TOEFL TPO 28 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal, then state her opinion about the proposal, and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在回答中，发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿不太自然。建议在练习时注意提高语言的流利度，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，能够概括提议并说明女士的观点及理由。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议在练习时注意逻辑性和条理性，尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来使回答更加连贯。同时，在给出例子时可以更具体一些，以便让听众更好地理解你的观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The student proposes that the school should keep the music building open till midnight. The proposal suggests that the university should extend the music building's hours until midnight. (原句表达较为简单，修改后的句子更加正式和自然) Firstly, there are some students will use it later in the midnight. First, some students would utilize it late at night. (修改语法错误并简化表达) Secondly, it will be more convenient for the students to reserve the room. Second, this would make room reservations more convenient for students. (调整句子结构，使其更自然流畅) In the listening, the woman agrees with this. Firstly, First, (避免重复使用“Firstly”) she thinks that the students will know where to go in the night because they will keep quiet in other places in the school, so that it will not disrupt the students' sleep and the music building is a proper place. Secondly, for example, the winter concert and the summer concert, Additionally, during events like winter and summer concerts, (调整句子结构，使其更自然流畅) there are a lot of concerts like always trying to use this. And as the man regarded that the students always have already booked because the time is very short, so the longer time makes it convenient to reserve the room.

Revised Answer (140 words): The proposal suggests that the university should extend the music building's hours until midnight. First, some students would utilize it late at night. Second, this would make room reservations more convenient for students. In the listening, the woman agrees with this. First, she thinks that students will know where to go at night because they will keep quiet in other places on campus, ensuring that it will not disrupt other students' sleep and making the music building a proper place for practice. Additionally, during events like winter and summer concerts, there is a high demand for practice rooms. The man mentions that students often find all time slots already booked due to limited availability, so extending the building's hours would make it more convenient for them to reserve rooms.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Extend music building hours until midnight

- Reasons
  - Late-night practice
  - Convenient room reservations

- Woman's opinion (listening)
  - Agrees with proposal
    - Avoids disrupting others' sleep
    - Proper place for practice
    - High demand during concerts
      - Winter and summer concerts
      - Limited availability of time slots

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰流畅的，但在某些地方还需要注意控制语速和适当的停顿。建议在练习时注意发音的准确性，尤其是在一些单词的发音上。此外，可以适当加强对连词和短语的运用，使语言更加自然。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答结构清晰，观点明确，并且提供了充分的支持和例子。在今后的练习中，可以尝试使用更多不同类型的连接词和过渡词汇，以增强说话内容之间的连贯性。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: A student suggests that the school should keep the music building open later, and the woman thinks that's a great idea for two reasons. The student proposes extending the music building's hours, and the woman agrees, citing two reasons. (将句子结构简化，使用更高级的词汇) First, she mentions that usually the students have to practice in their dorms because they have nowhere else to go. Firstly, she points out that students often resort to practicing in their dormitories due to a lack of alternative locations. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式) And that is really bad, because even if they try to keep the volume down, it is still noisy. This is problematic as, despite attempts to reduce noise levels, it remains disruptive. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式) Second, she also mentions that when there are so many sections in winter or in summer, and the students need to practice, it's so hard for students to book a place to practice. Secondly, she highlights the difficulty of reserving practice spaces during peak seasons such as winter and summer. (简化句子结构，使用更高级的词汇) And if the music building can open later, it will definitely be helpful. Extending the music building's hours would undoubtedly alleviate these issues. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式) As a result, she thinks that's a great idea. Consequently, she strongly supports the proposal. (使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式)

Revised Answer (140 words): The student proposes extending the music building's hours, and the woman agrees, citing two reasons. Firstly, she points out that students often resort to practicing in their dormitories due to a lack of alternative locations. This is problematic as, despite attempts to reduce noise levels, it remains disruptive. Secondly, she highlights the difficulty of reserving practice spaces during peak seasons such as winter and summer. Extending the music building's hours would undoubtedly alleviate these issues. Consequently, she strongly supports the proposal.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Extending music building hours

- Woman's opinion
  - Agrees
  - Two reasons
    - Practicing in dormitories
      - Lack of alternative locations
      - Disruptive noise levels
    - Difficulty reserving practice spaces
      - Peak seasons (winter and summer)

- Benefits of extended hours
  - Alleviate issues
  - Strong support for the proposal

