TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample: The man expresses his opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答相对清晰，流畅度尚可，但偶尔有停顿。为了提高发音准确性，请注意纠正发音错误。此外，请注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高语言表达的连贯性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的。然而，可以尝试更清晰地阐述观点，并在解释原因时提供更多详细信息。为了提高话题发展水平，请注意在回答中明确表达观点，并确保在解释原因时提供充分的支持或例子。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the reading, a student proposes that the university should let students borrow cameras from the course. In the reading passage, a student proposes that the university should allow all students to borrow cameras from the art department. (原文中提到的是让所有学生从艺术系借相机，而不仅仅是从课程中借相机。) In this way, students can advance their photograph skills, By doing so, students can enhance their photography skills, (使用“enhance”更自然，同时注意将“photograph”改为“photography”。) and if the learning time is shortened, many students can access the cameras. However, in the conversation, the man disagrees with the proposal for two reasons. Firstly, most of the cameras are technologically sophisticated, so it is not easy for all students to use it without receiving any training before. And secondly, the students who take part in the photograph class have to take a lot of time to finish the assignment, and it's almost impossible for them to finish the assignment in such a shortened time. They have to go off-campus and shoot at different locations, which is not convenient to use the cameras.

Revised Answer (140 words): In the reading passage, a student proposes that the university should allow all students to borrow cameras from the art department. By doing so, students can enhance their photography skills, and if the loan time is reduced, more students could have access to these cameras. However, in the conversation, the man disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. First, most of these cameras are technologically advanced, making it difficult for students without prior training to use them effectively. Second, photography students need a significant amount of time to complete their assignments, and it would be nearly impossible for them to finish within a shortened time frame. These assignments often require off-campus shooting at various locations, making the proposed camera usage inconvenient.

6.思维导图

• Reading Passage

  • Proposal: Allow all students to borrow cameras
  • Benefits: Enhance photography skills, more students access cameras

• Conversation

  • Man's disagreement
    • Reason 1: Technologically advanced cameras, difficult without training
    • Reason 2: Photography students need more time for assignments, shortened time frame not feasible

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 0 Topic Development: 0 Language Use: 0

2.预估分数

0. 3.表达

由于回答中没有任何内容，无法评估发音、语速和停顿等方面的问题。建议重新录制回答，并确保提供完整的信息。

4.话题发展 回答没有提供关于提案的总结，也没有说明男子对提案的看法以及他给出的理由。请重新组织回答，确保包含所有要求的信息。

5.语言使用

原回答：🚨🚨🚨🚨🚨🚨🚨 无回答（原回答没有提供任何内容，因此无法评估语言使用方面的问题。请重新录制回答，并确保提供完整的信息。）

修订后的回答（满分30分）：

In the proposal, Mary suggests that all university students should be allowed to borrow the high-quality professional cameras owned by the art department, instead of just those enrolled in photography courses. She believes that this would give more students the opportunity to advance their photography skills. To accommodate this change, she proposes shortening the loan time from a full day to a couple of hours.

However, the man disagrees with Mary's proposal for two main reasons. First, he believes that most people would not benefit much from using these sophisticated cameras without extensive training, as they have many settings and adjustments. Second, he argues that the assignments for photography students are time-consuming and often require going off-campus to shoot in various locations. If everyone had access to the cameras as Mary suggests, it would be nearly impossible for photography students to complete their assignments within the shortened loan time.

总结：请确保在回答中使用高级词汇、正确的语法、自然的陈述流程、平滑的过渡和有力的结论。同时，请注意使用自然 sounding 的语言风格。

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • All university students borrow cameras
  • Shorten loan time

• Man's opinion

  • Disagrees with proposal

• Reasons

  • Sophisticated technology
    • Extensive training needed
  • Time-consuming assignments
    • Off-campus locations
    • Impossible to complete within shortened loan time

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：0

• 主题发展：0

• 语言使用：0

2.预估分数

• 总分：0

3.表达 由于回答与问题无关，无法评估表达方面的得分。请重新回答问题，并确保内容与问题相关。

4.话题发展 回答没有涉及到问题的主题，因此无法评估话题发展方面的得分。请重新回答问题，并确保内容与问题相关。

5.语言使用

原回答：MBC 뉴스 이덕영입니다. The proposal suggests paving a sidewalk across the main lawn on campus, but the man disagrees with it. (原回答与问题无关，已修改为与问题相关的内容。)

修正后的回答：The proposal suggests paving a sidewalk across the main lawn on campus, but the man disagrees with it. He believes that students should not be cutting across the lawn and can use the existing walkways instead. He also thinks that the dirt path looks more natural and beautiful than a concrete sidewalk would.

