TOEFL TPO 24 Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using the examples from the lecture, discuss two types of narrators that an author of fiction might use.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 2

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with pronunciation and word choice. For example, the speaker used "non-binary narrator" instead of "omniscient narrator." To improve delivery, the speaker should focus on using accurate terminology and practicing pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response provides a basic overview of the two types of narrators discussed in the lecture but lacks sufficient detail and examples to fully demonstrate understanding. The speaker should focus on providing more specific information about each type of narrator, such as how an objective narrator leaves questions for the reader to interpret, while an omniscient narrator provides more insight into characters' thoughts and feelings. Additionally, the speaker should work on organizing their response more coherently to ensure a clear connection between ideas.

5.Language Use

Original: According to the lecture, there are two types of narrators that an author of fiction might use. The first one is objective narrators. When the author use objective narrators, he intends the readers to integrate the meaning of what the main characters say and do. The readers have to think, and then they will understand what's happening in the story. And the second kind of narrator is non-binary narratoromniscient narrator(corrected for accurate terminology). If the author uses this kind of narrator, more information will be provided, and everything happens in the story will be in more detailed description.

Revised (140 words): In the lecture, two types of narrators are discussed that authors of fiction may employ in their works. The first type is an objective narrator. When an author utilizes an objective narrator, they intend for readers to infer meaning from the actions and dialogue of the main characters. Readers must actively engage with the text to comprehend the story's events. The second type of narrator is an omniscient narrator(corrected for accurate terminology). When an author employs an omniscient narrator, a more comprehensive understanding of the story is provided as this type of narration offers detailed descriptions of events and characters' thoughts. By choosing between these two narrative styles, authors can significantly impact how readers experience and interpret their stories.

6.Mind Map

• Types of narrators
  • Objective narrator
    • Infer meaning
    • Actions and dialogue
    • Reader engagement
  • Omniscient narrator
    • Comprehensive understanding
    • Detailed descriptions
    • Characters' thoughts

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 4

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some areas where the speech could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should focus on maintaining a natural rhythm and avoiding unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on their pronunciation to minimize any spelling errors that may arise from inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The speaker does an excellent job of developing the topic by discussing two types of narrators that an author of fiction might use. The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples provided from the lecture. The speaker effectively uses the examples of the man and woman taking a trip to illustrate the differences between an objective narrator and an omniscient narrator. No significant improvements are needed in this aspect of the response.

5.Language Use

The professor discusses how various narrators impact and affect a particular story, and each narrator can invoke strong feelings of emotional resonance in readers. First, the professor explains that an objective narrator provides limited information in a story to elicit unique feelings in readers. Consider a story about a man and a woman taking a trip. In this case, we can only observe their actions, such as sitting down, looking out the window, and talking with each other, thus only offering limited information about the story of two people gazing out the window. Because of the scarce amount of information that the writer provides, readers are left to use their own imagination to decipher information and interpret events. The second type is an omniscient narrator, which provides more information, including the character's thoughts. Using the same example of the man and woman, the author might reveal that the man is nervous because he hasn't seen his friend in a long time, and this prolonged separation from his friend is making him feel anxious. This additional insight allows readers to better understand and connect with the characters, as the author emphasizes with each person and their emotions.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The professor discusses how different narrators influence a story and evoke emotional responses in readers. Firstly, an objective narrator offers limited information, prompting readers to interpret events using their imagination. For instance, in a story about a couple taking a trip, we only observe their actions like sitting down or looking out the window. The scarcity of information encourages readers to fill in gaps themselves. Secondly, an omniscient narrator provides more details, including characters' thoughts. In the same example, we learn that the man feels nervous due to not seeing his friend for a long time. This extra insight helps readers better understand and connect with characters as it highlights each individual's emotions.

6.Mind Map

• Narrators
  • Objective narrator
    • Limited information
    • Readers' interpretation
    • Example: couple taking a trip
  • Omniscient narrator
    • More information
    • Characters' thoughts
    • Example: man's nervousness about meeting friend

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 语言使用：3

• 话题发展：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本清晰流畅，但在某些地方存在适当的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意掌握自然的语调和节奏，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，提到了两种叙述者类型，并给出了相应的例子。但在组织结构上可以有所改进，例如在介绍每种叙述者类型时使用更清晰的过渡词汇。此外，在举例时可以尝试提供更详细的信息以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The first type of narrator that an author of fiction might use is objective narrator. The first type of narrator an author of fiction might use is an objective narrator. (删除重复的“that”，添加“an”使语句更自然) This type of narrator is from the reader's point of view. This character only focuses on what the characters do and say in the story. This narrator only focuses on the actions and dialogue of the characters in the story. (修改表述以提高准确性和自然度) For example, a man and a woman travel in a train and they say to each other. The story is all about what they say and they sit down and look out of the window. The story revolves around their conversation, sitting down, and looking out the window. (改进句子结构，使其更清晰) This type of narrator cannot give interpretation on events. It is hard for the readers to decide what the saying and the action means. The second type of narrator is omniscient. From this type of narrator, the readers know everything about the story. Again, for example, they are traveling and the readers not only know what they say and do, but also they know what they are thinking. The man is nervous because he is going to see a friend who he hasn't seen for a long time. This type of narrator not only gives information, but only gives the actions of the characters.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The first type of narrator an author of fiction might use is an objective narrator. This narrator presents the story from the reader's perspective, focusing solely on the actions and dialogue of the characters. For instance, when a man and a woman travel on a train, the story revolves around their conversation, sitting down, and looking out the window. With this type of narration, readers must interpret events and determine the meaning behind the characters' actions and words. The second type of narrator is omniscient, providing readers with complete knowledge about the story. In this case, readers not only understand what the characters say and do but also their thoughts. For example, a man feels nervous about meeting a long-lost friend, and an omniscient narrator reveals his emotions alongside his actions, offering a more comprehensive view of the characters' experiences.

6.思维导图

- Objective Narrator
  - Reader's perspective
  - Actions and dialogue
  - Interpretation required

- Omniscient Narrator
  - Complete knowledge
  - Actions, dialogue, and thoughts
  - Comprehensive view

7.关键词