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流畅度和语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方，标点符号使用不当导致了不恰当的停顿。此外，发音上也存在一些不准确之处。建议发言者注意在练习时加强对标点符号的运用，同时提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，观点之间的联系也较为清晰，并给出了足够的支持或例证。但仍有改进空间，例如可以更详细地描述女生提到的原因，以使回答更具说服力。建议在练习时尝试提供更多具体细节来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the reading, the students suggested the university to keep the museum building lit because the students have no place to practice and it is difficult for them to reserve one room. In the reading, it is suggested that the university should keep the music building open later as students have no place to practice and find it difficult to reserve a room.（将"museum building"改为"music building"，将"lit"改为"open later"，调整句子结构使其更自然。）

In the listening, the woman agreed with this idea for two reasons. In the listening, the woman supports this proposal for two reasons.（将"agreed with this idea"改为"supports this proposal"，使表达更准确。）

Firstly, there is no place for students to play except for dormitory. Firstly, there is no other place for students to practice besides their dormitories.（将"play"改为"practice"，将"dormitory"改为"dormitories"，使表达更准确。）

However, when she plays her violin indoors, she feels it is bad for others because they are sleeping or studying. However, when she practices her violin in her room, she feels guilty as it may disturb others who are sleeping or studying.（将"plays her violin indoors"改为"practices her violin in her room"，将 "it is bad for others because they are sleeping or studying." 改为 "she feels guilty as it may disturb others who are sleeping or studying."，使表达更自然。）

Secondly, when the concert is coming, all students need to practice their instruments. Secondly, when a concert is approaching, all students need to practice their instruments.（将"when the concert is coming"改为"when a concert is approaching"，使表达更自然。）

However, the orchestra will book every room. However, the orchestra members often book all available rooms.（将"the orchestra will book every room"改为"the orchestra members often book all available rooms"，使表达更准确。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading, it is suggested that the university should keep the music building open later as students have no place to practice and find it difficult to reserve a room. In the listening, the woman supports this proposal for two reasons. Firstly, there is no other place for students to practice besides their dormitories. However, when she practices her violin in her room, she feels guilty as it may disturb others who are sleeping or studying. Secondly, when a concert is approaching, all students need to practice their instruments. However, the orchestra members often book all available rooms.

6.思维导图

• Reading

  • Suggestion
    • Keep music building open later
    • No place to practice
    • Difficult to reserve a room

• Listening

  • Woman's opinion
    • Supports proposal
    • Reason 1: No other place besides dormitories
      • Disturbs others (sleeping, studying)
    • Reason 2: Concert approaching
      • Orchestra members book all rooms

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，流利，节奏稳定，仅有偶尔的停顿。但在某些地方，发言者可以改进一下自己的发音和语调。例如，“inavailability”应该是“unavailability”，“little girl”应该是“woman”。建议多加练习，提高发音准确性和自然度。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，并在回答中明确提到了女生对建议的看法以及她给出的理由。但是，在描述女生的观点时，可以更加简洁明了地陈述。例如，“the girl student thinks it's a good idea”可以改为“the woman agrees with the proposal”。此外，在提供理由时，可以更具体地描述一些细节。总体来说，回答已经很好地涵盖了问题要求的内容，但仍有改进空间。

5.语言使用

原文：According to the announcement, a letter was proposed as to keep the building open till midnight because students need to practice the instruments and also because of the inavailability of the practice room. The proposal suggests keeping the music building open until midnight due to students' need for instrument practice and the unavailability of practice rooms. (将句子结构简化，使用更准确的词汇)

The girl student thinks it's a good idea. The woman agrees with the proposal. (简化表述，更符合原文)

First, she mentions that there is not enough room for students to practice their instruments. Firstly, she mentions the insufficient availability of practice rooms. (使用更准确的词汇和表述)

They had to play the instruments in their dorm and they feel bad about it because it's a little bit noisy and the students next door maybe are sleeping or studying. Students are forced to practice in their dorms, causing noise disturbances for others who might be sleeping or studying. (简化句子结构，使表述更自然流畅)

Another reason given by the girl student is that sometimes students cannot book the concert places available for them to practice. Another reason she provides is the difficulty in booking practice slots. (简化表述，更符合原文)

For example, the girl student was unable to book the spring concert because someone has already booked it. For instance, she couldn't reserve a slot before the spring concert as all slots were already taken. (使用更准确的词汇和表述)

So, those are the two reasons provided by the little girl. Thus, these are the two reasons given by the woman. (简化表述，更符合原文)