根据审阅建议修改后的完整回答（140词）：

The proposal in Patty Greene's letter suggests paving a concrete sidewalk across the main lawn on campus to prevent muddy shoes and improve the lawn's appearance. However, the man disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. First, he believes that students should not be cutting across the lawn as there are already nice walkways around that area. He thinks students can avoid getting their shoes dirty by taking an extra minute or two to walk around using these existing paths. Second, he finds the dirt path more natural and beautiful compared to a concrete sidewalk. In his opinion, covering the path with concrete would ruin its natural beauty. Therefore, he believes that the lawn should remain as it is without any changes.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Pave sidewalk
  • Main lawn on campus

• Man's opinion

  • Disagrees
  • Reasons
    • Existing walkways
    • Natural beauty

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的语言流利度和语速基本上是一致的，偶尔有些停顿。建议在练习时注意提高发音准确性，尤其是在一些单词的发音上。此外，适当减少不必要的停顿，使语言更加流畅。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，观点之间也有明确的联系。但在论述原因时可以更具体一些，给出更充分的支持或例子。建议在练习时注意提高论述深度和完整性，以便更好地支持自己的观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, the students think that the university should pave a dirty path with concrete. First of all, they think that by doing so, the students won't get mud in their foot. And besides, they think that it will just make the route more attractive. And the man in the conversation doesn't like his idea. First of all, he thinks that the students don't have the motive to do it. I mean, he said that there's already a road, so they don't have to walk through this dirty path. They just can spend an extra minute to walk through the road. And also, he thinks that this road will just make them look natural. I mean, if you create concrete, the students think that you will just ruin it. And he didn't like concrete.

Corrected Answer: Well, some students believe that the university should pave a dirt path with concrete. Firstly, they argue that by doing so, students won't get mud on their shoes. Additionally, they believe that it would make the path more attractive. However, the man in the conversation disagrees with this idea. He believes that students don't have a valid reason for taking this shortcut since there's already a paved walkway nearby; they could simply take an extra minute to use it instead of walking through the dirt path. Furthermore, he thinks that leaving the path as is preserves its natural appearance and beauty; paving it with concrete would only ruin its charm. (修改了一些词汇和句子结构，使语言更自然、连贯。同时，对一些表达进行了调整，使其更准确。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Some students believe that the university should pave a dirt path with concrete for two main reasons. Firstly, they argue that paving the path would prevent students from getting mud on their shoes during rainy days. Additionally, they believe that a paved path would be more visually appealing. However, the man in the conversation disagrees with this proposal. He believes that students don't have a valid reason for taking this shortcut since there's already a paved walkway nearby; they could simply take an extra minute to use it instead of walking through the dirt path. Furthermore, he thinks that leaving the path as is preserves its natural appearance and beauty; paving it with concrete would only ruin its charm. In conclusion, the man opposes the idea of paving the dirt path due to its unnecessary nature and potential negative impact on the environment.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Pave dirt path with concrete
    - Reasons
      - Prevent mud on shoes
      - More visually appealing

- Man's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
    - Reasons
      - No valid reason for shortcut
        - Paved walkway nearby
      - Preserve natural appearance and beauty
        - Concrete would ruin charm

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 0 Topic Development: 0 Language Use: 0

2.预估分数

0. 3.表达

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5.语言使用

原回答：MBC 뉴스 이덕영입니다. The proposal suggests creating a bicycle-borrowing program at State University.（原文与题目无关，已修改为与题目相关的回答。）

修改后的回答： The proposal suggests creating a bicycle-borrowing program at State University. The man supports the proposal because he believes it would help reduce car traffic on campus and encourage students to get more exercise. He explains that the campus is large, and many students drive to get around, causing traffic congestion. If more students used bicycles, traffic would improve. Additionally, the man mentions that he is busy with classes and part-time jobs, so he doesn't have time for regular exercise. Using the bicycle-borrowing program would allow him to incorporate exercise into his daily routine without setting aside extra time.

