TOEFL TPO 52 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the idea expressed in the newspaper. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在发音方面，整体上讲得比较清楚，但仍有一些不太准确的地方。建议在发音时注意语速，保持一致的节奏，适时地停顿。此外，注意提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 回答内容在话题发展方面表现较好，观点清晰且有条理。可以考虑在回答中加入更多细节和例子来支持观点，使回答更加充实。

5.语言使用

原文：The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak in the graduation ceremonies. The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies.（在表示“在毕业典礼上”时，应使用“at”而非“in”。）

However, the woman does not agree with the idea. However, the woman disagrees with this idea.（使用“disagrees”更简洁明了。）

First of all, she thinks that there are always business leaders speaking in the graduation ceremonies, Firstly, she believes that business leaders are always invited to speak at graduation ceremonies,（使用“Firstly”和“believes”使句子更自然；同样地，用“at”替换“in”。）

and more influential people from diversified professions should be invited. and she suggests inviting more influential individuals from diverse professions.（改为主动语态，使句子更自然。）

Like teachers who are influential and play an important role in our communities. For example, teachers, who are influential and play a crucial role in our communities.（使用“For example”和“crucial”使句子更自然。）

Besides, the business program is big and well-known enough, Moreover, the business program is already large and well-established,（使用“Moreover”和“well-established”使句子更自然。）

so there is no need to advertise it. so it does not require additional promotion.（使用“additional promotion”使句子更自然。）

However, the teacher training program is less known, On the other hand, the teacher training program is less recognized,（使用“On the other hand”和“recognized”使句子更自然。）

so if teachers can be invited, teachers can draw attention a lot. so inviting teachers could significantly increase its visibility.（使用“significantly increase its visibility”使句子更自然。）

Thank you very much. Thank you for considering my suggestions.（使用“Thank you for considering my suggestions”使结尾更自然。）

修订版（140字）：

The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she believes that business leaders are always invited to speak at graduation ceremonies, and she suggests inviting more influential individuals from diverse professions. For example, teachers, who are influential and play a crucial role in our communities. Moreover, the business program is already large and well-established, so it does not require additional promotion. On the other hand, the teacher training program is less recognized, so inviting teachers could significantly increase its visibility. Thank you for considering my suggestions.

6.思维导图

• Disagreement

  • Business leaders always invited
  • Diverse professions
    • Example: Teachers
      • Influential
      • Crucial role in communities

• Business program

  • Large and well-established
  • No additional promotion needed

• Teacher training program

  • Less recognized
  • Inviting teachers increases visibility

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，以及提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上涵盖了所需的观点和原因。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化，例如可以更清晰地表达女生的观点和原因。为了提高话题发展质量，建议在练习时注意提高回答的条理性和连贯性。

5.语言使用

Original: It is proposed that the business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. The proposal suggests that a business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. (建议使用更自然的表达方式)

Original: Firstly, because they are the role models for students and they can help reinforce to the community. First, they serve as role models for students and can help strengthen the community's perception of success. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Original: However, in the listening part, the girls disagree with this. However, in the listening passage, the woman disagrees with this idea. (使用更准确的描述)

Original: Firstly, this is because it's always a business leader speaking at the graduation ceremony. Her first reason is that business leaders always speak at graduation ceremonies. (改进句子结构)

Original: And we should invite another influential people such as teachers to add the speaker. She suggests inviting other influential figures, like teachers, as speakers instead. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Original: This is because a business program is big enough and it didn't need more advertisement. This is because the business program is already well-established and doesn't need additional promotion. (改进句子结构和时态)

