TOEFL TPO 7 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯与衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章回答了题目要求的问题，但是在对阅读和听力材料中的观点进行对比时，有些地方表述不够清晰。建议在总结听力观点时更加明确地指出它们是如何对阅读材料产生质疑的。此外，在论述过程中尽量避免使用过于简单的句式，以提高文章的逻辑性和说服力。

示例1： 原文：Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicted by stating that American people would trust the certification because of the reputation of the international organization which differs the certification from other advertisement. 修改：The lecturer refutes this point by stating that American consumers trust certifications from reputable international organizations, which sets ecocertification apart from typical advertisements.

示例2： 原文：The lecturer denied these opinion that the certification works abroad because of the competition is extreme. 修改：The lecturer counters this argument by emphasizing that ecocertification is important not only for international markets but also due to intense competition from foreign companies in the domestic market.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构基本符合要求，包括引言、正文和结论。但在组织上还有改进空间。建议在每个段落中更明确地提出一个主题，并用详细的例子和论据来支持这个主题。同时，注意在段落之间使用恰当的过渡词或短语，使文章更加连贯。

示例1： 原文：In addition, the lecturer doubts another reason sied by the author that American customers are price sensitive which indicates that they prefer products with lower price... 修改：Furthermore, the lecturer challenges the author's claim that American consumers are primarily price-sensitive. He explains that...

示例2： 原文：Finally, the author argus that the certification only works for American wood companies when they marketed their products abroad. 修改：Lastly, the reading passage argues that ecocertification would only benefit American wood companies if they marketed their products internationally. However, the lecturer contends...

5. 语法批改

In the reading material ,,(Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses) the author cited three reasons to support the viewpoint that American companies would not like to gain the ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) because American customers would not pay for it. However, the lecturer argued that American customers would prefer to buy products from companies who get this certification, and post three reasons.

First and foremost, the author said that American customer would not likely to pay for the products who get this certification because they have received too mushto mush(too go (to go)) similar advertisement and thy would not pay much attention to this certification. Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicted by stating that American people would trust the certification because of the reputation of the international organization which differs the certification from other advertisement.

In addition, the lecturer doubts another reason siedsaid(misspelling) by the author that American customers are price sensitive which indicates that they prefer products with lower price, demonstrating that people only price motivated when the differences among the prices are too large-when the prices is only 5 percent larger than the other one, customers would not be price-motivated as mentioned in the article.What What(Missing space between sentences)'s more, American customers value environment protecting ,,(Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses) so they are likely to pay for the extra money.

Finally, the author argusArgus(misspelling) that the certification only works for American wood companies when they marketed their products abroad. The lecturer denied these opinionthis opinion('this' vs. 'these') that the certification works abroad because of the competition is extreme,

In conclusion, the lecturer contradicted the three reasons showing the certificcertified(misspelling)

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage presents the argument that American wood companies are unlikely to seek ecocertification due to a lack of consumer interest and financial incentives. However, the lecture casts doubt on these points by providing counterarguments that demonstrate American consumers' preferences and the potential benefits of ecocertification for American wood companies.

Firstly, the reading passage claims that American consumers would not value or pay attention to ecocertification labels due to their exposure to excessive advertising. In contrast, the lecturer asserts that Americans distinguish between company-made claims and those made by independent certification agencies. As a result, ecologically-minded Americans are likely to respond positively to wood products certified by a reputable international organization.

Secondly, the author argues that American consumers prioritize price over other factors, making them more likely to choose cheaper uncertified wood products. The lecturer disputes this point by stating that price only determines consumer decisions when there is a significant difference between competing products. When the price difference is small (e.g., less than 5%), as with certified wood, Americans often consider factors other than price. Furthermore, American consumers increasingly recognize the importance of environmental preservation and protection.

Lastly, the reading passage suggests that pursuing certification would only make sense for American wood companies if they primarily marketed their products abroad. The lecturer refutes this idea by emphasizing that US wood companies should pay attention to international developments in their industry not because of foreign consumers but due to foreign competitors. If American companies are slow in capturing environmentally-conscious consumers, foreign businesses will enter the US market with ecocertified products not offered by domestic firms.

In light of these counterarguments presented in the lecture, it becomes evident that there is a strong possibility for American wood companies to seek ecocertification and cater to an environmentally-aware consumer base in the United States. (305 words)

Revised essay: In the reading material , material, the author cited cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that American companies would not like to gain the pursue ecocertification because American customers would not pay for it. However, the lecturer argued argues that American customers would prefer to buy products from companies who get this certification, and post with this certification and provides three reasons. counterarguments.

