TOEFL TPO 37 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，标点符号的使用不当可能导致了不恰当的停顿。拼写错误可能是发音不准确的结果。建议发言者在练习发音时多加注意，以提高口语表达的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，观点之间关系明确，举例和论证也较为充分。但仍有改进空间，建议在练习时尝试更多地关注论点之间的逻辑关系，并在论证过程中给出更多具体例子以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: In the lecture, the student stress refers to cancelling the room phone since they believe that it is unnecessary. In the reading passage, the author suggests removing room phones because they are deemed unnecessary. (将“lecture”改为“reading passage”，将“student stress”改为“author”，将“cancelling”改为“removing”，以更准确地描述原文内容。)

Original: First, students all use their mobile phones to make calls, so that can be cancelled. Firstly, since all students use their mobile phones for calls, room phones can be eliminated. (将“First”改为“Firstly”，将“cancelled”改为“eliminated”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: Second, the student believes that cancelling the room phone can help students have cost benefits. Secondly, the author argues that removing room phones would result in cost savings for students. (将“student”改为“author”，将“cancelling”改为“removing”，将“have cost benefits”改为“result in cost savings”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this plan. In the listening part, the woman disagrees with this proposal. (将“conversation”改为“listening part”，将“plan”改为“proposal”，以更准确地描述原文内容。)

Original: She believes that it is good to have both ways since it is more reliable for students to use the room phone to have a call. She believes that having both options is beneficial as room phones provide a more reliable means of communication for students. (将“both ways”改为“both options”，将“to use the room phone to have a call”改为“room phones provide a more reliable means of communication”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: And also, sometimes the reputation is not so good and then the room phones can be a good backup for the students. Additionally, when mobile phone reception is poor, room phones serve as a reliable backup for students. (将“reputation”改为“reception”，将“not so good”改为“poor”，将“and then”删除，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Original: Second, she believes that students do not need to pay so much money for the phone call since they do not need to pay for the house bill. Furthermore, she contends that students don't need to spend much on phone calls as they only pay per call on their housing bill. (将“house bill”改为“housing bill”，将“so much money”改为“much”，以提高语言的准确性和自然度。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading passage, the author suggests removing room phones because they are deemed unnecessary. Firstly, since all students use their mobile phones for calls, room phones can be eliminated. Secondly, the author argues that removing room phones would result in cost savings for students. In the listening part, the woman disagrees with this proposal. She believes that having both options is beneficial as room phones provide a more reliable means of communication for students. Additionally, when mobile phone reception is poor, room phones serve as a reliable backup for students. Furthermore, she contends that students don't need to spend much on phone calls as they only pay per call on their housing bill.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
    - Remove room phones
        - Unnecessary
        - Cost savings

- Listening Part
    - Woman's opinion
        - Disagrees with proposal
        - Both options beneficial
            - Reliable communication
            - Backup when reception is poor
        - Cost not an issue
            - Pay per call on housing bill

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor pronunciation issues that need to be addressed. For example, "dumb phone service" should be "room phone service" and "latter" should be "letter." To improve, the speaker should practice pronouncing words more accurately and focus on enunciating each word clearly.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, summarizing the proposal and stating the woman's opinion about it. The reasons for her opinion are also explained. However, the response could be improved by providing more specific examples from the listening passage to support the woman's arguments. Additionally, the speaker should avoid repeating phrases like "the latter stressed" and instead use a variety of expressions to convey the same idea. Overall, focusing on incorporating more details from the listening passage and using a wider range of expressions will help improve topic development.

