TOEFL Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the professor's lecture illustrates the concept of a conservation-reliant species.

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）：3

• 语言使用（Language Use）：3

• 话题发展（Topic Development）：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。建议练习更流畅、自然的语音表达，以便在考试中更好地展示自己的英语水平。此外，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解你的观点。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有条理的，但可以进一步优化。建议在描述保护区和围栏设施方面提供更多细节，以便更好地说明这些措施如何帮助鸟类生存。同时，在提到成本问题时，可以给出具体的数字或例子，以增强说服力。总之，在准备托福口语考试时，要确保充分利用时间来组织和阐述观点，并提供充足的支持和例证。

5.语言使用

Original: Conservation-reliant species refers to animals whose survival relies on the conservation of people to their habitats. Stop of these conservation can lead to extinction of these animals. The professor give an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forest of Hawaii. Due to the introducing of domestic pigs and goats and their escaping to the forest, the vegetation environment of these birds living in has been destroyed greatly. In that case, people started their preservation of these birds by setting specific areas that keep the pigs and goats outside. This is very effective in some area but also very expensive due to the high cost of establishing equipments and repairments. However, if these efforts were stopped, then these kind of birds are likely to extinct.

Corrected: Conservation-reliant species Conservation-dependent species (用词更准确) refers to animals whose survival relies on the conservation of people human conservation efforts (表达更自然) to their habitats. Stop of these conservation Discontinuation of these efforts (语法更准确) can lead to extinction of these animals. The professor give gives (动词形式错误) an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forest of Hawaii in Hawaii(表达更自然). Due to the introducing introduction (词形错误) of domestic pigs and goats and their escaping to the forest, the vegetation environment of these birds living in has been destroyed greatly severely damaged (表达更自然). In that case, people started their preservation conservation (用词更准确) of these birds by setting specific areas that keep the pigs and goats outside. This is very effective in some area areas (单复数错误) but also very expensive due to the high cost of establishing equipments and repairments equipment and repairs(词形错误). However, if these efforts were stopped, then these kind of birds are likely to extinct. of birds would likely become extinct.(语法更准确)

Revised (140 words): Conservation-dependent species refers to animals whose survival relies on human conservation efforts to their habitats. Discontinuation of these efforts can lead to the extinction of these animals. The professor gives an example of bird species struggling for survival in the forests in Hawaii. Due to the introduction of domestic pigs and goats and their escape into the forest, the vegetation environment that these birds live in has been severely damaged. To address this issue, people started conserving these birds by establishing specific areas that keep the pigs and goats out. This approach has been very effective in some areas but also very expensive due to the high cost of setting up equipment and repairs. However, if these efforts were discontinued, these kinds of birds would likely become extinct.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-dependent species
  - Definition
  - Human conservation efforts

- Example: Hawaii's forests
  - Bird species struggling for survival
  - Introduction of domestic pigs and goats
  - Damage to vegetation environment

- Conservation efforts
  - Establishing specific areas
  - Effectiveness and cost

- Potential extinction
  - If efforts discontinued

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答内容基本清晰，但有些地方需要改进。例如，可以尝试提高语速和减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。建议多加练习，提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的。但是，在解释教授讲座中保护依赖物种的概念时，可以更详细地描述野猪和山羊如何破坏鸟类栖息地以及保护措施如何帮助这些鸟类生存。此外，可以强调这些鸟类在没有人类干预的情况下很难生存。建议在练习时关注提供更充分的支持和例子来丰富回答内容。

