TOEFL TPO 52 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the idea expressed in the newspaper. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在发音方面，整体上讲得比较清楚，但仍有一些不太准确的地方。建议在发音时注意语速，保持一致的节奏，适时地停顿。此外，注意提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 回答内容在话题发展方面表现较好，观点清晰且有条理。可以考虑在回答中加入更多细节和例子来支持观点，使回答更加充实。

5.语言使用

原文：The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak in the graduation ceremonies. The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies.（在表示“在毕业典礼上”时，应使用“at”而非“in”。）

However, the woman does not agree with the idea. However, the woman disagrees with this idea.（使用“disagrees”更简洁明了。）

First of all, she thinks that there are always business leaders speaking in the graduation ceremonies, Firstly, she believes that business leaders are always invited to speak at graduation ceremonies,（使用“Firstly”和“believes”使句子更自然；同样地，用“at”替换“in”。）

and more influential people from diversified professions should be invited. and she suggests inviting more influential individuals from diverse professions.（改为主动语态，使句子更自然。）

Like teachers who are influential and play an important role in our communities. For example, teachers, who are influential and play a crucial role in our communities.（使用“For example”和“crucial”使句子更自然。）

Besides, the business program is big and well-known enough, Moreover, the business program is already large and well-established,（使用“Moreover”和“well-established”使句子更自然。）

so there is no need to advertise it. so it does not require additional promotion.（使用“additional promotion”使句子更自然。）

However, the teacher training program is less known, On the other hand, the teacher training program is less recognized,（使用“On the other hand”和“recognized”使句子更自然。）

so if teachers can be invited, teachers can draw attention a lot. so inviting teachers could significantly increase its visibility.（使用“significantly increase its visibility”使句子更自然。）

Thank you very much. Thank you for considering my suggestions.（使用“Thank you for considering my suggestions”使结尾更自然。）

修订版（140字）：

The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she believes that business leaders are always invited to speak at graduation ceremonies, and she suggests inviting more influential individuals from diverse professions. For example, teachers, who are influential and play a crucial role in our communities. Moreover, the business program is already large and well-established, so it does not require additional promotion. On the other hand, the teacher training program is less recognized, so inviting teachers could significantly increase its visibility. Thank you for considering my suggestions.

6.思维导图

• Disagreement

  • Business leaders always invited
  • Diverse professions
    • Example: Teachers
      • Influential
      • Crucial role in communities

• Business program

  • Large and well-established
  • No additional promotion needed

• Teacher training program

  • Less recognized
  • Inviting teachers increases visibility

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，以及提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上涵盖了所需的观点和原因。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化，例如可以更清晰地表达女生的观点和原因。为了提高话题发展质量，建议在练习时注意提高回答的条理性和连贯性。

5.语言使用

Original: It is proposed that the business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. The proposal suggests that a business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. (建议使用更自然的表达方式)

Original: Firstly, because they are the role models for students and they can help reinforce to the community. First, they serve as role models for students and can help strengthen the community's perception of success. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Original: However, in the listening part, the girls disagree with this. However, in the listening passage, the woman disagrees with this idea. (使用更准确的描述)

Original: Firstly, this is because it's always a business leader speaking at the graduation ceremony. Her first reason is that business leaders always speak at graduation ceremonies. (改进句子结构)

Original: And we should invite another influential people such as teachers to add the speaker. She suggests inviting other influential figures, like teachers, as speakers instead. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Original: This is because a business program is big enough and it didn't need more advertisement. This is because the business program is already well-established and doesn't need additional promotion. (改进句子结构和时态)

Original: However, the education program which is about the training teacher program is beneficial for the society. However, the education program, specifically the teacher training program, would benefit society. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that a business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. First, they serve as role models for students and can help strengthen the community's perception of success. However, in the listening passage, the woman disagrees with this idea. Her first reason is that business leaders always speak at graduation ceremonies. She suggests inviting other influential figures, like teachers, as speakers instead. This is because the business program is already well-established and doesn't need additional promotion. However, the education program, specifically the teacher training program, would benefit society. By inviting a local teacher to speak at the ceremony, it could draw attention to this lesser-known but valuable program and potentially attract more prospective students interested in pursuing a career in education.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Business leader as speaker
  • Role models
  • Strengthen community perception