5.Language Use

Original: The latter stressed that the university should remove dumb phone service. The letter suggested that the university should remove room phone service. (Corrected "latter" to "letter" and "dumb" to "room" for accurate meaning) Original: First, the latter stressed that students all have mobile phones and they can use cars instead of dumb phone service. First, the letter emphasized that students all have mobile phones and can use them instead of room phone service. (Corrected "latter" to "letter", "cars" to "them", and "dumb" to "room" for proper context) Original: However, the woman argues that mobile phones is not reliable as they are easily get cut off, making it difficult for them to hear on the other line. However, the woman argues that mobile phones are not reliable because they can easily get cut off, making it difficult to hear on the other line. (Corrected grammar and sentence structure for clarity) Original: Dumb phone service provides a backup option when mobile phone doesn't work. Room phone service provides a backup option when a mobile phone doesn't work. (Corrected "dumb" to "room" for accurate meaning) Original: Second, the latter says that it will impose a high cost for students. Second, the letter claims that it will result in cost savings for students. (Corrected "latter" to "letter" and rephrased for accurate meaning) Original: The woman argues that students will only pay per call as they will afford high cost if they use less dumb phone service. The woman argues that students only pay per call, so they can avoid high costs by using room phone service less frequently. (Corrected "dumb" to "room" and rephrased for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): The letter suggested that the university should remove room phone service. First, the letter emphasized that students all have mobile phones and can use them instead of room phone service. However, the woman argues that mobile phones are not reliable because they can easily get cut off, making it difficult to hear on the other line. Room phone service provides a backup option when a mobile phone doesn't work. Second, the letter claims that it will result in cost savings for students. The woman argues that students only pay per call, so they can avoid high costs by using room phone service less frequently. Overall, the woman disagrees with the proposal due to concerns about mobile phone reliability and believes that keeping room phone service as a backup option is beneficial for students.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Remove room phone service
  - Reasons
    - Students have mobile phones
    - Cost savings

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons
    - Mobile phone reliability issues
      - Calls get cut off
      - Poor reception
    - Room phone service as backup option
  - Cost argument refuted
    - Pay per call system
    - Control costs by using less frequently

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，回答的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方还有改进的空间。建议在发音方面多加练习，尤其是在一些单词的发音上要更加准确。此外，在语速和停顿方面也需要注意，尽量保持语速的稳定，并适当减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答在话题发展方面做得很好，内容组织清晰，观点之间的联系明确。回答中提到了女生对提议的看法以及她给出的两个理由。这些内容都与题目要求紧密相关，足以支持女生的观点。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

Original: The student in the letter proposes that the university should remove the phones from students' rooms. The student in the letter suggests that the university remove phones from students' rooms.（建议使用suggest替换proposes，使语言更自然。）

However, the woman in the lesson disagrees with this idea for two reasons. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation opposes this idea for two reasons.（使用Nonetheless替换However，使句子更连贯；使用conversation替换lesson，更符合场景。）

The first reason is that it's good for students to have both their personal phones and dorm phones. The first reason is that having both personal phones and dorm phones is beneficial for students.（调整句子结构，使其更清晰。）

Sometimes the personal phones are just not reliable. At times, personal phones may be unreliable.（使用At times替换Sometimes，使语言更自然；调整句子结构，使其更简洁。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student in the letter suggests that the university remove phones from students' rooms. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation opposes this idea for two reasons. The first reason is that having both personal phones and dorm phones is beneficial for students. At times, personal phones may be unreliable due to poor reception caused by hills in the area, leading to dropped calls or unclear conversations. Therefore, having a backup option like dorm phones is essential. The second reason is that students don't have to pay a significant amount for dorm phones, as they are charged per call. By controlling the number of calls made through room phones, students can avoid high costs. In conclusion, the woman believes that it is better to maintain the current system with both personal and dorm phones available for students.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter suggestion: remove phones from students' rooms
  - Woman's opposition

- Reason 1: Benefits of having both personal and dorm phones
  - Unreliable personal phones
    - Poor reception due to hills
    - Dropped calls, unclear conversations
  - Backup option: dorm phones

- Reason 2: Cost of dorm phones not significant
  - Charged per call
  - Control number of calls to avoid high costs

- Conclusion
  - Maintain current system with both personal and dorm phones available for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较快，间歇较多。建议发言者注意语速的控制，尽量保持稳定的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在发音方面也存在一些问题，需要注意提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于女士的观点进行了总结，并给出了她的理由。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议发言者在陈述女士观点时，先概括提案内容，然后再陈述女士的观点和理由。同时，在给出理由时，可以适当加入一些连接词，使句子更加连贯。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, the students suppose that the university should stop the room phones and think it's not necessary for every student, because every student has mobile phones, and it will save students a lot of money if they don't pay for the survival. The students suggest that the university should remove the room phones, as they believe it is unnecessary for each student since everyone has mobile phones, and it would save them money if they didn't have to pay for this service.（将“suppose”改为“suggest”，更符合语境；将“stop”改为“remove”，更准确表达意思；将“for every student”改为“for each student”，使句子更通顺；将“survival”改为“service”，表达更准确。）

