TOEFL Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two drawbacks of home-based businesses.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位考生的语言流利度和语速基本上是一致的，偶尔会有停顿。为了提高发音准确性，建议考生在练习时注意发音和语调。同时，可以多参加一些口语练习活动，提高自己的口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，考生的回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，观点之间有明确的联系，并且提供了足够的支持和例子。但是，考生在描述例子时可以更具体一些，以便让听众更容易理解。此外，在回答问题时要注意使用正确的词汇，例如将“Catherine”改为“catering”。总体来说，通过进一步加强对细节的把握和词汇运用能力，考生可以在话题发展方面取得更好的成绩。

5.语言使用

原文：Catherine The professor (考生应使用“教授”而不是“Catherine”来指代讲座中的讲者) expressed two drawbacks of home-based businesses. The first is that it's difficult to maintain professional image a professional image (添加“a”以使句子更自然) because you do not have clear boundaries between your life and work. For example, if you do Catherine catering (将“Catherine”改为正确的词汇“catering”) work at home, you need to prepare a lot of food for wedding weddings (将单数形式改为复数形式以符合语境). But meanwhile, if your kids are crying in the backyard, it shows that you are not professional. So the consumers will not pursue that. The second is that it will cause problems to neighbors, even to the police. For example, if you also do Catherine catering (将“Catherine”改为正确的词汇“catering”) at home, you need a lot of assistants to help you prepare a lot of food. So they need to park their cars in the street, which means that other neighbors will not have a place for their own cars to park.

修订版（140词）：

The professor discussed two drawbacks of home-based businesses. The first drawback is the difficulty in maintaining a professional image due to the lack of clear boundaries between personal and work life. For instance, if someone runs a catering business from home and prepares food for weddings, the presence of crying children in the background may create an unprofessional impression, causing potential customers to lose trust in the business. The second drawback is that home-based businesses can cause issues for neighbors and even attract complaints to the police. For example, if a catering business operates from home, several assistants may be required to help prepare food. Consequently, these assistants would need to park their cars on the street, leaving no parking spaces for other neighbors.

6.思维导图

• Home-based businesses
  • Drawback 1
    • Professional image
      • Clear boundaries
      • Catering example
        • Crying children
        • Customer trust
  • Drawback 2
    • Neighbor issues
      • Police complaints
      • Catering example
        • Assistants parking
        • No parking spaces

7.关键词