TOEFL TPO 73 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the letter writer's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本清晰，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更流畅、自然的语言表达，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意发音准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和连接词方面还有待加强。建议在回答中使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇，使得回答更加连贯和有条理。同时，在提供理由时可以尝试给出更具体的例子或细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

The woman disagrees with the proposal to invite Jay's band to play concerts on campus. The woman disagrees with the proposal to invite the jazz band to play concerts on campus.（将“Jay's band”改为“the jazz band”，以保持与原文一致。）

She gives two reasons for supporting this opinion. She provides two reasons for her opinion.（将“支持这个观点”改为“她的观点”，使表达更自然。）

First, the woman changes the student's proposal that the concerts should take place in the afternoon. First, the woman challenges the suggestion that the concerts should take place in the afternoon.（将“changes”改为“challenges”，以表示女士对提议的质疑。）

According to her, this is a problem. It's not a bad time. According to her, this is problematic because it is not an ideal time.（将“这是一个问题。这不是一个坏时间。”改为“这是有问题的，因为这不是一个理想的时间。”，使表达更自然。）

In fact, students don't have time during the day due to their other commitments like studying and reading. In fact, students are busy during the day with their other commitments, such as studying and reading.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

The concerts will be noisy. The concerts would create noise.（将“音乐会会很吵。”改为“音乐会会产生噪音。”，使表达更自然。）

Evening is a better time and students can get relaxed. The evening would be a better time, allowing students to relax.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

Second, according to the woman, indoors is a better choice. Second, the woman believes that an indoor venue would be a better choice.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

The open law area looks nice now, but the situation will change. The open lawn area looks nice now, but that could change.（将“law”改为“lawn”，以保持与原文一致。将“情况会改变”改为“那可能会改变”，使表达更自然。）

If there are people working there, they will get crowded. If people gather there, it would become crowded.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

The grass will be trampled and died. The grass would be trampled and die.（将“将被践踏和死亡”改为“将被践踏并死去”，使表达更自然。）

The lawn will get into mud. The lawn would turn into mud.（将“草坪会变成泥巴。”改为“草坪会变成泥巴。”，使表达更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The woman disagrees with the proposal to invite the jazz band to play concerts on campus. She provides two reasons for her opinion. First, the woman challenges the suggestion that the concerts should take place in the afternoon. According to her, this is problematic because it is not an ideal time. In fact, students are busy during the day with their other commitments, such as studying and reading. The concerts would create noise. The evening would be a better time, allowing students to relax. Second, the woman believes that an indoor venue would be a better choice. The open lawn area looks nice

6.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - Jazz band concerts on campus

- Reasons
  - Afternoon concerts
    - Problematic
    - Not an ideal time
    - Students busy with commitments
  - Indoor venue
    - Better choice
    - Open lawn area issues
      - Crowded
      - Grass trampled and dying
      - Turning into mud

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 2.5 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，你的回答流利度和语速还算不错，但是在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。为了提高发音准确性，请注意纠正发音错误。同时，尝试减少不恰当的停顿，让你的回答更加流畅。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, your response does mention the woman's opinion and some reasons she gives for holding that opinion, but it could be more coherent and well-organized. Make sure to clearly summarize the proposal first, then state the woman's opinion, and finally explain her reasons in a logical order. Also, try to provide more accurate details from the listening passage to support your response. For example, mention that the woman thinks the concerts would be distracting for students studying in the afternoon and that having concerts on the lawn could damage the grass due to people walking on it.

5.语言使用

Original: The woman expresses her opinion against the writer's proposal. The woman disagrees with the writer's proposal. (原句表达较为复杂，修改后更简洁明了) Firstly, the writer's proposal is to hold the concert in the afternoon, because they think that in the afternoon, students do not have classes. First, the writer suggests holding concerts in the afternoon when students are free from classes. (修改后的句子结构更清晰，表达更准确) But the woman thinks that in the afternoon, students really want to sit around to read and study, just to have a quiet environment. However, the woman believes that students prefer a quiet environment for studying and reading during this time. (修改后的句子更简洁，语法更准确) And maybe in the evening it's better, because students can relax after a long day of work. She suggests that evening concerts might be more suitable as students can unwind after a long day. (修改后的句子结构和表达更自然) And secondly, the writer thinks that there are many people in the open lawn, and it's good to have open concerts. Second, the writer believes that the open lawn is an ideal location for concerts due to its popularity. (修改后的句子更简洁，表达更准确) But the woman thinks that some people are nice, but some people may be angry, because they do not want to listen to the concerts in the open lawn. However, the woman argues that not everyone might appreciate outdoor concerts, as they may have other preferences. (修改后的句子更简洁，语法更准确) They want to do other things. People might prefer engaging in different activities. (修改后的表达更自然)

