TOEFL TPO 7 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 4

• Organization: 3

• Coherence and Cohesion: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 22 (3.5)

3.Task completeness The essay does a decent job of addressing the specific requirements of the task by summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing clearer explanations and better paraphrasing. Additionally, some sentences are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Improve paraphrasing skills to avoid repetition.

• Provide clearer explanations for each point.

• Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure.

Examples:

1. Instead of "the customer in the United States will make sure whether the product's quality is better," consider writing "consumers in the United States are more likely to verify if a product's quality is superior before making a purchase."

2. Instead of "Because of American people is voting for ecocertified products," consider writing "As American consumers increasingly prefer ecocertified products."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it could benefit from better organization within each paragraph, focusing on one specific point and supporting details per paragraph. Clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs would also help improve coherence.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Focus on one main point per paragraph.

• Use clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

• Ensure that each paragraph supports the overall argument.

Examples:

1. Instead of combining two points in one paragraph like this: "However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that... And they have customers agency which are favor of ecocertification products and they will buy them," separate them into two paragraphs with clear transitions like this:

"However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that consumers in the United States are more discerning when it comes to advertising claims. They tend to trust independent certification agencies and are likely to value ecocertification labels on wood products.

Furthermore, the lecturer highlights that American consumers have a strong preference for products endorsed by reputable consumer agencies. This suggests that they would be more inclined to purchase ecocertified wood products."

2. Use clearer transitions between paragraphs, such as "In contrast," "On the other hand," or "Additionally," to help guide the reader through your argument.

5. 语法批改

In the reading material, the author casts three reasons to support his ideas that the wood companies in the United statesUnited States(capitalize proper names, geographic terms, historic episodes...) will not adopt new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive ecocertificationcertification(misspelling). Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that the American companies will still seek for ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) and opposes the points in the reading material.

First and foremost, the author argues that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) label. However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that the customer in the United States will make sure whether the product's quality is better. And they have customers agency which are favorin favor(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'in' is missing in a sentence.) of ecocertificationcertification(misspelling) products and, and(comma between independent clauses) they will buy them.

In addition, the lecturer casts doubts on the lecturer's second reason that on account of the higher cost of the ecocertifiedcertified(misspelling) wood, they will unlikelybe unlikely(who would (be) responsible) to be chosen because American consumers tend to be strongly motivated by price, demonstrating that although the price can be a bit higher than uncertified wood, according to a research, the consumer will only choose the cheap item when one price is much higher than the other. However, if the price is only about five percent higher than the other, consumerthe consumer(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) will probably choose by factor rather than price. What's more, the American people are always ready to buying the products that are capable of protecting the environment.

Finally, the author's third reason that pursuing certification would make sense foefor(Detects potentially wrong usage of "foe" instead of "for") American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad, while they only sell their products in the United States, where many customers isare(Detects potentially wrong usage of "is") satisfied with merchandise is also counteracted by the lecturer who points out that that is not because lack of foreign consumers but because lack of foreign companies. Because of American people is voting for ecocertifiedcertified(misspelling) products, it will attract more foreign companies to crowd in the country and sell products that have the certification.

6. Revised Essay

In the reading material, the author presents three reasons to support the idea that wood companies in the United States will not adopt new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive ecocertification. Conversely, the lecturer in the listening material contends that American companies will still seek ecocertification and refutes the points made in the reading material.

First and foremost, the author argues that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertification label. However, the lecturer offers an opposing perspective, stating that customers in the United States ensure better product quality by relying on independent consumer agencies. These agencies favor ecocertified products, and as a result, consumers are more likely to purchase them.

In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author's second reason: due to higher costs associated with ecocertified wood, it is unlikely to be chosen by price-conscious American consumers. The lecturer counters this by demonstrating that although ecocertified wood may be slightly more expensive than uncertified wood, research indicates that consumers only prioritize lower prices when there is a significant difference between competing products. If there is only a small price difference (e.g., around 5%), consumers tend to consider factors other than price when making their decision. Furthermore, Americans are increasingly willing to purchase products that contribute to environmental protection.

Lastly, the author's third reason—that pursuing certification would make sense for American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad—is also challenged by the lecturer. The lecturer points out that this is not due to a lack of foreign consumers but rather a lack of foreign competition. As American consumers increasingly prefer ecocertified products, this demand will attract more foreign companies to enter the US market and offer certified products.

In summary, while the reading passage posits several reasons why US wood companies may not pursue ecocertification, the lecturer effectively refutes each of these points, ultimately arguing that American companies will still seek ecocertification due to consumer preferences and market competition. (341 words)

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Finally, Lastly, the author's third reason that reason—that pursuing certification would make sense foe for American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad, while they only sell their products in the United States, where many customers is satisfied with merchandise is abroad—is also counteracted challenged by the lecturer who lecturer. The lecturer points out that that is not because this is not due to a lack of foreign consumers but because rather a lack of foreign companies. Because of American people is voting competition (changed "companies" to "competition" for clarity). As American consumers increasingly prefer ecocertified products, it this demand will attract more foreign companies to crowd in the country and sell products that have the certification.enter the US market and offer certified products.

In summary, while the reading passage posits several reasons why US wood companies may not pursue ecocertification, the lecturer effectively refutes each of these points, ultimately arguing that American companies will still seek ecocertification due to consumer preferences and market competition.

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
    - Reading material's argument
    - Lecturer's counterargument

- Point 1: Advertising and consumer attention
    - Reading: Consumers won't notice ecocertification labels
    - Listening: Independent consumer agencies promote ecocertified products

- Point 2: Higher costs of ecocertified wood
    - Reading: Price-conscious consumers won't choose ecocertified wood
    - Listening: Small price difference doesn't deter consumers; environmental awareness increasing

- Point 3: Marketing products abroad
    - Reading: Certification only makes sense if targeting foreign markets
    - Listening: Foreign competition will increase due to US consumer preferences for ecocertified products

- Conclusion
    - Lecturer's refutation of reading material's points 

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