TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample: The man expresses his opinion about the plan described in the article.Briefly summarize the plan. Then state his opinion about the plan and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

整体而言，发言者的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者在话题发展方面表现尚可，但仍有改进空间。建议发言者在组织回答时更加注重逻辑性和条理性，确保观点之间的联系更加紧密。此外，在提供支持或举例时，可以尝试给出更具体的信息，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The passage discussed the summer study abroad in Peru is cancelled because it's low enrollment due to its lack of resources and funding, and also the option for the other Spanish Peru summer. The man in the conversation didn't think it's a great idea. Firstly, he believed that it still leaves time to recruit more applicants. Furthermore, the high requirements prevent these applicants, including the three recommendations and high grades. Secondly, it's not enough to just take their language course. It should be enjoyed in the culture, which to make it a real plan.

Corrected Answer: The passage discussed the that summer study abroad in Peru is cancelled canceled because it's of its low enrollment due to its lack of resources and funding, and also the option for the other Spanish Peru language summer programs. The man in the conversation didn't think it'sit was a great idea.(原文中的“the”应改为“that”，因为这里是引述句子。此外，将“cancelled”改为美式拼写“canceled”。将“it's”改为“of its”，使句子更通顺。将“Peru”改为“language”，以避免重复。最后，将“it's”改为过去时态的“it was”。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The passage discussed that the summer study abroad program in Peru was canceled due to its low enrollment, which resulted from a lack of resources and funding. Additionally, the university offered other Spanish language summer programs as alternatives. The man in the conversation disagreed with the decision to cancel the program. He believed that there was still time to recruit more applicants by relaxing the stringent requirements, such as obtaining three recommendation letters and maintaining high grades. Moreover, he argued that merely participating in a language course was insufficient; students should also immerse themselves in the local culture to make the experience truly worthwhile. He expressed his interest in Peru's unique history and culture, which could not be found in other Spanish-speaking countries, making the cancellation particularly disappointing for him.

6.思维导图

• Cancellation

  • Low enrollment
  • Lack of resources and funding

• Alternative Spanish language programs

• Man's disagreement

  • Time to recruit more applicants
  • Relaxing requirements
    • Recommendation letters
    • High grades
  • Cultural immersion
    • Interest in Peru's history and culture

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，说话者的语言流利，语速较为稳定，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方，标点使用不当可能导致了不恰当的停顿。此外，拼写错误可能是发音不准确的结果。建议说话者练习更清晰、准确的发音，并注意在适当的地方停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，说话者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，观点之间关系明确，也给出了足够的支持和例子。但仍有改进空间。建议说话者在总结计划时更详细地描述阅读材料中提到的具体措施，并在陈述男生观点时更明确地解释其原因。这样可以使回答更加完整和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: The reading materials propose that the club will initiate an eco-friendly program. The reading passage states that the university plans to implement an environmentally friendly project.（将“club”改为“university”，使描述更准确；将“propose”改为“states”，使表述更自然。）

Original: Firstly, the location will be located at the roof. First, the solar panels will be installed on the roof of the student center.（将“location will be located at”改为“solar panels will be installed on”，使表述更清晰。）

Original: Secondly, the outdoor seating area will be replaced. Second, the outdoor seating area on the roof will be removed to make room for the solar panels.（将“replaced”改为“removed”，并补充描述，使表述更准确。）

Original: He thinks it will help because this year is very bright and the location is very good. He believes it will be beneficial due to the sunny weather and ideal location.（将“this year is very bright”改为“the sunny weather”，使表述更自然；将“the location is very good”改为“ideal location”，使表述更准确。）

Original: There is no need for making air conditioner. The university can save on air conditioning costs.（将原句改为“the university can save on air conditioning costs”，使表述更清晰。）

Original: But in the evening, it's very cool and he can see all the campus in the roof. However, in the evenings, it is cooler and offers a great view of the entire campus from the roof.（将“he can see all the campus in the roof”改为“offers a great view of the entire campus from the roof”，使表述更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage states that the university plans to implement an environmentally friendly project. First, the solar panels will be installed on the roof of the student center. Second, the outdoor seating area on the roof will be removed to make room for the solar panels. The man agrees with the first idea. He believes it will be beneficial due to the sunny weather and ideal location. The university can save on air conditioning costs. However, he has mixed feelings about removing the outdoor seating area. In his opinion, although it is hot during daytime, in the evenings it is cooler and offers a great view of the entire campus from the roof. Despite his concerns about losing this space, he still thinks that overall, implementing solar panels is a good idea.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - University's environmentally friendly project
  - Solar panels installation
  - Removal of outdoor seating area

- Man's Opinion
  - Agrees with solar panels installation
    - Sunny weather
    - Ideal location
    - Saving on air conditioning costs
  - Mixed feelings about removing seating area
    - Cooler in the evenings
    - Great view of the campus from the roof

- Overall, good idea despite concerns about losing seating area.