• Woman's disagreement

  • Business leaders always speak
  • Need for variety

• Suggestion

  • Invite influential figures (teachers)
  • Benefit other programs (education)
    • Teacher training program
    • Attract prospective students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在表述观点时可以更加明确和具体。建议在练习时关注提供更多支持观点的细节和例子，以便让回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the announcement, somebody in the university asked the university to invite famous business leaders in the graduation ceremony so that make the business guru program more famous and have many beneficials. But the guru totally disagreed about this solution. First of all, she thinks that they have already invited many business leaders in the ceremony in the past few years and she thinks there should be some change, such as inviting some teachers. And also, a teacher is a very important role in the society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is big enough and very famous enough, but the education program is not.

Corrected Answer: In the announcementletter, somebody ina student from the university askedsuggested that the university invite famous business leaders toin the graduation ceremony,. This would makepromote the business guruprogram and have many beneficialsbenefits. However, the woman disagreed with this solutionproposal. Firstly, she believes that they have already invited numerous business leaders toin past ceremonies and that there should be a change, such as inviting teachers. Additionally, teachers play a crucial role in society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is already well-established and renowned, but the education program is not.

(原文中的“announcement”应改为“letter”，因为这是一封信。原文中的“somebody in”应改为“a student from”，以更准确地描述信的来源。原文中的“asked”应改为“suggested that”，以使句子更自然。原文中的“make”应改为“promote”，以使词汇更准确。原文中的“guru”应改为“program”，以避免混淆。原文中的“beneficials”应改为“benefits”，以使语法正确。原文中的“solution”应改为“proposal”，以使表达更准确。)

Revised Answer (140 words): In the letter, a student from the university suggested that the university invite famous business leaders to the graduation ceremony. This would promote the business program and provide many benefits. However, the woman disagreed with this proposal. Firstly, she believes that they have already invited numerous business leaders to past ceremonies, and it's time for a change, such as inviting teachers who play a crucial role in society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is already well-established and renowned, so it doesn't need further promotion. On the other hand, the education program could benefit from increased exposure and recognition. By inviting a local teacher to speak at the graduation ceremony, the university could draw attention to its excellent teacher training program and attract more prospective students interested in pursuing a career in education.

6.思维导图

• Letter

  • Suggestion
    • Invite business leaders
    • Promote business program

• Woman's disagreement

  • Already invited business leaders
  • Need for change
    • Invite teachers
      • Crucial role in society
  • Business program well-established
  • Education program needs exposure

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。建议练习更连贯的表达，减少不必要的停顿，以提高交付得分。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，观点之间的联系清晰，提供了充足的支持和例子。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

原文：A student suggests that the business leader should be invited to the graduation ceremony as they serve as an excellent role model for the business students and can help enhance the reputation of the business program in the community. The student suggests inviting a business leader to the graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community.（将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。）

原文：However, in a conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal. However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea.（将“in a conversation”改为“during their conversation”，使句子更具体；将“proposal”改为“idea”，使词汇更自然。）

原文：Firstly, she believes that since the university has invited business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, such as teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. First, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community.（将“Firstly”改为“First”，使语言更自然；将“has invited”改为“invites”，使时态一致。）

原文：Secondly, she believes that business programs are already very well known to the public. Second, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public.（将“Secondly”改为“Second”，使语言更自然；去掉“very”，使语言更简洁。）

原文：However, other programs, like the education program, are not as well known in the community. However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community.（将“like”改为“such as”，使语言更正式。）

原文：Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract more attention to the education program, which would be advantageous, and as a result, she disagrees with this proposal. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this idea.（将“attract”改为“draw”，使词汇更自然；将“advantageous”改为“beneficial”，使词汇更自然；将“proposal”改为“idea”，使词汇更自然。）

修订后的回答（140字）：

The student suggests inviting a business leader to the graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community. However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea. First, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. Second, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public. However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this idea.