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman disagrees with the writer's proposal. First, the writer suggests holding concerts in the afternoon when students are free from classes. However, the woman believes that students prefer a quiet environment for studying and reading during this time. She suggests that evening concerts might be more suitable as students can unwind after a long day. Second, the writer believes that the open lawn is an ideal location for concerts due to its popularity. However, the woman argues that not everyone might appreciate outdoor concerts, as they may have other preferences. People might prefer engaging in different activities.

6.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - Afternoon concerts
    - Quiet environment for studying
    - Evening concerts (alternative)
  - Open lawn location
    - Popularity
    - Different preferences
    - Engaging in other activities

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details and elaborating on the reasons given by the woman in the conversation. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice expanding on their ideas and providing more in-depth explanations to better support their points.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: A student proposed a free concert on the lawn near the student center for students to relax and enjoy themselves, but the woman disagreed with the idea because she thinks it's not the best time in the afternoon to give the concert because it will be distracting and the student cannot focus themselves on studying and reading. A student proposed a free concert on the lawn near the student center for students to unwind and enjoy themselves. However, the woman disagreed with this idea, arguing that an afternoon concert would not be ideal as it would distract students from their studies and reading. (Changed repetitive phrases and improved sentence structure)

If it's in the evening, it will be better for students to relax themselves from the studying. An evening concert might be more suitable, allowing students to unwind after a day of studying. (Improved sentence structure and word choice)

Second, the woman thinks it will be better if it is located indoors because a lot of audience will be crowded and will turn the glass land into mud. Additionally, she believes an indoor venue would be preferable to prevent overcrowding and protect the grassy area from turning into mud. (Improved sentence structure, vocabulary, and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): A student proposed a free concert on the lawn near the student center for students to unwind and enjoy themselves. However, the woman disagreed with this idea, arguing that an afternoon concert would not be ideal as it would distract students from their studies and reading. She suggested that an evening concert might be more suitable, allowing students to unwind after a day of studying. Additionally, she believes an indoor venue would be preferable to prevent overcrowding and protect the grassy area from turning into mud. By considering these factors, the university could create a more enjoyable and less disruptive event for the students while preserving the campus's appearance.

6. Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Free concert
  - Lawn near student center

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons
    - Afternoon distraction
    - Evening alternative
    - Indoor venue preference
      - Overcrowding prevention
      - Grassy area protection

7. Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中。但在某些地方，发言者需要注意适当的停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。此外，发言者在发音方面也需要留意一些单词的准确度。

4.话题发展 发言者对于问题的回答基本上是连贯和有条理的，但在某些地方可以进一步加强观点的支持和举例。例如，在谈到草坪可能被破坏时，可以提供更具体的解释或建议如何避免这种情况。同时，在提到学生可能会被音乐干扰时，可以给出更多关于学生活动和时间安排的细节。

5.语言使用

原文：A student recommends the university to invite Jess Bond to play some free concerts or campers in the afternoon at the open lawn near the area near the student center. A student recommends that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts on campus in the afternoon, at the open lawn near the student center.（将"Jess Bond"改为"a jazz band"，将"or campers"改为"on campus"，调整句子结构以使其更自然。）

The woman thinks it is a great idea, but however, she disagrees with the time and location. The woman appreciates the idea but disagrees with the proposed time and location.（删除“but however”中的一个词，使句子更简洁。）

Many students don't have time to sit and relax in the afternoon because they may have classes or study schedule, so it is distracting. Many students don't have time to sit and relax in the afternoon due to their classes or study schedules, making it distracting.（将“study schedule”改为“study schedules”，调整句子结构以使其更自然。）