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大部分都很清晰，但有些地方需要改进。例如，在一些词汇和短语之间需要适当的停顿，以提高整体的流畅度。此外，注意正确发音一些单词，如“air conditioner”。建议多加练习，提高发音准确性和语言流利度。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论证方面还有待加强。首先，在总结阅读材料时，可以更明确地指出学校计划在学生中心的屋顶安装太阳能板，并移除室外座位区。然后，在陈述男生观点时，可以更清晰地表达他对计划的支持和担忧。例如，在谈到他对太阳能板的支持时，可以强调这将有助于节省能源和降低空调成本；而在谈到他对移除座位区的担忧时，可以指出这将影响到学生们在傍晚时分欣赏美景和呼吸新鲜空气的机会。建议在练习时注意提高回答的条理性和论证的充分性。

5.语言使用

Original: The reading materials propose that the club will initiate an eco-friendly program. The reading passage mentions that the university plans to implement an environmentally friendly project. (将“club”改为“university”，使表述更准确。同时，调整句子结构，使语言更自然。)

Original: Firstly, the location will be located at the roof. First, the solar panels will be installed on the roof. (调整句子结构，使表述更清晰。)

Original: Secondly, the outdoor seating area will be replaced. Second, the outdoor seating area will be removed. (将“replaced”改为“removed”，使表述更准确。)

Original: There is no need for making air conditioner. This could reduce the need for air conditioning. (调整句子结构，使语言更自然。)

Original: But in the evening, it's very cool and he can see all the campus in the roof. However, in the evening, it's cooler and students can enjoy a panoramic view of the campus from the rooftop. (调整句子结构，使语言更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage mentions that the university plans to implement an environmentally friendly project. First, the solar panels will be installed on the roof of the student center. Second, the outdoor seating area will be removed. The man agrees with the first idea, as he believes it will help save energy and reduce the need for air conditioning due to the bright and sunny weather. However, he has concerns about removing the seating area. Although it is hot during the day, in the evening, it's cooler and students can enjoy a panoramic view of the campus from the rooftop. The man appreciates having a place to relax and breathe fresh air after a long day of classes. Despite his concerns, he thinks that overall, the plan is a good idea.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - University's plan
    - Environmentally friendly project
      - Solar panels installation
      - Outdoor seating area removal

- Man's Opinion
  - Agreement
    - Energy saving
    - Reduced air conditioning needs
  - Concerns
    - Loss of seating area
    - Evening relaxation and views

- Overall Assessment
  - Good idea despite concerns

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and minimize unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help to avoid any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons for their opinion and providing more concrete evidence or examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original: The reading passage announces the change to the campus. To be more specific, it announces the close of student vegetable garden. In the conversation, the man strongly opposes this change for following two reasons. Firstly, he thinks that instead of giving the vegetable garden up, the university should have given students more guidance and instructions on planting vegetables. In addition, he thinks that this place is not ideal for other purposes. Since it is exposed to sunshine, it makes the space an ideal one for growing vegetables. However, the student might prefer to hang out at a more shaded place.

Corrected: The reading passage announces thea change to the campus(use "a" instead of "the" for a more natural-sounding language). To be more specific, it announces the closeclosure of student vegetable gardenthe student vegetable garden(use "closure" instead of "close" and add "the" for proper grammar). In the conversation, the man strongly opposes this change for following two reasonstwo main reasons(use "two main reasons" for a smoother transition). Firstly, he thinks that instead of giving the vegetable garden upup on the vegetable garden, the university should have given students more guidance and instructions on planting vegetables(use "up on" for a more natural flow). In addition, he thinks that this place is not ideal for other purposes. Since it is exposed to sunshine, it makes the space an ideal one for growing vegetables. However, the students might prefer to hang out at a more shaded place(add "s" to "student" for proper grammar).

