TOEFL TPO 1 Speaking Task 1 Sample: Some people believe that television has had a positive influence on society. Others believe it has had a negative influence on society. Which do you agree with and why? Use details and examples to explain your opinion.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 1

• Topic Development: 1

• Language Use: 1

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 8

3.Delivery The speaker's response is unclear and lacks fluidity. The pace is inconsistent, and there are several pauses throughout the answer. To improve delivery, practice speaking with a consistent pace and minimize pauses. Additionally, work on pronunciation to avoid spelling errors resulting from inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response lacks coherence and organization. The ideas presented are not well-connected, and there is insufficient support or examples provided to back up the opinion. To improve topic development, focus on creating a clear structure for your response, such as an introduction, main points with supporting examples, and a conclusion. This will help you present your ideas in a more organized manner and provide sufficient support for your opinion.

5. Language Use

Original:

I believe watching television has a negative influence on society because you think firstly study will be influenced as child for small time on television instead of their study. They will take less time on reviewing their test which will lead to bad results. Besides watching television is really harmful to our health. Example might be lead to eye joint and lead to bad posture.

Revised:

I believe that television has had a negative influence on society for two main reasons: its impact on children's education and its detrimental effects on our health. Firstly, excessive television viewing can hinder a child's academic performance, as they may spend more time watching TV rather than focusing on their studies. This could result in less time spent reviewing for tests and ultimately lead to poor academic outcomes.

Secondly, watching television can be harmful to our health. For example, prolonged exposure to screens may cause eye strain and contribute to poor posture, as people tend to sit in uncomfortable positions while watching TV. These negative effects on our well-being further support the argument that television has had an adverse impact on society.

I believe that television has had a negative influence on society for two main reasons: its impact on children's education and its detrimental effects on our health. Firstly, excessive television viewing can hinder a child's academic performance (revised from "you think firstly study will be influenced as child for small time on television instead of their study"), as they may spend more time watching TV rather than focusing on their studies (revised for clarity and natural flow). This could result in less time spent reviewing for tests (revised from "They will take less time on reviewing their test") and ultimately lead to poor academic outcomes (revised from "which will lead to bad results").

Secondly, watching television can be harmful to our health (revised from "Besides watching television is really harmful to our health"). For example, prolonged exposure to screens may cause eye strain (revised from "Example might be lead to eye joint") and contribute to poor posture (revised from "and lead to bad posture"), as people tend to sit in uncomfortable positions while watching TV. These negative effects on our well-being further support the argument that television has had an adverse impact on society (revised for a strong conclusion).Corrected:

I believe watching that television has had a negative influence on society because you for two main reasons: its impact on children's education and its detrimental effects on our health. Firstly, excessive television viewing can hinder a child's academic performance (revised from "you think firstly study will be influenced as child for small time on television instead of their study. They study"), as they may spend more time watching TV rather than focusing on their studies (revised for clarity and natural flow). This could result in less time spent reviewing for tests (revised from "They will take less time on reviewing their test which test") and ultimately lead to poor academic outcomes (revised from "which will lead to bad results. Besides results").

Secondly, watching television can be harmful to our health (revised from "Besides watching television is really harmful to our health. Example health"). For example, prolonged exposure to screens may cause eye strain (revised from "Example might be lead to eye joint and joint") and contribute to poor posture (revised from "and lead to bad posture.posture"), as people tend to sit in uncomfortable positions while watching TV. These negative effects on our well-being further support the argument that television has had an adverse impact on society (revised for a strong conclusion).

6. Display title: 6.Mind Map

- Preference/Opinion
  - Negative influence on society

- Main Point
  - Impact on studies
    - Less time for reviewing tests
    - Poor results
  - Health issues
    - Eye strain
    - Bad posture

- Supporting Examples
  - Children spending more time watching TV than studying
  - Health problems caused by excessive TV watching

- Conclusion
  - Watching television has a negative influence on society due to its impact on studies and health.

7. Display title: 7.Key Words

8. Display title: 8.Additional Examples

9. Watching excessive television can lead to a lack of social interaction, as people may prefer to stay indoors and watch TV rather than engage with friends and family.

10. Television can expose children to inappropriate content, which may negatively influence their behavior and values.

11. Watching television for long periods can contribute to obesity, as it encourages a sedentary lifestyle and often leads to unhealthy snacking habits.

12. Excessive television watching can reduce creativity and imagination, as people may become more reliant on TV for entertainment rather than exploring other hobbies or activities.

13. Watching too much television can contribute to sleep problems, as the blue light emitted from screens can interfere with the body's natural sleep patterns.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 2.5

• Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• 22 (based on the average of Sub Scores)

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some areas where the speech could be improved. For example, the speaker could work on their pronunciation of certain words, such as "imitate," to ensure that their message is easily understood by listeners. Additionally, the speaker should pay attention to appropriate pauses and intonation to convey their ideas more effectively.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of topic development. The speaker could expand on their argument by providing more examples or discussing other negative aspects of television on society. Additionally, they could address potential counterarguments or acknowledge that there may be some positive aspects of television as well. This would make the response more balanced and persuasive.

5.Language Use

Original: I believe that television has a negative influence on the society. This is because safety plays an essential role in everyone's life. In other words, television might benefit adults from the side of entertaining, but it is not for children. Children will watch something dangerous, and they will try to imitate the action. Take my neighbor Alex as an example. He's five years old kid, and last time he was watching a cartoon and that contained a superman who is flying in the sky. So after watching that, he tried to imitate the action and tried to jump off the building, and luckily he was saved by his parents at last. So that's basically why I think so.

