TOEFL TPO 75 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example of the lecture illustrates the technique of behavioral exposure.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰的，但在语音和语调方面还有一些不足。建议同学在发音和语调上多加练习，以提高口语的流利度和自然度。同时，在回答问题时，注意适当的停顿和强调关键词。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是符合题目要求的。但在组织结构和论证方面还有一些不足。建议同学在回答问题时，先简要概括阅读材料中的观点，然后详细描述听力材料中的例子，并明确指出这个例子如何说明阅读材料中的观点。此外，在使用连接词和过渡词时要更加自然，以提高回答的连贯性和条理性。

5.语言使用

Original: Behavioral exposure is the definition mentioned in the reading, which is one technique that can encourage children to perform gradually increasing amounts of the feared behavior. In the lecture, the professor used his own children as an example to explain it. You know, when his son was 18 years old, they moved to a new place. At first, his son was very afraid to talk to their neighbors. And at one night, the professor encouraged his son to say hi to a group of kids, but his son was very reluctant. And then on the way back to their homes, the professor encouraged his son to say nice about their back. And when they reached the homes, their son just went outside by bicycle. And at the end of the night, his son made several new friends. So therefore, there is one example.

Corrected: Behavioral exposure is the definition mentioned in the reading The reading passage introduces behavioral exposure (将原句改为更自然的表达方式), which is one technique that can encourage children to perform gradually increasing amounts of the feared behavior. In the lecture, the professor used his own children child (原文只提到了一个孩子) as an example to explain it. You know, when his son was 18 8 (听力原文中提到的是8岁) years old, they moved to a new place. At first, his son was very afraid to talk to their neighbors. And at one night, the professor encouraged his son to say hi to a group of kids, but his son was very reluctant. And then on the way back to their homes home (家应该是单数), the professor encouraged his son to say nice about their back something nice about their bikes (原句意思不清，应该是关于孩子们的自行车说些好话). And when they reached the home, their son just went outside by bicycle. And at the end of the night, his son made several new friends. So therefore, there is one example.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage introduces behavioral exposure, a technique that encourages children to gradually perform more of a feared behavior. In the lecture, the professor used his own child as an example to explain this concept. When his son was 8 years old, they moved to a new place where the boy was initially afraid to talk to their neighbors. One night, the professor encouraged his son to greet a group of kids; although reluctant, he did so. On their way back home, the professor urged his son to compliment the kids' bikes. After returning home, the boy went outside to ride his bicycle and eventually made several new friends by the end of the night. This example effectively illustrates how behavioral exposure can help children overcome their fears.

6.思维导图

- Behavioral Exposure
    - Technique
        - Gradually perform more of a feared behavior
    - Lecture Example
        - Professor's son
            - 8 years old
            - Moved to a new place
            - Afraid to talk to neighbors
        - Encouragement
            - Greet kids
            - Compliment bikes
        - Result
            - Overcame fear
            - Made new friends

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 4

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve by avoiding unnecessary repetition of words or phrases. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should focus on varying sentence structures and using more natural transitions between ideas.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The example from the lecture is accurately explained, and the concept of behavioral exposure is effectively illustrated. To further improve topic development, the speaker could consider adding more details from the lecture or providing additional examples to support their points.

5.Language Use

Original: Behavioral exposure is a technique where parents help their children to overcome a certain kind of fear by guiding them step by step to ease the anxiety. The professor gave a personal example in a lecture. So when he and his kids, Tommy, moved to a new neighborhood, Tommy was afraid of talking to the other kids because he's worried that he's not welcome there. So the professor took him out and encouraged him to say hi to those kids. When Tommy did so, those kids responded friendly. Later, when they met those kids again, the professor encouraged Tommy to say something nice about their bikes. Tommy did so, and those kids responded pretty nicely as well. After Tommy has exposed to his fear and overcame it, he actually voluntarily asked if he could play with those kids. And this is the example of behavioral exposure.