6.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Student's suggestion
  • Business leader as a speaker

• Woman's disagreement

  • Reasons
    • Variety in professions
      • Teachers as an example
    • Business programs' reputation
      • Already well-known
    • Education program
      • Needs more attention

• Conclusion

  • Woman's opinion

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意掌握自然的语调和节奏，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答内容连贯、组织良好，观点之间关系明确，并且提供了足够的支持和例子。在这方面已经做得很好了。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在练习中多关注其他可能的观点和论据，使回答更加全面和深入。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: A student suggests that the university should invite a business leader to this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models for students. And it can reinforce to the community that their school's business program is the biggest and best. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with it because firstly, she thinks they can do with some variety. She means the university can also consider other professions which are influential and successful, like the teachers. And besides, she thinks their school's business program is already very famous. So the university can pay more attention to other good programs, like the teacher training program.

Corrected Answer: A student suggests that the university should invite a business leader to this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models for students, and it can reinforce to the community that their school's business program is the biggest and best(添加逗号，使句子更自然). However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with it because, firstly, she thinks they can do with some variety(添加逗号，使句子更自然). She means the university can also consider other professions which are influential and successful, like, teachers(添加逗号，使句子更自然). And besides, she thinks their school's business program is already very famous. So, the university can pay more attention to other good programs, like, the teacher training program(添加逗号，使句子更自然).

Revised Answer (140 words): A student suggests that the university should invite a business leader to this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models for students, and it can reinforce to the community that their school's business program is the biggest and best. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she believes that having a variety of speakers from different professions, such as teachers who are also influential and successful, would be more beneficial. Secondly, she points out that their school's business program is already well-known, so it does not need additional promotion from a graduation speaker. Instead, she suggests that the university should focus on promoting other valuable programs like the teacher training program, which could greatly benefit from increased exposure and recognition.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
    - Student's suggestion
    - Business leader as speaker

- Woman's disagreement
    - Variety in speakers
        - Different professions
        - Teachers as an example
    - Business program already famous
        - No need for additional promotion
    - Focus on other programs
        - Teacher training program
        - Benefit from exposure and recognition

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their ideas and incorporating more concrete examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

The university claims that they should invite a business leader to speak ceremonyat the ceremony(added "at the" for clarity), and the woman holds a negative view. The first reason she mentions is that every year the university brings a business leader and they should dohave(changed "do" to "have" for better word choice) some variety. They should invite a teacher, because the role of a teacher is really important, and they can bring many benefits if they invite a teacher. And the second reason is that the program is so big and not any benefit they can bring.(added a period for proper punctuation) And instead, she mentions that the university can invite a training program for the teachers, which will definitely bring many benefits to the community.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The woman disagrees with inviting a business leader to speak at the graduation ceremony, as suggested by the university. She believes that there should be more variety in the speakers chosen, such as inviting a teacher. She argues that teachers play an essential role in society and could offer valuable insights during their speech. Additionally, she contends that the business program is already well-established and would not significantly benefit from having a business leader as a speaker. Instead, she proposes that inviting someone from an educational background could help promote lesser-known programs like teacher training. By doing so, it would not only diversify the speakers but also provide valuable exposure to other programs within the university, ultimately benefiting both students and the community.

6.Mind Map

- Disagreement
  - Variety in speakers
    - Teachers
      - Essential role
      - Valuable insights
  - Business program
    - Well-established
    - No significant benefit
  - Alternative proposal
    - Promote lesser-known programs
      - Teacher training
    - Diversify speakers
    - Exposure and benefits for students and community

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语速较为稳定，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者练习更流畅地说话，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者的回答基本上是连贯和组织良好的。但是，可以尝试更清晰地阐述观点，并提供更多支持或例子来增强论据。例如，在提到教育项目时，可以详细说明该项目的优点以及为什么它需要更多关注。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The woman in the listening part agreed with the idea in the letter because the graduation speaker is always business successful people and she thinks the university should let other people, other influential and important people to give the graduation speech like teachers Additionally, the business program is already well-known, it doesn't need advertisements by the graduation speaker