根据审阅建议修改后的回答（140字）： The proposal suggests creating a bicycle-borrowing program at State University. The man supports the proposal as it would help reduce car traffic on campus and encourage students to exercise more. He explains that the large campus causes many students to drive, leading to traffic congestion. If more students used bicycles, traffic would improve. Additionally, he mentions his busy schedule with classes and part-time jobs leaves no time for regular exercise. Using the bicycle-borrowing program would allow him to incorporate exercise into his daily routine without setting aside extra time.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Bicycle-borrowing program
  - State University

- Man's opinion
  - Supports proposal
  - Reasons
    - Reduce car traffic
      - Large campus
      - Traffic congestion
    - Encourage exercise
      - Busy schedule
      - Incorporate into daily routine

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 24

3.表达 整体而言，你的发言表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。为了提高发言的流畅度，请注意在句子之间保持连贯，并尽量减少不自然的停顿。此外，在发音方面，需要注意一些单词的准确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 你的回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，能够明确地表达出男生对提议的看法及其原因。但在描述提议时，建议将“students proposed the university”修改为“Joanne Grant proposed to the university”，以更准确地反映阅读材料中的信息。此外，在解释男生同意提议的原因时，可以尝试使用更多连接词（如“因此”、“然后”等），以使回答更加流畅和有条理。

5.语言使用

原文：In the lecture, the students proposed the university to create a bicycle borrowing program. In the reading passage, Joanne Grant proposes that the university create a bicycle-borrowing program. (将“students proposed the university”修改为“Joanne Grant proposes that the university”，以更准确地反映阅读材料中的信息。) Firstly, it could substitute driving, and secondly, it could also encourage students to get more exercise. First, it would reduce car traffic on campus, and second, it would promote physical activity among students. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。) And the students totally agree with the point for following reasons. Firstly, it's actually a big campus, First, since the campus is quite large, (使用更自然的表达方式。) so many people try to drive to the class by the car, and it will always make the road crowded and stressful. However, there is a better option to solve the problem. They could just ride a bicycle to the class. And secondly, students are always busy with their education and part-time job, so as a consequence, they have little time to take an exercise. So as a consequence, they could add an exercise during the commute by riding the bicycle.

修订版（140词）：

In the reading passage, Joanne Grant proposes that the university create a bicycle-borrowing program. First, it would reduce car traffic on campus, and second, it would promote physical activity among students. The man in the conversation agrees with this proposal for the following reasons. First, since the campus is quite large, many people drive to class, causing traffic congestion and stress. By using bicycles instead of cars, students can alleviate this issue. Second, students often have busy schedules due to their academic commitments and part-time jobs, leaving them with limited time for exercise. By incorporating cycling into their daily commute, they can effortlessly integrate physical activity into their routine, benefiting their overall health.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Joanne Grant's proposal
    - Bicycle-borrowing program
      - Reduce car traffic
      - Promote physical activity

- Conversation
  - Man's opinion
    - Agrees with the proposal
      - Reason 1: Large campus
        - Traffic congestion and stress
        - Solution: Use bicycles instead of cars
      - Reason 2: Busy schedules
        - Limited time for exercise
        - Solution: Incorporate cycling into daily commute

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度较好，但仍有一些不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意保持连贯的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对提案进行了概括，并阐述了男生对提案的看法及其理由。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议在回答问题时先简要概括提案，然后明确指出男生的观点，并逐一解释他给出的理由。这样可以使回答更加条理清晰，便于听众理解。

5.语言使用

Original: A student suggests the university to add a small snack shop in the science building because the students could buy light meals and snacks, and the students could benefit from it because the shop is near the science class. The student proposes that the university should include a small snack shop in the science building, as it would allow students to purchase light meals and snacks, and they would benefit from its proximity to their science classes.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，并使用适当的连接词。）

But I think it's not a good idea because firstly, students could bring food to class, and it's distracting to professors and other students that students eat in class. However, I believe it is not a good idea for two reasons: first, it may encourage students to bring food into class, which can be distracting for both professors and other students.（使用更自然的连接词，并将原因分点陈述。）

And the plan may be already finished, and so it's hard to make any change. Secondly, the building plans might have already been completed, making it difficult to implement any changes.（使用更自然的连接词，并简化句子结构。）

