TOEFL Academic Discussion Writing Sample: Your professor is teaching a class on environmental protection. Write a post responding to the professor's question. In your response you should do the following. · Express and support your opinion. · Make a contribution to the discussion in your own words. An effective response will contain at least 100 words.
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Professor
This week, we'll be discussing ways to address air pollution. One idea is introducing environmental taxes on air travel. Such taxes, also referred to as ecological taxes or green taxes, are extra charges that get added to the price of airplane tickets. Money collected from these taxes could be invested in environmentally friendly technologies or in promoting other cleaner modes of transportation. Do you think there should be an environmental tax on air travel? Why or why not?
Amy
We should impose environmental taxes on air travel. These taxes might encourage people to find cheaper, more eco-friendly ways to get places. in my country, many people use planes to fly a short distance because flights are relatively cheap, when they could just as easily take a less polluting form of transportation.
Rory
Additional taxes on air travel will do little to solve the problem of air pollution. Airplane tickets would become more expensive, punishing passengers without incentivizing airlines to become more environmentally friendly. The airlines should pay the price to protect the environment, not their customers.
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Résultat de l'Évaluation
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 1.0
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 1.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 2.0
2. 预估分数
8. 3 任务完成度
这篇文章没有明确回答教授的问题,也没有提供支持观点的论据。为了提高文章质量,你需要:
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阐述你对环境税的看法,并给出具体原因。
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使用自己的话参与讨论,而不是仅仅重复其他人的观点。
英文示例:
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"I believe that implementing environmental taxes on air travel is a necessary step towards reducing air pollution because it would encourage people to consider alternative, eco-friendly transportation options."
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"However, I also think that airlines should be held accountable for their environmental impact by investing in cleaner technologies and adopting more sustainable practices."
4. 文章结构与组织
文章缺乏清晰的结构和组织。为了改进,请注意以下几点:
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在引言中简要介绍话题和你的观点。
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在正文中详细阐述你的观点,并提供支持论据。
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在结论中总结你的主要观点。
英文示例:
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Introduction: "Air pollution is a pressing issue, and one proposed solution is to impose environmental taxes on air travel."
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Body: "On one hand, these taxes could discourage frequent flying and promote the use of cleaner transportation methods, such as trains or buses. On the other hand, some argue that it is the responsibility of airlines to invest in eco-friendly technologies and practices, rather than burdening passengers with additional costs."
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Conclusion: "In conclusion, while environmental taxes on air travel may have some benefits, it is crucial to consider other approaches that directly target the sources of pollution."
5. 语法批改
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Title: 6 文章修订
Paragraph 1: In response to the professor's question, I believe that implementing environmental taxes on air travel could be a beneficial approach to addressing air pollution. By imposing such taxes, individuals may be encouraged to seek alternative, eco-friendly modes of transportation for shorter distances. This would ultimately lead to a reduction in air pollution and promote a more sustainable way of traveling.
Paragraph 2: However, it is crucial to consider the potential drawbacks of this strategy. Imposing additional taxes on air travel might disproportionately burden passengers without effectively incentivizing airlines to adopt greener practices. To achieve meaningful progress in combating air pollution, it is essential to hold airlines accountable for their environmental impact and encourage them to invest in cleaner technologies and practices. (126 words)
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Title: 8 思维导图
1. Environmental taxes
1.1 Encourage alternative transportation
1.2 Reduce air pollution
1.3 Promote sustainable travel
2. Potential drawbacks
2.1 Disproportionate burden on passengers
2.2 Ineffective incentives for airlines
3. Addressing air pollution
3.1 Hold airlines accountable
3.2 Invest in cleaner technologies and practices
Title: 9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| Implementing | /ˈɪmpləˌmɛntɪŋ/ | gerund | Putting into effect | 实施 | Implementing environmental taxes can help reduce air pollution. |
| Eco-friendly | /ˌikoʊˈfrɛndli/ | adjective | Not harmful to the environment | 环保的 | People should choose eco-friendly modes of transportation whenever possible. |
| Sustainable | /səˈsteɪnəbəl/ | adjective | Able to be maintained at a certain level or rate | 可持续的 | Sustainable travel practices are essential for protecting the environment. |
| Disproportionate | /dɪsprəˈpɔrʃənət/ | adjective | Too large or too small in comparison to something else, especially when unfair |不成比例的 |The tax increase would place a disproportionate burden on passengers. | ||
| Incentivizing | /ɪnˈsɛntɪvaɪzɪŋ/ | gerund | Providing an incentive for a particular action | 激励 | Incentivizing airlines to adopt greener practices is necessary for reducing air pollution. |
| Accountable | /əˈkaʊntəbəl/ | adjective | Required to explain actions or decisions | 有责任的 | Airlines should be held accountable for their environmental impact. |
| Cleaner | /ˈklinər/ | adjective | Comparatively clean | 更清洁的 | Cleaner technologies can help reduce the environmental impact of air travel. |
| Technologies | /tɛkˈnɒlədʒiz/ | noun | The application of scientific knowledge for practical purposes, especially in industry | 技术 |Airlines should invest in cleaner technologies to reduce their carbon footprint. | |
| Practices | /ˈpræktɪsiz/ | noun | The actual application or use of an idea, belief, or method as opposed to theories about such application or use |实践 |Adopting sustainable practices is essential for reducing air pollution. |
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The question whether to raise taxes on car fuels is a complex one, influenced by many factors. From my perspective, I think this policy may have predo...
