TOEFL TPO 44 Speaking Task 1 Sample: Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand, and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer. Other people believe that it is still important for schools to teach children to have good handwriting. Which point of view do you agree with? Explain why.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• TOEFL iBT Speaking Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some areas for improvement. There are occasional pauses that could be reduced to create a more consistent pace. Additionally, the speaker should work on their pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors that may arise from inaccurate pronunciation. Overall, the speaker should practice speaking more naturally and confidently to improve their delivery.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the speaker could further develop their argument by providing more specific examples or personal experiences that relate to the importance of good handwriting. Additionally, the speaker could address the opposing viewpoint (teaching typing instead of handwriting) and explain why they believe handwriting is still important despite advancements in technology. This would make the response more balanced and persuasive.

5. Language Use

Original:

believe it is still important to teach children to have good handwriting. First, a good handwriting can help people to give others a better impression. For example, when we see a person with a nice and decent handwriting, we tend to see this person as a well-educated and knowledgeable person so that we are more willing to believe his or her words. Second, in my country, China, most several formal exams such as university entrance examinations still require students to complete in handwriting. So a beautiful handwriting can help students to get a better score. In addition, according to my experience, even though university students take notes by typing, it is still important for learning to reorganize and write down the notes in another form. So a beautiful handwriting can help students to understand their notes.

Revised:

I firmly believe that it is crucial to continue teaching children good handwriting in primary schools. Firstly, possessing neat and legible handwriting can create a positive impression on others. For instance, when we encounter an individual with elegant penmanship, we often perceive them as well-educated and knowledgeable, making us more inclined to trust their words. Secondly, in countries like China, numerous formal exams, such as university entrance examinations, still necessitate handwritten responses. Thus, having beautiful handwriting can potentially improve a student's performance. Furthermore, based on my experience, even though university students may take notes by typing, it remains essential for learning to reorganize and transcribe these notes in an alternate format. Consequently, refined handwriting can facilitate a better understanding of one's notes.

I firmly believe (revised for a stronger statement) that it is crucial (advanced vocabulary) to continue teaching children good handwriting in primary schools. Firstly (proper grammar), possessing neat and legible (advanced vocabulary) handwriting can create a positive impression on others. For instance (smooth transition), when we encounter an individual with elegant penmanship (advanced vocabulary), we often perceive them as well-educated and knowledgeable, making us more inclined (advanced vocabulary) to trust their words. Secondly (proper grammar), in countries like China, numerous formal exams (more specific example), such as university entrance examinations, still necessitate handwritten responses (clearer explanation). Thus (smooth transition), having beautiful handwriting can potentially improve a student's performance. Furthermore (proper grammar), based on my experience (more personal connection), even though university students may take notes by typing, it remains essential for learning to reorganize and transcribe these notes in an alternate format (clearer explanation). Consequently (smooth transition), refined handwriting can facilitate a better understanding of one's notes.

Corrected:

I firmly believe (revised for a stronger statement) that it is still important crucial (advanced vocabulary) to teach continue teaching children to have good handwriting. First, a good handwriting in primary schools. Firstly (proper grammar), possessing neat and legible (advanced vocabulary) handwriting can help people to give others a better impression. create a positive impression on others. For example, instance (smooth transition), when we see a person encounter an individual with a nice and decent handwriting, elegant penmanship (advanced vocabulary), we tend to see this person often perceive them as a well-educated and knowledgeable person so that we are knowledgeable, making us more willing inclined (advanced vocabulary) to believe his or her trust their words. Second, Secondly (proper grammar), in my country, countries like China, most several numerous formal exams (more specific example), such as university entrance examinations examinations, still require students to complete in handwriting. So a necessitate handwritten responses (clearer explanation). Thus (smooth transition), having beautiful handwriting can help students to get a better score. In addition, according to potentially improve a student's performance. Furthermore (proper grammar), based on my experience, experience (more personal connection), even though university students may take notes by typing, it is still important remains essential for learning to reorganize and write down the transcribe these notes in another form. So a beautiful an alternate format (clearer explanation). Consequently (smooth transition), refined handwriting can help students to understand their notes.facilitate a better understanding of one's notes.

6. Display title: 6.Mind Map

Mind Map
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|-- Preference/Opinion: Importance of good handwriting
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|   |-- Main Point: Good handwriting gives a better impression
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|   |   |-- Supporting Example: Well-educated and knowledgeable perception
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|   |-- Main Point: Handwriting is still required in formal exams
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|   |   |-- Supporting Example: University entrance examinations in China
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|   |-- Main Point: Handwriting helps in learning and understanding notes
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|       |-- Supporting Example: Reorganizing and writing down notes for better understanding
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|-- Conclusion: Good handwriting remains important for various reasons, including giving a better impression, being required in formal exams, and aiding in learning.

