TOEFL TPO 75 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example of the lecture illustrates the technique of behavioral exposure.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰的，但在语音和语调方面还有一些不足。建议同学在发音和语调上多加练习，以提高口语的流利度和自然度。同时，在回答问题时，注意适当的停顿和强调关键词。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是符合题目要求的。但在组织结构和论证方面还有一些不足。建议同学在回答问题时，先简要概括阅读材料中的观点，然后详细描述听力材料中的例子，并明确指出这个例子如何说明阅读材料中的观点。此外，在使用连接词和过渡词时要更加自然，以提高回答的连贯性和条理性。

5.语言使用

Original: Behavioral exposure is the definition mentioned in the reading, which is one technique that can encourage children to perform gradually increasing amounts of the feared behavior. In the lecture, the professor used his own children as an example to explain it. You know, when his son was 18 years old, they moved to a new place. At first, his son was very afraid to talk to their neighbors. And at one night, the professor encouraged his son to say hi to a group of kids, but his son was very reluctant. And then on the way back to their homes, the professor encouraged his son to say nice about their back. And when they reached the homes, their son just went outside by bicycle. And at the end of the night, his son made several new friends. So therefore, there is one example.

Corrected: Behavioral exposure is the definition mentioned in the reading The reading passage introduces behavioral exposure (将原句改为更自然的表达方式), which is one technique that can encourage children to perform gradually increasing amounts of the feared behavior. In the lecture, the professor used his own children child (原文只提到了一个孩子) as an example to explain it. You know, when his son was 18 8 (听力原文中提到的是8岁) years old, they moved to a new place. At first, his son was very afraid to talk to their neighbors. And at one night, the professor encouraged his son to say hi to a group of kids, but his son was very reluctant. And then on the way back to their homes home (家应该是单数), the professor encouraged his son to say nice about their back something nice about their bikes (原句意思不清，应该是关于孩子们的自行车说些好话). And when they reached the home, their son just went outside by bicycle. And at the end of the night, his son made several new friends. So therefore, there is one example.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage introduces behavioral exposure, a technique that encourages children to gradually perform more of a feared behavior. In the lecture, the professor used his own child as an example to explain this concept. When his son was 8 years old, they moved to a new place where the boy was initially afraid to talk to their neighbors. One night, the professor encouraged his son to greet a group of kids; although reluctant, he did so. On their way back home, the professor urged his son to compliment the kids' bikes. After returning home, the boy went outside to ride his bicycle and eventually made several new friends by the end of the night. This example effectively illustrates how behavioral exposure can help children overcome their fears.

6.思维导图

- Behavioral Exposure
    - Technique
        - Gradually perform more of a feared behavior
    - Lecture Example
        - Professor's son
            - 8 years old
            - Moved to a new place
            - Afraid to talk to neighbors
        - Encouragement
            - Greet kids
            - Compliment bikes
        - Result
            - Overcame fear
            - Made new friends

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 2.5 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that need improvement. For example, the speaker should work on pronouncing words more accurately and using appropriate pauses to make the speech sound more natural.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there are some inaccuracies in the content, such as mentioning the son's age as 16 instead of 8. To improve topic development, the speaker should pay closer attention to the details provided in the lecture and ensure that all information is accurate and relevant to the main idea of behavioral exposure.

5.Language Use

Original: The reading passage introduces the concept of behavioral exposure, which means a technique which helps children overcome problems they are afraid to encounter in a certain behavior. In a lecture, the professor illustrated this concept by his own son's experiences. His son is 16 years old. They moved to Los Angeles and one Saturday, his son really wanted to ride outside and play with the kids. But he hesitated to do so. The professor encouraged him to say hi and the son got a friendly hi back. On their way back, the professor encouraged the son again to say something about the bag. The son agreed with it and the children in the community also showed the son how fast the bag is. After this, the son can always automatically go outside and ride with their friend.

Corrected: The reading passage introduces the concept of behavioral exposure behavioral exposure, (added comma for clarity) which means a technique which that (replaced "which" with "that" for better flow) helps children overcome problems they are afraid to encounter in a certain behavior. In a lecture, the professor illustrated this concept by his own son's experiences. His son is 16 8 (corrected age) years old. They moved to Los Angeles and one Saturday, his son really wanted to ride outside and play with the kids. But he hesitated to do so. The professor encouraged him to say hi and the son got a friendly hi back. On their way back, the professor encouraged the son again to say something about the bag bike (corrected word). The son agreed with it and the children in the community also showed the son how fast the bag bike (corrected word) is. After this, the son can always automatically go outside and ride with their friend friends. (corrected word)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage introduces the concept of behavioral exposure, a technique that helps children overcome fears related to certain behaviors. In a lecture, the professor illustrated this concept using his 8-year-old son's experiences. They moved to Los Angeles, and one Saturday, his son wanted to ride his bike and play with other kids but hesitated. The professor encouraged him to say hi, and his son received a friendly response. On their way back, the professor encouraged his son to compliment a child's bike. The son did so, and the children showed him how fast their bikes were. After this experience, the son felt comfortable going outside and riding with his new friends. This example demonstrates how behavioral exposure can help children overcome their fears by gradually increasing their exposure to challenging situations.