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The question whether to raise taxes on car fuels is a complex one, influenced by many factors. From my perspective, I think this policy may have predo...
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The question whether to raise taxes on car fuels is a complex one, influenced by many factors. From my perspective, I think this policy may have predominantly negative to society. First, raising taxes on car fuels means placing financial burdens on the public, which will lead many financial problems and life problems to those low-income families. And there is too much uncertainties on the policy implementation. However, this policy would directly affect the economic and the life. Overall, to effectively address environmental issues, it is imperative that we prioritize finding practical solutions to release the vehicular emissions or develop effective methods for managing these emissions.
Résultat de l'Évaluation
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.0
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 3.5
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. 预估分数
24. 3 任务完成度
在文章中,你对教授提出的问题表达了自己的观点,并对讨论做出了贡献。但是,你的观点需要更多的细节和例子来支持。此外,你可以尝试使用更多的连接词来使文章更连贯。为了提高文章质量,建议在表达观点时给出更具体的理由和例子。
示例1: Instead of "raising taxes on car fuels means placing financial burdens on the public," you could write, "raising taxes on car fuels would place a significant financial burden on low-income families who rely heavily on their cars for transportation."
示例2: Instead of "it is imperative that we prioritize finding practical solutions to release the vehicular emissions," you could write, "it is crucial to prioritize the development of alternative transportation options, such as electric vehicles or improved public transportation systems, to reduce vehicular emissions."
4. 文章结构与组织
文章结构方面,你已经包含了引言、主体和结论。但是,在主体部分可以进一步完善段落结构,确保每个段落都集中讨论一个特定的观点,并提供支持细节。同时,在段落之间使用清晰的过渡词来增强连贯性。
示例1: 在主体部分,你可以添加一个段落来详细讨论可能的替代方案,如:“除了提高燃油税之外,政府还可以通过鼓励使用电动汽车和改善公共交通系统来减少空气污染。”
示例2: 在段落之间添加过渡词,如:“首先,提高燃油税意味着给公众带来负担。然而,在寻求解决方案时,我们还需要考虑其他可能的方法。”
5. 语法批改
The question whetherWhether(the question whether (whether) etc.) to raise taxes on car fuels is a complex one, influenced by many factors. From my perspective, I think this policy may have predominantly negative to society.
First, raising taxes on car fuels means placing financial burdens on the public, which will lead many financial problems and life problems to those low-income families. And there is too muchmany('much' + countable noun, e.g. 'much (many) children') uncertainties on the policy implementation. However, this policy would directly affect the economic and the life.
Overall, to effectively address environmental issues, it is imperative that we prioritize finding practical solutions to release the vehicular emissions or develop effective methods for managing these emissions.
Title: 6 Article Revision
The question of whether to raise taxes on car fuels is a multifaceted issue, influenced by numerous factors. In my opinion, implementing such a policy may have predominantly negative consequences for society.
Firstly, increasing taxes on car fuels would place additional financial burdens on the public, particularly affecting low-income families. These individuals may face significant financial and life challenges as a result of the increased cost of fuel. Moreover, there are many uncertainties surrounding the implementation and effectiveness of this policy, which could directly impact both the economy and people's lives.
Instead of focusing solely on raising fuel taxes, it is crucial that we prioritize finding practical solutions to reduce vehicular emissions or develop effective methods for managing these emissions. This approach would allow us to address environmental concerns without disproportionately burdening specific segments of society. (140 words)
Title: 7 Article Revision
The question of whether to raise taxes on car fuels is a complex one, influenced by many factors. From my perspective, I think believe this policy may have predominantly negative effects on society. [Changed "predominantly negative to society. society" to "predominantly negative effects on society" for clarity and natural tone.]
First, raising taxes on car fuels means placing additional financial burdens on the public, which will could lead many to financial problems and life problems to those challenges for low-income families. And there is too much [Revised "many financial problems and life problems" to "financial problems and life challenges" for better word choice.] There are also many uncertainties on surrounding the policy policy's implementation. However, this policy would directly affect both the economic economy and the life. people's lives. [Added "both" before "the economy and people's lives" for clarity.]
