TOEFL TPO 52 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the idea expressed in the newspaper. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3.5

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 4

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：27

3.表达 回答中的表达相对清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议在练习时注意保持流利的语言表达和一致的语速，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容完整，结构清晰，观点之间的联系明确。在主题发展方面已经做得很好。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在练习中加入更多具体的例子和细节来支持观点，使回答更加丰富和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：A student proposes that the university should invite business leaders to the graduation ceremony as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community. A student suggests that inviting business leaders to the graduation ceremony would be beneficial, as they serve as excellent role models for business students and can enhance the reputation of the business program within the community.（将"proposes"改为"suggests"，使语言更自然；将"as they are"改为"as they serve as"，使句子更通顺；将"improve"改为"enhance"，词汇更高级。）

原文：However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal. Nonetheless, in their conversation, the woman disagrees with this suggestion.（将"However"改为"Nonetheless"，词汇更高级；将"during their conversation"改为"in their conversation"，使句子更通顺；将“proposal”改为“suggestion”，避免重复。）

原文：Firstly, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. Firstly, she contends that as the university invites business leaders annually, it should also contemplate inviting prominent figures from other professions, such as teachers, who significantly influence the community.（将“believes”改为“contends”，词汇更高级；将“invites”改为“inviting”，使句子更通顺；将“like”改为“such as”，使语言更自然；将“have a significant impact”改为“significantly influence”，使句子更简洁。）

原文：Second, she believes that business programs are already very well-known to the public. Second, she asserts that business programs are already widely recognized by the public.（将“believes”改为“asserts”，词汇更高级；将“very well-known”改为“widely recognized”，使语言更自然。）

原文：However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community. Nonetheless, other programs, like the education program, lack similar recognition within the community.（将"However"改为"Nonetheless"，词汇更高级；将"are not as well-known"改为"lack similar recognition"，使句子更简洁。）

原文：Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to this ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this proposal. Consequently, she maintains that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract greater attention to the education program, yielding benefits and leading her to disagree with the suggestion.（将“believes”改为“maintains”，词汇更高级；将“draw more attention”改为“attract greater attention”，使语言更自然；将“which would be beneficial”改为“yielding benefits”，使句子更简洁；将“proposal”改为“suggestion”，避免重复。）

修订后的回答（140词）：

A student suggests that inviting business leaders to the graduation ceremony would be beneficial, as they serve as excellent role models for business students and can enhance the reputation of the business program within the community. Nonetheless, in their conversation, the woman disagrees with this suggestion. Firstly, she contends that as the university invites business leaders annually, it should also contemplate inviting prominent figures from other professions, such as teachers, who significantly influence the community. Second, she asserts that business programs are already widely recognized by the public. Nonetheless, other programs, like the education program, lack similar recognition within the community. Consequently, she maintains that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract greater attention to the education program, yielding benefits and leading her to disagree with the suggestion.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Student's suggestion
  - Business leaders as role models
  - Enhance business program reputation

- Woman's disagreement
  - Need for variety in speakers
    - Inviting prominent figures from other professions
    - Teachers as influential individuals
  - Business programs already widely recognized
  - Education program lacks recognition
    - Attract greater attention by inviting teachers
    - Yielding benefits for the education program

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为一致，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，同时注意准确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在连接观点和提供足够支持或例子方面还有待加强。建议发言者在组织回答时更加注意观点之间的逻辑关系，并尝试提供更多具体的例子来支持自己的观点。

5.语言使用

原文：In the ratings, In the reading, (改为“reading”，因为这里是在描述阅读材料) a student proposed that the school should like invite (改为“invite”，因为这里的意思是邀请，而不是喜欢) business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies because they are successful and influential, and it can advertise in the (删除“in”，因为这里应该是“the school's business program”) school's business program. The woman in the conversation doesn't agree with this proposal for two reasons. The first one is that there are always business students who speak at the ceremonies. It doesn't affair appeal (改为“appeal”，因为这里的意思是吸引，而不是事务) to the other professions. There are also other professions who came can be (改为“can be”，因为这里应该用现在时表示可能性) successfully, like teachers. And second reason is that the business program in the schools is already big and well-known, so it should give chance to the other programs that are good, but not that lots of people know. Like there's an educational program that is really good, but it should have the chance to be advertised, like letting the educational students to speak at the ceremony.