7. Display title: 7.Key Words

8. Display title: 8.Additional Examples

9. Good handwriting can improve one's self-confidence, as they feel proud of their writing abilities and are more likely to share their thoughts with others.

10. In professional settings, good handwriting can be crucial for clear communication, especially when sharing written notes or instructions with colleagues.

11. Handwriting is a form of self-expression, and having good handwriting allows individuals to showcase their unique style and personality through their writing.

12. Practicing good handwriting can improve fine motor skills and hand-eye coordination, which are essential for various daily tasks and activities.

13. In certain situations, such as power outages or lack of technology access, having good handwriting is necessary for effective communication and documentation.

1.子项得分

• 交付：2

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：22

3.表达 从交付方面来看，这个回答有一些问题。首先，句子之间的连接不够流畅，有时会出现不恰当的停顿。此外，发音也需要改进，以避免拼写错误。建议练习更清晰、流畅的发音，并注意保持一致的语速和适当的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的。然而，可以提供更多具体的例子和支持来增强观点。例如，可以讨论一下手写在某些情况下可能仍然有用，但在现代社会中，计算机打字技能更为关键。此外，在解释为什么计算机打字对学术表现和职业发展很重要时，可以给出更详细的解释。

5. 语言使用

Original:

Honestly, I think I agree that the primary school should teach children how to type on the computer instead of teaching them how to write by hand. First of all, I think computer typing is really important in the academic performance, since nowadays we often have to deal with the homework using the computers, like writing the passage and doing other works. Besides, I think it's also important because computer typing is really common in the work, so if students get training in the primary school of how to type on the computer, they can have a better career in the future.

Revised:

In my opinion, primary schools should prioritize teaching children how to type on a computer rather than focusing on handwriting. Firstly, computer literacy is crucial for academic success in today's world, as students frequently need to complete assignments using computers, such as writing essays and conducting research. Secondly, proficiency in computer typing is highly valued in the workforce, and by introducing this skill at an early age, students will be better prepared for their future careers.

In my opinion, primary schools should prioritize (revised for a more formal tone) teaching children how to type on a computer rather than focusing on (revised for clarity) handwriting. Firstly (revised for advanced vocabulary), computer literacy (added to emphasize the importance of typing skills) is crucial for academic success in today's world (revised for a more natural flow), as students frequently need to complete assignments using computers (revised for clarity), such as writing essays and conducting research (added examples to strengthen the argument). Secondly (revised for advanced vocabulary), proficiency in computer typing is highly valued in the workforce (revised for clarity), and by introducing this skill at an early age (revised for a more natural flow), students will be better prepared for their future careers (revised for a strong conclusion).

Corrected:

Honestly, I think I agree that the

In my opinion, primary school schools should teach prioritize (revised for a more formal tone) teaching children how to type on a computer rather than focusing on (revised for clarity) handwriting. Firstly (revised for advanced vocabulary), computer literacy (added to emphasize the computer instead importance of teaching them how typing skills) is crucial for academic success in today's world (revised for a more natural flow), as students frequently need to write by hand. First of all, I think complete assignments using computers (revised for clarity), such as writing essays and conducting research (added examples to strengthen the argument). Secondly (revised for advanced vocabulary), proficiency in computer typing is really important highly valued in the academic performance, since nowadays we often have to deal with the homework using the computers, like writing the passage workforce (revised for clarity), and doing other works. Besides, I think it's also important because computer typing is really common in the work, so if by introducing this skill at an early age (revised for a more natural flow), students get training in the primary school of how to type on the computer, they can have will be better prepared for their future careers (revised for a better career in the future.strong conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Agree with teaching typing instead of handwriting

- Main Point
  - Importance of computer typing in academics and work

- Supporting Examples
  - Homework often requires computer use
  - Typing skills can lead to better career opportunities

- Conclusion
  - Primary schools should focus on teaching typing skills for future success

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Typing is faster than handwriting. Explanation: Typing allows students to complete assignments more quickly and efficiently. Supporting Example: Students who type their essays can finish them in half the time it takes to handwrite them.

10. Sub-opinion: Typing is more legible than handwriting. Explanation: Typed text is easier to read and understand than handwritten text. Supporting Example: Teachers can grade typed assignments more accurately because they can clearly read the students' work.

11. Sub-opinion: Typing skills are essential for using modern technology. Explanation: Most devices and software require typing skills for effective use. Supporting Example: Students who know how to type can easily navigate and use computers, tablets, and smartphones.

