TOEFL TPO 37 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，标点符号的使用不当可能导致了不恰当的停顿。拼写错误可能是发音不准确的结果。建议发言者在练习发音时多加注意，以提高口语表达的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，观点之间关系明确，举例和论证也较为充分。但仍有改进空间，建议在练习时尝试更多地关注论点之间的逻辑关系，并在论证过程中给出更多具体例子以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: In the lecture, the student stress refers to cancelling the room phone since they believe that it is unnecessary. In the reading passage, the author suggests removing room phones because they are deemed unnecessary. (将“lecture”改为“reading passage”，将“student stress”改为“author”，将“cancelling”改为“removing”，以更准确地描述原文内容。)

Original: First, students all use their mobile phones to make calls, so that can be cancelled. Firstly, since all students use their mobile phones for calls, room phones can be eliminated. (将“First”改为“Firstly”，将“cancelled”改为“eliminated”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: Second, the student believes that cancelling the room phone can help students have cost benefits. Secondly, the author argues that removing room phones would result in cost savings for students. (将“student”改为“author”，将“cancelling”改为“removing”，将“have cost benefits”改为“result in cost savings”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this plan. In the listening part, the woman disagrees with this proposal. (将“conversation”改为“listening part”，将“plan”改为“proposal”，以更准确地描述原文内容。)

Original: She believes that it is good to have both ways since it is more reliable for students to use the room phone to have a call. She believes that having both options is beneficial as room phones provide a more reliable means of communication for students. (将“both ways”改为“both options”，将“to use the room phone to have a call”改为“room phones provide a more reliable means of communication”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: And also, sometimes the reputation is not so good and then the room phones can be a good backup for the students. Additionally, when mobile phone reception is poor, room phones serve as a reliable backup for students. (将“reputation”改为“reception”，将“not so good”改为“poor”，将“and then”删除，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: Second, she believes that students do not need to pay so much money for the phone call since they do not need to pay for the house bill. Furthermore, she contends that students don't need to spend much on phone calls as they only pay per call on their housing bill. (将“house bill”改为“housing bill”，将“so much money”改为“much”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading passage, the author suggests removing room phones because they are deemed unnecessary. Firstly, since all students use their mobile phones for calls, room phones can be eliminated. Secondly, the author argues that removing room phones would result in cost savings for students. In the listening part, the woman disagrees with this proposal. She believes that having both options is beneficial as room phones provide a more reliable means of communication for students. Additionally, when mobile phone reception is poor, room phones serve as a reliable backup for students. Furthermore, she contends that students don't need to spend much on phone calls as they only pay per call on their housing bill.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
    - Remove room phones
        - Unnecessary
        - Cost savings

- Listening Part
    - Woman's opinion
        - Disagrees with proposal
        - Both options beneficial
            - Reliable communication
            - Backup when reception is poor
        - Cost not an issue
            - Pay per call on housing bill

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，回答的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方还有改进的空间。建议在发音方面多加练习，尤其是在一些单词的发音上要更加准确。此外，在语速和停顿方面也需要注意，尽量保持语速的稳定，并适当减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答在话题发展方面做得很好，内容组织清晰，观点之间的联系明确。回答中提到了女生对提议的看法以及她给出的两个理由。这些内容都与题目要求紧密相关，足以支持女生的观点。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

Original: The student in the letter proposes that the university should remove the phones from students' rooms. The student in the letter suggests that the university remove phones from students' rooms.（建议使用suggest替换proposes，使语言更自然。）

However, the woman in the lesson disagrees with this idea for two reasons. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation opposes this idea for two reasons.（使用Nonetheless替换However，使句子更连贯；使用conversation替换lesson，更符合场景。）

The first reason is that it's good for students to have both their personal phones and dorm phones. The first reason is that having both personal phones and dorm phones is beneficial for students.（调整句子结构，使其更清晰。）

Sometimes the personal phones are just not reliable. At times, personal phones may be unreliable.（使用At times替换Sometimes，使语言更自然；调整句子结构，使其更简洁。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student in the letter suggests that the university remove phones from students' rooms. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation opposes this idea for two reasons. The first reason is that having both personal phones and dorm phones is beneficial for students. At times, personal phones may be unreliable due to poor reception caused by hills in the area, leading to dropped calls or unclear conversations. Therefore, having a backup option like dorm phones is essential. The second reason is that students don't have to pay a significant amount for dorm phones, as they are charged per call. By controlling the number of calls made through room phones, students can avoid high costs. In conclusion, the woman believes that it is better to maintain the current system with both personal and dorm phones available for students.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter suggestion: remove phones from students' rooms
  - Woman's opposition

- Reason 1: Benefits of having both personal and dorm phones
  - Unreliable personal phones
    - Poor reception due to hills
    - Dropped calls, unclear conversations
  - Backup option: dorm phones

- Reason 2: Cost of dorm phones not significant
  - Charged per call
  - Control number of calls to avoid high costs

- Conclusion
  - Maintain current system with both personal and dorm phones available for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较快，间歇较多。建议发言者注意语速的控制，尽量保持稳定的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在发音方面也存在一些问题，需要注意提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于女士的观点进行了总结，并给出了她的理由。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议发言者在陈述女士观点时，先概括提案内容，然后再陈述女士的观点和理由。同时，在给出理由时，可以适当加入一些连接词，使句子更加连贯。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, the students suppose that the university should stop the room phones and think it's not necessary for every student, because every student has mobile phones, and it will save students a lot of money if they don't pay for the survival. The students suggest that the university should remove the room phones, as they believe it is unnecessary for each student since everyone has mobile phones, and it would save them money if they didn't have to pay for this service.（将“suppose”改为“suggest”，更符合语境；将“stop”改为“remove”，更准确表达意思；将“for every student”改为“for each student”，使句子更通顺；将“survival”改为“service”，表达更准确。）

But the woman doesn't agree with these ideas. However, the woman disagrees with these points.（使用“However”替换“But”，使句子更连贯；使用“points”替换“ideas”，使语言更自然。）

Firstly, he thinks that both of the choices are very good, and always the reception of their phones are not very good. Firstly, she believes that having both options is beneficial because their mobile phone reception is often poor.（将“he”改为“she”，修正性别错误；简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

If they have the backup opportunity, the room phone is very suitable. Having a room phone as a backup option is quite suitable in such cases.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

Besides, the students always pay for the money every call. Moreover, students currently pay per call for the room phone service.（使用“Moreover”替换“Besides”，使句子更连贯；简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

If they call a lot, they will pay a lot too. If they make many calls, their expenses will increase accordingly.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

And the students not always to use the room phones as much as possible. Students can also choose to limit their use of room phones to control costs.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The students suggest that the university should remove the room phones, as they believe it is unnecessary for each student since everyone has mobile phones, and it would save them money if they didn't have to pay for this service. However, the woman disagrees with these points. Firstly, she believes that having both options is beneficial because their mobile phone reception is often poor. Having a room phone as a backup option is quite suitable in such cases. Moreover, students currently pay per call for the room phone service. If they make many calls, their expenses will increase accordingly. Students can also choose to limit their use of room phones to control costs.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Remove room phones
  • Unnecessary
  • Save money

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees
  • Reasons
    • Poor mobile reception
    • Backup option
    • Pay per call

7.关键词