Corrected Answer: The woman in the listening part disagreed with the idea in the letter because the graduation speaker is always a successful business person, and she thinks the university should invite other influential and important individuals to give the graduation speech, such as teachers. Additionally, since the business program is already well-known, it doesn't need further promotion through a graduation speaker. (在原文中，女士的观点应为“不同意”，而非“同意”。同时，对于毕业演讲者的描述和句子结构进行了修改，使其更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman in the listening part disagreed with Ryan's idea of inviting a business leader as a graduation speaker. She believes that there should be more variety in choosing speakers from different professions, such as teachers, who are also influential and important individuals. She argues that every year, it's always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies, which lacks diversity. Furthermore, she points out that since the university's business program is already well-known and highly regarded, it doesn't require additional promotion through a graduation speaker. Instead, she suggests that other programs like their education program could benefit from increased publicity. Inviting a local teacher to speak at the ceremony would draw attention to this lesser-known but valuable program and help promote it to prospective students.

6.思维导图

- Disagreed with the idea
  - Graduation speaker always a business person
  - Lacks diversity

- Suggests other professions
  - Teachers
  - Influential and important individuals

- Business program already well-known
  - Doesn't need further promotion

- Education program could benefit
  - Increased publicity
  - Inviting a local teacher as a speaker

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中。但在某些地方，发言者的停顿稍显不自然。建议发言者在练习时注意自己的发音和停顿，以提高整体表达效果。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的阐述，能够明确表达女士的观点及理由。然而，在提供支持或举例时，可以更加具体和详细。建议在练习时尝试增加一些具体事例或详细描述，以使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：A student suggests that the graduation speaker should be a business leader, because business leaders are excellent role models who can represent professional success. The student suggests that a business leader should be the graduation speaker, as they are excellent role models representing professional success.（将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅）

And also, this action can help reinforce to the community that our business program is the best one. Additionally, this choice would emphasize to the community that our business program is the best.（使用了更高级的词汇 "Additionally" 和 "emphasize"，并调整了句子结构）

However, the woman in the conversation doesn't like this idea. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea.（使用了更高级的词汇 "Nonetheless" 和 "disagrees"）

First off, she says that it's always business people who speak at graduation ceremony, Firstly, she mentions that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies,（使用了更自然的表达方式 "Firstly" 和 "mentions"）

and other professions like teachers should also be considered because they are also influential and successful, so the university should consider other professions as well. and believes other professions, such as teachers, should be considered due to their influence and success; thus, the university should explore alternative options.（调整了句子结构，使其更自然流畅，并使用了更高级的词汇 "believes" 和 "explore alternative options"）

And also, she says that the program is already very big and well-known, so it doesn't really need extra attention. Furthermore, she states that the program is already prominent and well-known, eliminating the need for additional attention.（使用了更高级的词汇 "Furthermore"、"prominent" 和 "eliminating"，并调整了句子结构）

But the educational program can benefit from this publicity because it's not well-known enough, so local teachers can really bring more attention to it. However, the educational program could benefit from such publicity since it lacks sufficient recognition; thus, local teachers could effectively draw more attention to it.（调整了句子结构，使其更自然流畅，并使用了更高级的词汇 "lacks sufficient recognition" 和 "effectively draw"）

Therefore, the woman in the conversation doesn't like this idea. Consequently, the woman in the conversation opposes this idea.（使用了更高级的词汇 "Consequently" 和 "opposes"）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student suggests that a business leader should be the graduation speaker, as they are excellent role models representing professional success. Additionally, this choice would emphasize to the community that our business program is the best. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she mentions that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies and believes other professions, such as teachers, should be considered due to their influence and success; thus, the university should explore alternative options. Furthermore, she states that the program is already prominent and well-known, eliminating the need for additional attention. However, the educational program could benefit from such publicity since it lacks sufficient recognition; thus, local teachers could effectively draw more attention to it. Consequently, the woman in the conversation opposes this idea.

6.思维导图

- Student's suggestion
  - Business leader as graduation speaker
  - Role models representing professional success
  - Emphasize the quality of the business program

- Woman's disagreement
  - Business people always speak at graduation ceremonies
  - Consider other professions (e.g., teachers)
    - Influence and success
    - Explore alternative options
  - Business program already prominent and well-known
    - No need for additional attention
  - Educational program could benefit from publicity
    - Lacks sufficient recognition
    - Local teachers could effectively draw more attention

- Woman's opposition to the idea

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result in inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should focus on proper punctuation usage and work on accurate pronunciation to avoid spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details or examples to further support the woman's opinion. To enhance topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons behind the woman's disagreement with the proposal and provide more concrete examples of how other professions could be influential speakers at the graduation ceremony.

