TOEFL TPO 1 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain groupthink and its effects using example of the computer company.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答相对清晰，但在语速和停顿方面还有待提高。建议在练习时注意保持一致的语速，适当减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论据支持方面还有提升空间。建议在练习时注意逻辑结构的梳理，确保观点之间的关联性，并尝试提供更多具体的例子或论据来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The group thinking is a process by which groups make bad or irrational decisions. The professor used his own example in a computer company to illustrate this idea. The professor proposed a new design of the computer in a meeting. However, originally, half of the co-workers voted for his opinion. However, after senior co-workers made disagreements, there was a shift in support. People began to vote against his own idea. And it turned out that the decision was really poor because the other year, the competitors changed his new design and used that design to attract the last of consumer which jeopardized the company's potential profits.

Corrected Answer: The group thinking Groupthink (原文为group thinking，应改为groupthink) is a process by which groups make bad or irrational decisions. The professor used his own example experience (原文为example，应改为experience) in a computer company to illustrate this idea. The professor proposed a new design of the computer in a meeting. However, originally, Initially (原文为however, originally，应改为initially以使句子更自然流畅), half of the co-workers voted for his opinion. However, Yet (原文为however，应改为yet以避免重复使用however), after senior co-workers made disagreements disagreed (原文为made disagreements，应改为disagreed), there was a shift in support. People began to vote against his own idea. And it turned out that the decision was really poor because the other year the following year (原文为the other year，应改为the following year), the competitors changed his new design introduced a new design (原文为changed his new design，应改为introduced a new design) and used that design to attract the last of consumer more consumers (原文为the last of consumer，应改为more consumers), which jeopardized the company's potential profits.

Revised Answer (140 words): Groupthink is a process by which groups make bad or irrational decisions. The professor shared his own experience in a computer company to illustrate this concept. He proposed a new design for the computer during a meeting. Initially, half of the co-workers supported his idea. Yet, when senior co-workers disagreed, there was a shift in support, and people began voting against his proposal. Eventually, the decision not to change the design proved to be detrimental, as the following year, competitors introduced an innovative design that attracted more consumers. This negatively impacted the company's potential profits. To achieve a higher score, it is essential to use advanced vocabulary, proper grammar, maintain a natural flow of statements, smooth transitions, and strong conclusions in your response.

6.思维导图

Groupthink
├─ Definition
├─ Professor's experience
│   ├─ Computer company
│   ├─ Proposed new design
│   ├─ Initial support
│   └─ Shift in support due to senior co-workers' disagreement
└─ Effects
    ├─ Decision not to change design
    └─ Competitors' success with new design and impact on company's profits

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of speech. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace and minimizing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors that may result from inaccuracies in speech.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific details from both the reading and listening passages to strengthen the response. The speaker should also focus on using more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of the answer.

5.Language Use

The reading of high stage reading passage (clarification for better understanding) mainly talks about groupthink, which refers to one process by which groups may make insensible irrational (corrected word choice) decisions. In the business measurement management (corrected word choice) class, the professor used his own working experience in a computer company as an example to illustrate the concept. Actually, he and his co-worker wanted to make a design makeover in order to attract new customers. In the beginning, half of his colleagues approved their plan, but some seniors disagreed with them because they thought their focus was technology and the change was necessary unnecessary (corrected word choice for accurate meaning). Then suddenly, most of his supporters and even his co-worker changed their mind because they didn't want to have a bad impression on the senior managers. Finally, the professor also voted against his own idea, but the end result was terrible. His competitor made a new design and prevented the company from profiting from new customers.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage discusses groupthink, a process where groups make irrational decisions due to conformity pressures. In a business management class, the professor shared his experience at a computer company to illustrate this concept. He and his coworker proposed a design makeover to attract new customers. Initially, half of their colleagues supported the idea, but some senior managers opposed it, believing their focus should be on technology and that the change was unnecessary. Subsequently, many supporters, including the coworker, changed their stance to avoid leaving a negative impression on senior managers. The professor eventually voted against his own proposal, leading to a poor outcome. Their competitor introduced a new design, attracting potential customers and negatively impacting their company's profits.

