TOEFL TPO 16 Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using points and examples from the talk, explain internal and external locus of control.

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

• Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大部分都很清晰，但有时会出现不恰当的停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议练习更自然、流畅的语言表达，避免不必要的停顿。同时注意发音准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 The response provides a coherent and well-organized explanation of internal and external locus of control using the job interview example from the lecture. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more detailed examples or further elaborating on the concepts. To enhance topic development, consider expanding on the ideas presented and ensuring that each point is fully explained and supported with relevant examples from the lecture.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The lecture uses the example of job interviewing as the example to illustrate two kinds of local subcontrol. The lecture uses job interviewing as an example to illustrate two types of locus of control. (将“local subcontrol”更正为“locus of control”，使句子更准确。) First comes the internal control, which means the interviewer will believe the result depends on herself and her preparation. First is internal locus of control, where individuals believe the outcome depends on their own efforts and preparation. (将“interviewer”更正为“individuals”，使句子更通用。) So if he gets the job, he will believe it is because of her hard work, So if they get the job, they will believe it is due to their hard work, (将“he”和“her”更正为“they”，使句子一致。) and if she didn't get the job, she will try to improve herself and try again. The second kind is the external control, which means the job interviewer will believe the result depends on his luck and anyone else. So he would like to take risks to apply for the job that he is not fully qualified. And if he gets the job, he will believe it is because his luck and the good mood of the interviewer. If he didn't get the job, he will blame the interviewer and think he was not lucky enough. These are the two examples of two kinds of local subcontrol.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The lecture uses job interviewing as an example to illustrate two types of locus of control. First is internal locus of control, where individuals believe the outcome depends on their own efforts and preparation. If they get the job, they will attribute their success to their hard work and dedication. However, if they don't get the job, they will seek ways to improve themselves for future opportunities. On the other hand, external locus of control refers to individuals who believe that external factors, such as luck or other people's decisions, determine the outcome. These individuals may take risks and apply for jobs they are not fully qualified for. If they succeed, they attribute it to luck or the interviewer's good mood; if they fail, they blame external factors rather than examining their own performance.

6.思维导图

• Locus of Control
  • Internal Locus of Control
    • Own efforts and preparation
    • Success attributed to hard work
    • Improvement when facing failure
  • External Locus of Control
    • External factors (luck, others' decisions)
    • Risk-taking behavior
    • Blaming external factors for failure

7.关键词