TOEFL TPO 58 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不太自然的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的连贯性，避免在不必要的地方停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以减少拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，观点之间的联系清晰，举例充足。在这方面无需改进。

Original: In the letter, the student suggests Kemper's the bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. This is because there should have chairs and tables available for students to sit while deciding what to buy, and it is convenient for hungry students between classes. However, the woman opposes this. First, she points out that the drinks are easily spent spilled on an expensive book by accident, so the book will be ruined. Moreover, she argues that there is already a convenience store in the student center selling same goods, which is much closer to academic building. However, bookstores are all the way in the other part of the campus. As a result, it is not convenient for students between classes to grab food.

(将“Kemper's”改为“the”，因为这里不需要特指某个书店。将“spent”改为“spilled”，因为这里表示的是饮料容易洒在书上。)

Revised (140 words): In the letter, the student suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. The proposal aims to provide chairs and tables for students to sit while browsing books and offer convenience for hungry students between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she highlights that drinks can be easily spilled on expensive books accidentally, causing damage to them. Furthermore, she argues that a convenience store already exists in the student center selling similar items and is much closer to academic buildings than the bookstore located on the other side of campus. Consequently, it would not be convenient for students between classes to grab food from the bookstore.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Campus bookstore
    - Sell snacks and drinks
    - Chairs and tables
    - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's disagreement
    - Drinks easily spilled on books
        - Damage to expensive books
    - Convenience store in student center
        - Closer to academic buildings
        - Similar items sold
    - Bookstore location inconvenient
        - Other side of campus

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

在回答中，发音和语速需要改进。有时候，发音不准确，导致了拼写错误。此外，适当的停顿也很重要。建议多加练习，提高发音准确度和语言流利度。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论述方面还有待加强。首先，在总结提案时，请注意使用正确的性别代词。其次，在解释女生观点时，可以更清晰地表达她的担忧，并给出更具体的例子。最后，在总结时，请注意使用正确的地点描述。建议在练习中关注这些方面，以便更好地组织和发展话题。

Original: In the readings in newspapersnewspaper reading(报纸阅读，而不是报纸中的阅读), they said the compasscampus(发音错误，应为campus) bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. But the girlwoman(用woman更正式) doesn't think so. HeShe(性别代词错误，应为she) doesn't think it will work very well. First, heshe(性别代词错误，应为she) thinks if we eat snacks and drink some beverage, it will be easy to ruin the expensive book. Second, it's not convenient enough to buy snacks and drinks in the bookstore because the bookstore is always outside the campuson the other side of campus(地点描述错误，应为校园另一边). And they have already some closer stores in the campus, so they don't have to sell snacks and drinks in the bookstore.

Revised (140 words): In the newspaper reading, it was suggested that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. However, the woman disagrees with this idea, as she believes it would not work effectively. Her first concern is that consuming snacks and beverages near books could easily lead to accidental spills, damaging expensive books. Secondly, she argues that purchasing snacks and drinks at the bookstore is not convenient due to its location on the other side of campus. She points out that there are already closer stores within the campus, making it unnecessary for the bookstore to sell snacks and drinks.

6.思维导图

- Campus Bookstore
  - Sell snacks and drinks
  - Woman's opinion
    - Disagrees
      - Reason 1: Accidental spills
        - Damage expensive books
      - Reason 2: Inconvenient location
        - Other side of campus
        - Closer stores available

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的语速和发音大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持连贯的语速，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，能够清楚地表达女士对提议的看法及其理由。但在描述便利店位置时，可以更明确地说明学生中心距离教学楼更近，而书店则相对较远。此外，在总结时可以再次强调女士反对提议的观点。

原文：The latter The letter (改为letter，因为这里是指信件，而不是后者) proposes that campus bookstores should sell snacks and drinks for the students who are hungry between classes, and students can also have a snack when they are buying books. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she thinks that it is easy for students to spill something on the books accidentally. Therefore, the books will be ruined. Some of the books are very expensive, so it is not good to do so. Additionally, the campus has a convenient store at the student center which sells snacks, and it is much closer to the buildings where students have classes, so students can purchase snacks there, and the campus bookstore is much further.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The letter proposes that campus bookstores should sell snacks and drinks for students who are hungry between classes, providing a place for them to enjoy refreshments while browsing books. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, she believes that having food and drinks in the bookstore increases the risk of accidental spills on books, potentially damaging or ruining expensive textbooks. Secondly, she points out that there is already a convenience store located in the student center which sells snacks and is much closer to academic buildings than the bookstore. This makes it more accessible for students to grab a quick snack between classes. In conclusion, due to concerns about potential damage to books and existing alternatives for purchasing snacks on campus, the woman does not support the proposal.