6.Mind Map

- Groupthink
  - Definition
  - Reasons for occurrence

- Professor's experience
  - Computer company
  - Design makeover proposal
  - Initial support
  - Senior managers' opposition
  - Supporters changing stance
  - Professor voting against own idea

- Consequences
  - Competitor's new design
  - Loss of potential customers and profits

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本上是一致的，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意以下几点：1) 在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性；2) 确保发音准确，以避免拼写错误。通过改进这些方面，发言者可以更清晰、流畅地表达观点。

4.话题发展 The speaker provided a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker could have elaborated more on the reasons behind groupthink and its effects on the computer company's decision-making process. Additionally, the speaker could have better emphasized the consequences of groupthink in the given example, such as the loss of customers and profits due to the company's decision not to update their computer design. By expanding on these points, the speaker's response would be more comprehensive and persuasive.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Groupthink said team members insist on immature and unreasonable thought only because of his fear or desire to take part in the group's group work. Groupthink occurs when team members adopt irrational and immature thoughts due to their fear or desire to conform to the group's consensus. (将原句中的表述进行了调整，使其更自然流畅) The company example is the speaker want to make a new design makeover to attract more customers. In the company example, the speaker wanted to create a new design makeover to attract more customers. (修改了时态和语法结构，使句子更清晰) Originally half of the people support the speaker but only when the senior manager disagreed with the opinion and said they should only focus on the technology, more and more people agreed with the senior manager because they think the disagreement will only jeopardize their promotion. Initially, half of the people supported the speaker, but when the senior manager disagreed and stated that they should focus solely on technology, more people agreed with him, fearing that disagreement would jeopardize their promotions. (调整了句子结构，使其更连贯) After more and more people supporting the senior manager, even if the speaker himself disagreed with the original thought, at the end the immature thought cost a lot of money and prevent the company from getting new customers. As more people supported the senior manager, even the speaker eventually disagreed with his original idea, resulting in the company losing money and potential new customers due to the immature decision. (对句子进行了重组，使其更清晰)

Revised Answer (140 words): Groupthink occurs when team members adopt irrational and immature thoughts due to their fear or desire to conform to the group's consensus. In the company example, the speaker wanted to create a new design makeover to attract more customers. Initially, half of the people supported the speaker, but when the senior manager disagreed and stated that they should focus solely on technology, more people agreed with him, fearing that disagreement would jeopardize their promotions. As more people supported the senior manager, even the speaker eventually disagreed with his original idea, resulting in the company losing money and potential new customers due to the immature decision. By understanding and addressing groupthink, companies can make better decisions and avoid costly mistakes like the one in this example.

6.思维导图

- Groupthink
  - Definition
  - Reasons
    - Fear
    - Desire to conform

- Company Example
  - New design makeover proposal
  - Initial support
  - Senior manager's disagreement
    - Focus on technology
  - Shift in support
    - Fear of jeopardizing promotions
  - Resulting decision
    - Loss of money and potential customers

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作调整。为了提高发音的准确性，请注意练习发音，并确保在讲话时保持一致的语速和适当的停顿。此外，尝试避免在句子中使用不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以通过提供更多关于团队成员如何受到压力去改变他们的观点以符合高层管理者的期望来进一步完善。为了使回答更具说服力，可以考虑添加更多关于公司最终决策对其业务造成负面影响的细节。

5.语言使用

Original: Group thinking refers to the concept that some individuals may conform their own ideas to the group concepts, even it may be negative for them, for the whole group. In the lesson, the professor takes himself as an example. In the computer company, he and his co-worker decided to make the outer design of their computer cooler, and so to attract more customers. However, there are some senior managers that didn't support their ideas, and then most of their workers changed their ideas against their designers, and in the end even the professor himself began to not support his own ideas, and finally they gave up this idea.

Corrected: Group thinking Groupthink (原词为“Group thinking”，正确的词是“Groupthink”) refers to the concept that some individuals may conform their own ideas to the group concepts the perceived group consensus (原句不够准确，应改为“the perceived group consensus”以更好地表达概念), even if it may be negative for them or the whole group. In the lesson, the professor uses himself as an example. In the computer company, he and his co-worker decided to make the outer design of their computers more attractive in order to attract more customers. However, some senior managers didn't support their idea, and then most of their colleagues changed their opinions against the proposed design change. In the end, even the professor himself began to not support his own idea, and finally they gave up on it.

Revised (140 words): Groupthink is a phenomenon where individuals conform their opinions to match the perceived group consensus, even if it may be negative for them or the whole group. The professor's experience in a computer company serves as an example. He and his co-worker proposed a more attractive outer design for their computers to attract more customers. However, some senior managers opposed the idea, causing most of their colleagues to change their opinions against the design change. Eventually, even the professor stopped supporting his own idea, and they abandoned the proposal. This example demonstrates the effects of groupthink, where individuals prioritize conformity over their own beliefs, leading to potentially negative outcomes for the group as a whole.

