TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample:

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could use some improvement. The speech is not very fluid, and there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. Additionally, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more fluidly and work on their pacing to reduce unnecessary pauses. Pronunciation should also be focused on to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4.Topic Development The topic development in the response needs improvement as well. The speaker does provide some reasons for the woman's disagreement with the proposal, but the connections between ideas are not very clear, and there is a lack of sufficient support or examples. To enhance topic development, the speaker should work on creating a more coherent and well-organized response by clearly connecting ideas and providing more support or examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The letter writer proposed that sports should be banned from law in front of the glass of the dining hall. The author of the letter proposed banning sports on the lawn in front of the glass windows of the dining hall. (Changed "letter writer" to "author of the letter" and rephrased for clarity) But the woman disagrees with this proposal. However, the woman opposes this idea. (Changed "disagrees" to "opposes" for better vocabulary) She thinks that's not helpful and she's not sure that it will accomplish anything. She believes it is unhelpful and doubts its effectiveness. (Rephrased for better sentence structure and vocabulary)

Revised Answer (140 words): The author of the letter proposed banning sports on the lawn in front of the glass windows of the dining hall. However, the woman opposes this idea. She believes it is unhelpful and doubts its effectiveness. Here are some reasons: First, everyone crosses the lawn every day because it is centrally located. So, even if students are not allowed to play sports on the lawn, they would still cause damage to it. Additionally, foot traffic between classes is quite busy, forcing students in a hurry to walk on the lawn instead of using sidewalks. Lastly, gyms and fields are situated at the edge of campus, making it inconvenient for students to engage in quick sports activities between classes.

6.Mind Map

- Author's proposal
  - Ban sports on lawn
  - Dining hall glass windows

- Woman's opposition
  - Unhelpful
  - Doubts effectiveness

- Reasons
  - Central location of lawn
    - Damage from foot traffic
  - Busy foot traffic between classes
    - Students walking on lawn instead of sidewalks
  - Gyms and fields at campus edge
    - Inconvenient for quick sports activities between classes

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

22. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。但是，发言者在一些地方使用了不恰当的词汇，如“drunk food”应为“junk food”。此外，发言者在发音方面也存在一定的问题，如将“hurt”发音为“heart”。建议发言者在练习口语时注意词汇的准确性和发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于阅读材料和听力材料的观点进行了总结，并给出了两个原因来支持男生的观点。然而，在论述过程中，发言者没有充分展开论述，使得论点显得略显简单。建议发言者在练习时尝试更深入地阐述论点，并在适当的地方加入例子或具体细节以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter proposed that schools should stop serving drunk junk ("drunk" 改为 "junk"，因为这里讨论的是垃圾食品而不是醉酒) food in the dining hall because it can help students more become (删除 "more"，添加 "become"，使句子更通顺) healthier and help them save money. The man in the conversation disagreed with the proposal. Firstly, he thinks many people are healthier. Eating drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food occasionally will not cause some bad influence. For example, at the end of the semester, when students finish paper their papers (将 "paper" 改为 "their papers"，使句子更通顺且表达更清晰) and study, it will be very nice to have some drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food. And secondly, if the school closes the drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food serving, students have to buy the drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food out of the campus, which is more expensive, so the students will cost more. As you can see, those are two reasons why the man in the conversation disagreed with the proposal.

Revised (140 words): The letter proposed that schools should stop serving junk food in the dining hall because it can help students become healthier and save money. The man in the conversation disagreed with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, he believes that many people are already healthy, and consuming junk food occasionally will not have a significant negative impact on their health. For instance, at the end of the semester, when students are busy finishing their papers and studying, it would be enjoyable to have some junk food as a treat. Secondly, if the school stops offering junk food, students would have to buy it off-campus, which is more expensive. Consequently, this would lead to increased expenses for students rather than saving money. These are the two reasons why the man in the conversation disagreed with Mary's proposal.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter's proposal
  - Man's disagreement

- Reason 1
  - Occasional junk food consumption
  - End of semester example

- Reason 2
  - Off-campus purchases
  - Increased expenses

- Conclusion
  - Two reasons for disagreement

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses and some punctuation problems. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or support to strengthen their argument. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their points and providing more detailed explanations or examples to better support their ideas.