First and foremost, the author said that American customer would not likely to pay for the states that American customers are unlikely to pay for products who get this certification with ecocertification because they have received been exposed to too mush much similar advertisement and thy advertising and would not pay much attention to this certification. Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicted contradicts this by stating that American people would trust the certification because of due to the reputation of the international organization behind it, which differs the certification sets it apart from other advertisement. advertisements.

In addition, the lecturer doubts challenges another reason sied by the author that American customers are cited by the author: that American customers are price-sensitive and prefer lower-priced products. The lecturer demonstrates that people are only price-motivated when there is a significant difference in prices - when one product's price sensitive which indicates that they prefer products with lower price, demonstrating that people only price motivated when the differences among the prices are too large-when the prices is only 5 percent larger higher than the other one, customers would not another's, customers are less likely to be price-motivated swayed by cost alone as mentioned in the article.What's more, article. Moreover, American customers value environment protecting , environmental protection, so they are likely to pay for the may be willing to pay extra money. for certified products.

Finally, the author argus that the certification argues that ecocertification would only works for benefit American wood companies when they marketed marketing their products abroad. The lecturer denied these refutes this opinion that the by stating that certification works abroad not just because of the foreign consumer interest but also due to intense competition is extreme, from international companies.

In conclusion, the lecturer contradicted the contradicts all three reasons showing the certificpresented in the reading passage and suggests there is potential for American wood companies to seek ecocertification and cater to environmentally-conscious consumers within their domestic market.

8. Mind Map

Mind Map:

- Introduction
  - Reading passage argument
  - Lecture counterarguments

- Point 1: Consumer Interest
  - Reading: Americans ignore ecocertification labels
  - Lecture: Americans trust independent certification agencies

- Point 2: Price vs. Other Factors
  - Reading: Americans prioritize price
  - Lecture: Small price difference allows for other factors to be considered, including environmental concerns

- Point 3: International Market vs. Domestic Market
  - Reading: Certification only beneficial for international market
  - Lecture: Foreign competitors may enter US market with ecocertified products if American companies don't adapt

- Conclusion
  - Strong possibility for American wood companies to seek ecocertification and cater to environmentally-aware consumers in the US.

9. Keywords

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 4

• Organization: 3

• Coherence and Cohesion: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 22 (3.5)

3.Task completeness The essay does a decent job of addressing the specific requirements of the task by summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing clearer explanations and better paraphrasing. Additionally, some sentences are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Improve paraphrasing skills to avoid repetition.

• Provide clearer explanations for each point.

• Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure.

Examples:

1. Instead of "the customer in the United States will make sure whether the product's quality is better," consider writing "consumers in the United States are more likely to verify if a product's quality is superior before making a purchase."

2. Instead of "Because of American people is voting for ecocertified products," consider writing "As American consumers increasingly prefer ecocertified products."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it could benefit from better organization within each paragraph, focusing on one specific point and supporting details per paragraph. Clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs would also help improve coherence.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Focus on one main point per paragraph.

• Use clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

• Ensure that each paragraph supports the overall argument.

Examples:

1. Instead of combining two points in one paragraph like this: "However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that... And they have customers agency which are favor of ecocertification products and they will buy them," separate them into two paragraphs with clear transitions like this:

"However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that consumers in the United States are more discerning when it comes to advertising claims. They tend to trust independent certification agencies and are likely to value ecocertification labels on wood products.

Furthermore, the lecturer highlights that American consumers have a strong preference for products endorsed by reputable consumer agencies. This suggests that they would be more inclined to purchase ecocertified wood products."

2. Use clearer transitions between paragraphs, such as "In contrast," "On the other hand," or "Additionally," to help guide the reader through your argument.

5. 语法批改

In the reading material, the author casts three reasons to support his ideas that the wood companies in the United statesUnited States(capitalize proper names, geographic terms, historic episodes...) will not adopt new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive ecocertificationcertification(misspelling). Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that the American companies will still seek for ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) and opposes the points in the reading material.

First and foremost, the author argues that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) label. However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that the customer in the United States will make sure whether the product's quality is better. And they have customers agency which are favorin favor(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'in' is missing in a sentence.) of ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) products and, and(comma between independent clauses) they will buy them.