Overall, to effectively address environmental issues, it is imperative that we prioritize finding practical solutions to release the reduce vehicular emissions or develop effective methods for managing these emissions.emissions. [Changed "release the vehicular emissions" to "reduce vehicular emissions" for accuracy.]
8 思维导图
1. 引言
- 提高汽车燃料税的问题
- 主要负面影响
2. 负担增加
- 对公众的额外财务负担
- 对低收入家庭的影响
3. 政策不确定性
- 实施和有效性的不确定性
- 对经济和人们生活的影响
4. 替代方案
- 减少汽车排放的实际解决方案
- 管理排放的有效方法
5. 结论
- 解决环境问题而不给特定社会群体带来过多负担
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English definition | Simplified Chinese translation | Sample sentences |
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| multifaceted | ˌmʌltiˈfæsɪtɪd | adjective | having many different aspects or features | 多方面的 | The issue of raising taxes on car fuels is a multifaceted problem. |
| predominantly | prɪˈdɒmɪnəntli | adverb | mainly; for the most part | 主要地,大部分地 | Implementing such a policy may have predominantly negative consequences for society. |
| burden | ˈbɜːdn | noun | a heavy load, especially a mental or emotional one | 负担 | Increasing taxes on car fuels would place an additional financial burden on the public. |
| uncertainties | ʌnˈsɜːtəntiz | noun | doubts; things that are uncertain | 不确定性 | There are many uncertainties surrounding the implementation and effectiveness of this policy. |
| prioritize | praɪˈɒrɪtaɪz | verb | to arrange in order of importance | 优先考虑 | We must prioritize finding practical solutions to reduce vehicular emissions. |
| emissions | ɪˈmɪʃənz | noun | substances discharged into the air (as by a smokestack or an automobile engine) | 排放物 | This approach would allow us to address environmental concerns without disproportionately burdening specific segments of society. |
| disproportionately | /dɪsproʊˈpɔrʃənətli/ | adverb | to an extent that is not appropriate; excessively | 不成比例地 | Increasing taxes on car fuels would disproportionately affect low-income families. |
| practical | /ˈpræktɪkəl/ | adjective | concerned with actual use or practice; useful, sensible | 实际的,实用的 | Raising fuel taxes is not a practical solution to reducing vehicular emissions. |
| segments | /ˈsɛgmənts/ | noun | parts into which something can be divided or sections; groups | 部分,群体 | This policy would burden specific segments of society, such as low-income families. |
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In my view, Rory's argument that customers should not bear the burden of addressing air pollution is more persuasive. Imposing higher taxes on flight ...
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In my view, Rory's argument that customers should not bear the burden of addressing air pollution is more persuasive. Imposing higher taxes on flight tickets alone would not effectively address the issue, as individual consumers have limited influence compared to airlines, which possess significant wealth and resources to make impactful decisions. Consequently, airlines should bear greater responsibility for environmental concerns. Governments should enforce stringent policies on airline companies regarding environmental preservation efforts. For instance, each airline's business management department should strive to cultivate an eco-friendly image for their company. This could be achieved by adopting recyclable dining products such as forks and plates or allocating a portion of their profits to support environmental organizations like the United Nations.
Résultat de l'Évaluation
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.5
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.5
2. 预估分数
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3. 任务完成度
这篇文章在任务完成度方面表现较好,成功回答了教授的问题并表达了自己的观点。但是,为了进一步提高文章质量,建议在论述中加入更多具体的例子和细节来支持观点。此外,可以尝试使用更多的连接 词和短语来使文章更连贯。
示例1:在讨论航空公司应承担环保责任时,可以举例说明政府如何通过政策推动航空公司减少碳排放。 示例2:在提到航空公司采用环保措施时,可以具体介绍一些技术创新或替代燃料的使用。
4. 文章结构与组织
文章结构方面基本合理,包括引言、正文和结论。然而,在正文部分可以进一步优化段落结构,使每个段落更专注于一个特定观点及其支持细节。同时,在段落之间添加清晰的过渡词或短语以增强连贯性。
建议1:在正文部分,可以将讨论航空公司应承担环保责任的观点和具体建议分为两个段落。 示例:首先,政府应强制航空公司采取更多环保措施。其次,航空公司可以通过投资可持续技术和支持环保组织来提高其环保形象。
建议2:在段落之间添加过渡词或短语,如“此外”、“然而”等。 示例:然而,我认为罗里的观点更有说服力,因为消费者相对于航空公司在解决空气污染问题上的影响力有限。
5. 语法批改
In my view, Rory's argument that customers should not bear the burden of addressing air pollution is more persuasive. Imposing higher taxes on flight tickets alone would not effectively address the issue, as individual consumers have limited influence compared to airlines, which possess significant wealth and resources to make impactful decisions. Consequently, airlines should bear greater responsibility for environmental concerns. Governments should enforce stringent policies on airline companies regarding environmental preservation efforts. For instance, each airline's business management department should strive to cultivate an eco-friendly image for their company. This could be achieved by adopting recyclable dining products such as forks and platesplates,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) or allocating a portion of their profits to support environmental organizations like the United Nations.