修订版（140词）：

In the reading, a student proposed that the school should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies because they are successful and influential, and it can advertise the school's business program. The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. The first reason is that business leaders always speak at the ceremonies, which doesn't appeal to other professions. She believes that other professions can also be successful and influential, such as teachers. The second reason is that the school's business program is already large and well-known, so it should provide opportunities for other programs that are good but not as widely recognized. For example, there is an excellent education program at the school, which could benefit from increased publicity if an education student were invited to speak at the ceremony.

6.思维导图

- Reading
    - Invite business leaders
        - Successful and influential
        - Advertise business program

- Woman's opinion
    - Disagrees with proposal
        - Reason 1: Business leaders always speak
            - Appeal to other professions
            - Example: Teachers can also be successful and influential
        - Reason 2: Business program already well-known
            - Provide opportunities for other programs
            - Example: Excellent education program could benefit from publicity

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

24. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为稳定，但偶尔有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，以提高整体表达的流畅性。同时，注意发音的准确性，避免因发音不准确而导致拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回应，观点之间的联系清晰，且给出了充分的支持和例子。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, a student proposes that the university should invite a business leader to the graduation ceremony because they are the excellent role model for the business students and it can help reinforce the good impression of the business program in the community. The student suggests that a business leader should be invited to the graduation ceremony as they serve as an excellent role model for business students and can help enhance the reputation of the business program in the community.（将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。同时，将"proposes"改为"suggests"，使表达更准确。）

However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal. Nonetheless, in the conversation, the woman opposes this suggestion.（将"proposal"改为"suggestion"，使表达更准确。）

Firstly, she thinks the university has invited business leaders every year and she thinks there are also many influential persons from other professional fields, for example, teachers who are very influential to the community should be invited to the ceremony. Firstly, she believes that since the university has invited business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, such as teachers who have a significant impact on the community.（对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。）

And secondly, she thinks the programs of business are already very well known to the public. Secondly, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public.（对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。）

However, other programs such as the education program are not so well known to the community. However, other programs, like the education program, are not as well-known in the community.（对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。）

So she thinks if the university can invite teachers to the ceremony, it will draw much attention to this program, which would be beneficial. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract more attention to the education program, which would be advantageous.（对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。同时，将"beneficial"改为"advantageous"，使词汇更丰富。）

Therefore, she disagrees with this proposal. As a result, she disagrees with this suggestion.（将"proposal"改为"suggestion"，使表达更准确。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student suggests that a business leader should be invited to the graduation ceremony as they serve as an excellent role model for business students and can help enhance the reputation of the business program in the community. Nonetheless, in the conversation, the woman opposes this suggestion. Firstly, she believes that since the university has invited business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, such as teachers who have a significant impact on the community. Secondly, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public. However, other programs, like the education program, are not as well-known in the community. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract more attention to the education program, which would be advantageous. As a result, she disagrees with this suggestion.

6.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Student's suggestion
  • Woman's disagreement

• Reason 1

  • Business leaders invited every year
  • Consider other professions (e.g., teachers)

• Reason 2

  • Business programs well-known
  • Education program not as well-known

• Conclusion

  • Inviting teachers beneficial
  • Woman disagrees with the suggestion

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在这个回答中，发言者的表达相对清晰，但仍有一些不太自然的停顿。为了提高发言的流畅性，建议发言者注意在句子之间保持恰当的停顿，同时避免在不需要的地方停顿。此外，尝试提高发音的准确性，以减少拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的发展，提出了女士对邀请商业领袖发表演讲的看法及其原因。然而，回答中部分观点的连接略显生硬。建议在陈述观点时更加注意逻辑性和连贯性，以使回答更加有条理。同时，在解释原因时可以尝试提供更多具体的例子或细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: It is proposed that the university should invite some business leaders to speak at this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models because they represent the meaning of professional success and also can reinforce to the company that business program is the biggest and best one in the state. The proposal suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at this year's graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models who represent professional success and can reinforce the prestige of the business program within the state. (建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复使用"because"。)

