TOEFL TPO 73 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific solutions proposed in the reading passage.

1.Sub Scores

Task fulfillment: 4 Organization: 4 Coherence and Cohesion: 4 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

Estimated Score: 25

3.Task completeness

The essay does a good job of summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they cast doubt on the specific solutions proposed in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of language use and clarity. The essay could benefit from more precise vocabulary and sentence structure to better convey the ideas.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Use more specific vocabulary to describe the strategies and their potential consequences.

• Improve sentence structure to make your points clearer.

Examples:

1. Instead of "The author thinks they are effective while the professor does not," consider writing "The author believes these strategies are effective, but the professor disagrees."

2. Instead of "Cutting down the trees may consequently create another residential place for those ants," try writing "Removing these trees might inadvertently create new habitats that are also suitable for yellow crazy ants."

4.Essay structure and organization

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point, but there is room for improvement in terms of transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Add clear transitions between ideas within paragraphs.

• Strengthen connections between paragraphs to improve overall coherence.

Examples:

1. In your first body paragraph, add a transition such as "However" or "On the other hand" before discussing the professor's argument.

2. When moving from one strategy to another, consider using phrases like "In addition" or "Furthermore" to show that you are presenting another point of disagreement between the author and professor.

5. Grammar

The author in the textauthor, in the text, and the professorprofessor, in the reading material has completely contrarymaterial, have contrasting views on the strategies that may be used for killing an invasive species named yellow crazy ant.ants. The author thinks they are effectiveeffective, while the professor does not. First of all,Firstly, the author suggests that using traps containing low concentrationconcentrations of toxic chemicals may kill the ants. He cites thea successful experience inon an island near Australia as an example. However, the professor argues that this method may harm native ants. Unlike the islandisland, which containcontains no other kindstypes of ants but the yellow crazy one, Seychelles Islands surviveshave batches of native ants whichthat we attempt to protect. Additionally, as providedstated in the passage, cutting down the broad-leaved treestrees, which are the antsants' preferred habitatshabitats, may control the spread of the ant colonies. On the contrary,However, these trees are not the only suitable roost, suggested in the lecture. The yellow crazy ants tend to live in open areas that iswith access to the sunlight. Cutting down the trees may consequently create another residential place for those ants. ThusThus, we can not get away ofcannot escape them. Ultimately, the writer mentions that considering ants may forage for foods left by human-beings, limiting human activities near the palm trees may work. Nevertheless, this is also challenged by the professor, mainly because this strategy may cause economic problems. Limiting the tourism and scientific activities may shrink the source of income of local people and thus do great harm to the regional economy.

6. Revised Essay

The author and the professor in the lecture hold opposing views on the strategies proposed to combat the invasive yellow crazy ant species. While the author believes these strategies are effective, the professor disagrees.

Firstly, the author suggests that using traps containing a low concentration of toxic chemicals may kill the ants, citing successful experiences on an island near Australia as evidence. However, the professor contends that this method could harm native ants. Unlike the island mentioned, which contains only yellow crazy ants, Seychelles Islands is home to various native ant species that require protection.

Secondly, the passage proposes cutting down broad-leaved trees, which are favored habitats for these ants, as a means to control their spread. In contrast, the lecture asserts that these trees are not their only suitable habitat. Yellow crazy ants also thrive in open areas with increased sunlight exposure. Consequently, cutting down trees may inadvertently create alternative living spaces for these ants, making it impossible to eliminate them.

Lastly, the author posits that limiting human activities near palm forests could help reduce ant populations since they may feed on food left behind by humans. However, this idea is challenged by the professor due to potential economic repercussions. Restricting tourism and scientific activities could diminish local income sources and significantly harm regional economies. (219 words)

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Additionally, as provided in the passage, Secondly, the passage proposes cutting down the broad-leaved trees trees, which are the ants preferred favored habitats may for these ants, as a means to control the their spread of the ant colonies. On the contrary, (revised for smoother sentence structure). In contrast, the lecture asserts that these trees are not the their only suitable roost, suggested in the lecture. The yellow habitat (revised for a more natural tone). Yellow crazy ants tend to live also thrive in open areas that is access to the sunlight. Cutting with increased sunlight exposure (revised for clarity). Consequently, cutting down the trees may consequently inadvertently create another residential place for those ants. Thus we can not get away of them. alternative living spaces for these ants, making it impossible to eliminate them (revised for smoother sentence structure).

Ultimately, the writer mentions that considering ants may forage for foods left by human-beings, Lastly, the author posits that limiting human activities near the palm trees forests could help reduce ant populations since they may work. Nevertheless, feed on food left behind by humans (revised for clarity and conciseness). However, this idea is also challenged by the professor, mainly because this strategy may cause professor due to potential economic problems. Limiting the repercussions (revised for a more natural tone). Restricting tourism and scientific activities may shrink the source of could diminish local income of local people and thus do great sources and significantly harm to the regional economy.economies (revised for smoother sentence structure).