Section Title: 6 Article Revision
In response to the question posed by Doctor Smith, I concur with Rory's stance that customers should not be held primarily responsible for addressing air pollution. Imposing environmental taxes on flight tickets alone would not effectively tackle the issue, as individual consumers possess limited influence compared to airlines, which wield substantial wealth and resources to make impactful decisions. As a result, airlines should assume greater responsibility for mitigating environmental concerns. Governments ought to enforce stringent policies compelling airline companies to prioritize environmental preservation efforts. For example, each airline's business management department could endeavor to establish an eco-friendly image for their company by adopting recyclable dining products such as forks and plates or allocating a portion of their profits to support environmental organizations like the United Nations. (131 words)
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8 思维导图
- 主题: 航空公司应对空气 污染负更大责任
- 客户影响有限
- 环境税对个人消费者的影响
- 航空公司的责任
- 财富和资源
- 影响力和决策能力
- 政府政策和监管
- 强制性环保措施
- 支持环保组织和项目
- 航空公司的环保举措
- 可回收餐具使用
- 利润分配支持环保事业
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
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| concur | /kənˈkɜr/ | verb | to agree | 同意 | I concur with Rory's stance on the issue. |
| environmental taxes | /ɛnˌvaɪrənˈmɛntl tæks/ | noun | taxes imposed to address environmental issues | 环境税 | Imposing environmental taxes on flight tickets would not effectively tackle the issue. |
| influence | /ˈɪnfluəns/ | noun | the capacity to have an effect on something or someone | 影响力 | Individual consumers possess limited influence compared to airlines. |
| resources | /rɪˈsɔrs, -ˈzɔrs/ | noun | a stock or supply of materials or assets | 资源 | Airlines wield substantial wealth and resources to make impactful decisions. |
| mitigation | /ˌmɪtɪˈgeɪʃən/ | noun | the action of reducing the severity of something | 减轻,缓和 | Airlines should assume greater responsibility for mitigating environmental concerns. |
| stringent | /ˈstrɪndʒənt/ | adjective | strict, precise, and exacting | 严格的 | Governments ought to enforce stringent policies compelling airline companies to prioritize environmental preservation efforts. |
| eco-friendly | /ˌikoʊˈfrɛndli/ | adjective | not harmful to the environment | 环保的 | Each airline's business management department could establish an eco-friendly image for their company. |
| recyclable | /riːˈsaɪk(ə)ləb(ə)l/ | adjective | able to be processed and used again | 可回收的 | The airline could adopt recyclable dining products such as forks and plates. |
| allocation | /ælə'keiʃən/ | noun | _ | the process of distributing something_ | 分配 |
Comment la Discussion Académique est Évaluée
La tâche TOEFL Discussion Académique est évaluée selon le barème officiel de l'ETS. L'évaluation par IA analyse chaque réponse selon plusieurs dimensions.
Pertinence et Contribution
La réponse traite-t-elle la question et contribue-t-elle de façon pertinente à la discussion ?
Utilisation de la Langue
Précision grammaticale, richesse du vocabulaire et qualité de la structure des phrases.
Développement et Argumentation
Les idées sont-elles bien développées avec des exemples précis et un raisonnement clair ?
Tendances Communes dans les Réponses
D'après l'analyse des réponses soumises par les utilisateurs pour cette tâche, voici les tendances courantes observées dans les réponses des étudiants.
De nombreux étudiants expriment des opinions claires mais manquent d'exemples précis à l'appui.
Les réponses solides font directement référence au texte de lecture et aux points de vue des autres participants.
Les réponses les mieux notées utilisent des structures de phrases variées et un vocabulaire académique.
La gestion du temps est un facteur clé — les réponses qui semblent précipitées ont tendance à obtenir un score plus faible en développement.
Conseils d'Apprentissage
Lisez attentivement la consigne et identifiez toutes les parties de la question avant d'écrire.
Faites référence au texte de lecture et aux opinions des autres étudiants dans votre réponse.
Utilisez des exemples précis pour appuyer votre idée principale — évitez les affirmations génériques.
Visez 120 à 150 mots. Une réponse plus longue n'est pas toujours meilleure ; la clarté et la précision comptent davantage.
Entraînez-vous à répondre en temps limité (10 minutes) pour gagner en aisance dans les conditions de l'examen.
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