenging for the animals to survive.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Definition
  - Example
    - Hawaii forests
      - Bird species
      - Habitat destruction by invasive farm animals
  - Conservation efforts
    - Fences construction
    - Habitat recovery
  - Downside
    - Costly
    - Maintenance required
    - Challenges if discontinued

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on their pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors that may result from inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on the examples given and providing more context to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

The reading discussed the concept of conservation-reliant species, which refers to animals who are dependent reliant on humans' conservation efforts for its their survival. The professor elaborates on this with the example of bird species in Hawaii. In Hawaii, a lot of bird species are living in the forest. However, their habitat is threatened because of pigs and goats. A lot of pigs and goats from other countries enter were introduced to Hawaii and also access infiltrate the forest. They eat the vegetation and destroy the habitat so that many bird species are nearly extincted extinct. Humans try to preserve the habitat of birds by building fences, trying to keep the pigs and goats out of the habitat of the birds. It helps the habitat to recover. However, building and maintaining fences are very expensive. And whenever this process stops, pigs and goats will enter the habitat of birds again, and birds are in danger again.

("dependent" was changed to "reliant" for better word choice; "its" was changed to "their" for subject-verb agreement; "enter" was changed to "were introduced to" for clarity; "access" was changed to "infiltrate" for better word choice; "extincted" was changed to "extinct" for proper grammar.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading introduced the concept of conservation-reliant species, which refers to animals reliant on human conservation efforts for their survival. The professor illustrated this concept with the example of bird species in Hawaii's forests. These birds' habitats are threatened by pigs and goats introduced from other countries, which infiltrate the forests, consuming vegetation and destroying the birds' habitat, pushing many species close to extinction. To preserve the birds' habitat, humans build fences to keep pigs and goats out, allowing the habitat to recover. This approach has been effective in some areas; however, constructing and maintaining fences is costly. If these efforts cease, pigs and goats will re-enter the birds' habitat, putting them in danger once more.

6.Mind Map

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Definition
  - Human conservation efforts

- Example: Bird species in Hawaii
  - Threatened habitat
    - Pigs and goats introduced
    - Vegetation destruction
  - Human intervention
    - Building fences
    - Habitat recovery
  - Challenges
    - Expensive maintenance
    - Potential danger if efforts cease

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2.5

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 22

3.表达 回答中的表达大部分清晰，但仍有改进的空间。建议在练习发音时注意一些单词的发音，如“conservation”和“vegetation”。此外，尝试减少不必要的停顿，以使语言更流畅。最后，在描述具体事例时，注意使用更准确的词汇，例如将“人类发送一些猪和山羊进入森林”改为“人类从其他地区引入了猪和山羊”。

4.话题发展 回答在话题发展方面做得相对较好，能够将阅读材料中的概念与听力材料中的具体例子结合起来。然而，在解释如何保护鸟类时，可以更详细地描述保护措施（如建立围栏）及其效果。此外，在总结时，可以强调这些鸟类因为人类保护措施的停止而成为了保护依赖物种。

5.语言使用

Original: The reading passage gives a definition of the conservation-reliant species, that is, some animals depend on humans' conservation for its survival. The reading passage defines conservation-reliant species as animals that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. (将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。)

Original: The lecture gives an example of the birds in the United States forest. The lecture provides an example of bird species in the forests of the United States. (使用了更准确的词汇和语法结构。)

Original: There's a bird. It was struggling living in the forest, which becomes extinct. These birds were struggling to survive in the forest and were on the verge of extinction. (修改了句子结构，使其更清晰且自然。)

Original: So a human sends some pigs and goats into the forest, and they become eating the vegetation and destroy the forest. Humans introduced pigs and goats into the forest, which led to these animals consuming large amounts of vegetation and destroying the habitat. (改进了句子结构，使描述更准确。)