So it's really expensive for them to make a new plan. As a result, creating a new plan would be quite costly.（简化句子结构，使其更自然。）

So he doubts that the university could make the changes on this plan. So he thinks it's a really unrealistic plan. Therefore, he doubts the feasibility of making changes to the current plan and considers it to be unrealistic.（使用更自然的连接词，并简化句子结构。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student proposes that the university should include a small snack shop in the science building, as it would allow students to purchase light meals and snacks, and they would benefit from its proximity to their science classes. However, I believe it is not a good idea for two reasons: first, it may encourage students to bring food into class, which can be distracting for both professors and other students. Secondly, the building plans might have already been completed, making it difficult to implement any changes. As a result, creating a new plan would be quite costly. Therefore, he doubts the feasibility of making changes to the current plan and considers it to be unrealistic.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Small snack shop
  • Science building
  • Benefits

• Opinion

  • Not a good idea
  • Reasons
    • Distraction in class
    • Completed building plans
    • Costly changes

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意保持语速的稳定，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，还需注意准确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对于提案的总结和男生观点的陈述较为清晰，但在解释原因方面略显简单。建议在解释原因时尝试提供更多具体细节和例子，以使回答更加充实和有说服力。同时，注意保持回答的条理性和连贯性。

5.语言使用

Original: Zhang Baike proposed that all university students are allowed to borrow a camera because it can advance their photography skills, and at the same time, this could shorten the learning time for diverse music. However, Ding Ding disagreed with the proposal. At first, he believed that students are not likely to easily get use of the camera. Because the photography is sophisticated, there are many settings and adjustments on the camera. Secondly, he believed that it was impossible for them to finish the assignment within a day, not to mention reduce the learning time. Since they always have to take much time to complete the photography assignment, which is very involved, so they disagreed with the proposal.

Corrected: Zhang Baike Mary Wilson (人名错误，应为Mary Wilson) proposed that all university students are allowed should be allowed (语法错误，应使用should be allowed) to borrow a camera because it can advance their photography skills, and at the same time, this could shorten the learning time for diverse music other students (原文中未提及音乐，应为其他学生). However, Ding Ding the man (人名错误，应为the man) disagreed with the proposal. At first, he believed that students are not likely to easily get use of use (表达错误，应为use) the camera. Because the photography is sophisticated, there are many settings and adjustments on the camera. Secondly, he believed that it was impossible for them to finish the assignment within a day, not to mention reduce shortening (词汇错误，应为shortening) the learning time. Since they always have to take much time to complete the photography assignment, which is very involved, so they disagreed with the proposal.

Revised (140 words): Mary Wilson proposed that all university students should be allowed to borrow a camera because it can advance their photography skills, and at the same time, this could shorten the loan time for other students. However, the man disagreed with the proposal. Firstly, he believed that students are not likely to easily use the camera due to its sophisticated technology and numerous settings and adjustments. Secondly, he argued that it would be impossible for photography students to finish their assignments within a day if everyone had access to the cameras, not to mention shortening the loan time. As their assignments often require shooting in various locations and involve significant time investment, he disagreed with Mary's proposal.

6.思维导图

- Mary Wilson's Proposal
  - Allow all university students to borrow cameras
  - Advance photography skills
  - Shorten loan time for other students

- The man's disagreement
  - Difficulty in using cameras
    - Sophisticated technology
    - Numerous settings and adjustments
  - Impact on photography students' assignments
    - Impossible to finish within a day
    - Require shooting in various locations
    - Significant time investment

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的语音清晰，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议练习更流畅、连贯的发音，并保持一致的语速。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但在某些地方可以进一步完善。例如，在描述建议使用地下室作为健身区域时，可以更详细地说明这个选择的优势。此外，在总结时可以更明确地表达男生对提议的看法。总体来说，需要在组织和支持观点方面做进一步改进。

5.语言使用

原文：University set up a small fitness area in the dorm itself, because it's easier for students to get regular exercise, and one of the lounges could be converted for the purpose. The university should set up a small fitness area within the dormitory, as it would make it easier for students to engage in regular exercise, and one of the lounges could be repurposed for this.（将“University set up”改为“The university should set up”，使句子更自然；将“in the dorm itself”改为“within the dormitory”，使表达更准确；将“get regular exercise”改为“engage in regular exercise”，使词汇更高级。）（将“University set up”改为“The university should set up”，使句子更自然；将“in the dorm itself”改为“within the dormitory”，使表达更准确；将“get regular exercise”改为“engage in regular exercise”，使词汇更高级。）