She thinks evening is good because students can relax after a whole day of study. She believes evenings would be better as students can unwind after a full day of studying.（使用更高级的词汇，如“unwind”和“full day”。）

And if it is held at a lawn, many audience will walk over there and the crowded audience will make the grass die and the area will turn to mud. Additionally, if held on the lawn, many people would walk over it, causing the grass to die and the area to turn into mud due to the large crowd.（调整句子结构以使其更自然，使用更高级的词汇，如“large crowd”。）

修订版（140字）：

A student recommends that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts on campus in the afternoon, at the open lawn near the student center. The woman appreciates the idea but disagrees with the proposed time and location. Many students don't have time to sit and relax in the afternoon due to their classes or study schedules, making it distracting. She believes evenings would be better as students can unwind after a full day of studying. Additionally, if held on the lawn, many people would walk over it, causing the grass to die and the area to turn into mud due to the large crowd.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Jazz band
  • Free concerts
  • Afternoon
  • Open lawn near student center

• Woman's opinion

  • Appreciates idea
  • Disagrees with time and location

• Reasons for disagreement

  • Afternoon distractions
    • Classes and study schedules
  • Evening alternative
    • Unwind after full day of studying
  • Lawn concerns
    • Grass damage and mud

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses and minor pronunciation issues. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace and work on refining their pronunciation of certain words. Additionally, focusing on proper punctuation will help with the flow of speech.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, but there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific examples and support for the points made. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on their ideas and connecting them more clearly to the reading and listening passages. This will help create a more comprehensive response that fully addresses the question.

5.Language Use

The reading is about suggesting a jazz band to have a free contest concert (corrected word for clarity) in the university, believing that can help it can help (added "it" for proper grammar) the students to have their free time and the lawn is the new build newly built (corrected phrase for proper grammar), so it can provide a better place for them to play. However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with the idea. Firstly, she thinks that it is not the best time, because students have really struggled struggle (corrected verb tense) with their studies or readings and in the classroom, so they will be easily distracted from the noises and play from the playground concert area (changed term for clarity). Maybe the evening will be better because they can have a relax after a long day studying. Secondly, the woman suggests that it can play indoors will be changed fast, because the lawn is new build and all people are walking around, so the grass will get tremble and will get some mud. That will be not good for the quality of the lawn.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading suggests that a jazz band should hold a free concert at the university, believing it can help students enjoy their free time and that the newly built lawn can provide an ideal location. However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she believes it's not the best time, as students struggle with their studies and would be easily distracted by noise from the concert area. She suggests that evenings might be better for relaxation after a long day of studying. Secondly, the woman proposes holding the concert indoors to prevent damage to the lawn, as people walking around could trample the grass and turn it into mud, which would be detrimental to the lawn's quality.

6.Mind Map

- Reading
  - Jazz band
  - Free concert
  - University
  - Lawn area

- Conversation
  - Woman's disagreement
    - Timing issue
      - Distraction for students
      - Evening alternative
    - Location issue
      - Lawn damage
      - Indoor alternative

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of reading suggestion
  - Woman's opinion and reasons
    - Timing and distraction concerns
    - Lawn preservation and indoor proposal

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，这位考生的发言相对清晰，语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。建议考生在练习时注意提高语言流利度，减少不必要的停顿，并注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, summarizing the proposal and stating the woman's opinion about it. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific examples or details from the listening passage to support the woman's opinion. Additionally, the speaker should work on making clearer connections between ideas to enhance the overall coherence of the response.

5.语言使用

Original: In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with it because there are some problems. First, the woman said the best time should not be in the afternoon because the students will be reading and studying in the afternoon and it's really distracting if there is music. But she thinks that evening would be a good time. Second, the concert should be indoor because the lawn is a great area but if there are more and more students hanging out there, the grass will die and finally that place will turn into mud so the environment will get worse. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with this letter.

Corrected: In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with it the proposal because there are some problems. First, the woman said she mentions that the best time should not be in having concerts during the afternoon because is not ideal as students will be reading and studying,; it's really distracting if there is music. But she thinks that evening would be a good time. Second, the concert should be indoor an indoor venue would be better for concerts, because although,; the lawn is a great area,; if there are more and more students hanging out there, the grass will die and eventually,; that place will turn into mud,; so the environment will get worse. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with this letter.