5.Language Use

The student proposed that they should have a business leader for the graduation ceremony because a business leader is always means for professional success and this will reinforce the community that their program is the best and the biggest program of the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she thinks business people always come for the graduation ceremony. They should have other occupations and also influential jobs to speak for the graduation ceremony like teachers. Secondly, she thinks that the program is already quite big and well-known and it doesn't need to have a business leader on the ceremony to attract extra attention. However, the education of the student is very important.

The student proposed that they should have a business leader prominent business figure for the graduation ceremony because a business leader prominent business figure always means symbolizes professional success(changed "means" to "symbolizes" for better word choice), and this will reinforce(added comma for clarity) to the community that their program is the best and biggest in the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she believes(changed "thinks" to "believes" for variety) that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies(clarified context). They should invite speakers from other influential professions, such as teachers. Secondly, she contends that since the program is already well-established and widely recognized, it doesn't require a business leader at the ceremony to garner additional attention. Instead, she emphasizes the importance of focusing on students' education.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student proposed that they should have a prominent business figure for the graduation ceremony because such a figure symbolizes professional success, and this will reinforce to the community that their program is the best and biggest in the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she believes that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies and suggests inviting speakers from other influential professions, such as teachers. Secondly, she contends that since the program is already well-established and widely recognized, it doesn't require a business leader at the ceremony to garner additional attention. Instead, she emphasizes the importance of focusing on students' education and believes that showcasing other professions would provide a more diverse and enriching experience for graduates.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Prominent business figure
  - Symbolizes professional success
  - Reinforce program's reputation

- Woman's disagreement
  - Business people always speak at ceremonies
  - Invite other influential professions (e.g., teachers)

- Program's current status
  - Well-established and widely recognized
  - Doesn't require additional attention from a business leader

- Emphasis on students' education
  - Showcasing other professions for diversity and enrichment

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语速和语调基本上是清晰流畅的，但偶尔会有些停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。此外，尝试改善发音准确性以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 Regarding topic development, the speaker provided a coherent response and mentioned the woman's disagreement with the idea of inviting business leaders to the graduation ceremony. However, the response could be better organized by clearly stating the woman's opinion and then elaborating on her reasons for holding that opinion. To improve, the speaker should focus on providing more specific examples from the listening passage to support their points, such as mentioning how inviting a local teacher could draw attention to the education program. This would make the response more well-rounded and persuasive.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading text says that the businessmen should be invited to the graduate ceremony more because of their success, and for instance, it would enhance the community for the business. The reading passage suggests that business leaders should be invited to the graduation ceremony due to their success, which would benefit the business community.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，同时保持语法准确性。）

But the woman in the lecture disagreed with that. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea.（用词更准确，表达更自然。）

She thinks that there are already plenty of businessmen being invited to the ceremony because it is always the businessmen do it, and she wants to invite some teachers to participate in this. She believes that many business leaders have already been invited to such ceremonies and suggests inviting teachers instead.（简化句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

And that will make the teachers more properly train our students in it. This would highlight the importance of teachers in shaping students' education.（改进句子结构和用词，使表达更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage suggests that business leaders should be invited to the graduation ceremony due to their success, which would benefit the business community. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea. She believes that many business leaders have already been invited to such ceremonies and suggests inviting teachers instead. This would highlight the importance of teachers in shaping students' education. The woman also argues that the business program is already well-known and does not need additional publicity from a graduation speaker. On the other hand, the education program could benefit from the increased attention that a local teacher's speech would bring. In conclusion, the woman's opinion is that inviting a teacher to speak at the graduation ceremony would provide more variety and help promote the university's education program.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Business leaders
  - Graduation ceremony
  - Success
  - Benefit business community

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the idea
  - Many business leaders already invited
  - Suggests inviting teachers instead
  - Importance of teachers in education

- Education Program
  - Needs more attention and publicity
  - Local teacher's speech would help promote the program

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the points made. To strengthen topic development, the speaker should consider incorporating more detailed explanations or examples to further illustrate their points and make their argument more persuasive.