But the woman doesn't agree with these ideas. However, the woman disagrees with these points.（使用“However”替换“But”，使句子更连贯；使用“points”替换“ideas”，使语言更自然。）

Firstly, he thinks that both of the choices are very good, and always the reception of their phones are not very good. Firstly, she believes that having both options is beneficial because their mobile phone reception is often poor.（将“he”改为“she”，修正性别错误；简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

If they have the backup opportunity, the room phone is very suitable. Having a room phone as a backup option is quite suitable in such cases.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

Besides, the students always pay for the money every call. Moreover, students currently pay per call for the room phone service.（使用“Moreover”替换“Besides”，使句子更连贯；简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

If they call a lot, they will pay a lot too. If they make many calls, their expenses will increase accordingly.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

And the students not always to use the room phones as much as possible. Students can also choose to limit their use of room phones to control costs.（简化句子结构，使其更通顺。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The students suggest that the university should remove the room phones, as they believe it is unnecessary for each student since everyone has mobile phones, and it would save them money if they didn't have to pay for this service. However, the woman disagrees with these points. Firstly, she believes that having both options is beneficial because their mobile phone reception is often poor. Having a room phone as a backup option is quite suitable in such cases. Moreover, students currently pay per call for the room phone service. If they make many calls, their expenses will increase accordingly. Students can also choose to limit their use of room phones to control costs.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Remove room phones
  • Unnecessary
  • Save money

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees
  • Reasons
    • Poor mobile reception
    • Backup option
    • Pay per call

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，你的回答相对清晰，但仍有改进的空间。为了提高发音的准确性，请注意一些元音和辅音的发音。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。多练习和模仿母语人士的发音可以帮助你在这方面取得进步。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, your response is generally coherent and well-organized, but there is room for improvement. Make sure to clearly summarize the proposal and the woman's opinion before explaining her reasons. Also, try to provide more specific examples or details from the listening passage to support your points. This will help make your response more complete and convincing.

6.语言使用

Original: In the letter, it is proposed that the phone in student room should be removed. In the letter, the author proposes that phones in student rooms should be removed. (在原文中，建议将学生房间的电话移除。这里的表述可以改为“在信中，作者提议应该移除学生房间的电话。”)

Original: First reason is students now all have their own phones, so the room phones are unnecessary. The first reason is that students now all have their own phones, making room phones unnecessary. (首先，现在所有学生都有自己的手机，所以房间里的电话变得不必要。这里可以改为“第一个原因是现在所有学生都有自己的手机，使得房间里的电话变得不必要。”)

Original: Second reason is if school stops the phone service, students will no longer need to pay the phone fees, so they will save some money. The second reason is that if schools discontinue phone services, students will no longer need to pay for them, resulting in cost savings. (第二个原因是如果学校停止电话服务，学生将不再需要支付电话费用，从而节省一些钱。这里可以改为“第二个原因是如果学校停止电话服务，学生将不再需要支付电话费用，从而节省开支。”)

Original: But the woman think it is not a good idea. However, the woman believes this is not a good idea. (但是，女士认为这不是一个好主意。这里可以改为“然而，女士认为这不是一个好主意。”)

Original: On the one hand, she thinks students' phones are not reliable all the time. On one hand, she argues that students' phones are not always reliable. (一方面，她认为学生的手机并不总是可靠的。这里可以改为“一方面，她认为学生的手机并不总是可靠的。”)

Original: Sometimes the signals will be cut off or the reception will be bad. Sometimes, signal interruptions or poor reception may occur. (有时信号会中断或接收效果不佳。这里可以改为“有时可能会出现信号中断或接收效果不佳。”)