Corrected: I believe that television has a negative influence on society(removed "the"). This is because safety plays an essential role in everyone's life. In other words, television might benefit adults in terms of entertainment(rephrased for clarity), but it is not suitable(changed "for" to "suitable") for children. Children may watch something dangerous, and they will try to imitate the action. Take my neighbor Alex as an example; he's a five-year-old kid, and once he was watching a cartoon, which contained a superman who was flying in the sky. So after watching that, he tried to imitate the action and attempted to jump off the building; luckily, he was saved by his parents in the nick of time(added for emphasis). So that's basically why I think so.

I believe that television has a negative influence on society. This is because safety plays an essential role in everyone's life. In other words, television might benefit adults in terms of entertainment, but it is not suitable for children. Children may watch dangerous content and attempt to imitate the actions they see. Take my neighbor Alex as an example; he's a five-year-old kid, and once he was watching a cartoon, which contained a superman who was flying in the sky. After watching that, he tried to imitate the action and attempted to jump off the building; luckily, he was saved by his parents in the nick of time. Another example is the exposure to violent content on television, which can lead to aggressive behavior among children and teenagers. In conclusion, due to potential risks for children and negative effects on their behavior, I firmly believe that television has a negative influence on society.

6.Mind Map

• Preference: Negative influence on society
  • Main Point: Safety concerns for children
    • Supporting Example 1: Neighbor Alex imitating dangerous actions
    • Supporting Example 2: Exposure to violent content leading to aggressive behavior
  • Conclusion: Television has a negative influence due to potential risks and negative effects on children's behavior

7.Key Words

8.Additional Examples

1. Children may develop unhealthy eating habits due to the influence of junk food advertisements on television.

2. Television can lead to a sedentary lifestyle, contributing to obesity and other health issues among viewers.

3. Excessive screen time spent watching television can negatively impact children's academic performance and social skills.

4. Television can perpetuate stereotypes and reinforce negative cultural biases, affecting viewers' perceptions of different groups of people.

5. The overconsumption of television may lead to addiction, causing individuals to prioritize watching shows over more important aspects of their lives.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some areas where the speaker could improve. For instance, the speaker could work on varying their intonation to make their speech more engaging and easier to follow. Additionally, the speaker should practice pronouncing certain words more accurately to avoid any confusion for listeners. Overall, the delivery is good but could be improved with some minor adjustments.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the response could be strengthened by providing more specific examples or details to support the main argument. For instance, the speaker could discuss how television has led to increased awareness of global issues or how it has provided educational opportunities for people who may not have access to traditional resources. By expanding on these ideas and providing more concrete evidence, the speaker's response would be even more persuasive and compelling.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: Personally, I think that television had a positive influence on society. Well, television can make some common topics for people that have the same interest. For instance, for me, I'm actually a big fan of soap operas. And while I'm studying in school during break time, when I'm communicating with new friends, when we're talking about TV shows, if I say my interest is soap operas, some people that have the same interest will have the same topic for me, and then we will become friends, maybe hang out or watch the TV together. Therefore, this strengthens the bond between people around me and make me happier and psychologically healthier. Therefore, I think that television has had a positive influence on societies, which people can make more friends that has the same interest.

Corrected Answer: Personally, I think that television had has had (corrected tense) a positive influence on society. Well, (removed filler word) Television can make create (improved word choice) common topics for people that have who share (improved phrasing) the same interest. For instance, for me, I'm actually a big fan of soap operas. And while I'm studying in school during break time, when I'm communicating with new friends, and (improved flow) we're talking about TV shows, if I say my interest is soap operas, some people that have who share (improved phrasing) the same interest will have the same topic for me, and then we will become friends, maybe hang out or watch the TV together. Therefore, this strengthens the bond between people around me and make makes (corrected verb form) me happier and psychologically healthier. Therefore, I think that television has had a positive influence on societies, as (improved flow) people can make more friends that has who share (improved phrasing) the same interest.

Revised Answer (110 words): Personally, I believe that television has had a positive influence on society. Television creates common topics for people who share similar interests. For example, as a fan of soap operas, I find it easier to connect with new friends at school when discussing our favorite shows. This shared interest strengthens our bonds and contributes to our happiness and psychological well-being. Additionally, television can raise awareness of global issues and provide educational opportunities for those without access to traditional resources. In conclusion, television has positively impacted society by fostering connections among individuals with shared interests and promoting education and awareness on a global scale.

6.Mind Map

• Preference: Positive influence of television on society
  • Main Point 1: Fosters connections among individuals with shared interests
    • Supporting Example 1: Bonding over soap operas
    • Supporting Example 2: Discussing favorite shows at school
  • Main Point 2: Promotes education and awareness on a global scale
    • Supporting Example 3: Raising awareness of global issues
    • Supporting Example 4: Providing educational opportunities for those without access to traditional resources
  • Conclusion: Television has positively impacted society in various ways

7.Key Words

8.Additional Examples

1. Television can expose viewers to diverse cultures and perspectives, promoting empathy and understanding among people from different backgrounds.

2. News programs on television keep people informed about current events, allowing them to make informed decisions and engage in meaningful discussions.

3. Educational television programs, such as documentaries and science shows, can inspire curiosity and a love for learning in viewers of all ages.

4. Television can provide a platform for talented individuals to showcase their skills, inspiring others to pursue their passions and dreams.

5. Family-friendly television programs can bring families together, creating shared experiences and memories that strengthen familial bonds.