5.Language Use

Original: The newspaper stressed that the university should invite a business leader to be graduation speakers. The newspaper emphasized that the university should invite a business leader as the graduation speaker. (Changed "stressed" to "emphasized" and "to be graduation speakers" to "as the graduation speaker" for better sentence structure and clarity.)

Original: First, he points out that although business leaders represent the meaning of professional success, the graduation ceremony always invites business leaders. First, she points out that even though business leaders embody professional success, they are consistently invited to speak at graduation ceremonies. (Corrected pronoun from "he" to "she," rephrased for clarity and improved sentence structure.)

Original: Moreover, teachers who are influential and place an important role in real world can also be an excellent alternative for students to invite. Furthermore, influential teachers who play a significant role in the real world could also be excellent alternatives for students to consider inviting. (Improved sentence structure and word choice.)

Original: Second, the woman emphasizes that advertising business programs cannot attract more students as they are already well-known, but advertisements on teacher training programs will be more efficient for students to attract more teachers to enroll in these programs. Second, the woman emphasizes that promoting business programs may not attract more students since they are already well-known; however, advertising teacher training programs could be more effective in attracting prospective teachers to enroll. (Improved sentence structure and clarity.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The newspaper emphasized that the university should invite a business leader as the graduation speaker. The woman disagrees with this suggestion. First, she points out that even though business leaders embody professional success, they are consistently invited to speak at graduation ceremonies. Furthermore, influential teachers who play a significant role in the real world could also be excellent alternatives for students to consider inviting. Second, the woman emphasizes that promoting business programs may not attract more students since they are already well-known; however, advertising teacher training programs could be more effective in attracting prospective teachers to enroll. By considering these points, the university could diversify its choice of graduation speakers and better showcase its various programs, ultimately achieving a more balanced and engaging ceremony for all attendees.

6.Mind Map

- Disagreement
  - Business leaders consistently invited
  - Influential teachers as alternatives

- Reasons
  - Business programs already well-known
  - Teacher training programs need promotion

- Suggestion
  - Diversify graduation speakers
  - Showcase various programs

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度较好，但仍有一些不必要的停顿。建议发言者继续练习，提高语速和连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意正确发音，避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论据方面还有待加强。建议发言者在回答问题时更加关注逻辑性和条理性，明确表达观点，并给出更具说服力的例子和论据来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The woman opposes the proposal for two reasons. First of all, she thinks the university always invites business executives to give a speech, but other professionals can't be as influential. The woman opposes the proposal for two reasons. First of all, she believes that the university consistently invites business executives to deliver speeches, while other professionals who could be equally influential are overlooked.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，并使用更高级的词汇。）

And she suggests the campus to invite teachers, for example. For instance, she suggests that the university should consider inviting teachers.（改进句子结构，使其更自然。）

What's more, she thinks the business program in this university is big enough, Furthermore, she believes that the business program at this university is already well-established,（使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

and some other department also needs attention, and that other departments also require attention,（改进句子结构，使其更自然。）

like the university can ask professionals in educational background to give a speech, such as inviting professionals with an educational background to deliver speeches,（改进句子结构，使其更自然。）

and that will be contributing to the educational program in the school, which is also a great one. which would contribute to the promotion of the university's education program, which is also exceptional.（使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman opposes the proposal for two reasons. First of all, she believes that the university consistently invites business executives to deliver speeches, while other professionals who could be equally influential are overlooked. For instance, she suggests that the university should consider inviting teachers. Furthermore, she believes that the business program at this university is already well-established, and that other departments also require attention, such as inviting professionals with an educational background to deliver speeches, which would contribute to the promotion of the university's education program, which is also exceptional.