修订后的回答（140字）：

The proposal suggests keeping the music building open until midnight due to students' need for instrument practice and the unavailability of practice rooms. The woman agrees with the proposal. Firstly, she mentions the insufficient availability of practice rooms. Students are forced to practice in their dorms, causing noise disturbances for others who might be sleeping or studying. Another reason she provides is the difficulty in booking practice slots. For instance, she couldn't reserve a slot before the spring concert as all slots were already taken. Thus, these are the two reasons given by the woman.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Keep music building open until midnight
  • Reasons: students' need, unavailability of practice rooms

• Woman's opinion

  • Agrees with the proposal
  • Reasons:
    • Insufficient availability of practice rooms
      • Practicing in dorms, noise disturbances
    • Difficulty in booking practice slots
      • Example: unable to reserve a slot before the spring concert

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度较好，但仍有一些不必要的停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对阅读材料和听力材料进行了总结，并提出了女士对建议的看法及理由。但在组织结构上还有待加强，可以尝试使用更清晰的连接词来串联观点，使回答更加连贯。此外，在提供支持或举例时，可以尝试更详细地描述以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the reading passage, the university decided proposed (建议使用"proposed"，因为这是一个提议，而不是已经决定的事情) to keep the music building open late. That means, in the previous, students always have difficulty to reserve the music building. Opening more hours can help the music building accommodate more students. In the conversation, the woman agreed with this plan. She said, as a musician student, they always need to make some practice. However, they have no place to practice, so they need to practice at their dorm room. However, that's a kind of ban because it will cause noise to the students who live nearby them. And second, opening more hours, that means it can have more time slots. In the previous, like the summer vacation or winter vacation, it's always every slot is being reserved by the students. For these two reasons, the woman agreed with this plan.

Revised Answer (140 words): In the reading passage, the university proposed to keep the music building open later than its current closing time of 9 p.m., as it would accommodate more students who want to reserve practice rooms. In the listening passage, the woman supports this proposal for two main reasons. First, she mentions that due to a lack of available practice spaces on campus, many music students are forced to practice in their dorm rooms, which can disturb other students who are trying to sleep or study. Second, she points out that extending the building's operating hours would provide more time slots for reservations, especially during busy periods such as before major concerts when demand for practice rooms is high. Therefore, she believes that keeping the music building open later would greatly benefit music students.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - University proposal
    - Keep music building open later
    - Accommodate more students

- Listening Passage
  - Woman's opinion
    - Supports the proposal
      - Reason 1: Lack of practice spaces
        - Practicing in dorm rooms
        - Disturbing other students
      - Reason 2: More time slots for reservations
        - Busy periods (e.g., before concerts)
        - High demand for practice rooms

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以及提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，各个观点之间关系明确，有足够的支持或例证。为了进一步提高回答质量，建议发言者在总结论点时更加明确和有力地表达观点，并尝试使用更多的连接词来使回答更加流畅。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, in the proposal, the proposal said the students need to keep the practice rooms in the music building to open until midnight because the musician students can practice late at night and lots of other students can use the practice room because they cannot make a reservation. And in the lecture, in the conversations, the girl agreed with the proposal because many music students will have a place to practice instead of keeping their volume down in the dormitory because students in the dormitory will have to study and sleep in the late night. What's more, before the concert, everybody can practice in the room instead of cannot making reservation.

Corrected Answer: Well, in the proposal, the proposal said it stated(建议使用不同的词汇，避免重复) that students need to keep the practice rooms in the music building to open open(去掉多余的词) until midnight because the musician students music students(简化表达) can practice late at night and lots of other students can use the practice room because they cannot make a reservation. And in the lecture, the listening passage,(更准确地描述听力材料) in during(使用更恰当的介词) the conversation, the girl agreed with the proposal because many music students will have a place to practice instead of keeping their volume down in the dormitory because students in the dormitory will have to study and sleep in the late night late at night(更自然的表达). What's more, before the concert, everybody can practice in the room instead of cannot making not being able to make a(使用更自然的表达) reservation.

Revised Answer (140 words): In the proposal, it stated that students need to keep the practice rooms in the music building open until midnight. This would allow music students to practice late at night and accommodate more students who currently cannot reserve a practice room. During the conversation in the listening passage, the girl agreed with this proposal. She believed that having extended hours for practice rooms would provide music students with a suitable place to practice, rather than disturbing others in their dormitories while trying to keep their volume down. Additionally, she mentioned that having more available time slots would be especially beneficial before concerts when everyone needs extra practice time. By extending the music building's hours, students would no longer struggle with reserving practice rooms during these crucial periods.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Extended hours
  - Music building
  - Practice rooms

- Listening passage
  - Girl's agreement
  - Reasons
    - Suitable practice space
    - Avoid disturbing dormitory students
    - More available time slots
    - Benefit before concerts