12. Sub-opinion: Typing encourages collaboration. Explanation: Digital documents can be easily shared and edited by multiple people. Supporting Example: Students can work together on group projects by sharing and editing documents online.

13. Sub-opinion: Typing reduces the need for paper and is environmentally friendly. Explanation: Digital documents save paper and reduce waste. Supporting Example: Schools that prioritize typing over handwriting can reduce their paper consumption and contribute to a greener environment.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 2

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 2

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2

2.预估分数

• 总分: 17

3.表达 从交付方面来看，这个回答有一些问题。首先，发言者的语速不够流畅，有时会出现不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在某些地方使用了错误的词汇，如“momentous”和“indispensable”，这可能会让听众产生困惑。建议发言者提高语速，并注意在表达时使用恰当的词汇。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答虽然提到了两个观点，但是论述不够充分。例如，在谈到学习打字对学生很重要时，发言者只提到了托福考试是在计算机上进行的，并没有给出其他具体的例子。此外，回答最后一句话与主题无关，建议删除。为了改进这个回答，建议发言者在论述观点时提供更多具体的例子和证据，并确保整个回答紧扣主题。

5. 语言使用

Original:

Personally speaking, I believe that primary school should no longer teach students how to write by hand, and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer. First, it can catch up with times and with the development of technology. Second, typing is an important, computer plays an important role, and typing is a momentous and indispensable skill for students to catch up with the development of technology. For example, the TOEFL test is on computer, and I should learn how to type quickly. So I think teaching students how to type on a computer is very important. Be careful, don't eat all the medicine on your clothes.

Revised:

In my opinion, primary schools should shift their focus from teaching children how to write by hand to teaching them how to type on a computer. Firstly, this change would align with the rapid advancement of technology in today's world. Secondly, typing has become an essential skill due to the significant role computers play in various aspects of life.

One supporting example is the TOEFL test, which is now administered on computers. To perform well on this exam, students must learn to type quickly and efficiently. Another example is the increasing reliance on digital communication in both personal and professional settings. Good typing skills enable individuals to communicate more effectively and efficiently through emails, instant messaging, and social media platforms.

By prioritizing typing over handwriting in primary education, we can better prepare students for success in a technology-driven world.

In my opinion, primary schools should shift their focus from teaching children how to write by hand (revised for clarity) to teaching them how to type on a computer (revised for clarity). Firstly, this change would align with the rapid advancement of technology (revised for natural flow) in today's world. Secondly, typing has become an essential skill (revised for natural flow) due to the significant role computers play in various aspects of life (revised for natural flow).

One supporting example is the TOEFL test (revised for clarity), which is now administered on computers. To perform well on this exam, students must learn to type quickly and efficiently (revised for natural flow). Another example is the increasing reliance on digital communication in both personal and professional settings (revised for clarity). Good typing skills enable individuals to communicate more effectively and efficiently through emails, instant messaging, and social media platforms (revised for natural flow).

By prioritizing typing over handwriting in primary education (revised for clarity), we can better prepare students for success in a technology-driven world (revised for strong conclusion).

Corrected:

Personally speaking, I believe that

In my opinion, primary school schools should no longer teach students shift their focus from teaching children how to write by hand, and instead should spend time hand (revised for clarity) to teaching them how to type on a computer. First, it can catch up computer (revised for clarity). Firstly, this change would align with times and with the development the rapid advancement of technology. Second, technology (revised for natural flow) in today's world. Secondly, typing has become an essential skill (revised for natural flow) due to the significant role computers play in various aspects of life (revised for natural flow).

One supporting example is an important, computer plays an important role, and typing is a momentous and indispensable skill for students to catch up with the development of technology. For example, the TOEFL test (revised for clarity), which is on computer, and I should now administered on computers. To perform well on this exam, students must learn how to type quickly. So I think teaching quickly and efficiently (revised for natural flow). Another example is the increasing reliance on digital communication in both personal and professional settings (revised for clarity). Good typing skills enable individuals to communicate more effectively and efficiently through emails, instant messaging, and social media platforms (revised for natural flow).

By prioritizing typing over handwriting in primary education (revised for clarity), we can better prepare students how to type on for success in a computer is very important. Be careful, don't eat all the medicine on your clothes.technology-driven world (revised for strong conclusion).