6.思维导图

- Woman's Opinion
  - Opposes proposal
  - Two reasons
    - Consistent invitation of business executives
      - Overlooking other influential professionals
        - Example: Teachers
    - Business program well-established
      - Other departments require attention
        - Example: Education program
          - Inviting professionals with educational background
          - Promotion of the university's education program

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，这位考生的发言较为清晰，语速稳定，但偶尔有停顿。建议考生在练习时注意提高发音准确性，避免不必要的停顿，以提高整体表达能力。

4.话题发展 The speaking answer provides a clear opinion of the woman and explains her reasons for holding that opinion. However, it could be more coherent and well-organized by connecting the ideas more effectively and providing more specific examples or support for the woman's opinion. To improve, the speaker should focus on creating a more logical flow of ideas and elaborating on the reasons given by the woman in the conversation.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The policy that the university should invite a business leader to speak at this year's graduation ceremony. The woman disagrees with the idea of inviting a business leader to speak at the graduation ceremony. (原文没有明确表示女士的观点，修改后更清晰地表达了女士的观点。)

Corrected Answer: The woman disagrees with the idea of inviting a business leader to speak at the graduation ceremony.

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman expresses her disagreement with the idea of inviting a business leader to speak at this year's graduation ceremony. She believes that other professions, such as teachers, can also be considered influential and successful. She argues that the university should consider having someone from another profession speak since business leaders always do it. Additionally, she thinks that the business program is already quite big and well-known, so it doesn't need the extra attention or free advertising that a graduation speaker would bring. Instead, she suggests that the education program could benefit from the free publicity, as it is a great teacher training program but not as well-known. Having a local teacher as a speaker could draw attention to it and help promote the education program at the university.

6.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - Inviting business leader

- Other professions
  - Teachers
  - Influential and successful

- Business program
  - Already big and well-known

- Education program
  - Benefit from free publicity
  - Local teacher as speaker

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 话题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少停顿。同时注意一些发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在提到与教育相关的观点时，可以更详细地说明为什么教育专业也应该有机会在毕业典礼上发言。此外，在总结时可以更明确地指出女生的观点和原因。为了提高话题发展能力，建议多加练习并尝试使用更多的连接词和例子来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original: In the ratings, In the conversation, the students proposed that the school should let business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies because they are successful and influential and they can advertise in the school's business program. The woman in the conversation doesn't agree with this proposal. She thinks that for the first reasons, there is always business students who speak at the ceremonies and it is not fair because other professions are also successful, like educational or teachers. They don't have the chance to speak at the ceremonies. And the second reason is that the business program in the school is already big and well-known. It doesn't really need any advertising. But there are educational programs that are really good but not well-known by lots of people. They are the programs that should be advertised.

(将“ratings”改为“conversation”，因为这里是在讨论一封信，而不是评分。)

Revised (140 words):

In the conversation, students proposed inviting business leaders to speak at graduation ceremonies due to their success, influence, and ability to promote the school's business program. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. She believes that firstly, it's unfair as business speakers always dominate these events, while other successful professionals like educators don't get a chance to speak. Secondly, she argues that the already prominent business program doesn't need further advertising, whereas lesser-known but high-quality educational programs could benefit from increased exposure. Thus, she suggests giving other professions an opportunity to speak at graduation ceremonies to promote a more diverse range of programs.

6.思维导图

• Conversation
  • Business leaders
    • Success
    • Influence
    • Promote business program
  • Woman's disagreement
    • Unfairness
      • Dominance of business speakers
      • Other successful professionals (educators)
    • Advertising needs
      • Prominent business program
      • Lesser-known educational programs

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方有不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高语音连贯性和减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的阐述，提出了与女士观点相关的理由。然而，在组织结构上还有改进空间。建议发言者在练习时注意明确表达观点，并在给出理由时保持条理清晰。同时，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来增强论述之间的联系。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: opinion in the letter. The woman expresses her opinion on the idea presented in the letter. (修改了句子结构，使其更自然) The woman they said there is always a business person to speak in the year's graduation ceremony and it's time to have a change. Maybe they can give the chance to other influential jobs such as teachers. As for the statement that in the letter that the business person can reinforce business program, the woman states that the business program was already big and doesn't need to be improved by the free advertisement. However, education, because it's not well known, it can benefit greatly from this free advertisement and gain popularity.