Original: So room phones are necessary for students as a backup option. Thus, room phones serve as a necessary backup option for students. (因此，房间电话对学生来说是必要的备选方案。这里可以改为“因此，房间电话对学生来说是必要的备选方案。”)

Original: If they don't use the room phone, they need to pay nothing. If they don't use the room phone, they don't have to pay anything. (如果他们不使用房间电话，他们无需支付任何费用。这里可以改为“如果他们不使用房间电话，他们无需支付任何费用。”)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the letter, the author proposes that phones in student rooms should be removed. The first reason is that students now all have their own phones, making room phones unnecessary. The second reason is that if schools discontinue phone services, students will no longer need to pay for them, resulting in cost savings. However, the woman believes this is not a good idea. On one hand, she argues that students' phones are not always reliable. Sometimes, signal interruptions or poor reception may occur. Thus, room phones serve as a necessary backup option for students. On the other hand, she points out that students only need to pay when they use room phones. If they don't use the room phone, they don't have to pay anything. So most of them

7.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Remove phones in student rooms
    • Reason 1: Students have their own phones
    • Reason 2: Cost savings for students

• Woman's Opinion

  • Disagrees with the proposal
    • Reason 1: Unreliable personal phones
      • Signal interruptions, poor reception
    • Reason 2: Pay-per-use system for room phones
      • No cost if not used

8.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位考生的回答相对清晰，但仍有改进的空间。建议考生在发音方面多加练习，尤其是在一些单词的发音上要更加准确。此外，考生在回答过程中要注意保持语速的一致性，避免不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，考生的回答基本上符合题目要求，能够概括信中的建议并阐述女生的观点及理由。但在组织结构上还可以更加清晰和紧凑。建议考生在回答时尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇，以使得回答更加连贯和有条理。同时，在给出理由时可以适当举例或详细说明，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The student suggests that the school should remove the room phone service of all the students, but the woman didn't think it was a good idea. Firstly, the woman thinks although we have mobile phone services, but it is always unreliable. Sometimes it may cut off, and the reception was not very good. So she usually calls back in another line. So it is better to have a backup action. Secondly, about the cost problem, the woman thinks that the cost of phone is based on how much they use the phone. The more you use the phone, the higher you pay the cost.

Corrected Answer: The student suggests proposes(建议更换为proposes，使语言更正式) that the school should remove the room phone service of for(介词错误，应该用for) all the students, but the woman didn't think it was a good idea. Firstly, the woman thinks although that even though(虽然的表达可以改为even though，使语言更自然) we have mobile phone services, but it is always unreliable. Sometimes it may cut off, and the reception was not very good. So she usually calls back in another line. So it is better to have a backup action. option.(将action改为option，使语言更准确) Secondly, about the cost problem, the woman thinks that the cost of phone is based on how much they use the phone. The more you use the phone, the higher you paythe cost.the fees.(将cost改为fees，避免重复)

Revised Answer (140 words): The student proposes that the school should remove the room phone service for all students, but the woman disagrees with this idea. She believes that even though most students have mobile phone services, they can be unreliable at times. The reception might be poor, and calls may get cut off, so having a landline as a backup option is beneficial. Furthermore, she argues that the cost of the room phone service is based on usage. The more calls a student makes, the higher the fees they pay. This way, students can control their expenses by limiting their use of the room phone service. Therefore, she thinks it's best to keep the current system in place.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Remove room phone service

- Woman's Opinion
    - Disagrees with the proposal

- Reason 1
    - Unreliable mobile phone services
        - Poor reception
        - Calls cut off
    - Backup option: Landline

- Reason 2
    - Cost based on usage
        - Control expenses by limiting use

- Conclusion
    - Keep the current system in place

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be reduced. Additionally, the pronunciation of some words could be improved for better clarity. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and work on accurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the points made. To further develop the topic, the speaker should consider elaborating on their points and providing more concrete examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original: The students suggest that universities should remove room phones from students' rooms. The proposal suggests that universities should remove room phones from dormitories. (clarification of the subject) However, the woman totally disagrees with the idea. The woman strongly disagrees with this proposal. (more formal language) This is because she believes that although many students have their own mobile phone now, it is necessary to have both because phone service is not always reliable. There are a lot of hills around school. So her phone cost was often cut off and its reception is not good as well. So it's better to have a backup option. And she goes on to say that she didn't believe that the new policy would save money because students pay for per call. So if they do not make a lot of call, they do not need to pay lots of money. So she suggests that universities should keep the ways now.

