TOEFL TPO -1 Academic Discussion Writing Sample: Your professor is teaching a class on social studies. Write a post responding to the professor’s question.
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Professor
Today, we are going to talk about whether it has become easier to maintain good health than it was in the past. As the economy prospers and technologies evolve, more and more people have come to realize the importance of maintaining good health. Though people nowadays know and care more about health, the problem is, is it more challenging or easier for people to maintain good health today?
Student A
I think it has become easier for modern people to keep healthy. Thanks to economic growth, people have enjoyed higher incomes and thus higher living standards. Therefore, most people, compared to people in the past, have more money at their disposal to spend on healthier lifestyles. In other words, they can afford proper medical treatments while they are sick. Besides, they can eat in a more nutritious and balanced way.
Student B
Although I share Claire’s view that people have become wealthier, I still believe that it has become more challenging for people to maintain good health. Due to technological progress, life has become more convenient: people can do almost anything indoors with just a few taps or clicks. They can just order food and shop online, take online courses, and entertain themselves without heading out to do everything in person, unlike people in the past. As a result, people today exercise much less than ever before, and such laziness, inevitably, has considerably contributed to many more health problems today.
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User Sample
I think it become more easier for people to maintain good health today. As Claire says people today have more money at their disposal to spend on healthier lifestyle, for example, spend more money to buy exercise facilities or go to gym, which will contribute to maintain good health. Besides, technologies evolve also lead to easier access to health information and knowledge. Moreover, people today can easier monitor their health condition by using the technological items like apple watch, allowing you to know your heart beating speed and energy consume condition, which can not be possible for the people in the past. In short, people today can maintain good health easier compared to people in the past.
Evaluation Result
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. 预估分数
- 27
3. 任务完成度
这篇文章在任务完成方面做得不错，但仍有改进的空间。首先，你需要更详细地阐述你的观点，例如提供更多具体的例子来支持你的观点。此外，在表达观点时尽量使用更多的同义词和短语，以增加文章的语言丰富性。
示例1：在谈到健康信息和知识时，可以举例说明如何通过网络和移动应用程序获取有关健康饮食、锻炼方法等方面的信息。 示例2：在讨论经济增长对健康生活方式的影响时，可以提到人们现在可以负担得起更好的医疗保险和预防性护理。
4. 文章结构与组织
文章结构方面还有待加强。首先，在引言部分简要介绍文章主题，并提出自己的观点。接下来，在正文部分详细阐述并支持你的观点。最后，在结论部分总结文章要点，并重申自己的立场。同时，请注意在段落之间使用过渡词和短语，使文章更加连贯。
示例1：引言部分可以这样写：“在当今社会，我认为人们维持健康的难度已经降低。随着经济的发展和科技的进步，人们越来越重视健康，并拥有更多资源来实现健康生活。” 示例2：在正文部分，可以使用过渡词如“首先”、“其次”、“此外”等来组织观点和论据。例如：“首先，由于经济增长，人们的收入水平提高，从而能够投资于更健康的生活方式。”
5. 语法批改
I think it becomebecomes('it' + non-3rd person verb) more easiereasier(No 'more' or 'most' before comparatives) for people to maintain good health today. As Claire sayssays,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) people today have more money at their disposal to spend on healthier lifestyle, for example, spend more money to buy exercise facilities or go to gym, which will contribute to maintain good health. Besides, technologies evolve also lead to easier access to health information and knowledge. Moreover, people today can easier monitor their health condition by using the technological items like apple watchApple Watch(Apple product names), allowing you to know your heart beating speed and energy consume condition, which can not be possible for the people in the past. In short, people today can maintain good health easier compared to people in the past.