Revised Answer: The woman expresses her opinion on the idea presented in the letter, stating that there is always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies, and it's time for a change. She suggests giving opportunities to other influential professions, such as teachers. Regarding the statement in the letter about a business person reinforcing the business program, she argues that since it is already well-established, it doesn't need further improvement through free advertisement. On the other hand, she believes that education, being less well-known, could greatly benefit from this exposure and gain popularity.

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman disagrees with the idea presented in the letter and believes it's time for a change since there is always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies. She suggests considering other influential professions like teachers for this role. She argues that although having a business leader as a speaker might reinforce the business program, it is already well-established and doesn't need further improvement through free advertisement. Instead, she believes that education, being less well-known, could greatly benefit from this exposure and gain popularity. By inviting a local teacher as a speaker, the university could draw attention to its education program, which would be a more effective use of the opportunity.

6.思维导图

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the letter
  - Time for a change

- Other professions
  - Teachers as speakers

- Business program
  - Already well-established
  - Doesn't need free advertisement

- Education program
  - Less well-known
  - Could benefit from exposure

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3.5

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 4

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：27

3.表达 回答中的表达相对清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议在练习时注意保持流利的语言表达和一致的语速，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容完整，结构清晰，观点之间的联系明确。在主题发展方面已经做得很好。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在练习中加入更多具体的例子和细节来支持观点，使回答更加丰富和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：A student proposes that the university should invite business leaders to the graduation ceremony as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community. A student suggests that inviting business leaders to the graduation ceremony would be beneficial, as they serve as excellent role models for business students and can enhance the reputation of the business program within the community.（将"proposes"改为"suggests"，使语言更自然；将"as they are"改为"as they serve as"，使句子更通顺；将"improve"改为"enhance"，词汇更高级。）

原文：However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal. Nonetheless, in their conversation, the woman disagrees with this suggestion.（将"However"改为"Nonetheless"，词汇更高级；将"during their conversation"改为"in their conversation"，使句子更通顺；将“proposal”改为“suggestion”，避免重复。）

原文：Firstly, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. Firstly, she contends that as the university invites business leaders annually, it should also contemplate inviting prominent figures from other professions, such as teachers, who significantly influence the community.（将“believes”改为“contends”，词汇更高级；将“invites”改为“inviting”，使句子更通顺；将“like”改为“such as”，使语言更自然；将“have a significant impact”改为“significantly influence”，使句子更简洁。）

原文：Second, she believes that business programs are already very well-known to the public. Second, she asserts that business programs are already widely recognized by the public.（将“believes”改为“asserts”，词汇更高级；将“very well-known”改为“widely recognized”，使语言更自然。）

原文：However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community. Nonetheless, other programs, like the education program, lack similar recognition within the community.（将"However"改为"Nonetheless"，词汇更高级；将"are not as well-known"改为"lack similar recognition"，使句子更简洁。）

原文：Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to this ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this proposal. Consequently, she maintains that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract greater attention to the education program, yielding benefits and leading her to disagree with the suggestion.（将“believes”改为“maintains”，词汇更高级；将“draw more attention”改为“attract greater attention”，使语言更自然；将“which would be beneficial”改为“yielding benefits”，使句子更简洁；将“proposal”改为“suggestion”，避免重复。）

修订后的回答（140词）：

A student suggests that inviting business leaders to the graduation ceremony would be beneficial, as they serve as excellent role models for business students and can enhance the reputation of the business program within the community. Nonetheless, in their conversation, the woman disagrees with this suggestion. Firstly, she contends that as the university invites business leaders annually, it should also contemplate inviting prominent figures from other professions, such as teachers, who significantly influence the community. Second, she asserts that business programs are already widely recognized by the public. Nonetheless, other programs, like the education program, lack similar recognition within the community. Consequently, she maintains that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract greater attention to the education program, yielding benefits and leading her to disagree with the suggestion.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Student's suggestion
  - Business leaders as role models
  - Enhance business program reputation

- Woman's disagreement
  - Need for variety in speakers
    - Inviting prominent figures from other professions
    - Teachers as influential individuals
  - Business programs already widely recognized
  - Education program lacks recognition
    - Attract greater attention by inviting teachers
    - Yielding benefits for the education program

7.关键词