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
    - Author's view: Strategies are effective
    - Professor's view: Strategies are not effective

- Strategy 1: Traps with toxic chemicals
    - Author's argument: Successful experiences on an island near Australia
    - Professor's counterargument: Harm to native ants in Seychelles Islands

- Strategy 2: Cutting down broad-leaved trees
    - Author's argument: Control ant spread by removing favored habitats
    - Professor's counterargument: Ants also thrive in open areas, cutting trees may create alternative habitats

- Strategy 3: Limiting human activities near palm forests
    - Author's argument: Reduce ant populations by limiting food sources from humans
    - Professor's counterargument: Economic repercussions from restricting tourism and scientific activities

9. Key Words

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 4 连贯与衔接: 4 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

你的文章在任务完成度方面表现较好，能够概括阅读和听力材料中的主要观点，并对它们进行比较。但是，有一些细节可以改进。例如，你可以更详细地解释为什么使用有毒陷阱对当地生态系统可能有害。此外，在描述听力材料中的反驳观点时，可以提供更多具体信息。

改进示例1： 原文：Nonetheless, the professor argues that the toxic chemicals may lead to unintended consequence since these will not differentiate species of ants, therefore, kill other native ants. 修改后：Nonetheless, the professor argues that using toxic ant traps may lead to unintended consequences since these traps cannot differentiate between yellow crazy ants and native ant species, potentially harming the native ant population in the process.

改进示例2： 原文：On the contrary, the professor suggests that this method may slow down the increasement of invasive ants a liitle but will cuase economic problems. 修改后：On the contrary, the professor suggests that while this method may slow down the spread of invasive ants slightly, it could cause significant economic problems for the local community due to decreased tourism and scientific research opportunities.

4.文章结构与组织 你的文章结构清晰，包括引言、正文和结论。每个段落都集中讨论了一个具体的观点，并提供了支持细节。然而，可以改进一些过渡词和短语，使文章更连贯。

改进示例1： 原文：In contrast, the professor contends that this method may not solve the invasion of ants because the yellow crazy ants can thrive in different ways such as open areas with sunlight. 修改后：In contrast, the professor contends that this method may not solve the ant invasion problem because yellow crazy ants can also thrive in alternative environments, such as open areas with increased sunlight.

改进示例2： 原文：Thus, limiting human activities has negative impact on the whole region near the palm forest. 修改后：Thus, limiting human activities would have a negative impact on the entire region surrounding the palm forest due to its detrimental effects on tourism and scientific research.

5. 语法批改

In the reading passage, the author presents three methods to prevent yellow crazy ants from destroying a unique palm forest in Africa. However, the professor in the audio recording challenges these viewpoints and offers counterarguments.

The author asserts that using traps containing chemicals with toxin to kill the yellow crazy ants is a successful method, which has been used in Australia to solve the problem caused by invasive ants. Nonetheless, the professor argues that the toxic chemicals may lead to unintended consequence sinceconsequence of(Collocation: consequences on/for/of) these will not differentiate species of ants, therefore, kill other native ants. The professor elaborates that the reason why these toxic chemicals were used in AudtraliaAustralia(misspelling) successfully is that no native ants exist there, whereas in Africa there are still native ants which should be protected, and using traps with toxic chemicals will kill native ants.

Furthermore, the author claims that reducing the extent of habitat of yellow crazy ants by cutting down the broad-leaved trees, which are not native plants and will not negatively impact local ecosystem, is also a valid method. In contrast, the professor contends that this method may not solve the invasion of ants because the yellow crazy ants can thrive in different waysways,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) such as open areas with sunlight. Therefore, removing the borad-leavedbroadleaved(misspelling) trees will create increasing sunlight for yellow crazy ants and provide them with a new habitat.

Additionally, the author states that limiting human activities near the palm forest could keep the invasive ants from spreadingspreading,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) as these ants feed on the food left by visitors. On the contrary, the professor suggests that this method may slow down the increasementincrement(misspelling) of invasive ants a liitlelittle(misspelling) but will cuasecase(misspelling) economic problems. He elucidates that these areas not only attracts tourists but scientists who study there, moreover, the tourism is the main source incomingof incoming(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'of' is missing in a sentence.) of the local people. Thus, limiting human activities has negative impact on the whole region near the palm forest.

6.文章修订

In the reading passage, the author presents three methods to prevent yellow crazy ants from destroying a unique palm forest in Africa. However, the professor in the audio recording challenges these viewpoints and offers counterarguments.

The author asserts that utilizing traps containing chemicals toxic to yellow crazy ants is a successful method, which has been employed in Australia to address problems caused by invasive ants. Nonetheless, the professor argues that deploying toxic ant traps may lead to unintended consequences since these traps cannot differentiate between yellow crazy ants and native ant species, potentially harming the native ant population in the process. The professor elaborates that the reason why these toxic chemicals were used successfully in Australia is that no native ants exist there, whereas in Africa there are still native ants which should be protected.