6.思维导图

- Letter Proposal
  - Campus bookstores sell snacks and drinks
  - Convenience for students between classes

- Woman's Disagreement
  - Accidental spills on books
    - Damaging expensive textbooks
  - Convenience store in student center
    - Closer to academic buildings
    - Existing alternative for snacks

- Conclusion
  - Concerns about book damage
  - Availability of other snack options on campus

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速基本稳定，偶尔有停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议发言者在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，避免不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，观点之间的联系也比较清晰，并且提供了一定的支持和例证。为了进一步提高话题发展能力，建议在练习时尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来使观点之间的联系更加紧密，并在论述中给出更详细的例子和论据。

Original Answer: Well, the proposal is that the bookstall should sell drinks and snacks. Because first, students are available to sit down and have something to eat or drink when they are reading books. And next, if students are hungry between classes, they can go to the bookstall to have something to eat. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Because first, she points out that the books will be easily get ruined if there are students drink or eat at the bookstall. And specifically, some of the books are rarely expensive. What's more, she points out that there has already been a convenience store which is much closer to the building where students take classes. The convenience store also sells food and drinks, so students are unlikely to go to the bookstall.

Corrected Answer: The proposal suggests that the bookstore should sell drinks and snacks. Firstly, this would allow students to sit down and enjoy refreshments while browsing books. Secondly, it would provide a convenient option for students who are hungry between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. She believes that having food and drinks in the bookstore could lead to accidental spills and damage to expensive books. Furthermore, she mentions that there is already a convenience store closer to the academic buildings where students have their classes. This store also sells food and drinks, making it less likely for students to visit the bookstore for refreshments. (原文中的“bookstall”改为“bookstore”，以保持一致；将“rarely expensive”改为“expensive”，使表达更准确。)

Revised Version (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the campus bookstore should sell drinks and snacks for two main reasons: it would provide a comfortable space for students to enjoy refreshments while browsing books, and it would offer a convenient option for those who are hungry between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. Firstly, she is concerned that having food and drinks in the bookstore could lead to accidental spills, potentially damaging expensive books. Secondly, she highlights the fact that there is already a convenience store closer to the academic buildings where students have their classes. This store also sells food and drinks, making it a more convenient option for students. Therefore, she believes that adding refreshments to the bookstore is unnecessary and could even be detrimental to the books.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Sell drinks and snacks
  - Benefits
    - Comfortable space for refreshments
    - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reasons
    - Accidental spills and damage to books
    - Existence of a closer convenience store
      - Sells food and drinks
      - More convenient for students

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that could be reduced for a more consistent pace. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking without unnecessary pauses and work on pronouncing words more accurately to avoid spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve, the speaker should focus on elaborating on the reasons given by the woman in the conversation and providing more context to strengthen their argument.

Original: Well, the letter proposes that the campus bookstore would sell snacks and drinks, but the woman disagreed with the idea in the letter. The letter suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks; however, the woman disagrees with this proposal. (Improved sentence structure and clarity)

Original: First, she worried about the books. Firstly, she expressed concern for the books. (Improved vocabulary and phrasing)

Original: To be more specific, some books are expensive. Specifically, she mentioned that some books are costly. (Enhanced vocabulary and sentence structure)

Original: In addition, if students eat the snacks or drinks, they may not care about whether they damage the books. Moreover, students consuming snacks or beverages might inadvertently damage these valuable books. (Improved vocabulary and phrasing)

Original: Second, the convenience store is nearby the academic building. Secondly, there is already a convenience store near the academic building. (Enhanced sentence structure and clarity)

Original: However, the campus bookstore is far away from the academic building, In contrast, the campus bookstore is located at a considerable distance from the academic building, (Improved vocabulary and phrasing)

Original: so it is unnecessary for students between classes to sell snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore. making it less convenient for students to purchase snacks and drinks between classes. (Enhanced clarity and sentence structure)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The letter suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks; however, the woman disagrees with this proposal. Firstly, she expressed concern for the books. Specifically, she mentioned that some books are costly. Moreover, students consuming snacks or beverages might inadvertently damage these valuable books. Secondly, there is already a convenience store near the academic building. In contrast, the campus bookstore is located at a considerable distance from the academic building, making it less convenient for students to purchase snacks and drinks between classes. These reasons led the woman to disagree with the idea presented in the letter, as she believes that selling snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore would not be practical or beneficial for students.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the proposal

- Reasons for disagreement
  - Concern for books
    - Costly books
    - Potential damage from snacks and beverages
  - Convenience store near academic building
    - Campus bookstore at a considerable distance
    - Less convenient for students between classes

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer pronunciation and reducing pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response. To improve, practice speaking aloud and focus on enunciating each word clearly.

4. Topic Development The response does not accurately summarize the proposal from the reading passage, nor does it clearly state the woman's opinion and her reasons for holding that opinion. To improve, the speaker should focus on providing a coherent and well-organized response that directly addresses the question, making sure to include clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading and listening passages.

Original Answer: In the reading, we know that there is a proposal that universities should open a snack shop to create job opportunities and also to create a convenient place for students to buy food and provide a fast and easy place to get snacks at any time of the day and in the conversation, the men agree with the proposal because it provides good job experience which can use in real life like you're running a business in the campus and when you graduate, you can run a business in real life and secondly, there is a cafeteria in the school but it still wait in a long line and although you have a car, you have to drive one hour to get the food and this time can save for studying.