And the students agree with the idea because for some students it was really a long walk and the school shuttle isn't always reliable for students, so they can't always work out because it's a big time commitment. Students support this proposal since some of them face a long walk to reach the gym, and the campus shuttle is not consistently reliable, making it difficult for them to maintain a regular workout schedule due to time constraints.（将“And the students agree with the idea because”改为“Students support this proposal since”，使句子更连贯；将“it was really a long walk”改为“some of them face a long walk”，使表达更准确；将“the school shuttle isn't always reliable for students”改为“the campus shuttle is not consistently reliable”，使词汇更高级；将“so they can't always work out because it's a big time commitment”改为“making it difficult for them to maintain a regular workout schedule due to time constraints”，使句子结构更复杂。）（将“And the students agree with the idea because”改为“Students support this proposal since”，使句子更连贯；将“it was really a long walk”改为“some of them face a long walk”，使表达更准确；将“the school shuttle isn't always reliable for students”改为“the campus shuttle is not consistently reliable”，使词汇更高级；将“so they can't always work out because it's a big time commitment”改为“making it difficult for them to maintain a regular workout schedule due to time constraints”，使句子结构更复杂。）

But he's not sure the location is the best choice because they can find a spot that students don't use so frequently, and big basements where the students always store their bags could be a better choice. However, he questions whether the proposed location is optimal, suggesting that an alternative space, such as the underutilized basement where students store their belongings, might be more suitable.（将“But he's not sure the location is the best choice because”改为“However, he questions whether the proposed location is optimal”，使句子结构更复杂；将“they can find a spot that students don't use so frequently, and big basements where the students always store their bags could be a better choice”改为“suggesting that an alternative space, such as the underutilized basement where students store their belongings, might be more suitable”，使句子更连贯。）（将“But he's not sure the location is the best choice because”改为“However, he questions whether the proposed location is optimal”，使句子结构更复杂；将“they can find a spot that students don't use so frequently, and big basements where the students always store their bags could be a better choice”改为“suggesting that an alternative space, such as the underutilized basement where students store their belongings, might be more suitable”，使句子更连贯。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university should set up a small fitness area within the dormitory, as it would make it easier for students to engage in regular exercise, and one of the lounges could

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Proposal: small fitness area within dormitory
  - Purpose: easier access to regular exercise

- Student's agreement
  - Long walk to gym
  - Unreliable campus shuttle
  - Time constraints for workouts

- Concern about location
  - Proposed location: lounge conversion
  - Alternative suggestion: underutilized basement
  - Benefits of alternative: more suitable, less disruption to social spaces

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付: 3

• 主题发展: 3

• 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 回答中的语言表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在不太流畅的现象。建议练习更多的口语，以提高发音的准确性和流畅度。此外，在回答过程中，适当地控制语速和停顿也有助于提高整体表达效果。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了题目要求的信息，但在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待加强。建议在准备过程中先梳理好要点，然后用恰当的连接词将各个部分串联起来，使回答更加连贯和有条理。同时，在解释原因时可以尝试给出更具体的例子或细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The student advises the university to add a snack shop in a science building so that there is nowhere nearby for students to get food. The student suggests that the university should add a snack shop in the science building because there are no nearby places for students to get food.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，如“suggests that”和“because”。同时注意句子结构的准确性。） And also, the construction hasn't been done yet, so it's easy to add a snack shop. Additionally, since the construction hasn't started yet, it would be easy to include a snack shop in the building plan.（使用更高级的词汇，如“additionally”和“include”。同时注意句子结构的准确性。） In the listening, the man doesn't support the change for two reasons to begin with. In the listening, the man opposes the proposal for two main reasons.（使用更自然的表达方式，如“opposes”和“proposal”。同时注意句子结构的准确性。） He mentions that in this way, a lot of students will bring food to their classrooms, so they will disturb other students or their professors in class. He mentions that this would lead to many students bringing food into their classrooms, causing disturbances to other students and professors during class.（使用更自然的表达方式，如“this would lead to”和“causing disturbances”。同时注意句子结构的准确性。） The second is that it's not easy to add a new snack shop in the science building because the plans have already been done, so it's difficult and annoying to draw new plans and stuff to add this snack shop in the science building. The second reason is that adding a snack shop to the science building would not be easy, as the plans have already been completed, making it challenging and inconvenient to modify them for the inclusion of a snack shop.（使用更高级的词汇，如“completed”和“modify”。同时注意句子结构的准确性。） That's how the man states his opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. That's how the man expresses his opinion on the proposal and explains the reasons behind his viewpoint.（使用更自然的表达方式，如“expresses”和“explains”。同时注意句子结构的准确性。）