In addition, the lecturer casts doubts on the lecturer's second reason that on account of the higher cost of the ecocertifiedcertified(misspelling) wood, they will unlikelybe unlikely(who would (be) responsible) to be chosen because American consumers tend to be strongly motivated by price, demonstrating that although the price can be a bit higher than uncertified wood, according to a research, the consumer will only choose the cheap item when one price is much higher than the other. However, if the price is only about five percent higher than the other, consumerthe consumer(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) will probably choose by factor rather than price. What's more, the American people are always ready to buying the products that are capable of protecting the environment.

Finally, the author's third reason that pursuing certification would make sense foefor(Detects potentially wrong usage of "foe" instead of "for") American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad, while they only sell their products in the United States, where many customers isare(Detects potentially wrong usage of "is") satisfied with merchandise is also counteracted by the lecturer who points out that that is not because lack of foreign consumers but because lack of foreign companies. Because of American people is voting for ecocertifiedcertified(misspelling) products, it will attract more foreign companies to crowd in the country and sell products that have the certification.

6. Revised Essay

In the reading material, the author presents three reasons to support the idea that wood companies in the United States will not adopt new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive ecocertification. Conversely, the lecturer in the listening material contends that American companies will still seek ecocertification and refutes the points made in the reading material.

First and foremost, the author argues that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertification label. However, the lecturer offers an opposing perspective, stating that customers in the United States ensure better product quality by relying on independent consumer agencies. These agencies favor ecocertified products, and as a result, consumers are more likely to purchase them.

In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author's second reason: due to higher costs associated with ecocertified wood, it is unlikely to be chosen by price-conscious American consumers. The lecturer counters this by demonstrating that although ecocertified wood may be slightly more expensive than uncertified wood, research indicates that consumers only prioritize lower prices when there is a significant difference between competing products. If there is only a small price difference (e.g., around 5%), consumers tend to consider factors other than price when making their decision. Furthermore, Americans are increasingly willing to purchase products that contribute to environmental protection.

Lastly, the author's third reason—that pursuing certification would make sense for American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad—is also challenged by the lecturer. The lecturer points out that this is not due to a lack of foreign consumers but rather a lack of foreign competition. As American consumers increasingly prefer ecocertified products, this demand will attract more foreign companies to enter the US market and offer certified products.

In summary, while the reading passage posits several reasons why US wood companies may not pursue ecocertification, the lecturer effectively refutes each of these points, ultimately arguing that American companies will still seek ecocertification due to consumer preferences and market competition. (341 words)

In the reading material, the author casts presents three reasons to support his ideas that the the idea that wood companies in the United states States will not adopt new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive ecocertification. Nevertheless, Conversely, the lecturer in the listening material argues that the contends that American companies will still seek for ecocertification and opposes refutes the points made in the reading material.

First and foremost, the author argues that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertification label. However, the lecturer offers an opposing perspective (opposite stand that the customer is not a natural phrase), stating that customers in the United States will make sure whether the product's ensure better product quality is better. And they have customers agency which by relying on independent consumer agencies. These agencies favor ecocertified products, and as a result, consumers are favor of ecocertification products and they will buy more likely to purchase them.

In addition, the lecturer casts doubts doubt on the lecturer's author's second reason that on account of the reason: due to higher cost of the costs associated with ecocertified wood, they will it is unlikely to be chosen because American consumers tend to by price-conscious American consumers. The lecturer counters this by demonstrating that although ecocertified wood may be strongly motivated by price, demonstrating that although the price can be a bit higher slightly more expensive than uncertified wood, according to a research, the consumer will research indicates that consumers only choose the cheap item prioritize lower prices when one there is a significant difference between competing products. If there is only a small price is much higher difference (e.g., around 5%), consumers tend to consider factors other than the other. However, if the price is only about five percent higher than the other, consumer will probably choose by factor rather than price. What's more, the American people when making their decision. Furthermore, Americans are always ready to buying the increasingly willing to purchase products that are capable of protecting the environment. contribute to environmental protection.

Finally, Lastly, the author's third reason that reason—that pursuing certification would make sense foe for American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad, while they only sell their products in the United States, where many customers is satisfied with merchandise is abroad—is also counteracted challenged by the lecturer who lecturer. The lecturer points out that that is not because this is not due to a lack of foreign consumers but because rather a lack of foreign companies. Because of American people is voting competition (changed "companies" to "competition" for clarity). As American consumers increasingly prefer ecocertified products, it this demand will attract more foreign companies to crowd in the country and sell products that have the certification.enter the US market and offer certified products.

