TOEFL TPO 67 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example from the professor's lecture illustrates goal displacement.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice proper pausing at appropriate points in the sentence and work on accurate pronunciation of certain words.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of elaborating on the specific details from the lecture. To further develop the topic, the speaker could include more information about how the ants' behavior exemplifies goal displacement and how it relates to the nomadic phase concept discussed in the reading passage.

5.Language Use

Original: Well, the professor dives deeper into the concept nomadic phase by providing an example of a specific kind of ants. The professor delves into the concept of the nomadic phase by providing an example of a particular species of ants. ("dives deeper" changed to "delves into" for a more natural-sounding phrase; "kind" changed to "species" for accurate terminology)

Original: So the ants live in colonies underground, and once there are baby ants in the colony who are in urgent need of extra nutrition, the entire colony leaves its original nest and went to a new location just to ensure continuous food supply. These ants live in underground colonies, and when baby ants require additional nutrition, the entire colony leaves its original nest and moves to a new location to ensure a continuous food supply. (Simplified sentence structure and improved grammar)

Original: And they only stop when the baby ants have grown up and are in no need of extra nutrition. They only stop when the baby ants have matured and no longer require extra nutrition. (Improved sentence structure and word choice)

Original: Then the entire colony would settle down and build a new nest underground. Afterward, the entire colony settles down and constructs a new underground nest. (Improved sentence structure and word choice)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The professor delves into the concept of the nomadic phase by providing an example of a particular species of ants. These ants live in underground colonies, and when baby ants require additional nutrition, the entire colony leaves its original nest and moves to a new location to ensure a continuous food supply. They only stop when the baby ants have matured and no longer require extra nutrition. Afterward, the entire colony settles down and constructs a new underground nest. This example illustrates goal displacement as the ants adapt their behavior to meet the changing needs of their colony, specifically the nutritional requirements of the baby ants. By engaging in a nomadic phase, they can secure adequate resources for their young, ultimately ensuring the survival and growth of the colony.

6.Mind Map

• Nomadic Phase
  • Concept
  • Example: Ants
    • Underground colonies
    • Baby ants' nutrition
      • Colony movement
        • Continuous food supply
        • Goal displacement
          • Adaptation for survival

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 语言使用：3

• 话题发展：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在解释目标置换时，可以更明确地说明如何通过教授讲座中的例子来说明这一点。例如，在回答中可以强调蚂蚁群体为了满足幼蚁的营养需求而不断迁徙的过程，以及这种行为如何体现了目标置换。在今后的练习中，请注意提供更充分的支持和例证来支持你的观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The reading passage introduced the definition of the nomadic phase, which are strategies where the entire groups move from one location to another in search of resources. The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, a strategy in which entire groups move from one location to another in search of resources. (将过去时改为现在时，使句子更自然。同时，将"which are"改为"a strategy in which"，使句子结构更准确。)

Original: For instance, ants are a type of animal that live together in the underground. For instance, ants are a type of insect that live together underground. (将"animal"改为"insect"，因为蚂蚁是昆虫而非动物。同时，将"in the underground"改为"underground"，使句子更自然。)

Original: In such cases, if the food near the nest is insufficient to provide for the baby ants' nutritional needs, the entire group will leave the nest and relocate to find a new food source. In such cases, if the food near the nest is insufficient to meet the baby ants' nutritional needs, the entire group will leave the nest and relocate to find a new food source. (将"provide for"改为"meet"，使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, a strategy in which entire groups move from one location to another in search of resources. For instance, ants are a type of insect that live together underground. They typically collect food near their nest, however, baby ants require a significant amount of nutrition. In such cases, if the food near the nest is insufficient to meet the baby ants' nutritional needs, the entire group will leave the nest and relocate to find a new food source. If the food in that location runs out, they will move again to meet the baby ants' nutritional requirements. Eventually, when the baby ants mature and no longer need as much food, the ants will find a new nesting site and settle there. This example illustrates goal displacement as the ants adapt their behavior to ensure the survival and growth of their young.