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意自己的发音和语调，尽量减少不自然的停顿，使语言更加流畅。

4.话题发展 发言者对于话题的发展较为完整，能够清晰地总结阅读材料和听力材料中的观点，并给出了女生对于建议的看法及原因。但在回答中有些部分略显啰嗦，可以尝试更简洁地表达观点。同时，在提供原因时可以尝试举例或给出更具体的细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：In the reading passage, it is proposed that the students recommend the university keeping building open until midnight because there's lots of people want to practice the instruments at night, and there's no good place to let them practice. In the reading passage, it is proposed that students recommend the university keep the music building open until midnight because many people want to practice their instruments at night, and there is no suitable place for them to do so.（将“keeping”改为“keep”，将“there's lots of people”改为“many people”，将“let them practice”改为“for them to do so”。这些修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

Also, he thinks that lots of people will use the building and it's difficult to reserve one place. Additionally, he believes that many people will use the building, making it difficult to reserve a room.（将“he thinks”改为“he believes”，将“lots of people”改为“many people”，将“reserve one place”改为“reserve a room”。这些修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

The woman in the conversation agrees with those ideas. The woman in the conversation concurs with these points.（将“agrees with those ideas”改为“concurs with these points”。这个修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

Firstly, she thinks that there's no place to go to practice the instrument and she has to practice in the dormitory. Firstly, she thinks that there is no suitable place to practice her instrument, forcing her to practice in the dormitory.（将“there's no place”改为“there is no suitable place”，将“she has to practice”改为“forcing her to practice”。这些修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

She feels really bad because it's pretty noisy and will interrupt other students. She feels guilty because it can be quite noisy and may disturb other students.（将“really bad”改为“guilty”，将“pretty noisy”改为“quite noisy”，将“interrupt”改为“disturb”。这些修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

And also, she thinks that it's hard to get reservation before winter concert and spring concert because lots of people will use that. Furthermore, she believes that it is challenging to secure a reservation before the winter and spring concerts due to high demand.（将“it's hard to get reservation”改为“it is challenging to secure a reservation”，将“lots of people will use that”改为“due to high demand”。这些修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

In conclusion, that's the reason why the woman agrees with those ideas. In conclusion, these are the reasons why the woman agrees with the proposal.（将“that's the reason why”改为“these are the reasons why”，将“those ideas”改为“the proposal”。这个修改使句子更加简洁、准确。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading passage, it is proposed that students recommend the university keep the music building open until midnight because many people want to practice their instruments at night, and there is no suitable place for them to do so. Additionally, he believes that many people will use the building, making it difficult to reserve a room. The woman in the conversation concurs with these points. Firstly, she thinks that there is no suitable place to practice her instrument, forcing her to practice in the dormitory. She feels guilty because it can be quite noisy and may disturb other students. Furthermore, she believes that it is challenging to secure a reservation before the winter and spring concerts due to high demand. In conclusion, these are the reasons why the woman agrees with the proposal.

6.思维导图

• Reading Passage

  • Proposal
    • Keep music building open until midnight
    • Many people want to practice at night
    • No suitable place for practice
    • Difficult to reserve a room

• Listening Passage

  • Woman's opinion
    • Agrees with the proposal
    • Reasons:
      • No suitable place, practices in dormitory
      • Feels guilty, noisy, disturbs other students
      • Challenging to secure reservation before concerts

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 0 Topic Development: 0 Language Use: 0 总分: 4

2.预估分数

4. 3.表达

由于回答不完整，无法对发音、语速和停顿进行评价。建议重新回答问题，确保内容完整。

4.话题发展 回答没有涵盖所需的内容，没有简要总结提案、陈述女士的观点以及她给出的理由。建议重新组织回答，确保包含所有要点。

5.语言使用

原回答：In the reading, a student's practice 在阅读中，有关学生的练习提案（原句过于简短，没有涵盖所需内容。建议用更完整的句子描述阅读部分的提案。）

修正后的回答：

在阅读中，有关学生的练习提案主张将校园音乐楼的开放时间从晚上9点延长至午夜。女士对此表示赞同，认为这将对音乐专业的学生非常有益。她提到，由于目前没有足够的练习空间，许多学生不得不在宿舍里练习，这会影响其他同学的休息和学习。此外，她还指出，在大型音乐会前，如冬季音乐会和春季音乐会前，所有学生都需要预约练习室进行排练，而目前的开放时间无法满足大量学生的需求。因此，延长音乐楼开放时间将有助于解决这些问题。