5.Language Use

In the listening, they disagree discuss ("disagree" is not incorrect, but "discuss" is more accurate and natural) with the student's suggestion about the professor's evaluations for two reasons. First of all, even the student's suggestion believes that teachers or professors can be motivated to improve more teaching skills through the available teaching evaluations. However, the girls in the listening argue that teachers would be unhappy because they think their teaching styles are being published posted ("posted" is more appropriate for online content) on the Internet. By the way, they will not be changed or browsed because they think there are so many negative criticisms on the Internet about the evaluations. So nothing happened will change (use future tense to match context). And the second reason is the suggestions believe that it's beneficial for prospective students because they can get more information and make a more informed decision about which class to take. However, the girls disprove that the students who finish these evaluations are at the end of the class and they are hard to leave in a hurry to leave (clarifies meaning). So the evaluations are unspecific, unhelpful, and unuseful.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the listening, two students discuss a suggestion regarding professor evaluations. The first reason for their disagreement is that although the suggestion posits that professors can improve their teaching skills through evaluations, the students argue that professors would be unhappy with their teaching styles being posted online. They believe that professors might not read or be influenced by these evaluations due to negative criticism, so nothing will change. The second reason is that while the suggestion claims it's beneficial for prospective students to make informed decisions about classes, the students counter that those who complete evaluations are often in a hurry to leave at the end of class. As a result, the evaluations tend to be unspecific and unhelpful, rendering them ineffective for both professors and future students.

6.Mind Map

- Listening
  - Discussion
  - Professor evaluations

- Disagreement Reasons
  - Unhappy professors
    - Teaching styles posted online
    - Negative criticism
  - Ineffective evaluations
    - Students in a hurry to leave
    - Unspecific and unhelpful feedback

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of discussion points
  - Conclusion on ineffectiveness of evaluations

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3.5

• Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

• 26

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。建议练习更流畅的发音和自然的语调，以便在讲话时保持一致的速度。此外，注意在适当的地方暂停，以避免不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以进一步改进。在解释女性观点时，请确保提供足够的支持或示例，以便更清楚地阐述她的立场。同时，在总结时，请尝试使用更多连接词，以使观点之间的联系更加明确。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter insists that school should put the career fair at the beginning of the school years. However, the woman in the conversation disagreed with this decision. Firstly, according to the letter, it said that many students have found the job, so the career fair is not reasonable. The woman pointed out that many students are not sure what to do in the future. They need time to organize or figure out the careers they are interested in. So, putting the fair at the end is more reasonable. Secondly, according to the letter, it is inconvenient for students to take part in this fair because they are busy. However, the woman said that taking part in this fair is just talking to get information. It won't waste too much time.

Corrected: The letter insists suggests (“insists”表示坚持，但在这里“suggests”更自然) that school the university (使用“the university”更具体) should put hold (“hold”更适合描述举办活动) the career fair at the beginning of the school years. However, the woman in the conversation disagreed with this decision. Firstly, according to the letter, it said that many students have found the job jobs (应使用复数形式“jobs”), so the career fair is not reasonable. The woman pointed out that many students are not sure what to do in the future. They need time to organize or figure out the careers they are interested in. So, putting the fair at the end is more reasonable. Secondly, according to the letter, it is inconvenient for students to take part in this fair because they are busy. However, the woman said that taking part in this fair is just talking to get information. It won't waste too much time.

Revised (140 words): The letter suggests that the university should hold the career fair at the beginning of the school year. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal. Firstly, she argues that many students are uncertain about their future career paths and need time throughout the year to explore their interests and options. Therefore, holding the fair at the end of the year is more beneficial for them. Secondly, although the letter claims that it is inconvenient for busy students to attend the fair, the woman contends that participating in it only involves gathering information through casual conversations, which does not require a significant amount of time. Thus, she believes that students can easily fit it into their schedules despite their other commitments.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter's suggestion
  - Woman's disagreement

- First point
  - Uncertainty about future careers
  - Time needed for exploration

- Second point
  - Inconvenience for busy students
  - Woman's counterargument: casual conversations, not time-consuming

- Conclusion
  - Woman's belief: end-of-year career fair is more beneficial and manageable for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流畅度和语速基本一致，偶尔出现停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以及提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者的回答内容较为连贯和有组织，观点之间的联系清晰，并提供了足够的支持和例子。为了进一步提高话题发展能力，建议发言者在总结观点时更加简洁明了，并尝试使用更多的连接词来增强观点之间的联系。

5.语言使用

原文：The letter proposes that school will hold a student art club and it will not count toward degree and it will organize some trip to local art museum with half half price and the man likes this idea because first he loves art very much and in this way he can concentrate on his chemistry program and relax through the art club without any great or some test and second the museum is pretty expensive especially for students who don't have much money therefore the school art club can provide an opportunity for them to see more great arts more easily therefore the man likes this idea