Corrected Answer: In the reading passage, we learn about a proposal suggesting that universities should open snack shops on campus. These shops would provide job opportunities and create convenient locations for students to purchase food. In the conversation, the man agrees with this proposal because it offers valuable job experience that can be applied in real life, such as running a business on campus or after graduation. However, there is already a cafeteria at school where students often wait in long lines. Even if they have cars, they must drive an hour to get food, which could be better spent studying. (The corrected answer has improved sentence structure, vocabulary, and grammar. It also provides a clearer summary of both the reading passage and listening conversation.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading passage, we learn about Matt Shapiro's proposal suggesting that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks for students' convenience. In the listening passage, two students discuss this idea. The woman disagrees with Matt's proposal for two main reasons. First, she is concerned about potential damage to books from spilled drinks or food. Second, she points out that there is already a convenience store in the student center, which is closer to academic buildings than the bookstore. In conclusion, while the proposal may seem appealing at first, the woman's concerns about book damage and the existence of a more conveniently located store make it less practical for implementation.

6. Mind Map

- Reading Passage
  - Proposal: Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

- Listening Passage
  - Woman's opinion: Disagrees with proposal
    - Reason 1: Potential damage to books
    - Reason 2: Existing convenience store in student center

- Conclusion
  - Woman's concerns make proposal less practical

7. Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔出现了不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意掌握自然的语调和节奏，减少不必要的停顿，提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 回答内容紧扣题目，结构清晰，观点明确。在话题发展方面表现优秀。可以尝试在练习中加入更多细节和例子来丰富论述。

Original: The reading is a letter telling that the campus bookstore should also offer drinks and snacks and provide some chairs, tables where students can sit down. The reading passage is a letter suggesting that the campus bookstore should offer drinks and snacks, as well as provide chairs and tables for students to sit. (建议使用更自然的表达方式)

The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. The woman in the conversation opposes this proposal for two main reasons. (使用更高级的词汇)

First of all, she says that allowing students to eat and drink in the campus bookstore can bring a lot of problems. Firstly, she argues that permitting students to eat and drink in the campus bookstore could lead to numerous issues. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

Students may accidentally spill their drink on the books even if they are careful. Students might inadvertently spill their drinks on the books, even if they are cautious. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

These expensive books can be ruined. This could result in damage to these costly books. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

Second of all, she points out that they already have a convenience store in the student center. Secondly, she highlights that there is already a convenience store in the student center. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

In fact, the student center is much closer to the academic building than the bookstore. In fact, the student center is significantly closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore is. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

So even if the bookstore offers snacks and drinks, students won't go there between classes. Therefore, even if the bookstore provides snacks and drinks, students are unlikely to visit it between classes. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage is a letter suggesting that the campus bookstore should offer drinks and snacks, as well as provide chairs and tables for students to sit. The woman in the conversation opposes this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, she argues that permitting students to eat and drink in the campus bookstore could lead to numerous issues. Students might inadvertently spill their drinks on the books, even if they are cautious. This could result in damage to these costly books. Secondly, she highlights that there is already a convenience store in the student center. In fact, the student center is significantly closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore is. Therefore, even if the bookstore provides snacks and drinks, students are unlikely to visit it between classes.

6.思维导图

• Reading Passage

  • Campus bookstore
  • Offer drinks and snacks
  • Provide chairs and tables

• Woman's opinion

  • Opposes proposal
  • Two main reasons
    • Potential issues
      • Inadvertent spills
      • Damage to costly books
    • Convenience store in student center
      • Closer to academic buildings
      • Unlikely to visit bookstore between classes

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语速和发音大致清晰，但仍有一些不自然的停顿。建议发言者练习更流畅、连贯的语言表达，避免不必要的停顿。同时注意提高发音准确性，以减少拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者基本上回答了问题，但可以更加有条理地组织内容。建议在总结提案时更明确地陈述提案的关键点，并在陈述女士观点时更具体地解释她的担忧。此外，在解释女士观点时，可以使用更多连接词和过渡词汇，使得回答更加连贯。

Original Answer: Well, the student proposed that campus bookstores should sell snakes or drink because the students can sit on the chairs and eat the snakes when looking at the book or deciding what to buy and it's convenient for the hungry student to buy the things between classes. The student proposed that campus bookstores should sell snacks and drinks, allowing students to sit on chairs and enjoy them while browsing books or deciding what to purchase. This would be convenient for hungry students who want to grab something between classes. (将"snakes"改为"snacks"，调整句子结构，使表达更自然。)

However, in the lecture, the woman disagreed with it because the food may ruin the expensive books. However, in the conversation, the woman disagreed because food might damage expensive books. (将"lecture"改为"conversation"，简化句子结构。)

Even the students are careful, it will happen. Even if students are careful, accidents can still occur. (调整句子结构，使表达更自然。)