Corrected: Behavioral exposure is a technique where parents help their children overcome a certain kind of fears by guiding them step by step to ease anxiety. The professor provided a personal example in his lecture. When he and his son, Tommy, moved to a new neighborhood, Tommy was afraid of talking to the other children because he worried that he would not be welcome there. The professor took him out and encouraged him to greet the other children. When Tommy did so, they responded in a friendly mannerfriendly. Later, when they encountered the children again, the professor encouraged Tommy to compliment their bikes. Tommy did so, and the children reacted positivelypretty nicely as well. After being exposed to his fear and overcoming it, Tommy voluntarily asked if he could play with the other children. This example demonstrates behavioral exposure.

(Reasons and explanations: "a certain kind of" is unnecessary; "his kids" should be "his son"; "he's" should be "he would"; "say hi" should be "greet"; "responded friendly" should be "responded in a friendly manner"; "those kids" should be "the children"; "pretty nicely" should be "positively"; "has exposed" should be "being exposed")

Revised (140 words): Behavioral exposure is a technique where parents help their children overcome fears by guiding them step by step to ease anxiety. The professor provided a personal example in his lecture. When he and his son, Tommy, moved to a new neighborhood, Tommy was afraid of talking to the other children because he worried that he would not be welcome there. The professor took him out and encouraged him to greet the other children. When Tommy did so, they responded in a friendly manner. Later, when they encountered the children again, the professor encouraged Tommy to compliment their bikes. Tommy did so, and the children reacted positively as well. After being exposed to his fear and overcoming it, Tommy voluntarily asked if he could play with the other children. This example demonstrates behavioral exposure effectively and shows how gradual exposure can help individuals overcome their fears.

6.Mind Map

• Behavioral exposure

  • Technique
  • Overcome fears
  • Step by step guidance

• Professor's example

  • New neighborhood
  • Tommy's fear of talking to children
  • Gradual exposure
    • Greeting children
    • Complimenting bikes
  • Overcoming fear
    • Voluntarily asking to play

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 语言使用：3

• 话题发展：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本清晰，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但在某些地方可以进一步完善。例如，在描述教授如何鼓励汤米与邻居孩子交流时，可以更详细地说明教授是如何逐步增加汤米面对恐惧的行为。此外，在总结时可以更明确地指出这个例子如何说明行为暴露技术。建议在练习时注意提高回答的条理性和完整性。

5.语言使用

Original: The professor uses this example to talk about behavior exposure. The professor discusses behavioral exposure using this example. (将"behavior exposure"更正为"behavioral exposure"，使句子更自然。)

Original: It means to overcome the fear, children should be encouraged to perform behavior. This means that to overcome their fears, children should be encouraged to engage in the feared behavior. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: Take Tommy, the professor's son. Consider Tommy, the professor's son, as an example. (改进句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: He feared to talk to his new neighbor some children. He was afraid to talk to some children in his new neighborhood. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: So the professor did a lot of things. So the professor took several steps. (使用更高级的词汇。)

Original: Firstly, he encouraged Tommy to walk out. First, he encouraged Tommy to go outside. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: After that, he encouraged Tommy to say hi to the students. Next, he encouraged Tommy to greet the children. (改进句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: So Tommy said hi to the students. As a result, Tommy greeted the children. (改进句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: And then, the professor encouraged Tommy to say something nice about those children's bike. Then, the professor encouraged Tommy to compliment the children's bikes. (改进句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: So Tommy said something and he no longer feared to say to these children. Tommy did so, and he was no longer afraid to speak to these children. (调整句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: After that, Tommy made friends with these children. Eventually, Tommy became friends with these children. (使用更高级的词汇。)

Original: So that's the concept of behavior exposure. This illustrates the concept of behavioral exposure. (将"behavior exposure"更正为"behavioral exposure"，使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The professor discusses behavioral exposure using this example. This means that to overcome their fears, children should be encouraged to engage in the feared behavior. Consider Tommy, the professor's son, as an example. He was afraid to talk to some children in his new neighborhood. So the professor took several steps. First, he encouraged Tommy to go outside. Next, he encouraged Tommy to greet the children. As a result, Tommy greeted the children. Then, the professor encouraged Tommy to compliment the children's bikes. Tommy did so, and he was no longer afraid to speak to these children. Eventually, Tommy became friends with these children. This illustrates the concept of behavioral exposure.