6.思维导图

• 阅读部分提案

  • 延长音乐楼开放时间至午夜

• 女士的观点

  • 赞同延长开放时间

• 原因1

  • 缺乏练习空间导致学生在宿舍练习
  • 影响其他同学休息和学习

• 原因2

  • 大型音乐会前需求增加
  • 当前开放时间无法满足需求

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰的，但在某些地方可能需要稍微调整一下语速和停顿。建议同学在练习时注意保持连贯的语速，并适当减少不必要的停顿，以提高整体的表达效果。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是连贯和有条理的，但在某些地方可以进一步完善。例如，在总结提议时，可以更明确地指出是关于将音乐楼开放时间延长至午夜的提议。此外，在解释女生支持这一提议的原因时，可以更具体地描述她所提到的问题，如宿舍里练习带来的噪音问题以及在重要演出前预约练习室困难等。通过对这些细节进行补充和完善，可以使回答更加丰富和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The university is going to keep the music building open for more time for the following two reasons. The university is considering extending the music building's hours for two main reasons. (原句表述不够自然，修改为更自然的表达方式) The first reason is that since many students practice at night, if the building keep open, students will have more time to practice. Firstly, as many students practice at night, keeping the building open would provide them with more time to practice. (修改语法和表达方式，使句子更自然流畅) And the second reason is that as the amount of users increase, if they keep the music building open, the practice numbers can let more students to practice it. Secondly, with an increasing number of users, extending the building's hours would allow more students to access practice rooms. (修改语法和表达方式，使句子更自然流畅)

In the conversation, we are aware that the man and the woman both hold a positive attitude for the following two reasons. The first reason is that they have somewhere to go and they have more time to practice and won't affect others. The second reason is that they can have more time to practice, because once they won't have enough space to practice, it really affects their grade. And now it's a great idea for both of them.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university is considering extending the music building's hours for two main reasons. Firstly, as many students practice at night, keeping the building open would provide them with more time to practice. Secondly, with an increasing number of users, extending the building's hours would allow more students to access practice rooms. In the conversation, both the man and the woman express their support for this proposal. They believe that having a designated place to practice would not only give them more time but also prevent disturbing others in their dorm rooms. Additionally, they mention that having more available practice slots would be especially beneficial during busy periods before major concerts when practice rooms are in high demand. Overall, they think that extending the music building's hours is a great idea that would benefit all music students.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Extend music building hours

• Reasons

  • More practice time at night
  • Accommodate increasing number of users

• Conversation

  • Man and woman's support
    • Designated practice place
      • Prevent disturbing others in dorms
    • More available practice slots
      • Beneficial during busy periods before major concerts

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 26

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor punctuation issues that result in inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should focus on proper punctuation usage to create a more natural flow in their speech. Additionally, the speaker should work on accurate pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively summarizes the proposal, states the woman's opinion, and explains her reasons for holding that opinion. To further improve topic development, the speaker could provide more specific examples from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original: The proposal stressed that the university should keep the music building open until midnight, the woman agrees with the proposal. The proposal suggests that the university should extend the music building's hours until midnight, and the woman agrees with this suggestion. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow) First, students need some places for them to practice the instruments, and there aren't any good places for them to practice. First, students require suitable locations to practice their instruments, and currently, there are no adequate options available. (Improved sentence structure and vocabulary) Currently, the students have no place to go as they practice the instruments in their dorm room, which causes noisy noise for their roommates as well as others. At present, students resort to practicing in their dorm rooms, causing disturbances for their roommates and others nearby. (Improved grammar and vocabulary) Second, it's hard for students to reserve a place to practice, and especially before the concert, there exists a surge in the demand as the students have to prepare for the concert. Second, reserving practice spaces is challenging for students, particularly before concerts when demand increases due to necessary preparations. (Improved sentence structure and vocabulary) Therefore, opening the music building until midnight will provide more time slots for students to practice and also good places without interrupting others. Therefore, extending the music building's hours until midnight will offer more time slots for students to practice in suitable locations without disturbing others. (Improved grammar and vocabulary)

Revised Answer (140 words): The proposal suggests that the university should extend the music building's hours until midnight, and the woman agrees with this suggestion. First, students require suitable locations to practice their instruments, and currently, there are no adequate options available. At present, students resort to practicing in their dorm rooms, causing disturbances for their roommates and others nearby. Second, reserving practice spaces is challenging for students, particularly before concerts when demand increases due to necessary preparations. Therefore, extending the music building's hours until midnight will offer more time slots for students to practice in suitable locations without disturbing others.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Extend music building hours until midnight
  - Woman's agreement