6.思维导图

• Nomadic Phase

  • Definition
  • Strategy

• Ants

  • Insects
  • Underground living

• Baby Ants

  • Nutritional needs
  • Insufficient food

• Relocation

  • New food source
  • Goal displacement

7.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

Estimated Score: 23

3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解内容；2) 注意发音的准确性，避免因发音不准确而导致的拼写错误。通过练习和模仿母语者的发音，可以逐步提高发音水平。

4.话题发展

The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading passage and the lecture. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker should focus on explaining how the example from the professor's lecture illustrates goal displacement, which was not addressed in the response. To improve, the speaker should ensure that they fully address the question prompt and provide a clear explanation of how the example relates to the concept of goal displacement.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading passage talks about nomadic phase, which means that during a period of travel, the insect group will continually move from one place to another to search for additional resources. The reading passage discusses the nomadic phase, a period during which an insect group continuously moves from one location to another in search of additional resources. (将原句中的"talks about"改为"discusses"，使语言更加正式。同时，对句子进行了简化，使其更加简洁。)

In the lecture, the professor talks about a kind of ants living in colonies. In the lecture, the professor mentions a type of ants that live in colonies. (将原句中的"talks about"改为"mentions"，使语言更加正式。同时，对句子进行了简化，使其更加简洁。)

They need to collect food or bring the food back to the nest. They must gather food and bring it back to their nest. (将原句中的"need to"改为"must"，使语言更加正式。同时，对句子进行了简化，使其更加简洁。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage discusses the nomadic phase, a period during which an insect group continuously moves from one location to another in search of additional resources. In the lecture, the professor mentions a type of ants that live in colonies. These ants must gather food and bring it back to their nest. When baby ants are born, they require a significant amount of nutrition, which cannot be found near the nest. To ensure the baby ants have enough food, the entire colony leaves the nest and carries the baby ants to a new location with a fresh food supply. They continue moving to new locations as needed until the baby ants grow and no longer require as much food. At this point, the colony can settle in one place and establish a new underground nest for the group to live in. This example effectively illustrates the nomadic phase.

6.思维导图

• Nomadic Phase

  • Definition
  • Insect group movement

• Ant Colony Example

  • Living in colonies
  • Gathering food
  • Baby ants' nutrition needs
  • Colony movement
    • Carrying baby ants
    • New food supply locations
  • Settling in one place

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 2

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 15

3.表达 从发音和语速方面来看，这位考生的表达有待提高。他的发音不够准确，导致了一些拼写错误。此外，他的语速不够流畅，有时会出现不必要的停顿。建议考生多加练习发音和语速的控制，以便在考试中能更清晰、流畅地表达自己的观点。

4.话题发展 The speaker's response lacks coherence and organization, making it difficult to understand the connection between the reading passage and the lecture. The speaker should work on providing a clear summary of both the reading passage and the lecture, as well as explaining how the example from the lecture illustrates goal displacement. Additionally, it would be helpful to use more accurate vocabulary and grammar to better convey their ideas.

5.语言使用

Original: The reading test shows a concept of the nomadic fetus center, and the speaker in this lecture explained it. The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, which is further explained in the lecture. (原文中的“nomadic fetus center”表达不准确，应改为“nomadic phase”。句子结构也需要调整，以使表达更清晰。)

Original: He used the example of the ant to illustrate this. The professor uses ants as an example to illustrate this concept. (建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意主语的一致性。)

Original: He gave two examples. The lecture provides a specific instance of ants' behavior during their nomadic phase. (原文的表述不准确，应改为描述讲座中提到的蚂蚁行为的具体实例。)

Original: First, the baby ant will stay in the nest, and the other nest will go to the nest to find food to take them home. Initially, ants collect food near their nest and bring it back to feed the baby ants. (原文的句子结构和词汇使用不当，需要进行调整以提高语言质量。)

Original: And the second nomadic colony, the right ant would go to the new location, so they will continue to give the nutrition, and eventually food financial can't move. During the nomadic phase, the entire colony moves to new locations to ensure a continuous food supply for the baby ants until they no longer require as much nutrition. (原文的表述不清晰，需要重新组织句子结构和使用更准确的词汇。)

Original: That's all. In conclusion, the example of ants demonstrates how their nomadic phase helps them meet their temporary needs for additional resources. (原文的结尾较为简单，建议使用更完整的表达方式进行总结。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage introduces the concept of the nomadic phase, which is further explained in the lecture. The professor uses ants as an example to illustrate this concept. The lecture provides a specific instance of ants' behavior during their nomadic phase. Initially, ants collect food near their nest and bring it back to feed the baby ants. During the nomadic phase, the entire colony moves to new locations to ensure a continuous food supply for the baby ants until they no longer require as much nutrition. In conclusion, the example of ants demonstrates how their nomadic phase helps them meet their temporary needs for additional resources.