Original: People try to conserve this animal through making a certain area to keep the pigs and the goats out, and this is so costly, so humans stopped this program, and the environment becomes difficult for the birds to survive since they stopped the program. Conservationists attempted to protect these birds by creating designated areas to keep pigs and goats out. However, this approach was costly, and when the program was discontinued, the birds' survival became even more challenging. (对句子进行了重组，使其更清晰且自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage defines conservation-reliant species as animals that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. The lecture provides an example of bird species in the forests of the United States. These birds were struggling to survive in the forest and were on the verge of extinction. Humans introduced pigs and goats into the forest, which led to these animals consuming large amounts of vegetation and destroying the habitat. Conservationists attempted to protect these birds by creating designated areas to keep pigs and goats out. However, this approach was costly, and when the program was discontinued, the birds' survival became even more challenging. This example illustrates how the bird species in Hawaii's forests have become conservation-reliant due to human intervention and the subsequent discontinuation of conservation efforts.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species
  • Definition
  • Lecture example
    • Bird species in the United States forests
    • Struggling to survive
    • Pigs and goats introduced
      • Destroying habitat
    • Conservation efforts
      • Designated areas
      • Costly program
      • Discontinued efforts
    • Birds' survival challenges

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，仅有少数停顿。为了提高发言的表达能力，建议在练习时注意以下几点：1) 注意正确的发音，以避免拼写错误；2) 在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性；3) 多加练习，提高口语的自然度和流利度。

4.话题发展 The speaker provided a coherent and well-organized response, explaining the concept of conservation-reliant species through the example of birds in Hawaii's forests. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. To enhance the response, the speaker could: 1) Elaborate on the specific challenges faced by the bird species due to habitat destruction caused by pigs and goats; 2) Explain more clearly how the conservation efforts are helping the bird species survive and why they are reliant on these efforts; 3) Provide more context on the overall significance of conservation-reliant species in relation to broader environmental issues.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The professor gives an example of a species of bird in the U.S. The wild pigs demonstrated in where the birds lived. The pigs eat the vegetation there and destroy many other things. So the conservationists build a defense to protect them from the destruction of the birds. But this conservation is very expensive because building and later repelling and keeping the defense cost a lot. And if the conservation stops, the birds will soon extinct.

Corrected Answer: The professor provides an example of a bird species in the U.S. The wild pigs have invaded the habitat where these birds live. The pigs consume vast amounts of vegetation and cause extensive damage to the environment. As a result, conservationists construct barriers to shield the birds from further destruction. However, this conservation effort is quite costly due to the construction and ongoing maintenance of these barriers. If these efforts cease, the bird species may quickly become extinct. (在这个修改后的版本中，我们使用了更自然、更准确的词汇和表达方式，例如“invaded”代替“demonstrated in”，“consume vast amounts”代替“eat”，“cause extensive damage”代替“destroy many other things”，以及“construct barriers”代替“build a defense”。同时，我们也对语法和句子结构进行了调整，使得回答更加流畅、连贯。)

Revised 140-word Answer:

The professor provides an example of a bird species native to Hawaii's forests in the United States, which has become conservation-reliant due to habitat destruction caused by invasive wild pigs and goats. These animals consume vast amounts of vegetation, causing extensive damage to the environment and threatening the survival of the bird species. To address this issue, conservationists have implemented measures such as constructing barriers to protect the birds and their habitat from further destruction. This conservation effort has proven effective in some areas, but it is also quite costly due to the construction and ongoing maintenance of these barriers. The lecture emphasizes that if these efforts were to cease, the bird species may quickly become extinct, illustrating the concept of conservation-reliant species and the importance of continued human intervention for their survival.

6.思维导图

• Conservation-reliant species
  • Example: Bird species in Hawaii's forests
    • Habitat destruction
      • Invasive wild pigs and goats
        • Consume vast amounts of vegetation
        • Cause extensive damage to the environment
  • Conservation efforts
    • Constructing barriers
      • Protect birds and their habitat
      • Costly due to construction and maintenance
  • Importance of continued human intervention
    • Bird species may quickly become extinct if efforts cease

7.关键词