- Reasons
  - Suitable practice locations
    - Lack of adequate options
    - Dorm room disturbances
  - Reservation challenges
    - Increased demand before concerts
    - Necessary preparations

- Benefits
  - More time slots for practice
  - Suitable locations without disturbing others

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发音清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持流利的语言表达，减少不自然的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以在连接观点和提供支持或例子方面做得更好。建议在练习时关注如何更清晰地表达观点，并尝试提供更多相关的支持或例子来增强论述。

5.语言使用

原文：The student proposes that the university should keep the music building open later for two reasons. The proposal suggests that the university should extend the music building's hours for two reasons. (修改了句子结构，使表达更自然) First, some students and musicians, they want to play or practice their instruments at night. First, many students and musicians desire to play or practice their instruments during nighttime. (使用了更高级的词汇，改善了语法和句子结构) And it would be easier for them to accommodate more students. This would make it more convenient to accommodate a larger number of students. (改进了句子结构和词汇)

The woman in the conversation agrees with this proposal for two reasons. The woman in the conversation supports this proposal due to two main reasons. (使用了更自然的表达方式) First, she had to practice instruments at her dorm room, which is noisy and also will interrupt other students who are sleeping or studying. First, she has experienced practicing her instrument in her dorm room, causing noise disturbances and interruptions for other students who are sleeping or studying. (改进了句子结构和语法) Second, before orchestra, a lot of students from every section had to practice their instruments. Second, prior to orchestra performances, numerous students from all sections need to practice their instruments. (使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式) However, they can't even reserve a space to practice. Nonetheless, they often struggle to reserve a practice space. (改进了句子结构和词汇)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should extend the music building's hours for two reasons. First, many students and musicians desire to play or practice their instruments during nighttime. This would make it more convenient to accommodate a larger number of students. The woman in the conversation supports this proposal due to two main reasons. First, she has experienced practicing her instrument in her dorm room, causing noise disturbances and interruptions for other students who are sleeping or studying. Second, prior to orchestra performances, numerous students from all sections need to practice their instruments. Nonetheless, they often struggle to reserve a practice space. Extending the music building's hours would provide more opportunities for students to practice without disturbing others and ensure that everyone has access to the necessary resources before important performances.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Extend music building hours
  • Two reasons

• Woman's opinion

  • Supports proposal
  • Two main reasons
    • Dorm room practice issues
      • Noise disturbances
      • Interruptions for other students
    • Orchestra performances
      • Numerous students need practice time
      • Difficulty reserving practice space

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答整体上流畅，语速较为稳定，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方可能需要更清晰的发音。建议同学多加练习发音和语调，以便在考试中更好地展示自己的口语能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答较为连贯和有条理，观点之间的联系也较为明确。但在提供支持或举例方面还有待加强。建议同学在练习时尝试更充分地运用听力材料中的信息来支持自己的观点，以便在考试中更好地展示自己的思维能力和组织能力。

5.语言使用

Original: In the reading, a student suggests the university to keep the music building open late because there is no place for students to practice and it is difficult for them to reserve one room. In the reading, a woman agrees with the idea for two reasons. Firstly, there is no place for students to practice instruments except for dormitory. However, when she practices in dormitory, she feels it is bad because it is noisy and it will interrupt others who is sleeping or studying. Secondly, when the concert is coming, all students need to practice instruments. However, the orchestra will book every room and others couldn't practice their instruments.

Corrected: In the reading, a student suggests proposes ("proposes" 更正式，适合描述建议) the university to keep should keep (使用 "should" 更自然地表达建议) the music building open late because there is no place for students to practice and it is difficult for them to reserve one room a room ("a room" 更自然地表示一个房间). In the listening, a woman agrees with the idea for two reasons. Firstly, there is no place for students to practice instruments except for dormitory in their dormitories (使用复数形式更自然地表示多个宿舍). However, when she practices in dormitory her dormitory ("her dormitory" 更明确地表示特定宿舍), she feels it is bad because it is noisy and it will interrupt others who is are (使用 "are" 与 "others" 一致) sleeping or studying. Secondly, when the concert is coming, all students need to practice instruments. However, the orchestra will book every room and others couldn't can't (使用 "can't" 更自然地表示无法做某事) practice their instruments.

Revised (140 words): In the reading, a student proposes that the university should keep the music building open late because there is no place for students to practice and it is difficult for them to reserve a room. In the listening, a woman agrees with this proposal for two reasons. First, there is no place for students to practice instruments except in their dormitories. However, when she practices in her dormitory, she feels guilty because it is noisy and interrupts others who are sleeping or studying. Second, when a concert is approaching, all students need to practice their instruments. Unfortunately, the orchestra books every available room, leaving no space for other students to practice. Extending the music building's hours would alleviate these issues and provide more opportunities for students to hone their skills.