6.思维导图

- Nomadic Phase
  - Reading Passage
    - Introduction to concept
  - Lecture
    - Ants as an example
      - Ant behavior during nomadic phase
        - Collecting food near nest
        - Entire colony moves for continuous food supply
          - Baby ants' nutritional needs
  - Conclusion
    - Ants' nomadic phase meets temporary resource needs

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some areas where the speaker could improve. For example, the speaker could work on varying their intonation to make their speech more engaging. Additionally, the speaker should focus on pronouncing certain words more accurately to avoid confusion. Overall, the speaker should continue practicing their delivery to enhance clarity and fluency.

4.Topic Development

The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker should focus on providing more specific details from the lecture to better illustrate the concept of goal displacement. Additionally, the speaker could work on making smoother transitions between ideas to enhance the overall flow of their response. By incorporating these suggestions, the speaker can further improve their topic development skills.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The concept of nomadic phase refers to animal groups trying to find additional food resources that they cannot find in their surrounding area. The nomadic phase concept involves animal groups searching for extra food resources unavailable in their immediate surroundings. (Improved sentence structure and vocabulary) Once they find enough food, they will stop. When they locate sufficient food, they cease their search. (Enhanced vocabulary and sentence structure) The professor takes specific ants as an example. Those ants live in colonies under the ground, and they often collect food near their nests and bring it back to the nest to eat. If there are baby ants in their group and there are not enough food to eat, the entire group will go out and find other places to have the food and they will carry their baby ants. Once they find enough food, they will stop there and make a long time living there.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The nomadic phase concept involves animal groups searching for extra food resources unavailable in their immediate surroundings. When they locate sufficient food, they cease their search. The professor uses a specific type of ant as an example. These ants live in underground colonies and frequently gather food near their nests, bringing it back for consumption. If the colony has baby ants and insufficient food, the entire group ventures out to find new sources of nourishment while carrying the baby ants with them. Upon locating adequate sustenance, they settle in that area for an extended period.

By incorporating advanced vocabulary, proper grammar, smooth transitions, and a strong conclusion, this revised answer demonstrates a more natural flow of statements and improved language use, increasing the likelihood of achieving a score of 30.

6.Mind Map

• Nomadic phase concept

  • Animal groups
  • Extra food resources
  • Cease search when sufficient

• Professor's example

  • Specific type of ant
  • Underground colonies
  • Baby ants and insufficient food
  • Venture out for new nourishment sources
  • Settle in new area when adequate

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve their pronunciation to avoid confusion. For example, the word "displacement" was not mentioned in the response, which is essential for answering the question. To improve delivery, the speaker should focus on pronouncing key terms correctly and ensuring that all necessary information is included in their response.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the response does not directly address the concept of goal displacement as asked in the question. To improve topic development, the speaker should ensure that they fully understand the question and address it directly in their response. In this case, they should explain how the ants' behavior of constantly moving to find food for baby ants demonstrates goal displacement.

5.Language Use

Original: Nomadic phase is a continuous move of a type of insect. The nomadic phase involves the continuous movement of certain insects. (Rephrased for clarity and natural language flow) Typically, this happens because they have some temporary needs to be satisfied, and they just keep moving to find a way to satisfy their need. This typically occurs when they have temporary needs that must be met, prompting them to constantly search for resources. (Improved sentence structure and vocabulary) And once their need has been satisfied, they will settle down. Once their needs are met, they settle in one location. (Simplified sentence structure)

Revised answer (140 words):

The nomadic phase involves the continuous movement of certain insects. This typically occurs when they have temporary needs that must be met, prompting them to constantly search for resources. For example, a particular type of ant lives together in a colony. When baby ants are present in the colony, they require a significant amount of food for proper nutrition. To ensure the baby ants receive enough sustenance, the entire colony moves from one location to another in search of food. This process continues until the baby ants mature and no longer require as much nourishment. At this point, the ant community can settle in one location and establish a new underground nest. The ants' behavior demonstrates goal displacement as they temporarily shift their focus from maintaining their nest to finding food sources for the baby ants, ultimately returning to their original goal of nest maintenance once the baby ants' needs are met.

6.Mind Map

• Nomadic phase

  • Continuous movement
  • Temporary needs

• Ant colony example

  • Baby ants' nutrition
  • Moving for food resources

• Goal displacement

  • Shifting focus
  • Returning to original goal

7.Key Words