Revised (140 words): The reading passage announces a change to the campus, specifically the closure of the student vegetable garden. In the conversation, the man strongly opposes this change for two main reasons. First, he believes that instead of giving up on the vegetable garden, the university should have provided students with more guidance and instructions on planting vegetables. This would have allowed them to better understand and manage their plots. Second, he thinks that this sunny location is not ideal for other purposes, such as studying or socializing. The space is perfect for growing vegetables due to its exposure to sunlight; however, students might prefer to hang out in more shaded areas for comfort. Therefore, he argues that the university should reconsider its decision and continue supporting the vegetable garden initiative.

6.Mind Map

- Change to campus
  - Closure of student vegetable garden

- Man's opposition
  - Reason 1: Lack of guidance and instructions
    - University should provide more support
  - Reason 2: Location not ideal for other purposes
    - Sunny for vegetables, but students prefer shade

- Suggestion
  - Reconsider decision and support vegetable garden initiative

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不自然的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但在某些地方可以进一步加强。例如，在总结男子对计划的看法时，可以更明确地表达他的观点。此外，在解释他给出的理由时，可以提供更多具体细节和例子来支持观点。建议在练习时关注这些方面以提高话题发展水平。

5.语言使用

原文：The reading materials propose that they will reduce the max-minimum work hours for students. The reading passage states that the university plans to reduce the maximum work hours for students. (将“materials”改为“passage”，将“propose”改为“states”，将“max-minimum”改为“maximum”，使句子更清晰、准确。)
Firstly, they will reduce 20 hours a week to 10 hours a week. First, the weekly work hours will be reduced from 20 to 10. (简化句子结构，使其更自然。)
Secondly, it can provide more on-campus jobs for more students. Second, this change will create more on-campus job opportunities for students. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)
But the main dissenters agree that, firstly, they will have an upside effect because students want to earn money. However, the man disagrees and argues that, first, it may have a negative impact as students need to earn money. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)
So they have to find another off-campus job. As a result, they might seek off-campus jobs instead. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)
To go to the off-campus job, they should spend more time. This would require additional time for commuting to off-campus jobs. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)
Secondly, it is not very hard for students to find a job. Second, he believes that it is not difficult for students to find on-campus jobs. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)
Though it is desirable jobs, for example, in the library jobs, they also can't find enough students to do the job. Even though some positions may be less desirable, such as library jobs, there are still available positions that students are not filling. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)
So it will be available for students to find a job. Therefore, finding a job on campus should not be an issue for students. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)

修订版（140字）：

The reading passage states that the university plans to reduce the maximum work hours for students. First, the weekly work hours will be reduced from 20 to 10. Second, this change will create more on-campus job opportunities for students. However, the man disagrees and argues that, first, it may have a negative impact as students need to earn money. As a result, they might seek off-campus jobs instead. This would require additional time for commuting to off-campus jobs. Second, he believes that it is not difficult for students to find on-campus jobs. Even though some positions may be less desirable, such as library jobs, there are still available positions that students are not filling. Therefore, finding a job on campus should not be an issue for students.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Reduce maximum work hours
  - More on-campus job opportunities

- Man's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the plan
  - Reasons:
    - Negative impact due to students' need to earn money
      - Seek off-campus jobs instead
      - Additional commuting time
    - Not difficult to find on-campus jobs
      - Less desirable positions still available

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位考生的回答相对清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作调整以提高流畅度。建议考生注意在适当的地方停顿，以便更好地表达自己的观点。此外，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展的角度来看，考生的回答基本上是连贯和有组织的。然而，可以在解释男子对计划的看法时提供更多具体细节和例子。例如，在谈到学生可能会选择校外工作时，可以进一步说明这将如何影响他们的学习和生活。总之，尽量在回答中提供更多相关信息和支持观点的例子，以便使回答更加完整和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter proposed that the school should set a limit for on-campus job hours. The reading passage proposes that the university should set a limit for on-campus job hours.（原文中的“letter”应改为“reading passage”，同时将“school”改为“university”，以保持与题目一致。）

This way, the students can focus on their schoolwork, and it can help the students by giving them more jobs. By doing so, students can concentrate on their academic work, and it will create more job opportunities for them.（将原文中的“this way”改为“by doing so”，使句子更自然；同时，用“concentrate on their academic work”替换“focus on their schoolwork”，并用“create more job opportunities”替换“giving them more jobs”，以提高词汇的多样性。）