6.思维导图

• Reading

  • Proposal: Keep music building open late
  • Reasons: No place to practice, difficulty reserving rooms

• Listening

  • Woman's opinion: Agrees with proposal
  • Reason 1: No place to practice except dormitories
    • Negative impact: Noise, interrupting others
  • Reason 2: High demand for practice rooms before concerts
    • Problem: Orchestra books all rooms, no space for others

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 26分

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔出现停顿。建议在练习时注意提高发音准确性，尽量减少不必要的停顿，使表达更加流畅。

4.话题发展 回答内容条理清晰，观点明确，结构紧凑。学生很好地总结了建议，并提供了充足的理由支持女生的观点。在今后的练习中，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇，使表达更加连贯。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The student in the letter suggests that the university should keep the music building open until midnight. The student in the letter proposes that the university extend the music building's hours until midnight. (建议改为“提议”，使表达更准确) And the woman in the listening part likes this idea, The woman in the conversation agrees with this proposal, (改为“对话”和“同意”，使表达更自然) because firstly she says that there is no good place for them to practice their instrument, except the music building. For example, although she keeps the volume down in the dorm, it will still bother other students in the dorm who try to study or sleep. Secondly, she thinks that, before the big concert, all members of orchestra need to practice their instrument. But rooms in the music building are always booked, which is quite inconvenient for them to practice.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student in the letter proposes that the university extend the music building's hours until midnight. The woman in the conversation agrees with this proposal for two main reasons. First, she believes there is no suitable place for students to practice their instruments other than the music building. She explains that even when she tries to keep her volume low while practicing in her dorm room, it still disturbs other students who are studying or sleeping nearby. Second, she emphasizes that before major concerts, all orchestra members need additional practice time. However, due to high demand, practice rooms in the music building are often fully booked, making it difficult for students to find available slots. Extending the building's hours would help alleviate this issue and provide more opportunities for students to practice.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Extend music building hours until midnight

• Woman's opinion

  • Agrees with proposal

• Reason 1

  • No suitable place to practice instruments
    • Dorm room disturbances

• Reason 2

  • High demand for practice rooms before concerts
    • Fully booked rooms

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语速和语调基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，避免在句子中间出现不自然的停顿。此外，尽量减少发音错误，以免影响听众对内容的理解。

4.话题发展 The speaker provides a coherent response that summarizes the proposal and states the woman's opinion on it. However, the answer could be better organized by clearly stating the proposal first, followed by the woman's opinion, and then explaining her reasons for holding that opinion. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on providing a more structured response with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from the listening passage.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading passage talks about a suggestion of a student. The reading passage discusses a student's suggestion. (将句子改为更自然的表达) This student thinks school should keep the music building open at midnight, suggesting that the school should extend the music building's hours until midnight, (改进了句子结构和表达) because many musical students want to practice their instruments later at night. If the building were open more hours, it would be easier for this student to practice. The two students discussing with these suggestions, they agree with these suggestions. First, they think it will be a good idea, because now many musical students practice their instruments at home, and many other students doing their homework or reading books there, so it will be a bit noisy.

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage discusses a student's suggestion, proposing that the school should extend the music building's hours until midnight to accommodate students who want to practice their instruments later at night. The woman in the listening passage agrees with this proposal and provides several reasons for her support. Firstly, she mentions that currently, many music students are forced to practice in their dorm rooms due to limited availability of practice rooms. This creates noise disturbances for other students who are trying to study or sleep. Secondly, she highlights the increased demand for practice rooms during peak times such as before major concerts. Extending the music building's hours would alleviate this issue by providing more time slots for students to reserve practice rooms, ultimately benefiting both music students and those living in dormitories.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Student's suggestion
  - Extend music building hours until midnight

- Listening Passage
  - Woman's opinion
    - Agrees with proposal
    - Reasons for support
      - Noise disturbances in dorm rooms
      - Increased demand for practice rooms before concerts

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of proposal
  - Woman's opinion and reasons for support
    - Noise disturbances in dorm rooms
    - Increased demand for practice rooms before concerts