6. Display title: 6.思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Primary schools should teach typing instead of handwriting

- Main Point
  - Catch up with technology development
  - Importance of typing skills

- Supporting Examples
  - TOEFL test on computer
  - Typing is an indispensable skill for students

- Conclusion
  - Teaching students how to type is crucial for their future success

7. Display title: 7.关键词

8. Display title: 8.补充示例

9. Typing allows for faster communication, which is essential in today's fast-paced world.

10. Handwriting can still be taught as an elective course, allowing students to learn it if they are interested.

11. Typing reduces the chances of errors and makes editing easier, leading to improved overall work quality.

12. Students who learn typing early on will have an advantage when entering higher education or the workforce.

13. Teaching typing can also help students become more familiar with various software programs, increasing their computer literacy.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 2

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 2

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2

2.预估分数

• 总分: 17

3.表达 从交付方面来看，这个回答有一些不清晰和流畅度不高的地方。例如，“That is because most people care about feelings, and good handwriting could enhance the interaction with people.” 这句话中，"feelings" 和 "interaction with people" 的联系不够明确。建议在练习口语时，注意提高语言的清晰度和流畅度，保持一致的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容虽然与问题相关，但组织和连贯性有待提高。例如，在谈论为什么学生应该学习好的书写时，可以更具体地说明好的书写对于人际交往、学术和职业生涯的重要性。此外，可以提供更多具体的例子或论据来支持观点。在练习口语时，请注意提高回答的组织性和连贯性，并确保在回答中明确阐述观点并给出充分的支持或例子。

5.语言使用

原文：Well, I believe students should spend time on learning how to write in a good, have good writing. Well, I believe students should spend time learning how to write well and develop good handwriting skills.（在这里，我们将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然。同时，我们用 "write well" 和 "develop good handwriting skills" 替换了原来的 "write in a good, have good writing"。）

（在这里，我们将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然。同时，我们用 "write well" 和 "develop good handwriting skills" 替换了原来的 "write in a good, have good writing"。）

That is because most people care about feelings, and good handwriting could enhance the interaction with people. This is because many people value personal connections, and having good handwriting can improve communication with others.（这里我们用 "value personal connections" 替换了 "care about feelings"，并用 "improve communication with others" 替换了 "enhance the interaction with people" 以使表达更准确。）

（这里我们用 "value personal connections" 替换了 "care about feelings"，并用 "improve communication with others" 替换了 "enhance the interaction with people" 以使表达更准确。）

In my opinion, students should spend time learning how to write well and develop good handwriting skills. This is because many people value personal connections, and having good handwriting can improve communication with others. For instance, when writing a heartfelt letter to a friend or family member, neat and legible handwriting can convey sincerity and thoughtfulness.

Furthermore, good handwriting is essential in various professional settings. In some situations, such as filling out important documents or taking notes during meetings, clear and legible handwriting is crucial for effective communication. In conclusion, I believe that teaching children good handwriting skills is still important in primary schools as it not only helps to foster personal connections but also prepares them for future professional success.

6.思维导图

- Preference: Good handwriting skills
  - Main Point 1: Personal connections
    - Example 1: Heartfelt letters
    - Example 2: Showing respect
  - Main Point 2: Professional settings
    - Example 3: Filling out important documents
    - Example 4: Taking notes during meetings
  - Conclusion: Importance in primary schools for personal and professional success

7.关键词

8.补充示例

1. 学生们在学校里学习良好的书写技巧，可以在写日记时更好地表达自己的情感和思考。

2. 当孩子们长大后，他们可能需要为自己的孩子写亲子信，这时候好的书写技巧就显得尤为重要。

3. 在一些文化背景下，用优美的书法书写贺卡或请柬被认为是对收件人的尊重和礼貌。

4. 良好的书写技巧有助于提高阅读速度和理解能力，从而节省时间和提高工作效率。

5. 在没有电子设备可用的情况下，如露营或停电期间，拥有良好的书写技巧仍然具有实际应用价值。

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 2

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 2

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2

2.预估分数

• 总分: 17

3.表达 从交付方面来看，回答中存在一些问题。首先，句子之间的连接不够流畅，缺乏恰当的标点符号。此外，发音也有待提高，以避免拼写错误。建议练习更清晰、流利的发音，并注意在适当的地方加入停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答虽然提到了学校应该教授孩子们如何在计算机上打字，但没有充分阐述原因和提供足够的支持或例子。建议在回答中加入更多具体的论据和例子来支持观点，并确保内容条理清晰、组织有序。

5. 语言使用

Original:

from my perspective I agree with that school should teach children how to type on computer because nowadays most of the text are online text and like 12 text you need to have a high speed to complete your writing text if you have a low speed your score may be low and it is useful to children's future

Revised:

In my opinion, I believe that schools should focus on teaching children how to type on a computer rather than emphasizing handwriting. This is because, in today's digital age, most texts are found online, and proficient typing skills are essential for success. For instance, in standardized tests like the TOEFL iBT, having a high typing speed can significantly impact one's score. If a student has a low typing speed, they may struggle to complete their writing tasks, resulting in lower scores. Furthermore, strong typing skills will benefit children in their future careers as many professions require the use of computers and digital communication. By prioritizing typing over handwriting, schools can better prepare students for the demands of the modern world.