However, the man does not like this idea. Nonetheless, the man disagrees with this plan.（用“Nonetheless”替换“However”，使句子更自然；同时，用“disagrees with this plan”替换“does not like this idea”，以提高词汇的多样性。）

It was due to the fact that more students want to earn money, and they will do this by getting off-campus jobs instead of on-campus jobs, and they will have to spend time traveling from point A to point B even though their job hours are still the same. This is because many students still want to earn money, so they will resort to off-campus jobs instead of on-campus ones, resulting in additional time spent on commuting even if their working hours remain the same.（将原文中的“It was due to the fact that”改为“This is because”，使句子更自然；同时，用“resort to off-campus jobs”替换“getting off-campus jobs”，并用“resulting in additional time spent on commuting”替换“they will have to spend time traveling from point A to point B”，以提高词汇的多样性。）

Besides, he had never heard of a student that is really hard to find a position. Moreover, he has never heard of a student who has difficulty finding a job on campus.（将原文中的“Besides”改为“Moreover”，使句子更自然；同时，用“has difficulty finding a job on campus”替换“is really hard to find a position”，以提高词汇的多样性。）

For instance, the library hadn't found more people to work in that place, so in his perspective, he doesn't think that this whole thing will be a problem. For example, the library has not been able to hire more staff; therefore, from his perspective, this issue does not seem problematic.（将原文中的“the library hadn't found more people to work in that place”改为“the library has not been able to hire more staff”，使句子更自然；同时，用“this issue does not seem problematic”替换“he doesn't think that this whole thing will be a problem”，以提高词汇的多样性。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage proposes that the university should set a limit for on-campus job hours. By doing so, students can concentrate on their academic work, and it will create more job opportunities for them. Nonetheless, the man disagrees with this plan. This is because many students still want to earn money, so they will resort to off-campus jobs instead of on-campus ones, resulting in additional time spent on commuting even if their working hours remain the same. Moreover, he has never heard of a student who has difficulty finding a job on campus. For example, the library has not been able to hire more staff; therefore, from his perspective, this issue does not seem problematic.

6.思维导图

• Reading passage

  • Limit on-campus job hours
  • Focus on academic work
  • Create more job opportunities

• Man's opinion

  • Disagrees with the plan
  • Reasons:
    • Students still want to earn money
    • Resort to off-campus jobs
    • Additional time spent on commuting
    • No difficulty in finding on-campus jobs
    • Example: Library not able to hire more staff

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语速较为稳定，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。此外，发言者需要注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, the speaker provides a coherent response that summarizes the plan and states the man's opinion about it. However, the response could be better organized and more focused on the reasons for the man's opinion. To improve, the speaker should clearly state the man's opinion at the beginning of the response and then provide specific examples or reasons to support it, making sure to connect these ideas in a logical manner.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: According to the announcement, the university decided to cancel a study abroad program because the enrollment number is too low, so the university is unwilling to fund that program. According to the announcement, the university decided to cancel a study abroad program because the enrollment numbers were too low, making the university unwilling to fund that program. (将"is"改为"were"，使句子与前文保持一致。将"number"改为"numbers"，使其与后面的复数形式保持一致。)

However, the students can take another program like in Spanish. However, students can participate in other Spanish-language programs instead. (将"take another program like in Spanish"改为"participate in other Spanish-language programs instead"，使表达更清晰。)

The men disagree with that announcement. The man disagrees with this decision. (将"men"改为"man"，使其与原文保持一致。将"announcement"改为"decision"，使表达更准确。)

Firstly, the man thinks there are still plenty of time to find enough candidates, and the current requirements that need students to have high grades and three recommendation letters is too hard. Firstly, the man believes there is still ample time to find enough candidates, and the current requirements, which demand high grades and three recommendation letters, are too stringent. (将"thinks"改为"believes"，使表达更准确。将"plenty of time"改为"ample time"，使表达更地道。将"is too hard"改为"are too stringent"，使表达更准确。)

So if the university can relax the requirement and do more advertisements, there would be more students to sign up for this program. Therefore, if the university could relax the requirements and increase advertising, more students might sign up for this program. (将"requirement"改为"requirements"，与前文保持一致。将"do more advertisements"改为"increase advertising"，使表达更地道。)