In summary, while the reading passage posits several reasons why US wood companies may not pursue ecocertification, the lecturer effectively refutes each of these points, ultimately arguing that American companies will still seek ecocertification due to consumer preferences and market competition.

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
    - Reading material's argument
    - Lecturer's counterargument

- Point 1: Advertising and consumer attention
    - Reading: Consumers won't notice ecocertification labels
    - Listening: Independent consumer agencies promote ecocertified products

- Point 2: Higher costs of ecocertified wood
    - Reading: Price-conscious consumers won't choose ecocertified wood
    - Listening: Small price difference doesn't deter consumers; environmental awareness increasing

- Point 3: Marketing products abroad
    - Reading: Certification only makes sense if targeting foreign markets
    - Listening: Foreign competition will increase due to US consumer preferences for ecocertified products

- Conclusion
    - Lecturer's refutation of reading material's points 

9. Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 4

• Organization: 4

• Coherence and Cohesion: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 25

3.Task completeness The essay does a good job of addressing the specific requirements of the task, summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of language use and clarity. Some sentences are overly long and could be broken down into shorter, more concise statements. Additionally, some phrases are awkwardly worded or contain minor grammatical errors.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Break down long sentences into shorter ones.

• Revise awkward phrases and fix minor grammatical errors.

Examples:

1. Original sentence: "Most Americans have a lot of confidence in its independent organizations, especially when they are approved by an international organization or committee because certain practices used in creating its products." Improved sentence: "Most Americans have a lot of confidence in their independent organizations, particularly when they receive approval from an international organization due to their eco-friendly practices."

2. Original sentence: "This directly goes against the reading's view that eco-certified wood is expensive than regular wood, which brings the additional cost to the customers, causing more customers to choose the regular wood since American customers are strongly motivated by price." Improved sentence: "This contradicts the reading's claim that eco-certified wood is more expensive than regular wood and that this additional cost would lead price-conscious American customers to choose regular wood."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each point from the lecture, and a conclusion. The organization is logical, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point and supporting details. However, transitions between ideas could be improved for better coherence.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Improve transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

• Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.

Examples:

1. Original transition: "First, the professor in the listening contends that not all customers in the United States of America trat all advertisements the same way." Improved transition: "Firstly, the professor in the listening argues that American customers do not treat all advertisements equally."

2. Original topic sentence: "Secondly, the professor continues to state that studies have shown that for most customers, they do consider the prices of the two similar products, but they only decide according to price only if the price gap between the two is large." Improved topic sentence: "Secondly, the professor cites studies showing that while customers consider prices when comparing similar products, they base their decisions on price only if there is a significant price difference."

5. Grammar

The reading passage and the listening both discussesdiscuss the topic of whether wood companies in the United States of America will adopt new eco-friendly practices in order to receive eco-certification for the wood products that they produce. While the reading proclaimsclaims that these companies will not adopt these practices, the listening casts doubt on the reading's proposals. assertions. First, the professor in the listening contends that not all customers in the United States of America trat alltreat advertisements the same way. Most Americans have a lot of confidence in its independent organizations, especially when they are approved by an international organization or committee because certainof the practices used in creating itstheir products. In this case, most wood companies are already independent organizations of the United States of America;organizations; if they proceed to achieve a certificate from a global organization, this will definitely boost the customers forcustomers' confidence in this wood production company. This directly refutes the reading's point, sayingclaim, stating that American customers are exposed to so much advertising that they won't value or pay attention to the stickers and label that sayslabels that say this company is a eco-certified company. eco-certified. Secondly, the professor continues to state that studies have shown that for most customers, they do consider the prices of the two similar products, but they only decide according to price only if the price gap between the two is large. If not, many Americans also distinguishdifferentiate products from differentin other ways, like ifsuch as whether it is sustainable or not, and what materials is the product made of. This directly goes against the reading's viewclaim that eco-certified wood is expensive than regular wood,expensive, which brings the additional cost to thecosts to customers, causing more customers to choose the regular wood since American customers are strongly motivated by price. Third and lastly, the professor states that there will be foreign competition if the American companies don't adopt eco-certified measures. If the American companies do not provide these kinds of eco woodeco-wood products, then foreign companies will surge into the American market of wooden products, offering eco-wood products that local companies don't provide, which will take the profit that originally belongs to the local companies,companies and create a negative loop of marketing. This strongly contradicts with what is said in the reading that thereading, that American companies can still offer their wood products to customers inside the United States of America even if they don't have an eco-certificate thateco-certificate, which gives them a disadvantage in selling their wood abroad.

