TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample:

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could use some improvement. The speech is not very fluid, and there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. Additionally, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more fluidly and work on their pacing to reduce unnecessary pauses. Pronunciation should also be focused on to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4.Topic Development The topic development in the response needs improvement as well. The speaker does provide some reasons for the woman's disagreement with the proposal, but the connections between ideas are not very clear, and there is a lack of sufficient support or examples. To enhance topic development, the speaker should work on creating a more coherent and well-organized response by clearly connecting ideas and providing more support or examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The letter writer proposed that sports should be banned from law in front of the glass of the dining hall. The author of the letter proposed banning sports on the lawn in front of the glass windows of the dining hall. (Changed "letter writer" to "author of the letter" and rephrased for clarity) But the woman disagrees with this proposal. However, the woman opposes this idea. (Changed "disagrees" to "opposes" for better vocabulary) She thinks that's not helpful and she's not sure that it will accomplish anything. She believes it is unhelpful and doubts its effectiveness. (Rephrased for better sentence structure and vocabulary)

Revised Answer (140 words): The author of the letter proposed banning sports on the lawn in front of the glass windows of the dining hall. However, the woman opposes this idea. She believes it is unhelpful and doubts its effectiveness. Here are some reasons: First, everyone crosses the lawn every day because it is centrally located. So, even if students are not allowed to play sports on the lawn, they would still cause damage to it. Additionally, foot traffic between classes is quite busy, forcing students in a hurry to walk on the lawn instead of using sidewalks. Lastly, gyms and fields are situated at the edge of campus, making it inconvenient for students to engage in quick sports activities between classes.

6.Mind Map

- Author's proposal
  - Ban sports on lawn
  - Dining hall glass windows

- Woman's opposition
  - Unhelpful
  - Doubts effectiveness

- Reasons
  - Central location of lawn
    - Damage from foot traffic
  - Busy foot traffic between classes
    - Students walking on lawn instead of sidewalks
  - Gyms and fields at campus edge
    - Inconvenient for quick sports activities between classes

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

22. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。但是，发言者在一些地方使用了不恰当的词汇，如“drunk food”应为“junk food”。此外，发言者在发音方面也存在一定的问题，如将“hurt”发音为“heart”。建议发言者在练习口语时注意词汇的准确性和发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于阅读材料和听力材料的观点进行了总结，并给出了两个原因来支持男生的观点。然而，在论述过程中，发言者没有充分展开论述，使得论点显得略显简单。建议发言者在练习时尝试更深入地阐述论点，并在适当的地方加入例子或具体细节以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter proposed that schools should stop serving drunk junk ("drunk" 改为 "junk"，因为这里讨论的是垃圾食品而不是醉酒) food in the dining hall because it can help students more become (删除 "more"，添加 "become"，使句子更通顺) healthier and help them save money. The man in the conversation disagreed with the proposal. Firstly, he thinks many people are healthier. Eating drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food occasionally will not cause some bad influence. For example, at the end of the semester, when students finish paper their papers (将 "paper" 改为 "their papers"，使句子更通顺且表达更清晰) and study, it will be very nice to have some drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food. And secondly, if the school closes the drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food serving, students have to buy the drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food out of the campus, which is more expensive, so the students will cost more. As you can see, those are two reasons why the man in the conversation disagreed with the proposal.

Revised (140 words): The letter proposed that schools should stop serving junk food in the dining hall because it can help students become healthier and save money. The man in the conversation disagreed with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, he believes that many people are already healthy, and consuming junk food occasionally will not have a significant negative impact on their health. For instance, at the end of the semester, when students are busy finishing their papers and studying, it would be enjoyable to have some junk food as a treat. Secondly, if the school stops offering junk food, students would have to buy it off-campus, which is more expensive. Consequently, this would lead to increased expenses for students rather than saving money. These are the two reasons why the man in the conversation disagreed with Mary's proposal.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter's proposal
  - Man's disagreement

- Reason 1
  - Occasional junk food consumption
  - End of semester example

- Reason 2
  - Off-campus purchases
  - Increased expenses

- Conclusion
  - Two reasons for disagreement

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses and some punctuation problems. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or support to strengthen their argument. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their points and providing more detailed explanations or examples to better support their ideas.

5.Language Use

In the listening, they disagree discuss ("disagree" is not incorrect, but "discuss" is more accurate and natural) with the student's suggestion about the professor's evaluations for two reasons. First of all, even the student's suggestion believes that teachers or professors can be motivated to improve more teaching skills through the available teaching evaluations. However, the girls in the listening argue that teachers would be unhappy because they think their teaching styles are being published posted ("posted" is more appropriate for online content) on the Internet. By the way, they will not be changed or browsed because they think there are so many negative criticisms on the Internet about the evaluations. So nothing happened will change (use future tense to match context). And the second reason is the suggestions believe that it's beneficial for prospective students because they can get more information and make a more informed decision about which class to take. However, the girls disprove that the students who finish these evaluations are at the end of the class and they are hard to leave in a hurry to leave (clarifies meaning). So the evaluations are unspecific, unhelpful, and unuseful.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the listening, two students discuss a suggestion regarding professor evaluations. The first reason for their disagreement is that although the suggestion posits that professors can improve their teaching skills through evaluations, the students argue that professors would be unhappy with their teaching styles being posted online. They believe that professors might not read or be influenced by these evaluations due to negative criticism, so nothing will change. The second reason is that while the suggestion claims it's beneficial for prospective students to make informed decisions about classes, the students counter that those who complete evaluations are often in a hurry to leave at the end of class. As a result, the evaluations tend to be unspecific and unhelpful, rendering them ineffective for both professors and future students.

6.Mind Map

- Listening
  - Discussion
  - Professor evaluations

- Disagreement Reasons
  - Unhappy professors
    - Teaching styles posted online
    - Negative criticism
  - Ineffective evaluations
    - Students in a hurry to leave
    - Unspecific and unhelpful feedback

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of discussion points
  - Conclusion on ineffectiveness of evaluations

7.Key Words