Revised (140 words): The proposal suggests that universities should remove room phones from dormitories. The woman strongly disagrees with this proposal, arguing that having both mobile phones and room phones is necessary due to unreliable phone service in the area, which she attributes to the hilly terrain. She mentions experiencing frequent call disconnections and poor reception on her mobile phone, making a backup option like room phones essential. Furthermore, she disputes the cost-saving aspect of the proposal, explaining that students currently pay on a per-call basis for room phone usage. As a result, those who make fewer calls pay less, allowing them to control their expenses. Therefore, she recommends maintaining the current system instead of implementing the proposed change.

6.Mind Map

• Proposal

  • Remove room phones from dormitories

• Woman's opinion

  • Strong disagreement

• Reasons for disagreement

  • Unreliable phone service
    • Hilly terrain
    • Backup option needed
  • Cost-saving aspect disputed
    • Per-call payment system
    • Expense control for students

• Recommendation

  • Maintain current system

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上说得还算清楚，但有时候会出现一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意语速的控制，尽量保持流畅。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答基本上是连贯和组织良好的。但可以在连接思路和提供支持或例子方面做得更好。建议在练习时多关注如何将观点进行有效串联，并尝试提供更多具体的例子来支持自己的观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Essentially, a student proposes that the university should remove the Roam phones in the dormitory because students have their own mobile phones and it can save them a lot of money. Essentially, a student proposes that the university should remove the room phones in the dormitory because students have their own mobile phones, and it can save them a significant amount of money. (将"Roam"改为"room"，因为发音不准确；将"a lot of"改为"significant amount of"，使词汇更高级)

However, the women in the conversation disagrees with the idea for two reasons. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with the idea for two reasons. (将"women"改为"woman"，因为发音不准确)

The first reason is that the Roam phone can serve as a backup option. The first reason is that the room phone can serve as a backup option. (将"Roam"改为"room"，因为发音不准确)

It is big because their own mobile phone services is not always reliable. This is important because their own mobile phone service is not always reliable. (将"It is big"改为"This is important"，使句子更自然；将"services"改为"service"，修正语法错误)

Sometimes it would be cut off and the reception is not good. Sometimes calls get cut off, and the reception is poor. (修改句子结构，使其更自然)

The second reason is that the housing bill is not included for the Roam phones. The second reason is that the housing bill does not include charges for room phones. (将"Roam"改为"room"，因为发音不准确；修改句子结构，使其更自然)

Students need to pay the Roam phone with per call. Students need to pay for room phone usage on a per-call basis. (将"Roam"改为"room"，因为发音不准确；修改句子结构，使其更自然)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Essentially, a student proposes that the university should remove the room phones in the dormitory because students have their own mobile phones, and it can save them a significant amount of money. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with the idea for two reasons. The first reason is that the room phone can serve as a backup option. This is important because their own mobile phone service is not always reliable. Sometimes calls get cut off, and the reception is poor. The second reason is that the housing bill does not include charges for room phones. Students need to pay for room phone usage on a per-call basis. So, if they don't use the phone that much, they don't have to pay much. This is how they can avoid the bill.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Remove room phones
  • Reasons: own mobile phones, save money

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees with proposal
  • Reason 1: Backup option
    • Unreliable mobile service
    • Poor reception, calls cut off
  • Reason 2: Housing bill
    • No charges for room phones
    • Pay per call basis

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 24

3.表达 总体来说，发音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意以下几点：1) 在句子之间保持自然的停顿，避免在不需要的地方停顿；2) 注意发音的准确性，尤其是一些容易发错的单词；3) 多进行口语练习，提高语言的流利度。

4.话题发展 The response is coherent and well-organized, with a clear summary of the proposal and the woman's opinion. The reasons she gives for her opinion are also explained clearly. To improve topic development, consider providing more specific examples or details from the listening passage to support the reasons given by the woman, such as mentioning the hills affecting mobile phone reception. Additionally, ensure that all ideas are connected smoothly and transitions between points are clear.