And it is not convenient for the student to buy the things in the bookstores because there are already a convenience store in the student center that is much closer to the academy buildings which held the classes. Additionally, it is not convenient for students to buy items at bookstores since there is already a convenience store in the student center, which is much closer to the academic buildings where classes are held. (调整句子结构，使表达更自然。)

So the students won't go to the bookstores to buy these things between the classes. Therefore, students are unlikely to visit bookstores for purchasing snacks and drinks between classes. (调整句子结构，使表达更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The student proposed that campus bookstores should sell snacks and drinks, allowing students to sit on chairs and enjoy them while browsing books or deciding what to purchase. This would be convenient for hungry students who want to grab something between classes. However, in the conversation, the woman disagreed because food might damage expensive books. Even if students are careful, accidents can still occur. Additionally, it is not convenient for students to buy items at bookstores since there is already a convenience store in the student center, which is much closer to the academic buildings where classes are held. Therefore, students are unlikely to visit bookstores for purchasing snacks and drinks between classes.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Campus bookstores
  • Sell snacks and drinks
  • Convenience for students

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees with proposal
  • Reasons
    • Risk of damaging books
    • Existing convenience store
    • Location of bookstore

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中。但在某些地方，发言者可以减少停顿，让语言更加流畅。此外，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。建议多加练习，提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 发言者在话题发展方面做得不错，能够概括提案的内容，并阐述女士对提案的看法及理由。但在组织结构上还有改进空间。例如，在提到女士的观点时，可以使用更明确的连接词（如首先、其次）来组织论述。同时，在解释女士观点时，可以尝试使用更多具体例子来支持观点。通过这些方法，可以使回答更加有条理和说服力。

Original: While the proposal suggests that the bookstore should sell drinks and snacks, because first, this allows students to sit down and have something to eat while they are reading, and next, if students are hungry between classes, they can have something to eat at the bookstore. However, the woman disagrees with this idea, because first, she believes that the books will be easily get ruined if there are many students drink or eat at the bookstore, and specifically, some of the books are really expensive. What's more, she points out that there has already been a convenience store which is much closer to the building where students take classes. The convenience store also sells food and drinks, therefore, students are unlikely to go to the bookstore.

Corrected: While the proposal suggests that the bookstore should sell drinks and snacks, because since first, this allows students to sit down and have something to eat while they are reading; and next, if students are hungry between classes, they can have something to eat at the bookstore. However, the woman disagrees with this idea, because first, she believes that the books will be easily get ruined easily get damaged if there are many students drink or eat drinking or eating at the bookstore, and specifically, some of the books are really expensive. What's more, she points out that there has already been is already a convenience store which is much closer to the building where students take classes. The convenience store also sells food and drinks, therefore, students are unlikely to go to the bookstore.

(因为 -> 由于：这里使用"since"更自然。; -> ,：使用逗号连接两个句子更符合英语表达习惯。be easily get ruined -> easily get damaged：使用"easily get damaged"更符合英语表达习惯。drink or eat -> drinking or eating：使用现在分词形式更自然。has already been -> is already：使用"is already"更符合英语表达习惯。)

Revised (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the campus bookstore should sell drinks and snacks since it would provide a comfortable space for students to eat while browsing books and offer a convenient option for those hungry between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. Firstly, she believes that having students eating and drinking in the bookstore could easily lead to damage of the expensive books. Secondly, she points out that there is already a convenience store located closer to the academic buildings where students attend classes. This store also offers food and drinks, making it more likely for students to visit it instead of going to the bookstore. Therefore, she believes that implementing this proposal would not be practical or beneficial for the campus community.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Sell drinks and snacks
  - Benefits
    - Comfortable space for students
    - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reasons
    - Potential damage to expensive books
    - Existing convenience store
      - Closer to academic buildings
      - Already sells food and drinks

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方有些停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对于问题的回答较为完整，能够概括提案内容并阐述女生的观点及理由。但在组织结构上还有待加强，建议在练习时注意逻辑性和连贯性，使回答更加条理清晰。同时，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来帮助表达思路。

Original Answer: In the letter, the student thinks that the university should sell snacks and drinks in campus bookstore. First of all, the bookstore can have a few chairs and tables available. Besides, this can be very convenient for hungry students. The woman in the conversation doesn't think this plan will work. First of all, she says that it is easy to spill something on books accidentally and therefore ruin the books. And some of the books are very expensive. Besides, convenience store in the students can sell the same kind of stuff. And convenience store is much closer to academic building than the bookstore. So the students will not go there between classes. So the woman in the conversation disagrees with the idea.