修订版（140词）：

The student suggests that the university should add a snack shop in the science building because there are no nearby places for students to get food. Additionally, since the construction hasn't started yet, it would be easy to include a snack shop in the building plan. In the listening, the man opposes the proposal for two main reasons. He mentions that this would lead to many students bringing food into their classrooms, causing disturbances to other students and professors during class. The second reason is that adding a snack shop to the science building would not be easy, as the plans have already been completed, making it challenging and inconvenient to modify them for the inclusion of a snack shop. That's how the man expresses his opinion on the proposal and explains the reasons behind his viewpoint.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Add snack shop
  • Science building
  • No nearby food options
  • Easy to include in construction plan

• Man's opinion

  • Opposes proposal
  • Reasons:
    • Disturbances in class
    • Difficulty in modifying plans

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的语言表达较为清晰，但仍有改进的空间。建议在练习时注意提高发音的准确性，尤其是在涉及专有名词时。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构上还可以更加清晰。建议在练习时注意明确地陈述观点，并在给出原因时提供更具体的例子或细节。这样可以使回答更加有说服力和条理清晰。

5.语言使用

Original: According to the proposal, Jens suggests that the university should create a sidewalk across the main path because the dirty path is very annoying. In the proposal, Patty suggests that the university should construct a sidewalk across the main path due to the inconvenience caused by the muddy path. (将Jens改为Patty，使用construct替换create，使用inconvenience替换annoying，使句子更自然)

Original: The man in the conversation didn't think it's a great idea for the following two reasons. The man in the conversation disagrees with this idea for two reasons. (使用disagrees替换didn't think it's a great idea，使句子更简洁)

Original: First, there is already a good way with concrete around the dirty path, and if students who worried about the dirty path to pollute their shoes, they should just walk around. First, there is already a paved walkway around the muddy path, and if students are concerned about getting their shoes dirty, they should simply use that route. (使用paved walkway替换good way with concrete，使用muddy替换dirty，使用concerned替换worried，使用route替换walk around，使句子更自然)

Original: Secondly, he also states that the dirty path already has its own beauty because it is very natural and without the dirt and concrete looks, the main thing is already beautiful because it looks just the way it is. Secondly, he believes that the muddy path possesses its own beauty due to its natural appearance, and without the concrete, the area remains aesthetically pleasing as it is. (使用believes替换states，使用possesses替换has，使用aesthetically pleasing替换beautiful，使句子更自然)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the proposal, Patty suggests that the university should construct a sidewalk across the main path due to the inconvenience caused by the muddy path. The man in the conversation disagrees with this idea for two reasons. First, there is already a paved walkway around the muddy path, and if students are concerned about getting their shoes dirty, they should simply use that route. Secondly, he believes that the muddy path possesses its own beauty due to its natural appearance, and without the concrete, the area remains aesthetically pleasing as it is.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Patty
    - Construct sidewalk
    - Muddy path inconvenience

- Man's opinion
    - Disagrees
    - Two reasons
        - Paved walkway alternative
            - Concerned students
            - Use existing route
        - Natural beauty
            - Muddy path's aesthetic value
            - No concrete needed

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 19

3.表达 在表达方面，你的发音需要改进，以便更清晰地传达你的观点。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。为了提高你的发言能力，可以多练习朗读和模仿母语人士的发音。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，你的回答基本上涵盖了所需内容，但组织和连接可以更清晰。尝试使用过渡词汇（例如，首先、其次、最后等）来帮助组织你的想法，并确保每个观点都有足够的支持或例子。此外，在总结时，请确保简洁明了地重申提案及男子的观点。

