TOEFL TPO 7 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯与衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章回答了题目要求的问题，但是在对阅读和听力材料中的观点进行对比时，有些地方表述不够清晰。建议在总结听力观点时更加明确地指出它们是如何对阅读材料产生质疑的。此外，在论述过程中尽量避免使用过于简单的句式，以提高文章的逻辑性和说服力。

示例1： 原文：Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicted by stating that American people would trust the certification because of the reputation of the international organization which differs the certification from other advertisement. 修改：The lecturer refutes this point by stating that American consumers trust certifications from reputable international organizations, which sets ecocertification apart from typical advertisements.

示例2： 原文：The lecturer denied these opinion that the certification works abroad because of the competition is extreme. 修改：The lecturer counters this argument by emphasizing that ecocertification is important not only for international markets but also due to intense competition from foreign companies in the domestic market.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构基本符合要求，包括引言、正文和结论。但在组织上还有改进空间。建议在每个段落中更明确地提出一个主题，并用详细的例子和论据来支持这个主题。同时，注意在段落之间使用恰当的过渡词或短语，使文章更加连贯。

示例1： 原文：In addition, the lecturer doubts another reason sied by the author that American customers are price sensitive which indicates that they prefer products with lower price... 修改：Furthermore, the lecturer challenges the author's claim that American consumers are primarily price-sensitive. He explains that...

示例2： 原文：Finally, the author argus that the certification only works for American wood companies when they marketed their products abroad. 修改：Lastly, the reading passage argues that ecocertification would only benefit American wood companies if they marketed their products internationally. However, the lecturer contends...

5. 语法批改

In the reading material ,,(Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses) the author cited three reasons to support the viewpoint that American companies would not like to gain the ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) because American customers would not pay for it. However, the lecturer argued that American customers would prefer to buy products from companies who get this certification, and post three reasons.

First and foremost, the author said that American customer would not likely to pay for the products who get this certification because they have received too mushto mush(too go (to go)) similar advertisement and thy would not pay much attention to this certification. Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicted by stating that American people would trust the certification because of the reputation of the international organization which differs the certification from other advertisement.

In addition, the lecturer doubts another reason siedsaid(misspelling) by the author that American customers are price sensitive which indicates that they prefer products with lower price, demonstrating that people only price motivated when the differences among the prices are too large-when the prices is only 5 percent larger than the other one, customers would not be price-motivated as mentioned in the article.What What(Missing space between sentences)'s more, American customers value environment protecting ,,(Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses) so they are likely to pay for the extra money.

Finally, the author argusArgus(misspelling) that the certification only works for American wood companies when they marketed their products abroad. The lecturer denied these opinionthis opinion('this' vs. 'these') that the certification works abroad because of the competition is extreme,

In conclusion, the lecturer contradicted the three reasons showing the certificcertified(misspelling)

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage presents the argument that American wood companies are unlikely to seek ecocertification due to a lack of consumer interest and financial incentives. However, the lecture casts doubt on these points by providing counterarguments that demonstrate American consumers' preferences and the potential benefits of ecocertification for American wood companies.

Firstly, the reading passage claims that American consumers would not value or pay attention to ecocertification labels due to their exposure to excessive advertising. In contrast, the lecturer asserts that Americans distinguish between company-made claims and those made by independent certification agencies. As a result, ecologically-minded Americans are likely to respond positively to wood products certified by a reputable international organization.

Secondly, the author argues that American consumers prioritize price over other factors, making them more likely to choose cheaper uncertified wood products. The lecturer disputes this point by stating that price only determines consumer decisions when there is a significant difference between competing products. When the price difference is small (e.g., less than 5%), as with certified wood, Americans often consider factors other than price. Furthermore, American consumers increasingly recognize the importance of environmental preservation and protection.

Lastly, the reading passage suggests that pursuing certification would only make sense for American wood companies if they primarily marketed their products abroad. The lecturer refutes this idea by emphasizing that US wood companies should pay attention to international developments in their industry not because of foreign consumers but due to foreign competitors. If American companies are slow in capturing environmentally-conscious consumers, foreign businesses will enter the US market with ecocertified products not offered by domestic firms.

In light of these counterarguments presented in the lecture, it becomes evident that there is a strong possibility for American wood companies to seek ecocertification and cater to an environmentally-aware consumer base in the United States. (305 words)

Revised essay: In the reading material , material, the author cited cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that American companies would not like to gain the pursue ecocertification because American customers would not pay for it. However, the lecturer argued argues that American customers would prefer to buy products from companies who get this certification, and post with this certification and provides three reasons. counterarguments.

First and foremost, the author said that American customer would not likely to pay for the states that American customers are unlikely to pay for products who get this certification with ecocertification because they have received been exposed to too mush much similar advertisement and thy advertising and would not pay much attention to this certification. Nevertheless, the lecturer contradicted contradicts this by stating that American people would trust the certification because of due to the reputation of the international organization behind it, which differs the certification sets it apart from other advertisement. advertisements.

In addition, the lecturer doubts challenges another reason sied by the author that American customers are cited by the author: that American customers are price-sensitive and prefer lower-priced products. The lecturer demonstrates that people are only price-motivated when there is a significant difference in prices - when one product's price sensitive which indicates that they prefer products with lower price, demonstrating that people only price motivated when the differences among the prices are too large-when the prices is only 5 percent larger higher than the other one, customers would not another's, customers are less likely to be price-motivated swayed by cost alone as mentioned in the article.What's more, article. Moreover, American customers value environment protecting , environmental protection, so they are likely to pay for the may be willing to pay extra money. for certified products.

Finally, the author argus that the certification argues that ecocertification would only works for benefit American wood companies when they marketed marketing their products abroad. The lecturer denied these refutes this opinion that the by stating that certification works abroad not just because of the foreign consumer interest but also due to intense competition is extreme, from international companies.

In conclusion, the lecturer contradicted the contradicts all three reasons showing the certificpresented in the reading passage and suggests there is potential for American wood companies to seek ecocertification and cater to environmentally-conscious consumers within their domestic market.

8. Mind Map

Mind Map:

- Introduction
  - Reading passage argument
  - Lecture counterarguments

- Point 1: Consumer Interest
  - Reading: Americans ignore ecocertification labels
  - Lecture: Americans trust independent certification agencies

- Point 2: Price vs. Other Factors
  - Reading: Americans prioritize price
  - Lecture: Small price difference allows for other factors to be considered, including environmental concerns

- Point 3: International Market vs. Domestic Market
  - Reading: Certification only beneficial for international market
  - Lecture: Foreign competitors may enter US market with ecocertified products if American companies don't adapt

- Conclusion
  - Strong possibility for American wood companies to seek ecocertification and cater to environmentally-aware consumers in the US.

9. Keywords