6.思维导图

Groupthink
├─ Conform opinions
│   ├─ Perceived group consensus
│   └─ Negative outcomes
└─ Professor's example
    ├─ Computer company
    │   ├─ Attractive outer design proposal
    │   └─ Senior managers' opposition
    └─ Effects of groupthink
        ├─ Colleagues changed opinions
        ├─ Professor stopped supporting idea
        └─ Abandoned proposal

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 1

2.预估分数

15. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答有一些问题。首先，发言者的语速不够流畅，有时会出现不必要的停顿。其次，发言者在发音方面也存在一些错误，导致拼写错误。建议发言者在练习口语时注意提高语速的流畅性，并多加练习正确的发音。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答并没有很好地回答问题。问题要求解释什么是群体思维以及它在计算机公司中的影响，但是回答中提到了关于大学允许学生在课堂上吃东西的问题，与题目无关。建议发言者在回答问题时仔细审题，确保自己的回答与题目紧密相关，并提供充分的支持和例子来支持自己的观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The newspaper contend that the university should allow students to eat in class. That is because students will be able to concentrate better without hunger, and they will have a chance to have an in-class party at the end of the semester. However, the man in the conversation disagreed with this. He thinks that the snack will only help the people who eat it, and the others will get hurt from it, because they will pay attention to the noises and they can't concentrate anymore. Besides, the man argued that the last day of the semester is important because students will use it to review on the final exam. If they use the classes to take the party, they won't get well prepared for the exam and they will do bad in it. That is why the man disagreed with the newspaper's proposal.

Corrected Answer: Groupthink is a process where individuals in a group conform their opinions to what they believe is the group consensus, even if it leads to negative outcomes. In the computer company example, a design makeover was proposed to make their computers more appealing to customers. Initially, many supported this idea, but senior managers opposed it due to cost concerns. As a result, some supporters changed their minds, fearing negative impressions on senior managers or being seen as not team players. Eventually, everyone voted against the design change, leading to a unanimous decision to maintain the old design. This decision cost them potential customers and profits when a competitor released a new design that attracted their customers. (在这个修正后的回答中，我们删除了与题目无关的内容，并重新组织了回答，使其更加紧密地围绕题目展开。同时，我们还修正了一些语法错误和词汇问题，使回答更加自然和流畅。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Groupthink is a process where individuals in a group conform their opinions to what they believe is the group consensus, even if it leads to negative outcomes. In the computer company example, a design makeover was proposed to make their computers more appealing to customers. Market research showed that customers would be more interested in buying the computers if they looked cooler. Initially, many supported this idea, but senior managers opposed it due to cost concerns. As a result, some supporters changed their minds, fearing negative impressions on senior managers or being seen as not team players. Eventually, everyone voted against the design change, leading to a unanimous decision to maintain the old design. This decision cost them potential customers and profits when a competitor released a new design that attracted their customers and prevented them from profiting on potential new customers.

6.思维导图

• Groupthink

  • Definition
  • Negative outcomes

• Computer company example

  • Design makeover proposal
  • Initial support
  • Senior managers' opposition
  • Supporters changing minds
  • Unanimous decision against change
  • Negative consequences

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位考生的回答相对清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议考生注意在练习时保持连贯的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，考生的回答基本上符合题目要求，能够用计算机公司的例子解释集体思维及其影响。但是，在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待加强。建议考生在练习时注意使用恰当的过渡词汇和连接词，使回答更加连贯和有条理。同时，尝试提供更多相关细节和例子来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The lecture talks about group thinking think(集体思维应为groupthink), which means individual members of a group attempt to confirm conform(此处应为conform，表示遵循) their opinions to what's believed to be the group's conscience consensus(此处应为consensus，表示共识), even though the result is wrong. For example, when a professor worked in a computer company, their customers asked them to do some design makeover of their outlooking appearance(此处应为appearance，表示外观), and his co-worker agreed with that, but their manager disagreed with that. The manager saw that they should focus on technology, so everyone supported the manager and changed their mind, even the co-worker. When the professor asked them, he said that he didn't want to make a bad impression on the managers, but as a result, they stayed outlooking with the old design(此处应为with the old design，表示保留旧设计) and they cost more money, the computers created a more fashionable outlook.

Revised (140 words):

The lecture discusses groupthink, which occurs when individual members of a group attempt to conform their opinions to what is believed to be the group's consensus, even if the result is negative. For instance, when a professor worked at a computer company, their customers requested a design makeover for the computers' appearance. Although his co-worker initially agreed, their manager opposed the idea, believing that they should focus on technology. Consequently, everyone supported the manager and changed their minds, including the co-worker. When the professor inquired about this, his co-worker explained that he didn't want to leave a negative impression on the managers. As a result, they stuck with the old design, which ultimately cost them more money as their competitors released more fashionable designs that attracted potential customers.

6.思维导图

- Groupthink
  - Conform opinions
  - Group consensus
  - Negative result

- Example: Computer company
  - Design makeover
    - Co-worker agreed
    - Manager opposed
  - Focus on technology
  - Changed minds
    - Fear of bad impression
  - Old design retained
    - Costly decision
    - Competitors' fashionable designs

7.关键词