6.语言使用

Original: The letter proposes paying salaries for resident advisors but in the recording, the man does not support it because, firstly, in terms of the problem that resident advisors would have lots of works to do the man thinks that is not true because, actually, despite extra activities, the resident advisors just have basic responsibilities so they just stay on site in the same place for students to ask for some problems and also they could get a room at half of the price so it could happen to save lots of money and also, for the second point, to attract more qualified applicants the man thinks that it doesn't make sense because, actually, the applicants who apply just for the salary would not fit into this program because the best applicants should be socializing with students and also they should be sincere to do this job

Corrected: The letter proposes paying salaries for resident advisors. However, in the recording, the man disagrees with this idea. Firstly, he believes that resident advisors do not have a lot of work to do. In fact, despite extra activities, their primary responsibilities are basic. They stay on-site and assist students with their concerns. Additionally, they receive discounted housing at half-price, which saves them money. Secondly, he argues that offering salaries may not attract more qualified applicants. Those who apply solely for financial reasons may not be a good fit for this role since effective resident advisors should be sociable and genuinely interested in helping students. (在修正后的回答中，我们使用了更自然的语言风格，改进了句子结构和词汇，并确保了语句的自然流动、平滑过渡和有力的结论。我们还纠正了原始回答中的一些拼写错误和不恰当的停顿。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The letter suggests that resident advisors should receive salaries. However, the man in the recording disagrees for two main reasons. First, he believes that resident advisors do not have a significant workload, as their primary responsibilities are basic and they stay on-site to assist students with their concerns. Moreover, they benefit from discounted housing at half-price, which helps them save money. Second, he argues that offering salaries may not necessarily attract more qualified applicants. Applicants who are motivated solely by financial gain may not be suitable for this role. Effective resident advisors should be sociable and genuinely interested in helping students. Therefore, the man believes that paying salaries to resident advisors is not necessary and may not lead to better candidates for the position.

7.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Paying salaries for resident advisors

- Man's Disagreement
  - Reason 1: Workload
    - Basic responsibilities
    - On-site assistance
    - Discounted housing (half-price)
  - Reason 2: Attracting qualified applicants
    - Financial motivation not ideal
    - Effective resident advisors' qualities
      - Sociable
      - Genuinely interested in helping students

8.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在发音方面，您的回答相对清晰，但仍有一些不准确的发音。建议您多加练习，提高发音的准确性。此外，在语速和停顿方面，您需要保持一致的语速并减少不必要的停顿。多听英语录音并模仿可以帮助您改善这方面的问题。

4.话题发展 Your response is generally coherent and well-organized, but there are some areas where you could improve. For example, you could provide more specific examples from the listening passage to support your points, such as mentioning the man's experience as a resident advisor and how it influenced his opinion. Additionally, make sure to clearly state the man's opinion at the beginning of your response to provide a clear structure for your answer. Overall, focus on making clear connections between ideas and providing sufficient support or examples from the passage to strengthen your response.

6.语言使用

Original: The letter proposes to pay the salary for resident advisors, but in the recording, the woman does not support it, The letter proposes paying a salary for resident advisors, but in the recording, the man does not support it, (原文中提到的是男生不支持这个提议，而不是女生。同时，将“to pay”改为“paying”使句子更自然。) because firstly, in terms of the problem that advisors would make lots of works, because first, regarding the issue that advisors have a lot of work, (改进了表达方式，使句子更自然。) the man thinks that it's not true, because despite the extra activities, the basic responsibilities of resident advisors would not take so much time. the man believes it's not true since despite the extra activities, the basic responsibilities of resident advisors don't take up much time. (改进了语法和词汇，使句子更自然。)

Revised (140 words): The letter proposes paying a salary for resident advisors, but in the recording, the man does not support it. First, regarding the issue that advisors have a lot of work, the man believes it's not true since despite the extra activities, the basic responsibilities of resident advisors don't take up much time. They just stay on site in the same places, so they don't need to put much time into it. Additionally, they receive a room at half the price, which is a significant saving. As for the second point, attracting more qualified applicants, the man thinks it doesn't make sense because if candidates apply just for the salary, they wouldn't fit into this program. A good resident advisor should be sincere about helping students and be a social person who enjoys spending time getting to know them.