6.语言使用

Original Answer: A student proposes that the university should remove the room phone service because each student now have a mobile phone to use to make calls, and that will have a cost benefit for the students because they will save money if they don't have to pay for the room phone service. The student proposes that the university should remove the room phone service, as each student now has a mobile phone for making calls, which would provide a cost benefit by saving money if they no longer have to pay for the room phone service. (将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。同时，修正了动词的时态和语态。)

The woman disagreed with his study because, for the first reason, it's better to have both because the mobile phone is not always reliable, the reception is sometimes not good, so it's good to have a backup option. The woman disagrees with his proposal, stating that having both options is better since mobile phones are not always reliable and reception can be poor at times, making it essential to have a backup option. (调整了句子结构，使其更清晰，并使用了更高级的词汇。)

The second reason is that the students actually pay per call this time, so if they don't make many calls, they won't have to pay much. Her second reason is that students currently pay per call; thus, if they make fewer calls, their expenses will be minimal. (调整了句子结构，使用了更高级的词汇和连接词。)

So for these two reasons, the woman considered the change to be unnecessary. Therefore, due to these two reasons, the woman considers the proposed change unnecessary. (调整了句子结构，使其更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The student proposes that the university should remove the room phone service, as each student now has a mobile phone for making calls, which would provide a cost benefit by saving money if they no longer have to pay for the room phone service. The woman disagrees with his proposal, stating that having both options is better since mobile phones are not always reliable and reception can be poor at times, making it essential to have a backup option. Her second reason is that students currently pay per call; thus, if they make fewer calls, their expenses will be minimal. Therefore, due to these two reasons, the woman considers the proposed change unnecessary.

7.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Remove room phone service
  - Cost benefit

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons
    - Reliability of mobile phones
      - Poor reception at times
      - Need for backup option
    - Payment per call
      - Minimal expenses for fewer calls

- Conclusion
  - Proposed change unnecessary

8.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰流畅的，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但在一些地方可以进一步完善。例如，在描述女生对于手机信号不稳定的观点时，可以更详细地解释为什么这会影响到学生。此外，在谈到按次付费时，可以更清楚地说明这种方式对于节省费用的优势。总体来说，尝试在回答中提供更多支持或例子来增强观点。

5.语言使用

Original: Students in the letter suggest that room phones are unnecessary. The first reason is that students have their private mobile phones, and removing phones would have a cost-benefit for students. But the woman in the listening part dislikes this idea, because first, she thinks the surface of mobile phones is not reliable, because there are a lot of hills, and the surface of the mobile phone could get cut off, so this is good for students to keep room phones if the surface of the mobile phone is not working. Secondly, she thinks students could only pay for per course, that's because if students use too many times, they will pay enough money, so students could avoid to use the room phones for saving this money.

Corrected: Students in the letter suggest that room phones are unnecessary. The first reason is that students have their private personal mobile phones, and removing phones would have a cost-benefit for students. But the woman in the listening part dislikes this idea because first, she thinks the surface service of mobile phones is not reliable(私人改为personal，更自然；surface改为service，因为这里讨论的是手机信号的可靠性). There are a lot of hills, and the surface service of the mobile phone could get cut off(去掉重复的because，使句子更简洁；surface改为service，与前文保持一致). So it is good for students to keep room phones if the surface service of the mobile phone is not working. Secondly, she thinks students could only pay for per course each call, that's because if students use it too many times, they will pay enough money, so students could avoid to use using the room phones for saving this money(per course改为each call，因为这里讨论的是电话费用；to use改为using，使句子更自然).

Revised (140 words): Students in the letter suggest that room phones are unnecessary because they have personal mobile phones, and removing room phones would be cost-effective. However, the woman in the listening part disagrees with this idea, stating that the service of mobile phones is not reliable due to the presence of hills in the area, which could cause service interruptions. Therefore, she believes it is beneficial for students to have room phones as a backup option when mobile service is unavailable. Additionally, she points out that students only pay for each call made from room phones, allowing them to control their expenses by limiting usage. Thus, she argues that maintaining the current system is a better solution for students.