6. Revised Essay

The reading passage and the listening both discuss the topic of whether wood companies in the United States of America will adopt new eco-friendly practices in order to receive eco-certification for the wood products that they produce. While the reading proclaims that these companies will not adopt these practices, the listening casts doubt on the reading's proposals.

First, the professor in the listening contends that not all customers in the United States of America treat all advertisements the same way. Most Americans have a lot of confidence in independent organizations, especially when they are approved by an international organization or committee because certain practices used in creating its products. In this case, most wood companies are already independent organizations of the United States of America; if they proceed to achieve a certificate from a global organization, this will definitely boost customers for this wood production company. This directly refutes the reading's point, saying that American customers are exposed to so much advertising that they won't value or pay attention to stickers and labels indicating eco-certification.

Secondly, the professor continues to state that studies have shown that for most customers, they do consider prices when comparing similar products but make decisions based on price only if there is a significant difference between them. If not, many Americans also distinguish products through other factors such as sustainability and materials used. This directly goes against the reading's view that eco-certified wood is more expensive than regular wood, which brings additional cost to customers and causes more customers to choose regular wood since American consumers are strongly motivated by price.

Third and lastly, the professor states that there will be foreign competition if American companies don't adopt eco-certified measures. If American companies do not provide these kinds of eco-wood products, then foreign companies will surge into the American market offering eco-wood products unavailable from local companies. This would take profit away from local businesses and create a negative loop of marketing. This strongly contradicts what is said in the reading that American companies can still offer their wood products to customers inside the United States of America even if they don't have an eco-certificate, giving them a disadvantage in selling their wood abroad. (372 words)

The reading passage and the listening both discusses discuss the topic of whether wood companies in the United States of America will adopt new eco-friendly practices in order to receive eco-certification for the wood products that they produce. While the reading proclaims that these companies will not adopt these practices, the listening casts doubt on the reading's proposals.

First, the professor in the listening contends that not all customers in the United States of America trat treat (revised "trat" to "treat" for correct spelling) all advertisements the same way. Most Americans have a lot of confidence in its independent organizations, especially when they are approved by an international organization or committee because certain practices used in creating its products. In this case, most wood companies are already independent organizations of the United States of America; if they proceed to achieve a certificate from a global organization, this will definitely boost the customers customers (revised "the customers" to "customers" for better flow) for this wood production company. This directly refutes the reading's point, saying that American customers are exposed to so much advertising that they won't value or pay attention to the stickers and label that says this company is a eco-certified company. labels (revised "the stickers and label" to "stickers and labels" for consistency) indicating eco-certification.

Secondly, the professor continues to state that studies have shown that for most customers, they do consider the prices of the two when comparing similar products, products but they only decide according to make decisions based on price only if there is a significant difference between them (revised "only if the price gap between the two is large. large" for clarity). If not, many Americans also distinguish products from through other factors such as sustainability and materials used (revised "from different ways, like if it is sustainable or not, and what materials is the product made of. of" for clarity). This directly goes against the reading's view that eco-certified wood is more expensive than regular wood, which brings the additional cost to the customers, causing customers and causes more customers to choose the regular wood since American customers consumers are strongly motivated by price.

Third and lastly, the professor states that there will be foreign competition if the American companies don't adopt eco-certified measures. If the American companies do not provide these kinds of eco wood eco-wood products, then foreign companies will surge into the American market of wooden products, offering eco-wood products that unavailable from local companies (revised "that local companies don't provide, which will provide" for better flow). This would take the profit that originally belongs to the away from local companies, businesses and create a negative loop of marketing. This strongly contradicts with what is said in the reading that the American companies can still offer their wood products to customers inside the United States of America even if they don't have an eco-certificate that gives eco-certificate, giving them a disadvantage in selling their wood abroad.

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Reading passage: Companies won't adopt eco-friendly practices
  - Listening passage: Doubts the reading's proposals

- Point 1: Customer Confidence
  - Reading: Americans won't value eco-certification labels
  - Listening: Americans trust independent organizations with international approval

- Point 2: Price vs. Sustainability
  - Reading: Eco-certified wood is more expensive, so customers choose regular wood
  - Listening: Customers consider price but also prioritize sustainability and materials

- Point 3: Foreign Competition
  - Reading: American companies can still sell products without eco-certification
  - Listening: Foreign companies will enter the market with eco-certified products, taking profits from local businesses

- Conclusion
  - Summarize main points and contradictions between reading and listening passages

9. Key Words