In my opinion, I believe that schools should focus on teaching children how to type on a computer rather than emphasizing handwriting (revised for clarity and proper grammar). This is because, in today's digital age (added "digital" for emphasis), most texts are found online (revised for proper grammar), and proficient typing skills are essential for success (revised for advanced vocabulary). For instance (added transition), in standardized tests like the TOEFL iBT (added example), having a high typing speed can significantly impact one's score (revised for clarity). If a student has a low typing speed, they may struggle to complete their writing tasks (revised for proper grammar), resulting in lower scores (revised for proper grammar). Furthermore (added transition), strong typing skills will benefit children in their future careers as many professions require the use of computers and digital communication (added supporting example). By prioritizing typing over handwriting (revised for clarity), schools can better prepare students for the demands of the modern world (strong conclusion).

Corrected:

from

In my perspective opinion, I agree with believe that school schools should teach focus on teaching children how to type on a computer because nowadays rather than emphasizing handwriting (revised for clarity and proper grammar). This is because, in today's digital age (added "digital" for emphasis), most of the text texts are found online text (revised for proper grammar), and proficient typing skills are essential for success (revised for advanced vocabulary). For instance (added transition), in standardized tests like 12 text you need to have the TOEFL iBT (added example), having a high typing speed can significantly impact one's score (revised for clarity). If a student has a low typing speed, they may struggle to complete your their writing text if you have a low speed your score may be low tasks (revised for proper grammar), resulting in lower scores (revised for proper grammar). Furthermore (added transition), strong typing skills will benefit children in their future careers as many professions require the use of computers and it is useful to children's futuredigital communication (added supporting example). By prioritizing typing over handwriting (revised for clarity), schools can better prepare students for the demands of the modern world (strong conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Agree that schools should teach typing

- Main Point
  - Importance of typing in the digital age

- Supporting Examples
  - Online texts and exams
  - Future career opportunities

- Conclusion
  - Typing skills are essential for success in modern society

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Typing skills improve efficiency. Explanation: Fast typing allows students to complete tasks more quickly. Supporting example: Students who type quickly can finish essays and assignments faster, leaving more time for other activities.

10. Sub-opinion: Typing is a valuable skill in many industries. Explanation: Many jobs require typing skills for communication and documentation purposes. Supporting example: Careers in fields such as journalism, programming, and administration all require strong typing skills.

11. Sub-opinion: Learning to type helps develop fine motor skills. Explanation: Typing requires precise finger movements and hand-eye coordination. Supporting example: Children who learn to type at a young age may develop better fine motor skills and hand-eye coordination.

12. Sub-opinion: Typing is more environmentally friendly than writing on paper. Explanation: Using computers for writing reduces paper waste and saves trees. Supporting example: Schools that teach typing can help promote environmental awareness by reducing their reliance on paper.

13. Sub-opinion: Typing can be more accessible for students with disabilities. Explanation: Some students may struggle with handwriting due to physical or learning disabilities. Supporting example: Teaching typing can provide an alternative method of communication for students who have difficulty with traditional handwriting.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速较为稳定，偶尔有停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以及提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个相对连贯和有组织的回答，并在一定程度上阐述了观点。但是，可以进一步完善观点的支持和例子。建议发言者尝试提供更具体的例子和论据来支持观点，并确保各个观点之间有明确的联系。

5.语言使用

原文：For me, television is a tool that depends on people's minds, which means how we use it. In my opinion, television's influence on society depends on how people utilize it. (改进了句子结构，使其更自然。)

If we use it in a positive way, it will have some benefits. When used positively, television offers numerous benefits. (使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。)

For example, if we watch TV together with our family members, we could discuss some news or topics on the TV. For instance, watching TV with family members can promote discussions about news or various topics presented on the screen. (改进了句子结构，使其更自然。)

It could promote communication. This fosters better communication among family members. (使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。)

But if we use television in a negative way, it might hurt our health. However, when television is misused, it can negatively impact our health. (改进了句子结构，使其更自然。)

If we watch TV for the whole night, we would have no energy to focus on studying or working. For example, watching TV all night can lead to a lack of energy and focus for studying or working the next day. (改进了句子结构，使其更自然。)

In my opinion, television's influence on society depends on how people utilize it. When used positively, television offers numerous benefits. For instance, watching TV with family members can promote discussions about news or various topics presented on the screen. This fosters better communication among family members. However, when television is misused, it can negatively impact our health. For example, watching TV all night can lead to a lack of energy and focus for studying or working the next day. Therefore, it is crucial to use television responsibly and strike a balance between its advantages and potential drawbacks.