7.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Paying salary for resident advisors

- Man's opinion
  - Does not support the proposal

- Reasons
  - Workload
    - Basic responsibilities don't take up much time
  - Benefits
    - Discounted housing (half price)
  - Attracting applicants
    - Candidates applying for salary might not be a good fit
    - Sincerity and sociability are important qualities for resident advisors

8.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上说得还算清楚，但有时语速不够稳定，偶尔出现停顿。建议在练习时注意保持稳定的语速和自然的停顿，以提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展

从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在连接思路和提供足够的支持或例子方面还有待加强。建议在练习时注意明确地表达观点，并尝试提供更多相关的细节和例子来支持你的观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The proposal in the letter suggests paving a concrete sidewalk across the main lawn on campus to provide mud issues and improve the lawn's appearances. The man disagrees with the proposal for two reasons. First, he believes that citizens should not be cutting across the lawn as there are already nice walks around the area, and using them would avoid mud. He considers the shortcut as a sign of laziness. Second, he oversights the concrete path, preferring the natural appearances of the dirt path. He believes the dirt path enhances the campus' natural beauty, and paving it with concrete would ruin its beauty.

Corrected Answer: The proposal in the letter suggests paving constructing a concrete sidewalk across the main lawn on campus to provide mud issues address muddy conditions(提供泥泞问题不合适，应改为解决泥泞问题) and improve the lawn's appearances appearance(外观应为单数形式). The man disagrees with the proposal for two reasons. First, he believes that citizens students(这里讨论的是学生，而不是公民) should not be cutting across the lawn as there are already nice walks walkways(应使用更准确的词汇“人行道”) around the area, and using them would avoid mud. He considers the shortcut as a sign of laziness. Second, he oversights overlooks(oversights是疏忽的意思，这里应该用overlooks) the concrete path, preferring the natural appearances appearance(外观应为单数形式) of the dirt path. He believes the dirt path enhances the campus' natural beauty, and paving it with concrete would ruin its beauty.

Revised Answer (140 words): The proposal in the letter suggests constructing a concrete sidewalk across the main lawn on campus to address muddy conditions and improve the lawn's appearance. The man disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. Firstly, he believes that students should not be cutting across the lawn since there are already well-maintained walkways around the area, which would help them avoid mud if used. He perceives taking shortcuts as a sign of laziness. Secondly, he overlooks the concrete path and prefers the natural appearance of the dirt path. In his opinion, the dirt path enhances the campus's natural beauty, and replacing it with a concrete sidewalk would diminish its aesthetic appeal.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Construct concrete sidewalk
  • Address muddy conditions
  • Improve lawn's appearance

• Man's Disagreement

  • Reason 1: Students should use existing walkways
    • Avoid mud
    • Laziness
  • Reason 2: Prefer natural appearance of dirt path
    • Enhances campus beauty
    • Concrete would ruin beauty

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上说得还算清楚，但有时会出现一些不太自然的停顿。建议在练习时注意语音的连贯性和节奏，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在连接思路和提供足够的支持或例子方面还有待加强。建议在练习时尝试使用更多的连接词汇和逻辑结构，使回答更加严密。同时，在给出观点时可以多提供一些具体的例子或论据来支持自己的观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the passage, the student proposes that the school should include a small snake shop in the new building. In the passage, the student proposes that the school should include a small snack shop in the new building. (将"snake"改为"snack"，因为这里讨论的是小吃店而不是蛇店。) This is because the students could buy meals and snakes more conveniently, This is because students could purchase meals and snacks more conveniently, (将"snakes"改为"snacks"，并使用更高级的词汇"purchase"替换"buy"。) and the school still has time to change its plans. and there is still time for the school to modify its plans. (使用更自然的表达方式，并用"modify"替换"change"。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the passage, the student proposes that the school should include a small snack shop in the new science building. This is because students could purchase meals and snacks more conveniently, especially since there are no other food options nearby. Additionally, there is still time for the school to modify its plans before construction begins. However, the man in the conversation disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, he believes that having a snack shop within close proximity to classrooms would encourage students to bring food into class, which could be distracting for both professors and students. Secondly, he argues that it would be difficult and costly to make last-minute changes to the building's design plans, as they have likely already been finalized.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Include snack shop
  - New science building
  - Convenient food options
  - Time to modify plans

- Disagreement
  - Distraction in class
    - Food in classrooms
  - Difficulty in changing plans
    - Finalized design
    - Costly modifications

7.关键词