6.Mind Map

- Behavioral Exposure
  - Technique
    - Overcome fears
      - Certain behaviors

- Lecture Example
  - Professor's son
    - 8 years old
    - Moved to Los Angeles
    - Hesitated to play with kids
  - Gradual exposure
    - Saying hi
    - Complimenting bike
  - Outcome
    - Son comfortable playing with friends

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 语言使用：2.5

• 话题发展：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的语言表达较为流畅，但在某些地方存在一些不太自然的停顿。建议在练习时注意语速的控制，避免过多的停顿。此外，部分单词发音不准确，需要加强发音练习。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了阅读和听力材料中的关键信息，但在表述过程中有些地方略显混乱。建议在组织回答时，先梳理好思路，将关键信息按照逻辑顺序进行陈述，并适当加入一些连接词以增强连贯性。

5.语言使用

Original: According to the reading passage, behavior exposure means that a kind of technique that can help children overcome this kind of fear. The professor sends his son, for example. His son are ready to a new neighborhood, which are not his friend, so he are always very afraid of them. Then his father want to go out and with him to buy an ice cream from store. So he pass them and say hi. And next, he can be more confident to say something with the kids. As a result, he make a friend from his new neighborhood.

Corrected: According to the reading passage, behavior exposure behavioral exposure (修改为正确的词汇) is a technique that can help children overcome their fear. The professor gives an example of his son who are ready moves (修改为正确的动词形式) to a new neighborhood where he doesn't have any friends, so he is always very afraid of them. Then his father want wants (修改为正确的动词形式) to go out with him to buy ice cream from the store. So they pass by the kids and say hi. After that, he becomes more confident in talking with the kids. As a result, he makes friends in his new neighborhood.

Revised (140 words): According to the reading passage, behavioral exposure is a technique that can help children overcome their fear by gradually increasing their exposure to the feared behavior. The professor gives an example of his son who moves to a new neighborhood where he doesn't have any friends, making him feel afraid. To help his son, the father decides to go out with him to buy ice cream from the store, passing by the kids and saying hi. This initial interaction helps the son gain confidence in talking with the kids. As they continue their walk, the father encourages his son to compliment the kids on their bikes, further increasing his confidence. As a result of this gradual exposure to social interactions, the son is able to overcome his fear and make friends in his new neighborhood, illustrating the effectiveness of behavioral exposure.

6.思维导图

• Behavioral Exposure

  • Technique
  • Overcome fear

• Professor's Example

  • Son moves to new neighborhood
  • No friends, feels afraid

• Father's Strategy

  • Buy ice cream, pass by kids
  • Say hi, gain confidence

• Gradual Exposure

  • Compliment kids on bikes
  • Increase confidence

• Result

  • Overcome fear
  • Make friends in new neighborhood

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 2

2.预估分数

15. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答有一些语法错误和不清晰的表述。例如，“the man suggested that Tommy can walk down the street and buy an ice cream”应该是“the man suggested that Tommy could walk down the street and buy an ice cream”。此外，回答中有一些重复的内容，如“when they return home, Tommy say hi back to Tommy”。建议在练习时注意语法正确性和清晰表达。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答没有充分说明行为暴露技术如何在这个例子中起作用。虽然回答提到了汤米和邻居孩子的互动，但没有明确指出这是通过逐步增加汤米面对恐惧行为的次数来帮助他克服恐惧。建议在回答时更详细地解释行为暴露技术如何在这个例子中应用，并提供更多支持和例子。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The man take his own son Tommy as an example to illustrate the technique of behavioral exposure. When they moved to Los Angeles, his son Tommy wants to talk to their neighborhood's children but he is afraid of not being accepted and the man suggested that Tommy can walk down the street and buy an ice cream. They both walk by the neighborhood's door and the man suggested his son to say hi to the neighbor and when Tommy say hi to his neighbor, his neighbor just say hi back to Tommy and Tommy feel more confident when they return home and when they return home, Tommy say hi back to Tommy.

Corrected Answer: The man take took(把“take”改成过去时“took”) his own son Tommy as an example to illustrate the technique of behavioral exposure. When they moved to Los Angeles, his son Tommy wants wanted(把“wants”改成过去时“wanted”) to talk to their neighborhood's children but he is was(把“is”改成过去时“was”) afraid of not being accepted and the man suggested that Tommy can could(把“can”改成过去时“could”) walk down the street and buy an ice cream. They both walk walked(把“walk”改成过去时“walked”) by the neighborhood's door and the man suggested his son to say hi to the neighbor, .(把逗号改成句号) When Tommy say said(把“say”改成过去时“said”) hi to his neighbor, his neighbor just say said(把“say”改成过去时“said”) hi back to Tommy and Tommy feel felt(把“feel”改成过去时“felt”) more confident when they returned home, .(把逗号改成句号) When they returned home, Tommy say said(把“say”改成过去时“said”) hi back to Tommy.

Revised Answer (140 words): The man took his own son Tommy as an example to illustrate the technique of behavioral exposure. When they moved to Los Angeles, Tommy wanted to talk to the neighborhood children but was afraid of not being accepted. The man suggested that Tommy could walk down the street and buy an ice cream. As they walked by the neighborhood's door, the man encouraged his son to say hi to the neighbor. When Tommy said hi, the neighbor responded warmly, making Tommy feel more confident. Upon returning home, Tommy felt even more at ease. This example demonstrates how behavioral exposure works by gradually increasing the amount of feared behavior and showing that negative outcomes are unlikely, ultimately helping individuals overcome their fears.

6.思维导图

- Behavioral Exposure
  - Tommy's example
    - Moved to Los Angeles
    - Fear of not being accepted
    - Father's suggestion
      - Walk and buy ice cream
      - Say hi to neighbors
    - Gradual exposure
      - Positive interactions
      - Increased confidence
  - Overcoming fear

7.关键词