Original: However, the education program which is about the training teacher program is beneficial for the society. However, the education program, specifically the teacher training program, would benefit society. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that a business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. First, they serve as role models for students and can help strengthen the community's perception of success. However, in the listening passage, the woman disagrees with this idea. Her first reason is that business leaders always speak at graduation ceremonies. She suggests inviting other influential figures, like teachers, as speakers instead. This is because the business program is already well-established and doesn't need additional promotion. However, the education program, specifically the teacher training program, would benefit society. By inviting a local teacher to speak at the ceremony, it could draw attention to this lesser-known but valuable program and potentially attract more prospective students interested in pursuing a career in education.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Business leader as speaker
  • Role models
  • Strengthen community perception

• Woman's disagreement

  • Business leaders always speak
  • Need for variety

• Suggestion

  • Invite influential figures (teachers)
  • Benefit other programs (education)
    • Teacher training program
    • Attract prospective students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在表述观点时可以更加明确和具体。建议在练习时关注提供更多支持观点的细节和例子，以便让回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the announcement, somebody in the university asked the university to invite famous business leaders in the graduation ceremony so that make the business guru program more famous and have many beneficials. But the guru totally disagreed about this solution. First of all, she thinks that they have already invited many business leaders in the ceremony in the past few years and she thinks there should be some change, such as inviting some teachers. And also, a teacher is a very important role in the society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is big enough and very famous enough, but the education program is not.

Corrected Answer: In the announcementletter, somebody ina student from the university askedsuggested that the university invite famous business leaders toin the graduation ceremony,. This would makepromote the business guruprogram and have many beneficialsbenefits. However, the woman disagreed with this solutionproposal. Firstly, she believes that they have already invited numerous business leaders toin past ceremonies and that there should be a change, such as inviting teachers. Additionally, teachers play a crucial role in society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is already well-established and renowned, but the education program is not.

(原文中的“announcement”应改为“letter”，因为这是一封信。原文中的“somebody in”应改为“a student from”，以更准确地描述信的来源。原文中的“asked”应改为“suggested that”，以使句子更自然。原文中的“make”应改为“promote”，以使词汇更准确。原文中的“guru”应改为“program”，以避免混淆。原文中的“beneficials”应改为“benefits”，以使语法正确。原文中的“solution”应改为“proposal”，以使表达更准确。)

Revised Answer (140 words): In the letter, a student from the university suggested that the university invite famous business leaders to the graduation ceremony. This would promote the business program and provide many benefits. However, the woman disagreed with this proposal. Firstly, she believes that they have already invited numerous business leaders to past ceremonies, and it's time for a change, such as inviting teachers who play a crucial role in society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is already well-established and renowned, so it doesn't need further promotion. On the other hand, the education program could benefit from increased exposure and recognition. By inviting a local teacher to speak at the graduation ceremony, the university could draw attention to its excellent teacher training program and attract more prospective students interested in pursuing a career in education.

6.思维导图

• Letter

  • Suggestion
    • Invite business leaders
    • Promote business program

• Woman's disagreement

  • Already invited business leaders
  • Need for change
    • Invite teachers
      • Crucial role in society
  • Business program well-established
  • Education program needs exposure

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。建议练习更连贯的表达，减少不必要的停顿，以提高交付得分。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，观点之间的联系清晰，提供了充足的支持和例子。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

原文：A student suggests that the business leader should be invited to the graduation ceremony as they serve as an excellent role model for the business students and can help enhance the reputation of the business program in the community. The student suggests inviting a business leader to the graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community.（将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。）

原文：However, in a conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal. However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea.（将“in a conversation”改为“during their conversation”，使句子更具体；将“proposal”改为“idea”，使词汇更自然。）

原文：Firstly, she believes that since the university has invited business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, such as teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. First, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community.（将“Firstly”改为“First”，使语言更自然；将“has invited”改为“invites”，使时态一致。）

原文：Secondly, she believes that business programs are already very well known to the public. Second, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public.（将“Secondly”改为“Second”，使语言更自然；去掉“very”，使语言更简洁。）

原文：However, other programs, like the education program, are not as well known in the community. However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community.（将“like”改为“such as”，使语言更正式。）

原文：Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract more attention to the education program, which would be advantageous, and as a result, she disagrees with this proposal. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this idea.（将“attract”改为“draw”，使词汇更自然；将“advantageous”改为“beneficial”，使词汇更自然；将“proposal”改为“idea”，使词汇更自然。）

修订后的回答（140字）：

The student suggests inviting a business leader to the graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community. However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea. First, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. Second, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public. However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this idea.