修改后：The announcement states that the university will establish a Student Arts Club, which will not count towards a degree. The club will also organize trips to local art museums at half-price admission. The man appreciates this initiative because, firstly, he is passionate about art, allowing him to focus on his chemistry studies while enjoying the art club without worrying about grades or exams. Secondly, since museum visits can be costly, particularly for students with limited budgets, the club offers an affordable opportunity for them to appreciate more exceptional artwork with ease. Consequently, the man supports this idea.（修改原因：使用更高级的词汇，改进语法，让陈述自然流畅，平滑过渡，以及强有力的结论。）

修改建议及解释：（将“letter”改为“announcement”，因为这是关于公告的回答；将“school”改为“university”，以保持一致性；将“half half price”改为“half-price admission”，使表达更准确；将“great or some test”改为“grades or exams”，以提高语言准确性；将“great arts”改为“exceptional artwork”，使用更高级的词汇。）

修订后的回答（140字）：

The announcement states that the university will establish a Student Arts Club, which will not count towards a degree. The club will also organize trips to local art museums at half-price admission. The man appreciates this initiative because, firstly, he is passionate about art, allowing him to focus on his chemistry studies while enjoying the art club without worrying about grades or exams. Secondly, since museum visits can be costly, particularly for students with limited budgets, the club offers an affordable opportunity for them to appreciate more exceptional artwork with ease. Consequently, the man supports this idea.

6.思维导图

- Announcement
  - University
  - Student Arts Club
  - Not count towards degree
  - Trips to local art museums
  - Half-price admission

- Man's opinion
  - Appreciates the initiative
  - Reasons:
    - Passionate about art
    - Focus on chemistry studies
    - No worries about grades or exams
    - Costly museum visits
    - Affordable opportunity for students
    - Appreciate exceptional artwork with ease

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上说得比较清楚，但有时会出现停顿。建议在练习时注意语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但可以进一步加强观点之间的联系和支持。建议在练习时关注如何更清晰地表达观点，并提供更充分的支持或例证。

5.语言使用

Original: The email suggested that the geological field trip should change to a city's history museum because there are more kinds of rocks and if the weather is bad, it's hard for students to go out. The woman in the conversation totally disagreed with this email. Firstly, she thinks that if that happens, students will lose valuable experience to find identical rocks using the knowledge in the class. What's more, they will miss the nature contact. Secondly, the woman pointed out that because they study all year inside, many students want to being outside to breathe the fresh air and doing some exercises, which is really exciting for them.

Corrected: The email suggested that the geological field trip should change to a city's history natural history museum because there are more kinds of rocks and if the weather is bad, it's hard for students to go out. The woman in the conversation totally disagreed with this email. Firstly, she thinks that if that happens, students will lose valuable experience to find identical rocks in finding and identifying rocks using the knowledge in from the class. What's more, they will miss the nature contact contact with nature. Secondly, the woman pointed out that because they study all year inside, many students want to being be outside to breathe the fresh air and doing do some exercises, which is really exciting for them.

(将“history”改为“natural history”，因为原文中提到的是自然历史博物馆。将“to find identical rocks”改为“in finding and identifying rocks”，以更准确地表达女士的观点。将“in”改为“from”，使句子更通顺。将“the nature contact”改为“contact with nature”，以更自然地表达观点。将“being”改为“be”，使句子结构正确。将“doing”改为“do”，使句子结构正确。)

Revised (140 words): The email suggested that the geological field trip should change to a city's natural history museum because there are more kinds of rocks, and if the weather is bad, it's hard for students to go out. The woman in the conversation completely disagreed with this email. Firstly, she thinks that if that happens, students will lose the valuable experience of finding and identifying rocks using the knowledge from the class. Moreover, they will miss contact with nature. Secondly, the woman pointed out that since they study indoors all year, many students want to be outside to breathe fresh air and do some exercises, which is genuinely exciting for them. Overall, the woman believes that changing the field trip location would deprive students of essential hands-on experience and outdoor activities they eagerly anticipate.

6.思维导图

- Geological Field Trip Change
  - City's Natural History Museum
    - More kinds of rocks
    - Bad weather alternative
  - Woman's Disagreement
    - Valuable experience
      - Finding and identifying rocks
      - Knowledge from class
    - Contact with nature
    - Outdoor activities
      - Fresh air
      - Exercise
      - Excitement for students

7.关键词