Section Title: 6 Article Revision
While I agree with Claire that people today have more financial resources to invest in a healthier lifestyle, I believe the ease of maintaining good health is a more complex issue. Although economic growth and technological advancements have indeed provided individuals with greater access to health information and resources, they have also contributed to increasingly sedentary lifestyles. The convenience of modern life has led many people to engage in less physical activity, which can negatively impact their overall health. However, it is essential to recognize that individuals have the choice to utilize technology and their financial means to prioritize their well-being. By consciously incorporating exercise and proper nutrition into their daily routines, people can overcome the challenges posed by contemporary lifestyles and maintain good health more easily than in the past. (136 words)
I think it has become more easier accessible (become more easier) for people to maintain good health today. As Claire says says, people today have more money at their disposal to spend on healthier lifestyle, lifestyles (healthier lifestyle), for example, spend spending (spend) more money to buy exercise facilities or go to gym, the gym (gym), which will contribute to maintain maintaining (maintain) good health. Besides, technological advancements (technologies evolve evolve) also lead to easier access to health information and knowledge. Moreover, people today can easier more easily (easier) monitor their health condition by using the technological items like the Apple Watch (apple watch, watch), allowing you to know your heart rate (heart beating speed speed) and energy consumption levels (energy consume condition, condition), which was not possible for people in the past (can not be possible for the people in the past. past). In short, people today can maintain good health easier more easily compared to people those in the past.
8 思维导图
1. Introduction
- Financial resources
- Healthier lifestyle
2. Economic growth and technological advancements
- Access to health information and resources
3. Sedentary lifestyles
- Convenience of modern life
- Less physical activity
4. Negative impact on overall health
5. Individual choice to prioritize well-being
- Utilize technology and financial means
6. Incorporating exercise and proper nutrition
7. Overcoming challenges posed by contemporary lifestyles
8. Conclusion: Maintaining good health more easily than in the past.
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English definition | Simplified Chinese translation | Sample sentences |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| sedentary | /ˈsɛdntˌɛri/ | adjective | (of a person) tending to spend much time seated; somewhat inactive | 久坐不动的 | The convenience of modern life has led many people to engage in sedentary lifestyles, which can negatively impact their overall health. |
| prioritize | /praɪˈɔrəˌtaɪz/ | verb | designate or treat (something) as more important than other things | 优先考虑 | Individuals have the choice to prioritize their well-being by utilizing technology and their financial means. |
| contemporary | /kənˈtɛmpəˌreri/ | adjective | living or occurring at the same time; belonging to or occurring in the present | 当代的 | People can overcome the challenges posed by contemporary lifestyles and maintain good health more easily than in the past. |
| nutrition | /nuˈtrɪʃən/ | noun | the process of providing or obtaining the food necessary for health and growth | 营养 | By consciously incorporating exercise and proper nutrition into their daily routines, people can maintain good health. |
| well-being | /ˌwɛlˈbiɪŋ/ | noun | the state of being comfortable, healthy, or happy | 健康幸福 | It is essential to recognize that individuals have the choice to utilize technology and their financial means to prioritize their well-being. |
| financial resources | /fəˈnænʃəl rɪˈsɔrsɪz/ | noun | money available to a person, organization, or country for spending | 财务资源 | People today have more financial resources to invest in a healthier lifestyle. |
| technological advancements | /tɛkˈnɒlədʒɪkəl ədˈvænsmənts/ | noun | progress or improvements made in technology | 技术进步 | Economic growth and technological advancements have provided individuals with greater access to health information and resources. |
| economic growth | /iˌkɒnəmik ˈgroʊθ/ | noun | an increase in the amount of goods and services produced per head of the population over a period of time | 经济增长 | - |
| overall health | /oʊvərˈol hɛlθ/ | noun | a general state of physical, mental, and emotional well-being | 整体健康 | The convenience of modern life can negatively impact overall health, but individuals can prioritize their well-being to maintain good health. |
How Academic Discussion Is Scored
The TOEFL Academic Discussion task is evaluated based on the official ETS scoring rubric. AI evaluation analyzes each response across multiple dimensions.
Relevance & Contribution
Does the response address the question and contribute meaningfully to the discussion?
Language Use
Grammar accuracy, vocabulary range, and sentence structure quality.
Development & Support
Are ideas well-developed with specific examples and clear reasoning?
Common Patterns Across Responses
Based on analysis of user submissions for this task, here are common patterns observed in student responses.
Many students provide clear opinions but lack specific supporting examples.
Strong responses directly reference the reading passage and other speakers' viewpoints.
Higher-scoring responses use varied sentence structures and academic vocabulary.
Time management is a key factor — responses that feel rushed tend to score lower on development.
Learning Tips
Read the prompt carefully and identify all parts of the question before writing.
Reference the reading passage and the other students' opinions in your response.
Use specific examples to support your main point — avoid generic statements.
Aim for 120-150 words. Longer responses are not always better; clarity and focus matter more.
Practice timed responses (10 minutes) to build fluency under exam conditions.
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