6.思维导图

• Preference or opinion: The impact of television on society depends on how people use it
  • Key idea: Positive use of TV brings benefits
    • Supporting example 1: watch TV with family, facilitate discussion about news and topics
    • Supporting Example 2: Improve communication among family members
  • Key idea: Negative use of television has adverse health effects
    • Supporting Example 1: Watching TV all night leads to lack of energy and inability to concentrate on study or work
  • Conclusion: Use TV wisely, balancing its advantages and potential disadvantages

7.关键词

8.补充示例

1. Sub-opinion: Television can enhance knowledge

   • Explanation: People can learn a lot of new knowledge by watching documentaries and educational programs
   • Supporting examples: For example, watching documentaries about nature and history can broaden people's horizons

2. Sub-opinion: TV can help you relax

   • Explanation: After a stressful work or study, watching a comedy or entertainment program can make people relax
   • Supporting examples: For example, watching a light-hearted movie or comedy show can help reduce stress

3. Sub-opinion: TV may cause children to become addicted

   • Explanation: Watching too much TV may make children neglect school and outdoor activities
   • Supporting examples: For example, prolonged TV viewing may lead to poor grades and lack of exercise in children

4. Sub-opinion: TV ads can mislead consumers

   • Explanation: Some TV advertisements may exaggerate the advantages of products and mislead consumers to make wrong purchase decisions
   • Supporting examples: For example, some advertisements for weight loss products may exaggerate their effects, leading consumers to have unrealistic expectations

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 作为一名托福老师，在交付方面，我认为这个回答的发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。建议在练习口语时，注意保持连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，加强发音练习，提高准确度。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，这个回答提供了一个明确的观点，并给出了两个理由来支持观点。然而，在论述这两个理由时，可以更具体地给出一些例子或详细说明。例如，在谈到写字对记忆的帮助时，可以引用一些研究或具体案例来证明这一点。此外，在谈到电脑使用对健康的影响时，也可以提供更多详细信息。总之，尽量使论述更充实、有说服力。

5. 语言使用

Original:

I firmly agree that primary schools should still teach children how to write by hand. I have two reasons to support my viewpoint. Firstly, writing is a crucial skill for our future career, and it is better to enhance our memory when we try to memorize a passage or a sentence. And secondly, learning to type on the computer will lead to too much screen time, which is harmful for our mental and physical health.

Revised:

I strongly concur that primary schools should continue to teach children how to write by hand. I have two reasons to support my perspective. First, handwriting is an essential skill for our future careers, and it has been proven to improve memory retention when attempting to memorize passages or sentences. Second, focusing solely on typing skills would result in excessive screen time, which can be detrimental to both mental and physical health.

I strongly concur (revised "firmly agree" for a more advanced vocabulary) that primary schools should continue to teach children how to write by hand (rephrased for better flow). I have two reasons to support my perspective (changed "viewpoint" to "perspective" for variety). First, handwriting is an essential skill (revised "crucial skill" for a more advanced vocabulary) for our future careers, and it has been proven to improve memory retention (rephrased for clarity and natural flow) when attempting to memorize passages or sentences (revised for better flow). Second, focusing solely on typing skills (rephrased for clarity) would result in excessive screen time (revised "too much screen time" for a more advanced vocabulary), which can be detrimental (replaced "harmful" with "detrimental" for a more advanced vocabulary) to both mental and physical health (rephrased for better flow).

Corrected:

I firmly agree strongly concur (revised "firmly agree" for a more advanced vocabulary) that primary schools should still continue to teach children how to write by hand. hand (rephrased for better flow). I have two reasons to support my viewpoint. Firstly, writing perspective (changed "viewpoint" to "perspective" for variety). First, handwriting is an essential skill (revised "crucial skill" for a crucial skill more advanced vocabulary) for our future career, careers, and it is better has been proven to enhance our improve memory retention (rephrased for clarity and natural flow) when we try attempting to memorize a passage passages or a sentence. And secondly, learning to type sentences (revised for better flow). Second, focusing solely on the computer will lead to too typing skills (rephrased for clarity) would result in excessive screen time (revised "too much screen time, time" for a more advanced vocabulary), which is harmful can be detrimental (replaced "harmful" with "detrimental" for our a more advanced vocabulary) to both mental and physical health.health (rephrased for better flow).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Agree that primary schools should teach handwriting

- Main Point
  - Crucial skill for future career
  - Enhances memory
  - Reduces screen time

- Supporting Examples
  - Writing notes helps retention
  - Handwriting improves fine motor skills
  - Typing leads to excessive screen time

- Conclusion
  - Importance of handwriting in primary education

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Handwriting encourages creativity and self-expression, as it allows children to develop their unique writing style.

