TOEFL TPO 15 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The man expresses his opinion about the proposal in the student's letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state the man's opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大致清晰，但仍有一些不太自然的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持连贯流畅的语速，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，可以多加练习发音，提高准确度。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，能够概括提案内容并说明男生的观点及理由。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化，例如先明确表示男生反对这个提案，再分别陈述两个理由。此外，在论述理由时可以尝试使用更多连接词和过渡词汇，使表达更加连贯。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter says that the school should pave the trail to increase the safety and to look nicer in order to attract more people. The man is opposed to the proposal because first of all, it's actually very dangerous to run on a hard surface. It will cause injuries to your body. It's better to run on a soft surface. In addition to this, people love the way it is right now. It offers people an opportunity to get away from the ordinary buildings in the university. It makes people to feel like they're in nature. They don't have to renovate it.

Corrected: The letter suggests that the school should pave pave (改为：pave) the trail to increase safety and improve its appearance, thereby attracting more people. The man opposes this proposal primarily because running on a hard surface is actually quite dangerous and can cause injuries. He believes that running on a soft surface is preferable. Furthermore, he points out that people currently enjoy the trails as they are, as they provide an escape from the typical university buildings and create a sense of being in nature. Thus, there is no need for renovation.

Revised (140 words): The letter suggests that the university should pave the running trails to enhance safety and improve their appearance, which would attract more students. However, the man opposes this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, he argues that running on a hard surface is actually quite dangerous and can lead to injuries, whereas running on a soft surface is better for one's body. Secondly, he highlights that people currently appreciate the trails' natural state, as it offers an escape from typical campus buildings and creates a sense of being immersed in nature. Therefore, he believes there is no need for renovation, as the trails already serve their purpose and are enjoyed by the users.

6.思维导图

- Letter's Proposal
  - Pave trails
  - Increase safety
  - Improve appearance

- Man's Opposition
  - Hard surface dangers
    - Injuries
    - Soft surface preference
  - Enjoyment of natural state
    - Escape from campus buildings
    - Sense of being in nature

- Conclusion
  - No need for renovation

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在解释男子提出的观点时可以更详细。例如，在谈到硬表面对跑步者的影响时，可以提供更多关于长期影响和具体损伤类型的信息。此外，在描述跑道改变后可能导致学生使用减少的原因时，可以进一步解释为什么这种改变会让跑道失去吸引力。总之，为了提高话题发展能力，请尝试在回答中提供更多具体细节和例子。

5.语言使用

Original: In the reading passage, the student suggests that the university should pave those three miles of unpaved dirt running trails with cometscement(原文中的“comets”应为“cement”，这是发音不准确导致的拼写错误。). And in the lecture, the man disagreed with this idea. Firstly, he argues that it would not be safer, since the student doesn't think about the long-term consequence. It is not comfortable to run on a hard surface. It would even cause injury. Soft surface would be better. And secondly, the students would not like the way they look, and they would not use it more, since most students just take a break to work on it since it makes them feel in nature. And now it looks like a common street, and it is not as reliablerelaxing(原文中的“reliable”应为“relaxing”，这是发音不准确导致的拼写错误。).

Revised (140 words): In the reading passage, the student suggests that the university should pave the three miles of unpaved dirt running trails with cement. However, in the lecture, the man disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. First, he argues that paving the trails would not make them safer because running on a hard surface can lead to long-term injuries to bones and joints; a soft surface is better for runners' health. Second, he believes that students would not appreciate the change in appearance of the trails and might use them less frequently. This is because many students enjoy taking breaks from campus life by running on the trails, which currently offer a natural and relaxing environment. Paving the trails would make them resemble ordinary streets, diminishing their appeal as a place to escape and unwind.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Student's suggestion
    - Pave running trails with cement

- Lecture
  - Man's disagreement
    - Reason 1: Safety and health concerns
      - Hard surface leads to long-term injuries
      - Soft surface is better for runners' health
    - Reason 2: Change in appearance
      - Students enjoy natural environment
      - Paved trails resemble ordinary streets
      - Diminished appeal for relaxation and escape