Corrected Answer: In the letter, the student thinks suggests (“thinks”改为“suggests”，使表达更准确) that the university should sell snacks and drinks in campus bookstore the campus bookstore (加上定冠词“the”，使句子更通顺). First of all, the bookstore can have a few chairs and tables available. Besides, Moreover, (将“Besides”改为“Moreover”，使过渡更自然) this can be very convenient for hungry students. The woman in the conversation doesn't think this plan will work. First of all, she says that it is easy to spill something on books accidentally and therefore ruin the books. And some of the books are very expensive. Besides, Furthermore, (将“Besides”改为“Furthermore”，使过渡更自然) convenience store in the students the convenience store in the student center (修改表达，使句子更清晰) can sell the same kind of stuff. And convenience store the convenience store (加上定冠词“the”，使句子更通顺) is much closer to academic building the academic buildings (加上定冠词“the”和复数形式，使句子更通顺) than the bookstore. So the students will not go there between classes. So the woman in the conversation disagrees with the idea.

Revised Answer (140 words): In the letter, the student suggests that the university should sell snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore, providing chairs and tables for students' convenience. Moreover, this would be beneficial for hungry students between classes. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal. She believes that it would be easy for students to accidentally spill something on books, potentially ruining expensive textbooks. Furthermore, she points out that there is already a convenience store in the student center that sells similar items and is closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore. Therefore, she argues that students would not visit the bookstore for snacks and drinks between classes. In conclusion, the woman does not support the idea due to concerns about potential damage to books and the existence of a more convenient alternative.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Sell snacks and drinks
  - Campus bookstore
  - Chairs and tables
  - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons:
    - Potential damage to books
    - Existence of a more convenient alternative (convenience store)
      - Student center location
      - Closer to academic buildings

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速适中，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方，发言者的发音可能导致了拼写错误。建议发言者多加练习，提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容条理清晰，观点明确。但在解释原因时，可以更详细地阐述一下，以便让听众更好地理解。建议在练习时尝试提供更多细节和例子来支持观点。

Original: and in the letter suggests that The letter suggests（原文表述不够简洁，建议改为“The letter suggests”） the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. But the woman in the listening part doesn't like this idea, because firstly she says that if campus bookstore provides（动词应与主语保持一致，改为provides） snacks and drinks, students are more likely to spend something on books, which might be really expensive. Secondly, she thinks that it's quite convenient for students to buy snacks and drinks in another campus store, which is really close to the campus bookstore. Besides, the academic building is really far away from the campus bookstore, which means it's difficult for students to buy stuff in the campus bookstore between the classes.

Revised (140 words):

The letter suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. However, the woman in the listening part disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. First, she believes that if the campus bookstore provides snacks and drinks, students might accidentally spill them on books, potentially damaging expensive items. Second, she points out that there is already a convenience store located near the academic buildings where students can easily purchase snacks and drinks between classes. This store is much closer to where students attend classes compared to the campus bookstore, which is situated on the other side of the campus. Therefore, she concludes that adding snacks and drinks to the bookstore would not be as beneficial or practical as suggested in the letter.

6.思维导图

• Letter's suggestion

  • Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

• Woman's disagreement

  • Reason 1: Potential damage to books
  • Reason 2: Convenience store near academic buildings
    • Closer to classes
    • Already selling snacks and drinks

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：2.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：22

3.表达 在回答中，发音大部分清晰，但有些地方需要改进。例如，“the student is write a letter”应该是“the student wrote a letter”。此外，在一些地方，停顿不太自然。建议多加练习，提高口语流利度和准确性。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了所需的信息，但组织和连接可以更清晰。例如，在提到女士的观点时，可以使用更明确的过渡词汇，如“然而”或“尽管如此”。另外，在解释原因时，可以更详细地说明为什么这些原因使得提议不可行。总体来说，需要在组织和连接方面进行改进以使回答更连贯。

原文：the student is write a letter the student wrote a letter（学生写了一封信，这里应该使用过去时态）(学生写了一封信，这里应该使用过去时态) to that campus bookstore should sell some snacks and drinks and give some table and chair for giving the student place to eat and drink. And it's more convenient for the hungry students between the classes. And in the listening material, we can clearly learn that the woman disagrees with that opinion. The first reason she gave is that the problem is that some books are easy to spoiled by the food and the drinks. And some books are very expensive. It is true that the clearly have there is already（已经有，这里应该使用更准确的表达）(已经有，这里应该使用更准确的表达) the shop in the student center where the students could go to there to buy the food. The second reason is based on the fact that the student center is much closer to the education building than the bookstore. So when the students during the classes, they are more likely to go to the student center is that. the student center instead.（学生中心，而不是书店，这里需要更清晰的表达）(学生中心，而不是书店，这里需要更清晰的表达)

修订版（140词）：

The student wrote a letter suggesting that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks, and provide tables and chairs for students to eat and drink. This would be more convenient for hungry students between classes. However, in the listening material, the woman disagrees with this opinion. The first reason she gives is that books could easily be damaged by food and drinks, especially since some books are very expensive. Additionally, there is already a shop in the student center where students can buy food. The second reason is based on the fact that the student center is much closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore. Therefore, during class breaks, students are more likely to go to the student center instead of the bookstore.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Campus bookstore
    - Sell snacks and drinks
    - Provide tables and chairs