In the conversation, the woman think it is not a good idea based on two reasons. In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. (改进语法和表达。)

First, she states that it is always the business person who have a speech. First, she states that it is always business people who give speeches at graduation ceremonies. (改进语法和词汇选择。)

The university can also invite some influential and successful person from other professions like teachers and the program is already well-known and quite big so it doesn't need some extra attention and free advertising that graduation speakers would bring. The university could also invite influential and successful individuals from other professions, such as teachers. Moreover, since the business program is already well-known and prominent, it doesn't require additional attention or free advertising from graduation speakers. (改进句子结构，使表达更清晰。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at this year's graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models who represent professional success and can reinforce the prestige of the business program within the state. In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. First, she states that it is always business people who give speeches at graduation ceremonies. The university could also invite influential and successful individuals from other professions, such as teachers. Moreover, since the business program is already well-known and prominent, it doesn't require additional attention or free advertising from graduation speakers.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Invite business leaders
  - Graduation ceremony
  - Role models
  - Professional success
  - Prestige of business program

- Woman's disagreement
  - Always business people speaking
  - Other professions (e.g., teachers)
  - Business program already well-known
  - Doesn't require additional attention or advertising

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中。但在某些地方，发言者的停顿不太合适，可能会影响听众的理解。建议发言者在练习时注意自己的语音、语调和停顿，以便更好地表达自己的观点。

4.话题发展 发言者对于问题的回答较为完整，能够明确表达女生的观点及其原因。但在组织结构上还有待提高，可以尝试使用更清晰的逻辑连接词来帮助听众更好地理解观点之间的关系。同时，在提供支持或举例时，可以尝试使用更具体和详细的信息来增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: In a letter, the students suggest the school can invite some business leader to the graduation ceremony, which can help the students to learn a lot and also improve more attention on the business program in the school. However, according to the listening, the student disagreed with that statement because she thinks that the graduation ceremony always invites business people, and she thinks it can be a great chance to invite other professional people such as teachers. She thinks the business program at the school is already quite big, however, the education program is also a very well-programmed, but it will definitely need more attention on it, so she thinks it will be a good chance to invite an education leader to the school.

Corrected: In a letter, the students students suggestthe that school the school can invite some a business leader to the graduation ceremony, which can helpthe students to learn a lot and also improve more attention on students learn and draw more attention to the business program in the school. However, according to the listening, the student disagreed with that statement because she thinks that one student disagrees as she believes the graduation ceremony always invites business people, and she thinks it can be a great chance to invite other professional people such as teachers.; thus, it would be better to invite professionals from other fields, like teachers. She thinks the business program at the school is already quite big, however, but the education program is also a very well-programmed, well-established, but it will definitely need more attentionon it,; so she thinks it will be a good chance to invite an education leader to the school.

(删除了多余的定冠词，改进了语法和句子结构，使句子更自然。)

Revised (140 words): In a letter, students suggest that the school can invite a business leader to the graduation ceremony, which can help students learn and draw more attention to the business program in the school. However, according to the listening, one student disagrees as she believes the graduation ceremony always invites business people; thus, it would be better to invite professionals from other fields, like teachers. She thinks the business program at the school is already quite big but the education program is also well-established; however, it needs more attention. Therefore, she believes it would be a good opportunity to invite an education leader to speak at the graduation ceremony, which could not only provide variety but also promote and draw attention to the school's education program.

6.思维导图

• Letter

  • Business leader
  • Graduation ceremony
  • Attention to business program

• Listening

  • Student's disagreement
  • Always business people
  • Other professionals (teachers)

• Business program

  • Already big

• Education program

  • Well-established
  • Needs more attention

• Suggestion

  • Invite education leader

7.关键词