5.语言使用

Conservation-reliant species means a type of species which depends on human's conservation efforts for survival. Conservation-reliant species refer to those that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. (修改了句子结构，使其更自然) And in the professor's example, he says that there are a lot of bird species that are struggle for survival and close to extinct, and they need to eat mass amount of vegetation for survival. In the professor's example, he mentions numerous bird species struggling to survive and being on the verge of extinction, requiring a large amount of vegetation for sustenance. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使其更自然) Therefore, conservationists keep wilds out from the forests and build fences around the forests and keep repairing them, which undoubtedly is quite expensive. As a result, conservationists exclude wild animals from the forests by building and maintaining fences around them, which is undoubtedly costly. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使其更自然) However, if the conservationists stop the program, it's really difficult for these bird species to survive without human's effort. Nonetheless, if conservationists cease their efforts, it would be extremely challenging for these bird species to survive without human intervention. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使其更自然)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Conservation-reliant species refer to those that depend on human conservation efforts for their survival. In the professor's example, he mentions numerous bird species struggling to survive and being on the verge of extinction in Hawaii's forests, requiring a large amount of vegetation for sustenance. The introduction of domesticated pigs and goats, which escaped into the forests and destroyed the birds' habitat by consuming massive amounts of vegetation, exacerbated the situation. As a result, conservationists exclude wild animals from the forests by building and maintaining fences around them, which is undoubtedly costly. These efforts have proven effective in some areas, but they require continuous financial support. Nonetheless, if conservationists cease their efforts, it would be extremely challenging for these bird species to survive without human intervention.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Depend on human conservation efforts

- Professor's example
  - Bird species in Hawaii's forests
    - Struggling to survive
    - On the verge of extinction
  - Pigs and goats
    - Destroying bird habitat
    - Consuming vegetation

- Conservation efforts
  - Building and maintaining fences
  - Costly but effective

- Challenges
  - Continuous financial support needed
  - Difficulty in survival without human intervention

7.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

Estimated Score: 23

3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流利，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在适当的地方加入适当的停顿，以便让听众更好地理解内容；2) 注意发音准确性，避免因发音不准确而导致的拼写错误。通过改进这些方面，发言者可以使表达更加清晰流畅。

4.话题发展

The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from the lecture. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker could have elaborated more on the specific challenges faced by the bird species and the conservation efforts undertaken to protect them. Additionally, the speaker could have emphasized the importance of human intervention in maintaining the habitat for these conservation-reliant species. By incorporating these points, the speaker's response would be more comprehensive and better aligned with the lecture content.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the lecture, the professor uses the example of bird species to illustrate the concept of a conservation-reliant species. In the lecture, the professor illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species using the example of bird species. (调整了句子结构，使表达更自然) For instance, in a forest, many bird species are close to extinct because of the introduction of domesticated goats and pigs, which destroyed the forest where bird species live. For instance, in a forest, many bird species are on the verge of extinction due to the introduction of domesticated goats and pigs that have destroyed their habitat. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达) To give them a chance to recover, the conservationists build fences to keep goats and pigs out. To aid their recovery, conservationists construct fences to exclude goats and pigs. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达) As a result, in some areas, those fences are quite effective, however, they are very expensive because they cost a lot to build and repair when they break down. Consequently, in some areas, these fences prove effective; however, they are costly due to construction and maintenance expenses. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达) The conservationists also find out, if they stop building and repairing those fences, it will be difficult for the bird species to survive. Conservationists also discover that if they cease constructing and maintaining these fences, the bird species' survival becomes challenging. (使用了更高级的词汇和更准确的表达)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the lecture, the professor illustrates the concept of conservation-reliant species using the example of bird species. For instance, in a forest, many bird species are on the verge of extinction due to the introduction of domesticated goats and pigs that have destroyed their habitat. To aid their recovery, conservationists construct fences to exclude goats and pigs. Consequently, in some areas, these fences prove effective; however, they are costly due to construction and maintenance expenses. Conservationists also discover that if they cease constructing and maintaining these fences, the bird species' survival becomes challenging. By emphasizing the importance of human intervention in preserving habitats for conservation-reliant species and elaborating on specific challenges faced by these birds, the speaker's response can achieve a higher score and better align with the lecture content.

6.思维导图

- Conservation-reliant species
  - Example: Bird species in Hawaii
    - Threat: Domesticated goats and pigs
      - Habitat destruction
  - Conservation efforts
    - Fences to exclude goats and pigs
      - Effectiveness in some areas
      - Costly construction and maintenance
  - Importance of human intervention
    - Continuous efforts for species survival

7.关键词