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 2.5 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。但是，有些标点问题是由于不恰当的停顿造成的。所有拼写错误都是由于发音不准确造成的。建议发言者在练习时注意提高发音准确性，并尝试减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待加强。建议发言者在练习时注意明确地陈述观点，并在论述过程中保持逻辑清晰和条理分明。同时，可以适当增加一些具体的例子或论据来支持自己的观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The proposal is to pave the way, pave the trails near the school by cement and to make it prettier. The man in the listening content disagreed with this proposal because he thinks that for runners, it's good for them to run on a hard surface and it's good for their joints and knees. Also, running in the cement way made them feel a rewind sense and eased their mind, gave them feel a sense of nature. So if they paved the way with the cement, it can provide them with a sense of relaxation. Thus, they lost their doubts about running.

Corrected: The proposal is to pave the way, pave the trails near the school by with cement and to make it prettier more attractive. The man in the listening content segment disagreed with this proposal because he thinks that for runners, it's good better for them to run on a hard soft surface as it's good for their joints and knees. Also, running on the cement way made them feel a rewind sense and eased their mind, unpaved trail provides a more natural experience, giving them a sense of nature. So if they paved the way with cement, it would not provide them with a sense of relaxation. Thus, they would lose their motivation for running.

(将“by”改为“with”，更符合语境；将“prettier”改为“more attractive”，更准确地表达意思；将“content”改为“segment”，更符合听力材料的描述；将“good”改为“better”，表示更好的对比；将“hard”改为“soft”，纠正原文中的错误理解；将关于跑步感受的描述进行修改，使其更自然、准确。)

Revised version (140 words):

The proposal suggests paving the trails near the school with cement to make them more attractive. The man in the listening segment disagrees with this proposal, arguing that it is better for runners to run on a soft surface, as it is beneficial for their joints and knees. He also points out that running on the unpaved trail provides a more natural experience, giving them a sense of nature and relaxation. If the trails were paved with cement, they would lose this connection to nature and potentially decrease their motivation for running. In conclusion, the man believes that paving the trails with cement would not only be detrimental to runners' physical health but also take away from their overall enjoyment of the activity.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Pave trails with cement
  - Make more attractive

- Man's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons
    - Soft surface better for joints and knees
    - Unpaved trail provides natural experience
      - Sense of nature and relaxation

- Consequences of paving
  - Loss of connection to nature
  - Decreased motivation for running

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should practice proper pausing and work on pronunciation to avoid spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in fully addressing the man's opinion and reasons for disagreeing with the proposal. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on providing more detailed explanations of the man's reasons and how they relate to the overall argument against paving the running trails.

5.Language Use

Original: The proposal says the university should pay running trials because first, it can increase the safety and secondly, it can make the running trials look nicer, which can increase student use. The proposal suggests that the university should pave running trails to improve safety and enhance their appearance, thereby encouraging more students to use them. (Corrected "pay" to "pave", rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Original: However, the man disagrees with this proposal because firstly, he thinks it is not good to our bones and joints because of the hard surface and which will cause injury to our body, and that is definitely terrible. However, the man disagrees with this proposal for two reasons: first, he believes that running on hard surfaces is harmful to our bones and joints, potentially leading to injuries; second, (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Original: Secondly, he thinks now the running trials is a place for students to take a rest off the campus and after the payment, it will just look like a regular place for running but not a good place for relaxing. he argues that paving the trails would make them less appealing as a natural escape from campus life since they would resemble regular streets or sidewalks rather than providing a relaxing environment. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should pave running trails to improve safety and enhance their appearance, thereby encouraging more students to use them. However, the man disagrees with this proposal for two reasons: first, he believes that running on hard surfaces is harmful to our bones and joints, potentially leading to injuries; second, he argues that paving the trails would make them less appealing as a natural escape from campus life since they would resemble regular streets or sidewalks rather than providing a relaxing environment. By addressing these concerns and using advanced vocabulary, proper grammar, smooth transitions, and a strong conclusion, the revised answer achieves a more natural-sounding language style and is better suited for a score of 30.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Pave running trails
    - Improve safety
    - Enhance appearance

- Man's disagreement
  - Harmful to bones and joints
    - Hard surfaces
    - Potential injuries
  - Less appealing environment
    - Natural escape from campus life
    - Resemble regular streets/sidewalks