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

回答中的发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。建议在练习时注意提高发音的准确性，并尝试在句子之间保持自然的停顿，以提高整体的流畅度。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，能够概括阅读材料中的建议，并说明女生对此建议的看法及原因。但在表述时，部分句子略显生硬，建议在练习时注意提高句子之间的连贯性和逻辑性，使回答更加有条理。同时，在举例子时尽量详细描述，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the reading, a student suggested the university to keep the museum building open late because there is no place for students to practice and it is difficult for them to reserve one room. In the reading, a student suggested that the university should keep the music building open later because there are no other places for students to practice, and it is difficult for them to reserve a room.（将museum改为music，调整句子结构，增加连接词，改变时态。）

In the reading, women agree with this idea for two reasons. In the listening, the woman agrees with this proposal for two reasons.（将reading改为listening，将women改为woman。）

Firstly, there is no place for students to practice except for dormitory. Firstly, there are no other places for students to practice except in their dormitories.（调整句子结构，改变时态。）

For instance, she always feels noisy to practice instrument in dormitory even slowing down the tone because others is sleeping or starting. For instance, she always feels guilty about practicing her instrument in her dormitory even when she tries to keep the volume down because others are sleeping or studying.（调整句子结构，增加连接词，改变时态。）

Secondly, when the concert is coming, all students need to practice their instrument, but the orchestra will book every room. Secondly, when a concert is approaching, all students need to practice their instruments, but the orchestra members have already booked every available room.（调整句子结构，改变时态。）

Revised Answer (140 words): In the reading, a student suggested that the university should keep the music building open later because there are no other places for students to practice, and it is difficult for them to reserve a room. In the listening, the woman agrees with this proposal for two reasons. Firstly, there are no other places for students to practice except in their dormitories. For instance, she always feels guilty about practicing her instrument in her dormitory even when she tries to keep the volume down because others are sleeping or studying. Secondly, when a concert is approaching, all students need to practice their instruments, but the orchestra members have already booked every available room.

6.思维导图

- Reading
  - Suggestion: Keep music building open later
  - Reasons: No other places to practice, difficult to reserve a room

- Listening
  - Woman's opinion: Agrees with proposal
  - Reasons:
    - No other places to practice except dormitories
      - Feels guilty, others sleeping or studying
    - Concert approaching, all students need practice
      - Orchestra members booked every available room

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高语音连贯性，减少不自然的停顿。此外，尽量纠正发音错误以提高整体表达效果。

4.话题发展 发言者对于提案的总结和女士观点的陈述较为清晰，但在解释原因方面可以进一步加强。例如，在提到学生需要在宿舍练习时，可以详细说明这会对其他同学产生何种影响。另外，在谈到音乐会前的排练需求时，可以进一步阐述为什么延长开放时间会对学生有所帮助。总之，尝试在回答中提供更多具体细节和例子来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The proposal says the practice room will open after 9 p.m. and maybe it will be later to accommodate a large number of students. The woman says this proposal is a great idea for two reasons. The first reason is that for now students don't have some room for practicing and they have to practice their instruments in their dorm room, which will bother other students in other rooms as the room is very large and other students may be sleeping or studying in their dorms. The second reason is that they will have to practice a lot of time before the winter or spring concert and all parts of the orchestra have to practice a long time. During this time, a lot of practice rooms have been booked for all time slots, so they have no room for practicing. This proposal opens a new area for them to practice.

Corrected: The proposal suggests that the practice room will open remain open (改为“remain open”，表示练习室将保持开放) after 9 p.m., possibly even later, to accommodate a larger number of students. The woman believes this proposal is an excellent idea for two reasons. First, currently, students lack adequate space for practicing and are forced to practice their instruments in their dorm rooms, which can disturb other students who might be sleeping or studying. Second, they need extensive practice time before winter or spring concerts, as all sections of the orchestra require ample preparation. During these periods, many practice rooms are fully booked, leaving no available space for additional practice sessions. This proposal would provide them with more opportunities to practice.

Revised (140 words): The proposal suggests that the practice room will remain open after 9 p.m., possibly even later, to accommodate a larger number of students. The woman believes this proposal is an excellent idea for two reasons. First, currently, students lack adequate space for practicing and are forced to practice their instruments in their dorm rooms, which can disturb other students who might be sleeping or studying. Second, they need extensive practice time before winter or spring concerts, as all sections of the orchestra require ample preparation. During these periods, many practice rooms are fully booked, leaving no available space for additional practice sessions. This proposal would provide them with more opportunities to practice, alleviating the issues faced by both music students and their fellow dorm residents.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Remain open after 9 p.m.
  - Accommodate more students

- Woman's opinion
  - Excellent idea
  - Reasons
    - Lack of practice space
      - Disturb other students in dorms
    - Extensive practice needed
      - Winter and spring concerts
      - Fully booked practice rooms

- Solution
  - More opportunities to practice

7.关键词