10. Writing by hand helps students focus on the content they are writing, rather than being distracted by the technology used for typing.

11. Handwritten notes are more personal and meaningful, which can improve communication and relationships between people.

12. Learning to write by hand can help children develop patience and perseverance, as it takes time and effort to perfect their handwriting skills.

13. Handwriting can be a form of art, allowing children to explore their artistic talents and appreciate the beauty of written language.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 2

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 2

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2

2.预估分数: 17

3.表达 从交付方面来看，这个回答存在一些问题。首先，句子之间的连接不够流畅，有时会出现不恰当的停顿。其次，发音方面也有一些错误，导致拼写错误。建议练习更清晰、流畅的发音，并注意保持一致的语速和适当的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答虽然提到了两个原因支持学校教授学生书写技能，但是论述不够充分和详细。首先，关于美感的观点可以进一步阐述为什么美感对人类如此重要以及如何体现在手写中。其次，关于史蒂夫·乔布斯的例子可以更详细地说明他如何将书法应用到苹果电脑以及这对苹果公司的成功产生了什么影响。建议在回答时尽量提供更多具体细节和例子来支持观点，并确保内容条理清晰、组织有序。

5. 语言使用

Original:

I hold a strong point that school should teach our children to have a good handwriting skill. The first reason is that I strongly think that the concept to beauty it's one of the essential property that different differed from human being with computer and the second reason it may told by Steve Jobs he points out when he finished his learning about penmanship and he put it into use with the Apple computer and it make us huge success

Revised:

I firmly believe that schools should continue to teach children the skill of good handwriting. The first reason is that I strongly feel that the concept of beauty, which is an essential quality that distinguishes humans from computers, is evident in handwriting. The second reason can be illustrated by Steve Jobs' experience; he emphasized the importance of penmanship after completing his own learning and incorporated it into Apple computers, leading to significant success.

I firmly believe that schools should continue to teach children the skill of good handwriting (revised for a stronger and more formal tone). The first reason is that I strongly feel (revised for clarity and emphasis) that the concept of beauty, which is an essential quality that distinguishes humans from computers (revised for clarity and proper grammar), is evident in handwriting. The second reason can be illustrated by Steve Jobs' experience (revised for a smoother transition and proper grammar); he emphasized the importance of penmanship after completing his own learning (revised for clarity) and incorporated it into Apple computers, leading to significant success (revised for a stronger conclusion).

Corrected:

I hold a strong point firmly believe that school schools should continue to teach our children to have a the skill of good handwriting skill. (revised for a stronger and more formal tone). The first reason is that I strongly think feel (revised for clarity and emphasis) that the concept to beauty it's one of the beauty, which is an essential property quality that different differed distinguishes humans from human being with computer computers (revised for clarity and the proper grammar), is evident in handwriting. The second reason it may told can be illustrated by Steve Jobs Jobs' experience (revised for a smoother transition and proper grammar); he points out when he finished emphasized the importance of penmanship after completing his own learning about penmanship (revised for clarity) and he put incorporated it into use with the Apple computer and it make us huge successcomputers, leading to significant success (revised for a stronger conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Importance of good handwriting

- Main Point
  - Differentiates humans from computers
  - Steve Jobs' success with Apple

- Supporting Examples
  - Concept of beauty in handwriting
  - Penmanship in Apple products

- Conclusion
  - Schools should teach good handwriting skills

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Good handwriting improves cognitive abilities. Explanation: Research has shown that practicing handwriting can enhance brain development and improve memory. Supporting Example: Students who take handwritten notes tend to retain information better than those who type their notes.

10. Sub-opinion: Handwriting is a form of self-expression. Explanation: Unique handwriting styles allow individuals to express their personality and creativity. Supporting Example: Famous artists like Vincent van Gogh and Frida Kahlo are known for their distinctive handwriting in their letters and journals.

11. Sub-opinion: Good handwriting promotes effective communication. Explanation: Clear and legible handwriting ensures that written messages are easily understood by others. Supporting Example: In professional settings, well-written documents can leave a positive impression on colleagues and clients.

12. Sub-opinion: Handwriting is a valuable skill in certain professions. Explanation: Some careers, such as calligraphy or graphic design, require excellent penmanship skills. Supporting Example: A calligrapher's success depends on their ability to create beautiful and precise handwritten text.