And secondly, the man lacks parole because of his culture and history, and he can't do that in other programs like in Spanish, and other students just feel the same way. Secondly, the man is particularly interested in Peru's culture and history, which he cannot experience in other Spanish-language programs, and other students may feel the same way. (重新组织句子，使表达更清晰。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

According to the announcement, the university decided to cancel a study abroad program because the enrollment numbers were too low, making the university unwilling to fund that program. However, students can participate in other Spanish-language programs instead. The man disagrees with this decision. Firstly, the man believes there is still ample time to find enough candidates, and the current requirements, which demand high grades and three recommendation letters, are too stringent. Therefore, if the university could relax the requirements and increase advertising, more students might sign up for this program. Secondly, the man is particularly interested in Peru's culture and history, which he cannot experience in other Spanish-language programs, and other students may feel the same way.

6.思维导图

- Announcement
  - Cancel study abroad program
  - Low enrollment numbers
  - University unwilling to fund

- Alternative option
  - Spanish-language programs

- Man's opinion
  - Disagrees with decision
  - Reasons:
    1. Ample time to find candidates
       - Relax requirements
       - Increase advertising
    2. Interest in Peru's culture and history
       - Not available in other programs
       - Other students may feel the same way

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3.5

• Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

• Estimated Score: 24

3.表达 在发音方面，你的回答相对清晰，但仍有一些需要改进的地方。为了提高发音的准确性，请多加练习，并注意在句子中适当地停顿。此外，保持语速一致，避免过多的停顿。

4.话题发展 你的回答在话题发展方面做得很好，内容组织清晰，观点明确。然而，你可以尝试更详细地解释男子为什么持有这种观点，以及他提出的解决方案。例如，在描述男子认为参观者应该有机会亲自参观图书馆时，可以进一步说明这对参观者产生积极影响的原因。总体而言，你的回答已经很好了，只需在一些细节上加以完善。

6.语言使用

Original Answer: The university is going to limit campus tours for prospective students and visitors to go inside the campus library, but the man in the listening pod doesn't like this idea because, firstly, he says that campus tours will not get a good impression than they are actually being there. The university plans to restrict campus tours for prospective students and visitors from entering the campus library. However, the man in the listening passage disagrees with this idea. First, he believes that campus tours will not get as good of an impression as they would by actually being there.（在这里，我们修改了句子结构，使其更自然流畅。同时，我们也修正了一些语法错误。）

Therefore, in his opinion, campus tours should have opportunity to visit this beautiful building instead of watching it through video. Thus, in his opinion, campus tours should have the opportunity to visit this beautiful building rather than watching it through a video.（我们在这里改进了句子结构，并使用了适当的词汇。）

Secondly, he thinks that, although some students might experience some distraction when campus tours visited the campus library, however, it's quite easy for the university to solve this issue by requiring campus tours to be quiet during the tour. Secondly, he thinks that although some students might experience distractions when campus tours visit the library, it would be relatively easy for the university to address this issue by requiring tour groups to remain quiet during their visit.（在这里，我们优化了句子结构，使其更自然流畅，并修正了一些语法错误。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to restrict campus tours for prospective students and visitors from entering the campus library. However, the man in the listening passage disagrees with this idea. First, he believes that campus tours will not get as good of an impression as they would by actually being there. Thus, in his opinion, campus tours should have the opportunity to visit this beautiful building rather than watching it through a video. Secondly, he thinks that although some students might experience distractions when campus tours visit the library, it would be relatively easy for the university to address this issue by requiring tour groups to remain quiet during their visit. By doing so, prospective students can still experience the library's atmosphere firsthand while minimizing disruptions to current students' studies.

7.思维导图

• University's Plan

  • Restrict campus tours from entering library

• Man's Opinion

  • Disagrees with the plan
  • Reasons:
    • Campus tours won't get a good impression from video
    • Visiting the library provides a better experience
    • Distractions can be minimized by requiring quietness during the tour

8.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should focus on accurate pronunciation to avoid any confusion or misunderstandings.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to better support their points. To improve, the speaker should practice expanding on their ideas and incorporating more relevant information from the reading and listening passages. This will help create a more comprehensive and well-developed response.