6.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Student's suggestion
  • Business leader as a speaker

• Woman's disagreement

  • Reasons
    • Variety in professions
      • Teachers as an example
    • Business programs' reputation
      • Already well-known
    • Education program
      • Needs more attention

• Conclusion

  • Woman's opinion

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意掌握自然的语调和节奏，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答内容连贯、组织良好，观点之间关系明确，并且提供了足够的支持和例子。在这方面已经做得很好了。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在练习中多关注其他可能的观点和论据，使回答更加全面和深入。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: A student suggests that the university should invite a business leader to this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models for students. And it can reinforce to the community that their school's business program is the biggest and best. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with it because firstly, she thinks they can do with some variety. She means the university can also consider other professions which are influential and successful, like the teachers. And besides, she thinks their school's business program is already very famous. So the university can pay more attention to other good programs, like the teacher training program.

Corrected Answer: A student suggests that the university should invite a business leader to this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models for students, and it can reinforce to the community that their school's business program is the biggest and best(添加逗号，使句子更自然). However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with it because, firstly, she thinks they can do with some variety(添加逗号，使句子更自然). She means the university can also consider other professions which are influential and successful, like, teachers(添加逗号，使句子更自然). And besides, she thinks their school's business program is already very famous. So, the university can pay more attention to other good programs, like, the teacher training program(添加逗号，使句子更自然).

Revised Answer (140 words): A student suggests that the university should invite a business leader to this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models for students, and it can reinforce to the community that their school's business program is the biggest and best. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she believes that having a variety of speakers from different professions, such as teachers who are also influential and successful, would be more beneficial. Secondly, she points out that their school's business program is already well-known, so it does not need additional promotion from a graduation speaker. Instead, she suggests that the university should focus on promoting other valuable programs like the teacher training program, which could greatly benefit from increased exposure and recognition.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
    - Student's suggestion
    - Business leader as speaker

- Woman's disagreement
    - Variety in speakers
        - Different professions
        - Teachers as an example
    - Business program already famous
        - No need for additional promotion
    - Focus on other programs
        - Teacher training program
        - Benefit from exposure and recognition

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their ideas and incorporating more concrete examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

The university claims that they should invite a business leader to speak ceremonyat the ceremony(added "at the" for clarity), and the woman holds a negative view. The first reason she mentions is that every year the university brings a business leader and they should dohave(changed "do" to "have" for better word choice) some variety. They should invite a teacher, because the role of a teacher is really important, and they can bring many benefits if they invite a teacher. And the second reason is that the program is so big and not any benefit they can bring.(added a period for proper punctuation) And instead, she mentions that the university can invite a training program for the teachers, which will definitely bring many benefits to the community.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The woman disagrees with inviting a business leader to speak at the graduation ceremony, as suggested by the university. She believes that there should be more variety in the speakers chosen, such as inviting a teacher. She argues that teachers play an essential role in society and could offer valuable insights during their speech. Additionally, she contends that the business program is already well-established and would not significantly benefit from having a business leader as a speaker. Instead, she proposes that inviting someone from an educational background could help promote lesser-known programs like teacher training. By doing so, it would not only diversify the speakers but also provide valuable exposure to other programs within the university, ultimately benefiting both students and the community.

6.Mind Map

- Disagreement
  - Variety in speakers
    - Teachers
      - Essential role
      - Valuable insights
  - Business program
    - Well-established
    - No significant benefit
  - Alternative proposal
    - Promote lesser-known programs
      - Teacher training
    - Diversify speakers
    - Exposure and benefits for students and community

7.Key Words