TOEFL TPO 37 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，标点符号的使用不当可能导致了不恰当的停顿。拼写错误可能是发音不准确的结果。建议发言者在练习发音时多加注意，以提高口语表达的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，观点之间关系明确，举例和论证也较为充分。但仍有改进空间，建议在练习时尝试更多地关注论点之间的逻辑关系，并在论证过程中给出更多具体例子以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: In the lecture, the student stress refers to cancelling the room phone since they believe that it is unnecessary. In the reading passage, the author suggests removing room phones because they are deemed unnecessary. (将“lecture”改为“reading passage”，将“student stress”改为“author”，将“cancelling”改为“removing”，以更准确地描述原文内容。)

Original: First, students all use their mobile phones to make calls, so that can be cancelled. Firstly, since all students use their mobile phones for calls, room phones can be eliminated. (将“First”改为“Firstly”，将“cancelled”改为“eliminated”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: Second, the student believes that cancelling the room phone can help students have cost benefits. Secondly, the author argues that removing room phones would result in cost savings for students. (将“student”改为“author”，将“cancelling”改为“removing”，将“have cost benefits”改为“result in cost savings”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this plan. In the listening part, the woman disagrees with this proposal. (将“conversation”改为“listening part”，将“plan”改为“proposal”，以更准确地描述原文内容。)

Original: She believes that it is good to have both ways since it is more reliable for students to use the room phone to have a call. She believes that having both options is beneficial as room phones provide a more reliable means of communication for students. (将“both ways”改为“both options”，将“to use the room phone to have a call”改为“room phones provide a more reliable means of communication”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: And also, sometimes the reputation is not so good and then the room phones can be a good backup for the students. Additionally, when mobile phone reception is poor, room phones serve as a reliable backup for students. (将“reputation”改为“reception”，将“not so good”改为“poor”，将“and then”删除，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: Second, she believes that students do not need to pay so much money for the phone call since they do not need to pay for the house bill. Furthermore, she contends that students don't need to spend much on phone calls as they only pay per call on their housing bill. (将“house bill”改为“housing bill”，将“so much money”改为“much”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading passage, the author suggests removing room phones because they are deemed unnecessary. Firstly, since all students use their mobile phones for calls, room phones can be eliminated. Secondly, the author argues that removing room phones would result in cost savings for students. In the listening part, the woman disagrees with this proposal. She believes that having both options is beneficial as room phones provide a more reliable means of communication for students. Additionally, when mobile phone reception is poor, room phones serve as a reliable backup for students. Furthermore, she contends that students don't need to spend much on phone calls as they only pay per call on their housing bill.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
    - Remove room phones
        - Unnecessary
        - Cost savings

- Listening Part
    - Woman's opinion
        - Disagrees with proposal
        - Both options beneficial
            - Reliable communication
            - Backup when reception is poor
        - Cost not an issue
            - Pay per call on housing bill

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor pronunciation issues that need to be addressed. For example, "dumb phone service" should be "room phone service" and "latter" should be "letter." To improve, the speaker should practice pronouncing words more accurately and focus on enunciating each word clearly.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, summarizing the proposal and stating the woman's opinion about it. The reasons for her opinion are also explained. However, the response could be improved by providing more specific examples from the listening passage to support the woman's arguments. Additionally, the speaker should avoid repeating phrases like "the latter stressed" and instead use a variety of expressions to convey the same idea. Overall, focusing on incorporating more details from the listening passage and using a wider range of expressions will help improve topic development.