Furthermore, the author claims that reducing the extent of habitat for yellow crazy ants by cutting down broad-leaved trees, which are not native plants and will not negatively impact local ecosystems, is also a valid method. In contrast, the professor contends that this approach may not resolve the invasion of ants because yellow crazy ants can also thrive in alternative environments such as open areas with increased sunlight. Therefore, removing broad-leaved trees would inadvertently create an environment conducive to yellow crazy ant proliferation.

Additionally, the author states that limiting human activities near the palm forest could help curb invasive ant populations as these ants feed on food left behind by visitors. On the contrary, the professor suggests that while this method may slightly slow down the spread of invasive ants, it could cause significant economic problems for local communities due to decreased tourism and scientific research opportunities. The professor elucidates that these areas attract not only tourists but also scientists who conduct studies there; moreover, tourism is a primary source of income for local people. Thus, limiting human activities would have a negative impact on the entire region surrounding the palm forest due to its detrimental effects on tourism and scientific research.

In summary, although the author proposes several strategies to combat the invasion of yellow crazy ants in the unique palm forest, the professor effectively refutes each of these methods by highlighting potential negative consequences and their inefficacy in addressing the issue. (379 words)

7.文章批改

In the reading passage, the author presents three methods to prevent yellow crazy ants from destroying a unique palm forest in Africa. However, the professor in the audio recording challenges these viewpoints and offers counterarguments. (Original text is clear and concise)

The author asserts that using utilizing traps containing chemicals with toxin to kill the toxic to yellow crazy ants is a successful method, which has been used employed in Australia to solve the problem address problems caused by invasive ants. (Changed "using" to "utilizing" for a more formal tone) Nonetheless, the professor argues that the deploying toxic chemicals ant traps may lead to unintended consequence consequences since these will not traps cannot differentiate species of ants, therefore, kill other between yellow crazy ants and native ants. ant species, potentially harming the native ant population in the process. (Changed "using" to "deploying" for variety and formality; added "potentially harming...in the process" for clarity) The professor elaborates that the reason why these toxic chemicals were used in Audtralia successfully in Australia is that no native ants exist there, whereas in Africa there are still native ants which should be protected, and using traps with toxic chemicals will kill native ants. protected.

Furthermore, the author claims that reducing the extent of habitat of for yellow crazy ants by cutting down the broad-leaved trees, which are not native plants and will not negatively impact local ecosystem, ecosystems, is also a valid method. In contrast, the professor contends that this method approach may not solve resolve the invasion of ants because the yellow crazy ants can also thrive in different ways alternative environments such as open areas with increased sunlight. (Changed "different ways" to "alternative environments" for clarity) Therefore, removing the borad-leaved broad-leaved trees will would inadvertently create increasing sunlight for yellow crazy ants and provide them with a new habitat. an environment conducive to yellow crazy ant proliferation. (Changed "increasing sunlight...new habitat" to "create an environment conducive...proliferation" for clarity and coherence)

Additionally, the author states that limiting human activities near the palm forest could keep the help curb invasive ants from spreading ant populations as these ants feed on the food left behind by visitors. On the contrary, the professor suggests that while this method may slightly slow down the increasement spread of invasive ants a liitle but will cuase ants, it could cause significant economic problems. He problems for local communities due to decreased tourism and scientific research opportunities. (Changed "increasement" to "spread" for accuracy; added "significant" for emphasis) The professor elucidates that these areas attract not only attracts tourists but also scientists who study there, conduct studies there; moreover, the tourism is the main a primary source incoming of the of income for local people. Thus, limiting human activities has would have a negative impact on the whole entire region near surrounding the palm forest.forest due to its detrimental effects on tourism and scientific research.

In summary, although the author proposes several strategies to combat the invasion of yellow crazy ants in the unique palm forest, the professor effectively refutes each of these methods by highlighting potential negative consequences and their inefficacy in addressing the issue. (Changed "by" to "by highlighting" for clarity; added "and their inefficacy in addressing the issue" for coherence)

8.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Reading passage: three methods to prevent yellow crazy ants
  • Lecture: challenges these methods

• Method 1: Toxic ant traps

  • Reading: successful in Australia
  • Lecture: unintended consequences, harm native ants in Africa

• Method 2: Cutting down broad-leaved trees

  • Reading: reduce habitat for ants, not harm local ecosystem
  • Lecture: ants can thrive in alternative environments, create conducive environment for ants

• Method 3: Limiting human activities near palm forest

  • Reading: curb invasive ant populations, feed on food left by visitors
  • Lecture: economic problems, decreased tourism and scientific research opportunities

• Summary:

  • Professor refutes each method by highlighting potential negative consequences and inefficacy

9.关键词