TOEFL TPO 29 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 26

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速稳定，仅有少量停顿。但是，有些地方的标点使用不当，导致了不恰当的停顿。此外，部分拼写错误是由于发音不准确造成的。建议发言者在练习时注意提高发音准确性，并在适当的地方停顿。

4.话题发展 The speaker provided a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The summary of the proposal, the woman's opinion, and the reasons for her opinion were all well-explained. To improve further, the speaker could focus on refining their language use and delivery to make their response even more polished and fluent.

5.语言使用

Original: The proposal suggests removing these old bicycles and disposing of them to free up space, because these bicycles have been forgotten by their owners. The woman strongly supports this viewpoint for two reasons. First, she says that these bicycles are in poor condition as they are missing parts or are lost. Secondly, she suggests the university could attach notes requesting students to remove these bicycles within two weeks or will be removed by security. Second, she mentions that in front of the dining hall, the area is always crowded with these old bicycles, making it difficult to find a parking space for their bikes. Additionally, she often has to park her bike at another building and then walk to the dining hall.

Corrected: The proposal suggests removingeliminating these old bicycles and disposing of them to free up space, because these bicycles have been forgotten by their owners. The woman strongly supports this viewpoint for two reasons. First, she says that these bicycles are in poor condition as they are missing parts or are losthave been abandoned(因为“失去”一词在这里不太合适，应该使用“被遗弃”以更准确地描述这些自行车的状态). Secondly, she suggests the university could attach notes requesting students to remove these bicycles within two weeks or will be removedthey will be removed by security. Second,Furthermore,(为了避免重复使用"Secondly"，可以使用"Furthermore"来表示进一步的论点) she mentions that in front of the dining hall, the area is always crowded with these old bicycles, making it difficult to find a parking space for their bikes. Additionally, she often has to park her bike at another building and then walk to the dining hall.

Revised (140 words): The proposal suggests eliminating these old bicycles and disposing of them to free up space, as they have been forgotten by their owners. The woman strongly supports this viewpoint for two reasons. First, she states that these bicycles are in poor condition, as they are missing parts or have been abandoned. Secondly, she suggests that the university could attach notes requesting students to remove these bicycles within two weeks; otherwise, they will be removed by security. Furthermore, she mentions that the area in front of the dining hall is always crowded with these old bicycles, making it difficult for students to find parking spaces for their bikes. As a result, she often has to park her bike at another building and walk to the dining hall, which highlights the need for action on this issue.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Eliminate old bicycles
  - Dispose of them
  - Free up space

- Woman's opinion
  - Strongly supports
  - Reasons
    - Poor condition
      - Missing parts
      - Abandoned
    - University action
      - Attach notes
      - Two-week deadline
      - Security removal
    - Crowded area
      - Dining hall
      - Difficulty finding parking spaces
      - Parking at another building and walking

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3.5

• Topic Development: 3.5

• Language Use: 3.5

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 27

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are a few instances where the speaker could improve their delivery by avoiding unnecessary pauses and ensuring accurate pronunciation of certain words. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more smoothly and focus on proper pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively summarizes the proposal and explains the woman's opinion and reasons for holding that opinion. To further improve topic development, the speaker could provide more specific details from the listening passage to strengthen their argument, such as mentioning the man's initial concern about fairness or emphasizing the inconvenience caused by the lack of available bike parking spaces.

5.Language Use

Original: A student suggests the university to remove bikes that haven't been touched for a long time from the bike racks, since their owners probably forget their existence. Additionally, more space will be made available for students who are actually using bikes and need places to park. The woman in the conversation agrees with this suggestion.

Corrected: A student suggests proposes to the university to remove bikes that haven't been touched for a long time from the bike racks, since their owners probably forget have forgotten their existence. Additionally, more space will be made available for students who are actually using bikes and need places to park. The woman in the conversation agrees with this suggestion.

Reasons/Explanations: "suggests" should be replaced with "proposes to" for a more natural-sounding language style. "forget" should be changed to "have forgotten" to maintain proper grammar.

Revised Answer (140 words):

A student proposes to the university to remove bicycles that have not been used for an extended period from the campus bike racks, as their owners have likely forgotten about them. This action would create additional parking spaces for students actively using bicycles and requiring parking spots. The woman in the conversation supports this proposal.

She believes it is a safe assumption because many of these bikes are rusty or have missing parts, indicating they have been abandoned. To address any concerns, she suggests that the university could attach a two-week notice on each bike, giving owners an opportunity to claim them before removal. Furthermore, she emphasizes the difficulty of finding available parking spaces near popular locations like the dining hall and explains that she often has to park her bike at another building and walk due to limited parking options.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Remove unused bikes
  - Free up parking spaces

- Woman's opinion
  - Agrees with proposal
  - Reasons:
    - Safe assumption (rusty, missing parts)
    - Two-week notice suggestion
    - Parking difficulty (dining hall example)

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of the speech. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace and minimizing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples and support for the points made. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on key points and incorporating more detailed examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: Some students proposed that the university should remove old bicycles from the bicycle racks since their owners have already forgotten them and it could free up those spaces for someone who really need to park their bicycles and the women really think this assumption is quite essential and safe since there are numerous bicycles have been left for years and those security members could notify students before removing those bicycles. Some students proposed that the university should remove old bicycles from the bicycle racks because their owners have apparently forgotten them, and this would free up space for those who genuinely need to park their bikes. The woman believes that this assumption is reasonable and safe, as numerous bikes have been abandoned for years. She suggests that security personnel could notify students before removing the bikes. (Changed "since" to "because" for better flow, corrected grammar, and rephrased sentences for clarity)

What's more the women specifically take the dining hall as an example. Furthermore, the woman specifically cites the dining hall as an example. (Corrected grammar and rephrased sentence for clarity)

There are a lot of students could not find spaces to park their bicycles so that they need to park their bicycles in another building instead of walk over to the dining house. Many students cannot find spaces to park their bikes, forcing them to park in another building and walk to the dining hall. (Simplified sentence structure and corrected grammar)

It's really a waste of time so clean up those bicycles and provide spaces for students is quite essential. This is a waste of time, so clearing the bike racks and providing spaces for students is crucial. (Corrected grammar and rephrased sentence for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): Some students proposed that the university should remove old bicycles from the bicycle racks because their owners have apparently forgotten them, and this would free up space for those who genuinely need to park their bikes. The woman believes that this assumption is reasonable and safe, as numerous bikes have been abandoned for years. She suggests that security personnel could notify students before removing the bikes. Furthermore, the woman specifically cites the dining hall as an example. Many students cannot find spaces to park their bikes, forcing them to park in another building and walk to the dining hall. This is a waste of time, so clearing the bike racks and providing spaces for students is crucial.

6.Mind Map

• Proposal

  • Remove old bicycles
  • Free up space

• Woman's opinion

  • Reasonable and safe assumption
  • Security personnel notification

• Example

  • Dining hall
  • Lack of parking spaces
  • Inconvenience

7.Key Words