5.Language Use

The reading passage announces a change to the campus policy. Specifically, the school will start to hold off-campus orientation sessions in various parts of the country. The man is in favor of this new policy. Firstly, he thinks that this can help students get access to the plane ticket plane tickets(plural form is needed as it refers to multiple students), which can be unaffordable for the students themselves. Therefore, the students won't need to feel missing out left out(more appropriate phrasing). Secondly, the man thinks that this orientation session can help students get more opportunities and information about schools the university(more specific reference) before they join.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage announces a change in the university's policy, stating that off-campus orientation sessions will be held in various parts of the country. The man supports this new policy for two main reasons. First, he believes that offering off-campus sessions will make it more accessible for students who cannot afford expensive plane tickets to attend on-campus orientations. This way, these students will not feel left out and can benefit from the valuable information provided during orientation. Second, he thinks that attending these sessions will give incoming students more opportunities and a better understanding of the university before they officially start their academic journey. Overall, this new policy aims to ensure that all new students have equal access to essential information and resources, regardless of their geographical location or financial situation.

6.Mind Map

- Change in policy
  - Off-campus orientation sessions

- Man's opinion
  - Supports new policy
    - Reason 1: Accessibility
      - Affordability of plane tickets
      - Inclusivity for students
    - Reason 2: Opportunities and information
      - Better understanding of the university
      - Equal access to resources

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上说得还算清楚，但有些地方需要改进。首先，注意保持语速的一致性，避免在不适当的地方停顿。其次，尽量减少发音错误，以免影响听众的理解。最后，注意在适当的地方使用标点符号，以提高语言的流畅性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答基本上是连贯和有条理的。但是，在总结计划时可以更简洁明了地表达。同时，在陈述男生对计划的看法时，可以更具体地说明他认为这个计划有哪些优点，并给出更多支持或例子来证明这一观点。此外，在解释原因时也可以更详细地说明为什么这个计划会对学生产生积极影响。

5.语言使用

原文：In the reading, the university decided to change the off-campus orientation session plan. In the reading, the university plans to offer off-campus orientation sessions.（原句表述不够准确，应该是大学计划提供校外迎新会。） Firstly, it will encourage a lot of students to attend this orientation. First, it aims to encourage more students to attend the orientation.（改进了句子结构和词汇，使表达更自然。） Secondly, it will help new students have access to get the information. Second, it will provide new students with better access to important information.（改进了句子结构和词汇，使表达更自然。） The man thinks this is a cool idea. (无需修改) Firstly, First, his hometown is far away from the university, and the ticket is really expensive, and a lot of students can't afford this ticket. So this will cause a lot of serious problems.（使用“First”而不是“Firstly”，使表达更自然。） Secondly, Second, the man always gets the information from the handbooks, and the handbooks always have hundreds of pages. So he misses a lot of important information. For example, his roommates get a really important job before getting to the university because of him attending the session. So if changing the plan, the man can get the same valuable work, too.（使用“Second”而不是“Secondly”，使表达更自然。）

修订版（140词）：

In the reading, the university plans to offer off-campus orientation sessions. First, it aims to encourage more students to attend the orientation. Second, it will provide new students with better access to important information. The man thinks this is a cool idea. First, his hometown is far away from the university, and the ticket is really expensive, and a lot of students can't afford this ticket. So this will cause a lot of serious problems. Second, the man always gets the information from the handbooks, and the handbooks always have hundreds of pages. So he misses a lot of important information. For example, his roommates get a really important job before getting to the university because of him attending the session. So if changing the plan, the man can get the same valuable work, too.

6.思维导图

- Off-campus orientation sessions
  - Encourage more students to attend
  - Provide better access to information

- Man's opinion
  - Cool idea
    - Hometown far away, expensive tickets
    - Misses important information from handbooks
    - Roommates get valuable jobs from attending session