6.思维导图

- Behavioral Exposure
    - Overcoming fears
        - Encouraging engagement in feared behavior
    - Example: Tommy
        - Afraid to talk to neighborhood children
        - Professor's steps
            1. Encourage going outside
            2. Encourage greeting children
            3. Encourage complimenting bikes
        - Result
            - Tommy no longer afraid
            - Made friends with children

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位考生的回答相对清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议考生在练习口语时注意保持流利度，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，考生的回答较为连贯和有组织。然而，在提供支持或例子时，可以更加详细和具体。建议考生在练习时尝试提供更多相关细节，以使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: This lecture provides an example for the technique of behavior exposure, which suggests that when kids conduct a feared behavior repeatedly without negative consequence, they will be more willing to do so. For example, the lecturer's son, Tommy, moved to Los Angeles, and he was afraid to talk to local children because he was afraid that they won't like him. On a Saturday afternoon, Tommy was watching the kids riding bikes outside his window. So the lecturer suggested they go out and have a little ice cream. He said okay, and the lecturer suggested Tommy say hi to these kids, and he received hi back. On the way back from the store, the lecturer encouraged Tommy to compliment the kids back, and they...

Corrected: This lecture provides an example of the behavioral exposure technique, which suggests that when children engage in a feared behavior repeatedly without negative consequences, they will become more willing to do so. For instance, the lecturer's son, Tommy, moved to Los Angeles and was afraid to talk to local children because he feared that they wouldn't like him. One Saturday afternoon, Tommy was watching children riding bikes outside his window. The lecturer suggested they go out for some ice cream. Tommy agreed, and the lecturer encouraged him to greet these children; he did so and received a friendly response. On their way back from the store, the lecturer encouraged Tommy to compliment the children on their bikes, and they...

(将“behavior exposure”改为“behavioral exposure technique”，使表达更准确。将“kids”改为“children”，使语言更正式。将“conduct”改为“engage in”，使表达更自然。在“negative consequences”后加逗号，使句子结构更清晰。将“example”改为“instance”，使表达更自然。在“Tommy was watching children riding bikes outside his window”中，将“kids”改为“children”，使语言更正式。在“go out for some ice cream”中，将“have a little ice cream”改为“go out for some ice cream”，使表达更自然。将“he said okay”改为“Tommy agreed”，使表达更自然。将“say hi to these kids”改为“greet these children”，使语言更正式。在“he did so and received a friendly response”中，将“he received hi back”改为“he did so and received a friendly response”，使表达更自然。在“the lecturer encouraged Tommy to compliment the children on their bikes”中，将“compliment the kids back”改为“compliment the children on their bikes”，使语言更正式。)

Revised (140 words): This lecture provides an example of the behavioral exposure technique, which suggests that when children engage in a feared behavior repeatedly without negative consequences, they will become more willing to do so. For instance, the lecturer's son, Tommy, moved to Los Angeles and was afraid to talk to local children because he feared that they wouldn't like him. One Saturday afternoon, Tommy was watching children riding bikes outside his window. The lecturer suggested they go out for some ice cream. Tommy agreed, and the lecturer encouraged him to greet these children; he did so and received a friendly response. On their way back from the store, the lecturer encouraged Tommy to compliment the children on their bikes, and they responded positively. This gradual exposure to the feared behavior helped Tommy overcome his fear and eventually make new friends.

6.思维导图

Behavioral Exposure Technique
├─ Children engaging in feared behavior
│   └─ Repeatedly without negative consequences
├─ Example: Tommy in Los Angeles
│   ├─ Afraid to talk to local children
│   ├─ Saturday afternoon
│   │   ├─ Watching children riding bikes
│   │   └─ Lecturer's suggestion: go out for ice cream
│   ├─ Greeting children
│   │   └─ Friendly response
│   └─ Complimenting children on bikes
│       └─ Positive response
└─ Gradual exposure helps overcome fear and make friends