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，说话者的语言流利，语速稳定，仅有少量停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议说话者注意在适当的地方停顿，以及准确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，说话者的回答内容连贯、组织良好，观点之间关系明确，并提供了足够的支持和例子。为了进一步提高话题发展能力，建议说话者在解释原因时更加详细和具体。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, in this letter, a student proposes to pave the running trails because he thinks that this will be very safety and the paving will also make the trails look nicer. However, the man from the listening disagrees with this proposal. Firstly, he thinks that the trails may be very hard, which will be bad for the bones and joints, and people will be more likely to run on soft places, and in this way, these trails will not be safer. And secondly, he also thinks that people will use less trails because they always want to go the sidewalk, and that's a much more relaxing way. Based on these reasons, the man just disagrees with the proposal.

Corrected: Well, in this letter, a student proposes to pave the running trails because he they think that this will be very safety improve safety(将“be very safety”改为“improve safety”，使语法更准确) and the paving will also make the trails look nicer. However, the man from the listening disagrees with this proposal. Firstly, he thinks that the trails may be very too(将“very”改为“too”，使语句更自然) hard, which will be bad for the bones and joints, and people will be more likely to run on soft places(在这里可以添加一个逗号，使句子更流畅), and in this way, these trails will not be safer. And secondly, he also thinks that people will use less fewer(将“less”改为“fewer”，因为“trails”是可数名词) trails because they always want to go the on the(将“the”改为“on the”，使语句更自然) sidewalk, and that's a much more relaxing way. Based on these reasons, the man just disagrees with the proposal.

Revised (140 words): In this letter, a student proposes to pave the running trails because they believe it will improve safety and make the trails look nicer. However, the man from the listening disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. First, he argues that paved trails would be too hard, negatively affecting runners' bones and joints, and leading them to prefer running on softer surfaces. Consequently, these paved trails would not be safer. Second, he believes that people will use fewer trails if they are paved since they prefer running on sidewalks for a more relaxing experience. The man contends that paving the trails would take away from their natural appeal and make them less attractive to runners. Based on these reasons, the man disagrees with the proposal to pave the running trails.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Pave running trails
  • Improve safety
  • Make trails look nicer

• Man's opinion

  • Disagrees with proposal
  • Reasons
    • Paved trails too hard
      • Bad for bones and joints
      • Runners prefer soft surfaces
    • Fewer people using trails
      • Prefer sidewalks for relaxation
      • Loss of natural appeal

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. For example, the speaker could work on pronouncing words more clearly and accurately to avoid spelling errors. Additionally, the speaker should practice using appropriate pauses to improve the overall flow of their speech.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, summarizing the proposal and stating the man's opinion on it. They also explain the reasons behind his opinion. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific examples or details to support their points. The speaker could also work on making clearer connections between ideas to enhance the overall coherence of their response.

5.Language Use

Original: The students' proposals and their the trails should be paved for the safety of the students and to attract more students to running. However, the men disagree with the proposal for several reasons. First, I think to pave the road it will be hard and hard surface is not a proper way to run because it will damage your bodies and it will cause injuries. So it's going to make people safe. Secondly, I think the people go this trail is just for relaxation and they need the natural experience. To pave is just like regular road and the effect of natural will lose. So the students think the proposal is not good.

(Replace "their" with "the" for clarity, change "men" to "man" for accuracy, rephrase sentences for better flow and grammar)

Revised (140 words): The student's proposal suggests that their the trails should be paved to ensure student safety and attract more students to running. However, the man disagrees with this proposal for several reasons. First, he believes that paving the trails would create a hard surface, which is not ideal for running as it can cause damage to one's body and lead to injuries. Therefore, paving would not necessarily make the trails safer. Secondly, he argues that people use these trails primarily for relaxation and enjoying a natural experience. Paving them would make them resemble regular roads, diminishing their appeal as a natural escape from campus life. Consequently, he believes that paving the trails would not be beneficial for students.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Pave trails
  - Safety
  - Attract students

- Man's opinion
  - Disagrees
  - Reasons
    - Hard surface
      - Damaging to body
      - Injuries
    - Natural experience
      - Relaxation
      - Appeal of trails

7.Key Words