(将“it”改为“the proposal”，使句子更清晰。将“the woman said”改为“she mentions”，使语言更自然。将“the best time should not be in”改为“having concerts during”，使句子更简洁。将“because”改为“is not ideal as”，使句子更连贯。在逗号处添加分号，使句子结构更清晰。将“the concert should be indoor”改为“an indoor venue would be better for concerts,”，使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with the proposal due to several concerns. Firstly, she mentions that having concerts during the afternoon is not ideal as students will be reading and studying; it would be really distracting if there is music playing. Instead, she believes that evenings would be a more suitable time for such events. Secondly, she argues that an indoor venue would be better for concerts; although the lawn is a great area, if more students start hanging out there, the grass will eventually die and turn into mud, resulting in a deteriorated environment. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with the letter's proposal for these reasons.

6.思维导图

- Letter Proposal
  - Jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Afternoon

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Concerns
    - Afternoon concerts: distracting for studying students
    - Evening concerts: more suitable
    - Indoor venue: better for concerts
      - Lawn area issues:
        - Grass damage
        - Environmental deterioration

- Conclusion
  - Woman disagrees with letter's proposal due to concerns

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 25

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。建议练习一些发音技巧，以便在发音时更加自然流畅。此外，注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有条理的，但可以在某些方面进行改进。例如，在提到女士反对提议的原因时，可以更详细地解释她的观点。此外，在总结时，可以更明确地指出女士对提议的看法。通过这些改进，回答将更加完整和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite the jazz band to hold the free concerts because students need relaxation between classes and, since the lawn is improved, it is the perfect location to hold the concerts. In the letter, the student proposes that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts as a means of relaxation for students between classes. Furthermore, with recent improvements to the lawn area, it serves as an ideal location for these concerts.（将句子结构进行了优化，使其更自然流畅。同时，对一些词汇进行了替换，以提高语言的表达水平。）

The woman in the conversation opposes this change for several reasons. The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal due to several concerns.（使用了更准确的词汇来描述女士的观点。）

Firstly, she believes that the noon is not the best time to hold the concerts because students normally do not have time to sit and relax, they are always filled with studying and reading, and the loud music can be distracting to them, Firstly, she argues that noon may not be an optimal time for concerts as students are usually preoccupied with studying and reading; thus, loud music could be distracting,（对句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。同时，对一些词汇进行了替换，以提高语言的表达水平。）

so she thinks that the evening is the best choice. so she suggests that evenings would be a better option.（使用了更自然的表达方式。）

Furthermore, she contends that the concerts should be held indoor because too many individuals outside can hurt the lawn. Furthermore, she maintains that holding the concerts indoors would be preferable to prevent damage to the lawn caused by excessive foot traffic.（对句子结构进行了优化，使其更自然流畅。同时，对一些词汇进行了替换，以提高语言的表达水平。）

Imagine there were audiences from all over and crowded together to watch the show, the grass on the lawn will eventually die because of that. Envision a large audience gathering and crowding together for a performance; this would inevitably lead to the grass on the lawn dying due to trampling.（对句子结构进行了优化，使其更自然流畅。同时，对一些词汇进行了替换，以提高语言的表达水平。）

修订版（140字）：

In the letter, the student proposes that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts as a means of relaxation for students between classes. Furthermore, with recent improvements to the lawn area, it serves as an ideal location for these concerts. The woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal due to several concerns. Firstly, she argues that noon may not be an optimal time for concerts as students are usually preoccupied with studying and reading; thus, loud music could be distracting, so she suggests that evenings would be a better option. Furthermore, she maintains that holding the concerts indoors would be preferable to prevent damage to the lawn caused by excessive foot traffic. Envision a large audience gathering and crowding together for a performance; this would inevitably lead to the grass on the lawn dying due to trampling.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Invite jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Relaxation for students
  - Improved lawn area

- Woman's concerns
  - Noon not optimal time
    - Students preoccupied with studying
    - Loud music distracting
  - Suggestion: Evening concerts
  - Indoor concerts preferable
    - Prevent damage to lawn
    - Excessive foot traffic
    - Grass dying due to trampling

7.关键词