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees
    - Reason 1: Book damage
      - Food and drinks spills
      - Expensive books
    - Reason 2: Student center
      - Shop for food
      - Closer to academic buildings

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答相对清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议同学在练习时注意保持语速的稳定，并尽量减少不自然的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上涵盖了所需内容，但在组织结构和连接词方面还有待提高。建议同学在练习时注意使用恰当的连接词来串联各个观点，并尝试使用更多的例子或细节来支持自己的观点。这样可以使回答更加有条理和说服力。

Original: Some people suppose that the school bookshops should sell snacks and drinks for students who are very hungry between the next class. However, in a conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea, because firstly, she believes that if we spill something dirty on the books, those students will be very careless, but these books will be very expensive. Another reason is, the school shop is not near the academic building, in contrast, they actually have a student center to sell snacks for students, it's more convenient for students. That's why the woman disagrees with this perspective.

Corrected: Some people suppose believe that the school bookshops bookstores should sell snacks and drinks for students who are very hungry between the next class hungry between classes. However, in a conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea because firstly, she believes that if we students spill something dirty on the books, those students will be very careless,,;</...

- Proposal
  - School bookstores sell snacks and drinks
  - Convenience for hungry students between classes

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the proposal
  - Reasons for disagreement
    - Risk of damaging books
      - Careless spills
      - Expensive books
    - Location of bookstore
      - Far from academic buildings
      - Student center as a better alternative
        - Closer to classes
        - Already sells snacks and drinks

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高语言流畅度。此外，尽量减少发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 发言者对于问题的回答较为完整，能够简要概括提案，并阐述女士的观点及理由。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化，例如可以先陈述女士的观点，再分别阐述她的两个理由。建议在练习中多关注逻辑结构和论据支持，使回答更加有条理。

Original: Students suggest school bookstores to sell snacks and drinks because they have chairs and tables for students to drink or eat. Also, it is convenient for students who are hungry to have some food before next classes. But the woman dislikes the idea. Firstly, she thinks it is easy to spill out by accident and damage the books, which is expensive. And second, she thinks the student center also sells drinks and snacks, and it is nearly to the building students taking classes. So it is unnecessary for bookstores to sell snacks and drinks.

Corrected: Students suggest The proposal suggests that school bookstores to should sell snacks and drinks because they have chairs and tables for students to drink or eat enjoy them. Also, it is convenient for students who are hungry to have some food before next classes their next class. But the woman dislikes the idea. Firstly, she thinks it is easy to spill out by accident and damage the books, which is are expensive. And second,ly, she thinks the student center also sells drinks and snacks, and it is nearly closer to the buildings students taking classes where students have their classes. So it is unnecessary for bookstores to sell snacks and drinks.

(建议将“Students suggest”改为“The proposal suggests that”，以使句子更自然。将“to”改为“should”，以修正语法错误。将“drink or eat”改为“enjoy them”，使表达更地道。将“next classes”改为“their next class”，使句子更准确。将“is”改为“are”，以修正语法错误。在“second”后加上“ly”，使其与前面的“firstly”保持一致。将“nearly”改为“closer”，以提高准确性。将“students taking classes”的表述改为“where students have their classes”，使句子更自然。)

Revised (140 words): The proposal suggests that school bookstores should sell snacks and drinks, as they have chairs and tables for students to enjoy them. This would be convenient for hungry students who want to grab a quick bite before their next class. However, the woman disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. First, she believes that accidents could easily occur, leading to spills that could damage the expensive books in the store. Secondly, she points out that the student center already offers drinks and snacks and is closer to the buildings where students have their classes. Therefore, she concludes that it is unnecessary for bookstores to sell snacks and drinks since there are already suitable alternatives available on campus.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - School bookstores selling snacks and drinks
  - Chairs and tables for students
  - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the proposal
  - Reasons
    - Accidental spills damaging expensive books
    - Student center already offers snacks and drinks
    - Closer to academic buildings

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体而言，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言流畅性。此外，尽量减少发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的发展，提供了一定程度的支持和例证。然而，在解释女士反对提议的原因时，可以更详细地说明她的观点。例如，在提到学生中心与教学楼之间的距离时，可以进一步阐述这对学生在课间选择购买食物的影响。此外，在总结女士的观点时，可以使用更多连接词来增强语句之间的连贯性。

Original: In this letter, a student proposed that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. The woman in the conversation, however, didn't think this proposal is a good idea. First, it's easy to spoil something on the books if the students are drinking or eating while they are reading. So the books will get rained and some of those books are very expensive. Second, she said that there is already a convenience store in the student center and sells the same stuff mentioned in the proposal. And the student center is much closer to the academic buildings. But the bookstore is very far away from the buildings where students go to the classes. So the woman thinks that students won't go there between the classes and grab something to eat. Therefore, the woman disagrees with the proposal what the student proposed in the lecture.