6.思维导图

• Room phones
  • Unnecessary
    • Personal mobile phones
    • Cost-effective
  • Woman's opinion
    • Disagrees
      • Mobile service not reliable
        • Hills in the area
        • Service interruptions
      • Room phones as backup option
      • Pay for each call
        • Control expenses by limiting usage

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，回答的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作调整。建议在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，尽量避免不必要的停顿。此外，注意正确发音单词，以减少拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答在话题发展方面做得很好，内容条理清晰，观点之间的联系明确。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在解释观点时提供更多具体的例子或支持论据。

5.语言使用

Original: The student in their letter proposes The student in the letter proposes (去掉多余的代词) that the university should remove the phones from students' rooms. However, the woman in the letter disagrees with this idea for two reasons. Firstly, it is good for students to have both their personal phones and the phones in the room, because sometimes their personal phones are not reliable. There's a lot of hills in this area, so the service isn't really good. Sometimes the phone calls are just cut off because the reception is not good. So it is good for students to have a backup option. And the second reason is that students actually don't have to pay a lot of money for having dorm phones because they pay per call. If they want to avoid the high rates, they can just control how many calls they make on one of the dorm phones. So in essence, women think it is good to keep it as the way it is now, which is to keep the students' dorm phones because they are really necessary.

Revised (140 words): The student in the letter proposes that the university should remove phones from students' rooms. However, the woman disagrees for two reasons. First, having both personal and room phones benefits students since personal phone service can be unreliable due to numerous hills affecting reception quality. Thus, room phones provide a dependable backup option. Second, she argues that dorm phone costs are not burdensome as students pay per call; by limiting usage, they can control expenses. Consequently, she believes maintaining current arrangements with dorm phones is beneficial and necessary for students.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Remove phones from students' rooms

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reason 1: Reliability
    - Personal phone service issues
    - Room phones as backup option
  - Reason 2: Cost
    - Pay per call system
    - Control expenses by limiting usage

- Conclusion
  - Maintain current arrangements with dorm phones

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。但是，为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在适当的地方加入适当的停顿，以增强语言的清晰度；2) 注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。通过改进这些方面，发言者可以使自己的表达更加清晰和流畅。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, the speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement. The speaker should focus more on summarizing the proposal from the reading passage and then clearly state the woman's opinion about the proposal before explaining her reasons. Additionally, it would be helpful to use more transitional phrases to connect ideas and create a smoother flow in the response. By making these improvements, the speaker can further enhance their topic development and overall response quality.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, the student thinks that the room phones are unnecessary. The reading passage proposes that room phones in dormitories are unnecessary. (原文中的建议是宿舍里的电话是不必要的，而不是学生认为如此。) First off, she says that today students all have mobile phones. Firstly, the author of the letter argues that students nowadays all have mobile phones. (这里应该指的是信的作者，而不是女生。) Besides, students can save much money if didn't have to pay the cost of phone service for the room. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. First off, she believes that the mobile phone may get cut off in some areas. Since the service of phone isn't always reliable, so it's good to have backup option. Furthermore, she argues that students only pay per call nowadays. They don't pay too much if they don't make many calls.

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage proposes that room phones in dormitories are unnecessary because students nowadays all have mobile phones and removing them would save money on housing costs. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, she points out that mobile phone service is not always reliable in certain areas around campus due to factors such as hills, leading to poor reception and dropped calls. Therefore, having a room phone serves as a backup option when mobile service is inadequate. Secondly, she refutes the cost-saving argument by explaining that students currently only pay per call for their room phones. As a result, if they don't make many calls, their expenses are minimal. In conclusion, the woman believes that room phones should remain in dormitories as they provide a reliable alternative to mobile phones and do not impose significant costs on students.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage Proposal
  - Unnecessary room phones
  - Mobile phones for students
  - Cost-saving

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons:
    - Unreliable mobile service
      - Poor reception, dropped calls
      - Room phone as backup option
    - Cost-saving argument refuted
      - Pay per call system
      - Minimal expenses for low usage

- Conclusion
  - Room phones should remain in dormitories

7.关键词