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言较为清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。建议发言者在练习口语时注意掌握适当的停顿，避免不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答较为连贯和有组织，观点之间的联系也较为明确。但在提供支持和例证方面还有待加强。建议在练习时尝试提供更多具体的例子和论据来支持观点，使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：In the reading, the university decided to change the off-campus orientation session plan. In the reading, the university decided to offer off-campus orientation sessions.（将“改变”改为“提供”，更符合原文意思。）
Firstly, it will encourage a lot of students attend this orientation. Firstly, it aims to encourage more students to attend the orientation.（将“鼓励很多学生参加这个迎新会”改为“鼓励更多的学生参加迎新会”，使表达更自然。）
Secondly, it will help new students have access to get the information. Secondly, it will ensure that new students have access to essential information.（将“帮助新生获得信息”改为“确保新生能够获得重要信息”，使表达更准确。）
The man thinks this is a good idea. The man agrees with this plan.（将“这是个好主意”改为“同意这个计划”，使表达更自然。）
Firstly, his hometown is far away from the university, and the ticket is so expensive, a lot of students cannot afford it, so it will cause a really serious problem. Firstly, his hometown is far from the university, and the high cost of plane tickets makes it unaffordable for many students, causing a significant issue.（将“他的家乡离大学很远，票价很贵，很多学生负担不起，这会导致一个非常严重的问题”改为“他的家乡离大学很远，飞机票价格高昂使得许多学生无法承担，从而导致一个重大问题”，使表达更准确。）
Secondly, the man gets information from the handbooks, and the handbooks always have 100 pages. Secondly, the man receives information from the handbooks, which are usually 100 pages long.（将“男子从手册中获得信息，手册总是有100页”改为“男子从手册中获得信息，手册通常有100页”，使表达更自然。）
But his roommates can get a really great job before getting the university because of attending the orientation session. However, his roommates were able to secure good on-campus jobs before starting university due to attending the orientation session.（将“但他的室友因为参加了迎新会，在进入大学之前就能找到一份很好的工作”改为“然而，由于参加了迎新会，他的室友在开始上大学之前就能找到好的校内工作”，使表达更准确。）
So, it is really important to get the orientation session.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading, the university decided to offer off-campus orientation sessions. Firstly, it aims to encourage more students to attend the orientation. Secondly, it will ensure that new students have access to essential information. The man agrees with this plan. Firstly, his hometown is far from the university, and the high cost of plane tickets makes it unaffordable for many students, causing a significant issue. Secondly, the man receives information from the handbooks, which are usually 100 pages long. However, his roommates were able to secure good on-campus jobs before starting university due to attending the orientation session. Therefore, attending the orientation session is crucial for new students to have a smooth transition into university life and gain access to valuable resources and opportunities.

6.思维导图

- Off-campus orientation sessions
  - Encourage more students to attend
  - Ensure access to essential information

- Man's opinion
  - Agrees with the plan
    - Hometown far from university
      - High cost of plane tickets
      - Significant issue for many students
    - Information from handbooks
      - Usually 100 pages long
    - Roommates secured on-campus jobs
      - Due to attending orientation session

- Importance of orientation session
  - Smooth transition into university life
  - Access to valuable resources and opportunities

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 2 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

在回答中，发音不够清晰，语速不稳定，有时停顿过多。建议练习发音，提高语言流利度，并注意保持稳定的语速。同时，尽量减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容虽然涉及了文章中的计划和男生的观点，但组织结构不够清晰，缺乏明确的逻辑关系。建议在回答时先简要概括计划，再明确阐述男生的观点，并给出具体原因。此外，注意使用恰当的连接词和过渡词来使回答更加连贯。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, the passage put forward that the off-campus orientation will be held in different parts in the country because it can encourage more students to attend in other than the different area and also impact the job experience. The men in the conversation agree with this idea. Firstly, he thinks that he lives in the countryside and he can afford to eat with the cheap low cost and it's easier for him to take part in. Secondly, it will offer him the different job experience to get the different experience there and just as the other roommates.

Corrected Answer: The passage states that off-campus orientation sessions will be held in various parts of the country to encourage more students from different areas to attend and enhance their job opportunities. The man in the conversation agrees with this plan. First, he believes that living in a rural area allows him to afford a lower cost of living, making it easier for him to participate. Second, these sessions provide diverse job experiences similar to those of his roommates. (修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使表达更自然流畅。同时，纠正了拼写错误。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The passage states that off-campus orientation sessions will be held in various parts of the country with the aim of encouraging more students from different areas to attend, thus enhancing their university experience and job opportunities. The man in the conversation expresses his agreement with this plan for two main reasons. First, he mentions that living in a rural area allows him to afford a lower cost of living, which makes it easier for him to participate in such sessions without worrying about high expenses. Second, he highlights that these orientation sessions provide diverse job experiences and opportunities similar to those of his roommates who attended the on-campus session. Overall, the man believes that this new plan will benefit students like him who live far away from the university and face financial constraints.

6.思维导图

• Passage

  • Off-campus orientation sessions
  • Encourage attendance
  • Enhance job opportunities

• Man's opinion

  • Agreement
    • Lower cost of living in rural area
    • Easier participation
    • Diverse job experiences

7.关键词