Corrected: In this letter, a student proposed that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. The woman in the conversation, however, didn't think this proposal is was (使用过去时，因为这是对已发生的对话的描述) a good idea. First, it's easy to spoil spill (拼写错误，应为“spill”） something on the books if students are drinking or eating while they are reading. So, the books will get rained the books could get damaged, (更自然的表达方式，避免使用“rained”） and some of those books are very expensive. Second, she said that there is already a convenience store in the student center and sells that sells (添加“that”以使句子更清晰） the same stuff mentioned in the proposal. And the student center is much closer to the academic buildings. But However, (使用“however”以增强语句之间的连贯性） the bookstore is very far away from the buildings where students go to the classes. So, the woman thinks that students won't go there between classes and grab something to eat. Therefore, the woman disagrees with the proposal what that (使用“that”以使句子更清晰） the student proposed in the lecture.

Revised (140 words): In this letter, a student proposed that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. The woman in the conversation, however, didn't think this proposal was a good idea. First, it's easy to spill something on the books if students are drinking or eating while they are reading. As a result, the books could get damaged, and some of those books are very expensive. Second, she mentioned that there is already a convenience store in the student center that sells the same items as proposed. Moreover, the student center is much closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore. Therefore, she believes that students won't go to the bookstore between classes to grab something to eat. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with the proposal that the student presented in the lecture.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

- Woman's opinion
    - Disagrees with the proposal

- Reasons
    - Risk of damaging books
        - Spilling drinks or food
        - Expensive books
    - Existing convenience store
        - Student center location
        - Closer to academic buildings
    - Bookstore location
        - Far from classes
        - Less likely for students to visit between classes

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 2 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 15

3.表达 在发音方面，您需要注意一些词汇的正确发音，例如“sorcerize”应该是“sell”，“snakes”应该是“snacks”，“fools”应该是“foods”。此外，请确保在讲话中保持一致的语速和适当的停顿。为了提高发音，请多练习并尝试模仿母语者的发音。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，您需要更清晰地总结提案和女性的观点。例如，您可以说：“提案建议在校园书店出售零食和饮料，以便学生在课间休息时购买。然而，女性认为这个想法行不通，因为可能会弄脏昂贵的书籍，并且学生中心更靠近教学楼，所以学生不太可能在课间去书店。”请确保您的回答紧密围绕主题，并提供足够的支持或例子。

Original Answer: In the passage, the student asks the university to sorcerize some snakes or drinks in the library, as some students can have some snakes between class. In the passage, the student suggests that the university should sell snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore, as students may want to have snacks between classes. (原文中的“sorcerize”应改为“sell”，“snakes”应改为“snacks”，“library”应改为“campus bookstore”。这些更改使句子更符合原文意思。)

However, the woman thinks it does not work well. However, the woman believes this idea would not be effective. (使用“believes”和“would not be effective”使句子更自然。)

Firstly, it is easy to make the books dirty as fools, Firstly, it would be easy for books to get dirty from food, (将“fools”改为“food”，并调整句子结构使其更自然。)

and the books are very expensive. and these books can be quite expensive. (使用“can be quite expensive”使句子更自然。)

Secondly, the student will go to the area near the classroom instead of the library, Secondly, students would prefer going to the area near the classrooms rather than the bookstore, (将“library”改为“bookstore”，并调整句子结构使其更自然。)

because the library is very far from the classroom. because the bookstore is located far from the classrooms. (将“library”改为“bookstore”，并调整句子结构使其更自然。)

So the woman disagrees with the proposal that sorcerize fools in the library. Therefore, the woman disagrees with the proposal to sell food in the bookstore. (将“sorcerize fools”改为“sell food”，并将“library”改为“bookstore”，使句子更符合原文意思。)

Revised Answer (140 words): In the passage, the student suggests that the university should sell snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore, as students may want to have snacks between classes. However, the woman believes this idea would not be effective. Firstly, it would be easy for books to get dirty from food, and these books can be quite expensive. Secondly, students would prefer going to the area near the classrooms rather than the bookstore, because the bookstore is located far from the classrooms. Therefore, the woman disagrees with the proposal to sell food in the bookstore.

6.思维导图

- Passage
  - Suggestion: Sell snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore
  - Reason: Students may want snacks between classes

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the proposal
  - Reasons:
    - Books could get dirty from food, expensive books
    - Students prefer going to the area near classrooms, bookstore far from classrooms

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 2.5 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从发音的角度来看，这个回答还有一些需要改进的地方。例如，有时候发音不够准确，导致了拼写错误。建议在练习发音时多加注意，尤其是在模仿地道英语发音时。此外，适当地控制语速和减少不必要的停顿也会使表达更加流畅。

4.话题发展 回答中提到了女生对提议的反对意见及原因，但在组织结构上还有待改进。首先，在总结提议时，应简洁明了地描述提议内容。其次，在陈述女生的观点时，需要避免重复相同的观点。例如，关于便利店的观点被重复了两次。最后，在陈述原因时，应保持条理清晰，并为每个原因提供足够的支持或例子。