5.Language Use

Original: The latter stressed that the university should remove dumb phone service. The letter suggested that the university should remove room phone service. (Corrected "latter" to "letter" and "dumb" to "room" for accurate meaning) Original: First, the latter stressed that students all have mobile phones and they can use cars instead of dumb phone service. First, the letter emphasized that students all have mobile phones and can use them instead of room phone service. (Corrected "latter" to "letter", "cars" to "them", and "dumb" to "room" for proper context) Original: However, the woman argues that mobile phones is not reliable as they are easily get cut off, making it difficult for them to hear on the other line. However, the woman argues that mobile phones are not reliable because they can easily get cut off, making it difficult to hear on the other line. (Corrected grammar and sentence structure for clarity) Original: Dumb phone service provides a backup option when mobile phone doesn't work. Room phone service provides a backup option when a mobile phone doesn't work. (Corrected "dumb" to "room" for accurate meaning) Original: Second, the latter says that it will impose a high cost for students. Second, the letter claims that it will result in cost savings for students. (Corrected "latter" to "letter" and rephrased for accurate meaning) Original: The woman argues that students will only pay per call as they will afford high cost if they use less dumb phone service. The woman argues that students only pay per call, so they can avoid high costs by using room phone service less frequently. (Corrected "dumb" to "room" and rephrased for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): The letter suggested that the university should remove room phone service. First, the letter emphasized that students all have mobile phones and can use them instead of room phone service. However, the woman argues that mobile phones are not reliable because they can easily get cut off, making it difficult to hear on the other line. Room phone service provides a backup option when a mobile phone doesn't work. Second, the letter claims that it will result in cost savings for students. The woman argues that students only pay per call, so they can avoid high costs by using room phone service less frequently. Overall, the woman disagrees with the proposal due to concerns about mobile phone reliability and believes that keeping room phone service as a backup option is beneficial for students.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Remove room phone service
  - Reasons
    - Students have mobile phones
    - Cost savings

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons
    - Mobile phone reliability issues
      - Calls get cut off
      - Poor reception
    - Room phone service as backup option
  - Cost argument refuted
    - Pay per call system
    - Control costs by using less frequently

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较快，间歇较多。建议发言者注意语速的控制，尽量保持稳定的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在发音方面也存在一些问题，需要注意提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于女士的观点进行了总结，并给出了她的理由。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议发言者在陈述女士观点时，先概括提案内容，然后再陈述女士的观点和理由。同时，在给出理由时，可以适当加入一些连接词，使句子更加连贯。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, the students suppose that the university should stop the room phones and think it's not necessary for every student, because every student has mobile phones, and it will save students a lot of money if they don't pay for the survival. The students suggest that the university should remove the room phones, as they believe it is unnecessary for each student since everyone has mobile phones, and it would save them money if they didn't have to pay for this service.（将“suppose”改为“suggest”，更符合语境；将“stop”改为“remove”，更准确表达意思；将“for every student”改为“for each student”，使句子更通顺；将“survival”改为“service”，表达更准确。）

But the woman doesn't agree with these ideas. However, the woman disagrees with these points.（使用“However”替换“But”，使句子更连贯；使用“points”替换“ideas”，使语言更自然。）

Firstly, he thinks that both of the choices are very good, and always the reception of their phones are not very good. Firstly, she believes that having both options is beneficial because their mobile phone reception is often poor.（将“he”改为“she”，修正性别错误；简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

If they have the backup opportunity, the room phone is very suitable. Having a room phone as a backup option is quite suitable in such cases.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

Besides, the students always pay for the money every call. Moreover, students currently pay per call for the room phone service.（使用“Moreover”替换“Besides”，使句子更连贯；简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

If they call a lot, they will pay a lot too. If they make many calls, their expenses will increase accordingly.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

And the students not always to use the room phones as much as possible. Students can also choose to limit their use of room phones to control costs.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The students suggest that the university should remove the room phones, as they believe it is unnecessary for each student since everyone has mobile phones, and it would save them money if they didn't have to pay for this service. However, the woman disagrees with these points. Firstly, she believes that having both options is beneficial because their mobile phone reception is often poor. Having a room phone as a backup option is quite suitable in such cases. Moreover, students currently pay per call for the room phone service. If they make many calls, their expenses will increase accordingly. Students can also choose to limit their use of room phones to control costs.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Remove room phones
  • Unnecessary
  • Save money

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees
  • Reasons
    • Poor mobile reception
    • Backup option
    • Pay per call

7.关键词