TOEFL TPO 67 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example from the professor's lecture illustrates goal displacement.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice proper pausing at appropriate points in the sentence and work on accurate pronunciation of certain words.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of elaborating on the specific details from the lecture. To further develop the topic, the speaker could include more information about how the ants' behavior exemplifies goal displacement and how it relates to the nomadic phase concept discussed in the reading passage.

5.Language Use

Original: Well, the professor dives deeper into the concept nomadic phase by providing an example of a specific kind of ants. The professor delves into the concept of the nomadic phase by providing an example of a particular species of ants. ("dives deeper" changed to "delves into" for a more natural-sounding phrase; "kind" changed to "species" for accurate terminology)

Original: So the ants live in colonies underground, and once there are baby ants in the colony who are in urgent need of extra nutrition, the entire colony leaves its original nest and went to a new location just to ensure continuous food supply. These ants live in underground colonies, and when baby ants require additional nutrition, the entire colony leaves its original nest and moves to a new location to ensure a continuous food supply. (Simplified sentence structure and improved grammar)

Original: And they only stop when the baby ants have grown up and are in no need of extra nutrition. They only stop when the baby ants have matured and no longer require extra nutrition. (Improved sentence structure and word choice)

Original: Then the entire colony would settle down and build a new nest underground. Afterward, the entire colony settles down and constructs a new underground nest. (Improved sentence structure and word choice)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The professor delves into the concept of the nomadic phase by providing an example of a particular species of ants. These ants live in underground colonies, and when baby ants require additional nutrition, the entire colony leaves its original nest and moves to a new location to ensure a continuous food supply. They only stop when the baby ants have matured and no longer require extra nutrition. Afterward, the entire colony settles down and constructs a new underground nest. This example illustrates goal displacement as the ants adapt their behavior to meet the changing needs of their colony, specifically the nutritional requirements of the baby ants. By engaging in a nomadic phase, they can secure adequate resources for their young, ultimately ensuring the survival and growth of the colony.

6.Mind Map

• Nomadic Phase
  • Concept
  • Example: Ants
    • Underground colonies
    • Baby ants' nutrition
      • Colony movement
        • Continuous food supply
        • Goal displacement
          • Adaptation for survival

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 语言使用：3

• 话题发展：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在解释目标置换时，可以更明确地说明如何通过教授讲座中的例子来说明这一点。例如，在回答中可以强调蚂蚁群体为了满足幼蚁的营养需求而不断迁徙的过程，以及这种行为如何体现了目标置换。在今后的练习中，请注意提供更充分的支持和例证来支持你的观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The reading passage introduced the definition of the nomadic phase, which are strategies where the entire groups move from one location to another in search of resources. The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, a strategy in which entire groups move from one location to another in search of resources. (将过去时改为现在时，使句子更自然。同时，将"which are"改为"a strategy in which"，使句子结构更准确。)

Original: For instance, ants are a type of animal that live together in the underground. For instance, ants are a type of insect that live together underground. (将"animal"改为"insect"，因为蚂蚁是昆虫而非动物。同时，将"in the underground"改为"underground"，使句子更自然。)

Original: In such cases, if the food near the nest is insufficient to provide for the baby ants' nutritional needs, the entire group will leave the nest and relocate to find a new food source. In such cases, if the food near the nest is insufficient to meet the baby ants' nutritional needs, the entire group will leave the nest and relocate to find a new food source. (将"provide for"改为"meet"，使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, a strategy in which entire groups move from one location to another in search of resources. For instance, ants are a type of insect that live together underground. They typically collect food near their nest, however, baby ants require a significant amount of nutrition. In such cases, if the food near the nest is insufficient to meet the baby ants' nutritional needs, the entire group will leave the nest and relocate to find a new food source. If the food in that location runs out, they will move again to meet the baby ants' nutritional requirements. Eventually, when the baby ants mature and no longer need as much food, the ants will find a new nesting site and settle there. This example illustrates goal displacement as the ants adapt their behavior to ensure the survival and growth of their young.

6.思维导图

• Nomadic Phase

  • Definition
  • Strategy

• Ants

  • Insects
  • Underground living

• Baby Ants

  • Nutritional needs
  • Insufficient food

• Relocation

  • New food source
  • Goal displacement

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 2

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 15

3.表达 从发音和语速方面来看，这位考生的表达有待提高。他的发音不够准确，导致了一些拼写错误。此外，他的语速不够流畅，有时会出现不必要的停顿。建议考生多加练习发音和语速的控制，以便在考试中能更清晰、流畅地表达自己的观点。

4.话题发展 The speaker's response lacks coherence and organization, making it difficult to understand the connection between the reading passage and the lecture. The speaker should work on providing a clear summary of both the reading passage and the lecture, as well as explaining how the example from the lecture illustrates goal displacement. Additionally, it would be helpful to use more accurate vocabulary and grammar to better convey their ideas.

5.语言使用

Original: The reading test shows a concept of the nomadic fetus center, and the speaker in this lecture explained it. The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, which is further explained in the lecture. (原文中的“nomadic fetus center”表达不准确，应改为“nomadic phase”。句子结构也需要调整，以使表达更清晰。)

Original: He used the example of the ant to illustrate this. The professor uses ants as an example to illustrate this concept. (建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意主语的一致性。)

Original: He gave two examples. The lecture provides a specific instance of ants' behavior during their nomadic phase. (原文的表述不准确，应改为描述讲座中提到的蚂蚁行为的具体实例。)

Original: First, the baby ant will stay in the nest, and the other nest will go to the nest to find food to take them home. Initially, ants collect food near their nest and bring it back to feed the baby ants. (原文的句子结构和词汇使用不当，需要进行调整以提高语言质量。)

Original: And the second nomadic colony, the right ant would go to the new location, so they will continue to give the nutrition, and eventually food financial can't move. During the nomadic phase, the entire colony moves to new locations to ensure a continuous food supply for the baby ants until they no longer require as much nutrition. (原文的表述不清晰，需要重新组织句子结构和使用更准确的词汇。)

Original: That's all. In conclusion, the example of ants demonstrates how their nomadic phase helps them meet their temporary needs for additional resources. (原文的结尾较为简单，建议使用更完整的表达方式进行总结。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, which is further explained in the lecture. The professor uses ants as an example to illustrate this concept. The lecture provides a specific instance of ants' behavior during their nomadic phase. Initially, ants collect food near their nest and bring it back to feed the baby ants. During the nomadic phase, the entire colony moves to new locations to ensure a continuous food supply for the baby ants until they no longer require as much nutrition. In conclusion, the example of ants demonstrates how their nomadic phase helps them meet their temporary needs for additional resources.

6.思维导图

- Nomadic Phase
  - Reading Passage
    - Introduction to concept
  - Lecture
    - Ants as an example
      - Ant behavior during nomadic phase
        - Collecting food near nest
        - Entire colony moves for continuous food supply
          - Baby ants' nutritional needs
  - Conclusion
    - Ants' nomadic phase meets temporary resource needs

7.关键词