13. Sub-opinion: Handwriting fosters a sense of accomplishment. Explanation: Mastering the skill of good handwriting can boost self-esteem and encourage a love for learning. Supporting Example: Children who take pride in their penmanship are more likely to engage in other academic pursuits with enthusiasm.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 2

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2.5

2.预估分数

• 总分: 20

3.表达 从交付方面来看，这位考生的回答相对清晰，但仍有改进的空间。建议考生注意以下几点：首先，尝试保持语速的一致性，避免在句子中出现过多的停顿；其次，注意发音的准确性，以免出现拼写错误；最后，适当练习口语表达，提高流利度。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，考生的回答虽然表达了自己的观点，但在组织和论证方面还有待加强。建议考生在回答问题时注意以下几点：首先，尝试使用更清晰的逻辑结构来组织回答内容；其次，在论述观点时给出具体的例子或理由以增强说服力；最后，注意在回答中保持与问题主题的紧密联系。

5. 语言使用

Original:

Personally speaking, I think schools no longer need to teach children how to write by hand. It's simply we don't write by hand like we used to do. We type more often on computer and when we want to publish an announcement, we can just send by email and we seldom write by hand nowadays. So I think we don't really need to teach children handwriting because it's just not very useful.

Revised:

In my opinion, primary schools should shift their focus from teaching children how to write by hand to instructing them on typing skills using computers. The reason behind this is that handwriting is becoming less prevalent in our modern society, as we increasingly rely on digital communication methods. For instance, when disseminating information or making announcements, people often opt for emails or social media platforms instead of handwritten notes. Additionally, the professional world demands proficiency in computer usage and typing skills, which further emphasizes the importance of adapting to this change. In conclusion, it is crucial for schools to prioritize teaching children how to type on computers over handwriting, as it better prepares them for the evolving technological landscape.

In my opinion, primary schools should shift their focus from teaching children how to write by hand (revised for a more formal tone) to instructing them on typing skills using computers (added "using computers" for clarity). The reason behind this is that handwriting is becoming less prevalent in our modern society (rephrased for a smoother flow), as we increasingly rely on digital communication methods (added for context). For instance, when disseminating information or making announcements (revised for advanced vocabulary), people often opt for emails or social media platforms instead of handwritten notes (provided a supporting example). Additionally, the professional world demands proficiency in computer usage and typing skills (added another supporting example), which further emphasizes the importance of adapting to this change (included a smooth transition). In conclusion, it is crucial for schools to prioritize teaching children how to type on computers over handwriting (restated the main argument), as it better prepares them for the evolving technological landscape (provided a strong conclusion).

Corrected:

Personally speaking, I think

In my opinion, primary schools no longer need to teach should shift their focus from teaching children how to write by hand. It's simply hand (revised for a more formal tone) to instructing them on typing skills using computers (added "using computers" for clarity). The reason behind this is that handwriting is becoming less prevalent in our modern society (rephrased for a smoother flow), as we don't write by hand like we used increasingly rely on digital communication methods (added for context). For instance, when disseminating information or making announcements (revised for advanced vocabulary), people often opt for emails or social media platforms instead of handwritten notes (provided a supporting example). Additionally, the professional world demands proficiency in computer usage and typing skills (added another supporting example), which further emphasizes the importance of adapting to do. We this change (included a smooth transition). In conclusion, it is crucial for schools to prioritize teaching children how to type more often on computer and when we want to publish an announcement, we can just send by email and we seldom write by hand nowadays. So I think we don't really need to teach children computers over handwriting because it's just not very useful.(restated the main argument), as it better prepares them for the evolving technological landscape (provided a strong conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Schools no longer need to teach handwriting

- Main Point
  - Handwriting is less relevant in modern society

- Supporting Examples
  - Increased use of computers and technology
  - Email and digital communication replacing handwritten letters
  - Time and resources can be better spent on other skills

- Conclusion
  - Handwriting is not as useful as it once was, and schools should focus on more relevant skills

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Handwriting is time-consuming. Explanation: Learning and practicing handwriting takes a significant amount of time. Supporting example: Students could use that time to learn other important skills, such as coding or a foreign language.

10. Sub-opinion: Handwriting is not environmentally friendly. Explanation: Writing by hand often involves using paper, which contributes to deforestation. Supporting example: Using digital devices for writing can help reduce paper waste and protect the environment.

11. Sub-opinion: Digital writing tools offer more options. Explanation: Digital tools allow for easy editing, formatting, and sharing of written content. Supporting example: Students can collaborate on group projects more efficiently using digital platforms.

12. Sub-opinion: Handwriting may not be accessible for all students. Explanation: Some students with disabilities may struggle with handwriting. Supporting example: Digital tools can provide accessibility features that make writing easier for these students.

13. Sub-opinion: Typing is faster than handwriting. Explanation: Most people can type faster than they can write by hand. Supporting example: This increased speed allows for more efficient note-taking and communication in various settings.