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答中的语音清晰，语速较为稳定，但偶尔出现停顿。建议在练习口语时，注意保持流利的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容较为连贯和有组织，但在解释行为暴露技术方面还有待加强。建议在回答时更明确地阐述行为暴露技术如何在例子中体现，并给出更多相关细节。例如，在回答中可以强调汤米逐渐克服恐惧的过程，以及他与邻居孩子建立友谊的过程。这样可以使回答更具说服力和深度。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The passage is telling a technique that makes children overcome the things that they fear. The passage discusses a technique that helps children overcome their fears. (将原句中的“telling”改为“discusses”，使句子更自然。同时，将“the things that they fear”简化为“their fears”。) This technique is by adding the amount of the fears to the children and giving them positive reactions. This technique involves gradually exposing children to their fears while providing positive reinforcement. (将原句中的“adding the amount of the fears”改为“gradually exposing”，使句子更准确。同时，将“giving them positive reactions”改为“providing positive reinforcement”。) The professor states an example that Tommy is afraid of talking to their neighbors. So the professor said that how about to walk to the store and approach to the kids to say hi to them. The kids said okay at the first time and they actually did. The kids agreed, and they greeted each other. (简化原句，使其更自然。) When they back from the store,

Revised Answer (140 words):

The passage discusses a technique that helps children overcome their fears. This technique involves gradually exposing children to their fears while providing positive reinforcement. The professor shares an example of his son Tommy, who was afraid of talking to their new neighbors. The professor suggested that they walk to the store and approach the kids to say hi. The kids agreed, and they greeted each other. On their way back from the store, the professor encouraged Tommy to compliment the kids on their bikes. Tommy did so, and this interaction helped him gain confidence. Eventually, Tommy went outside to ride his bike and interact with the other kids, making new friends by the end of the day. This example illustrates how behavioral exposure can help children overcome their fears by gradually increasing their exposure to the feared situation while providing positive reinforcement.

6.思维导图

• Behavioral Exposure

  • Overcome fears
  • Gradual exposure
  • Positive reinforcement

• Professor's Example

  • Tommy
    • Afraid of talking to neighbors
    • Walk to the store
      • Say hi to kids
      • Compliment bikes
    • Gained confidence
    • Made new friends

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve their delivery by avoiding repetition of certain phrases, such as "the professor" and "Tommy." Additionally, the speaker should work on varying their sentence structure to create a more engaging and natural flow. To improve, the speaker can practice speaking aloud and focusing on maintaining a steady pace while incorporating varied sentence structures.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The example of Tommy moving to a new neighborhood and gradually overcoming his fear of talking to other children effectively illustrates the technique of behavioral exposure. However, the speaker could further develop their response by elaborating on how the gradual increase in Tommy's interactions with the neighborhood kids helped him build confidence and overcome his fear. To improve topic development, the speaker can focus on providing more detailed explanations and examples to support their main points.

5.Language Use

Behavioral exposure is a technique teaching used to teach ("used to teach" is more natural and grammatically correct) children how to overcome their fears by gradually throwing introducing ("introducing" is a more appropriate word choice than "throwing") them something to challenging situations ("to challenging situations" provides clarity and context). In that lecture, the professor provides an example of his son Tommy. When he was eight years old, they moved to a new neighborhood and at the beginning Tommy was afraid to go out to talk to the neighborhood's kids. But one evening the professor took him out and when they passed the kids, the professor asked him to probably simply ("simply" is a better word choice than "probably") say hi to the kids and Tommy did. On their way back, the professor talked to Tommy again, asking him to say hi proactively. Tommy did so. By doing this gradually, having Tommy to be proactively throwing himself proactively engage with ("proactively engage with" is a more natural and accurate phrase) the kids, they become friends finally.

Revised Answer (140 words):

Behavioral exposure is a technique used to teach children how to overcome their fears by gradually introducing them to challenging situations. In the lecture, the professor shares an example of his son Tommy, who was initially afraid to interact with the neighborhood kids after moving to a new area. One evening, the professor encouraged Tommy to simply say hi to the kids as they passed by, which he did. On their way back, the professor asked Tommy to proactively greet the kids again. By gradually having Tommy proactively engage with the children, he was able to overcome his fear and eventually become friends with them. This example effectively demonstrates how behavioral exposure can help children build confidence and face their fears through incremental steps and positive experiences.

6.Mind Map

- Behavioral exposure
    - Technique
        - Overcome fears
        - Gradual introduction
    - Example
        - Tommy
            - New neighborhood
            - Afraid of interaction
        - Professor's encouragement
            - Saying hi
            - Proactive greeting
    - Outcome
        - Overcoming fear
        - Making friends

7.Key Words