Original: A student proposes that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. The campus bookstore is proposed to sell snacks and drinks by a student. (学生建议校园书店应该出售零食和饮料。这里的句子结构进行了调整，使其更符合英语表达习惯。)

The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal for three reasons. The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal and provides three reasons. (对话中的女生不同意这个提议，并提供了三个原因。这里的句子结构进行了调整，使其更符合英语表达习惯。)

Firstly, she says there might be some problems with these books. Firstly, she mentions potential issues with the books. (首先，她提到了这些书可能存在的问题。这里的词汇进行了调整，使其更自然。)

Even though students are careful, they will still spill something on books accidentally. Even if students are careful, they might still accidentally spill something on the books. (即使学生小心，他们仍然可能不小心把东西洒在书上。这里的句子结构进行了调整，使其更符合英语表达习惯。)

So these expensive books will get destroyed. As a result, these expensive books could be damaged. (因此，这些昂贵的书可能会被损坏。这里的词汇进行了调整，使其更自然。)

Secondly, she thinks there is already a convenient store in student center which sells the same stuff. Secondly, she points out that there is already a convenience store in the student center selling the same items. (其次，她指出学生中心已经有一个便利店在出售相同的物品。这里的词汇进行了调整，使其更自然。)

And they are much closer to academic buildings. This store is much closer to the academic buildings. (这家店离教学楼更近。这里的句子结构进行了调整，使其更符合英语表达习惯。)

However, the campus bookstore is on the other way of the campus, and they are not closer to the building students taking classes. However, the campus bookstore is on the other side of the campus and not close to the buildings where students have classes. (然而，校园书店位于校园的另一侧，并且离上课的教学楼不近。这里的句子结构进行了调整，使其更符合英语表达习惯。)

So students won't buy snacks and drinks between classes there. Thus, students are unlikely to buy snacks and drinks there between classes. (因此，学生在课间不太可能在那里购买零食和饮料。这里的词汇进行了调整，使其更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The campus bookstore is proposed to sell snacks and drinks by a student. The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal and provides three reasons. Firstly, she mentions potential issues with the books. Even if students are careful, they might still accidentally spill something on the books. As a result, these expensive books could be damaged. Secondly, she points out that there is already a convenience store in the student center selling the same items. This store is much closer to the academic buildings. However, the campus bookstore is on the other side of the campus and not close to the buildings where students have classes. Thus, students are unlikely to buy snacks and drinks there between

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

- Woman's opinion
    - Disagrees with the proposal

- Reasons
    - Potential issues with books
        - Accidental spills, damaged books
    - Convenience store in student center
        - Sells the same items, closer to academic buildings
    - Campus bookstore location
        - Not close to class buildings, students unlikely to buy snacks and drinks between classes

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍微改进。为了提高发音，请多加练习，尤其是在可能出现问题的单词上。此外，注意保持语速一致，避免不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织良好，观点清晰明确。你成功地总结了提议，并说明了女士对此提议的看法及其理由。为了进一步完善回答，可以尝试在解释理由时提供更多详细信息或例子。总体而言，这是一个很好的回答。

原文：Some people propose that the school compact bookstore should sell drinks and snacks for students who are hungry between classes. Some people propose that the campus bookstore should sell drinks and snacks for students who are hungry between classes.（将"school compact bookstore"改为"campus bookstore"，使表达更自然。）

原文：However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons.（将"idea"改为"proposal"，与问题描述保持一致。）

原文：First, she believes that, though students may be careful, it would be easy for food and drinks to spill on the books, potentially damaging expensive items. First, she believes that even though students may be careful, it would be easy for food and drinks to spill on the books, potentially damaging expensive items.（将"though"改为"even though"，使表达更自然。）

原文：The second reason is that there is a radio student center selling food for students, The second reason is that there is a student center selling food for students,（删除“radio”，使表达更准确。）

原文：which is closer to the academic building than the bookstore. which is closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore.（将“building”改为“buildings”，使表达更自然。）

原文：As a result, the bookstore's location is not convenient for students to visit between classes. As a result, the bookstore's location is not convenient for students to visit between classes.（无需修改。）

原文：These are the reasons why the woman disagrees with this proposal. These are the reasons why the woman disagrees with this proposal.（无需修改。）

修订版（140字）：

Some people propose that the campus bookstore should sell drinks and snacks for students who are hungry between classes. However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. First, she believes that even though students may be careful, it would be easy for food and drinks to spill on the books, potentially damaging expensive items. The second reason is that there is a student center selling food for students, which is closer to the academic buildings than the bookstore. As a result, the bookstore's location is not convenient for students to visit between classes. These are the reasons why the woman disagrees with this proposal.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Campus bookstore
        - Sell drinks and snacks

- Woman's opinion
    - Disagrees
        - Reason 1: Potential damage to books
            - Spills from food and drinks
        - Reason 2: Student center
            - Closer to academic buildings
            - Sells food for students

7.关键词