TOEFL TPO 73 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the letter writer's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，同时注意发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在连接观点和提供足够的支持或例子方面还有待加强。建议发言者在解释原因时尽量提供更多具体细节，以便让听众更好地理解观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the reading material, it is the purpose of that a student suggests to hold some concerts on the campus or on the lawn. In the reading material, a student proposes holding concerts on campus or on the lawn.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，例如“a student proposes”代替“it is the purpose of that a student suggests”。）

But in the conversation, the woman dislikes with this idea for two reasons. However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons.（“dislikes with”不是正确的表达，应该使用“disagrees with”。）

Firstly, the woman thinks that the student doesn't notice the problems the concerts will cause. Firstly, the woman believes that the student overlooks potential problems caused by these concerts.（使用更高级的词汇，如“overlooks”代替“doesn't notice”。）

For example, the concerts holding during the day, it will be distracting for the student because students often studies or learning during the day. For example, if concerts are held during daytime hours, they would be distracting for students who are typically studying or learning at that time.（改进句子结构和语法。）

So it is not the best time to hold this. Therefore, it is not an ideal time to hold these concerts.（使用更自然的表达方式，如“ideal time”代替“best time”。）

And another reason is holding in the lawn also cause environmental problems. Another reason is that holding concerts on the lawn could lead to environmental issues.（改进句子结构和语法。）

People go around in the grass, the grass will be dying and the area will turn to mud. As people walk on the grass, it will become damaged, eventually turning the area into mud.（改进句子结构和语法。）

Revised Answer (140 words): In the reading material, a student proposes holding concerts on campus or on the lawn. However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. Firstly, the woman believes that the student overlooks potential problems caused by these concerts. For example, if concerts are held during daytime hours, they would be distracting for students who are typically studying or learning at that time. Therefore, it is not an ideal time to hold these concerts. Another reason is that holding concerts on the lawn could lead to environmental issues. As people walk on the grass, it will become damaged, eventually turning the area into mud.

6.思维导图

- Reading Material
    - Student Proposal
        - Concerts on campus or lawn

- Conversation
    - Woman's Disagreement
        - Reason 1: Distraction
            - Students studying during daytime hours
        - Reason 2: Environmental Issues
            - Damaged grass, turning area into mud

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在发音方面，整体上讲得还算清楚，但有些地方需要注意。例如，注意正确发音单词，以免引起误解。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。继续练习和提高发音技巧。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了所需的信息，但在组织和连接思路方面还有待加强。尝试使用更多的连接词和短语来使回答更连贯。同时，在给出原因时，可以尝试提供更具体的例子或详细说明，以增强论点的说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：In the passage, the student proposed that the university should invite a music band to play at the lawn because students could have a relax and the lawn just refreshed. In the passage, the student proposed that the university should invite a music band to play on the lawn so that students could relax and enjoy the recently improved lawn.（将“at”改为“on”，使句子更自然；将“have a relax”改为“relax”，使句子更符合英语表达；将“the lawn just refreshed”改为“the recently improved lawn”，使句子更清晰。）

In the conversation, the woman disagreed with this proposal. First, she thinks the timing is not right. In the conversation, the woman disagreed with this proposal, stating that she believes the timing is not appropriate.（将“thinks”改为“believes”，使句子更自然；将“is not right”改为“is not appropriate”，使句子更准确。）

This is because students usually reading and studying at this time. This is because students are usually reading and studying during this time.（在“students”后加上“are”，使句子语法正确。）

They may be distracted by the music. Besides, she thinks the band should play at indoor places. They may be distracted by the music. Furthermore, she believes that the band should perform in indoor venues.（将“thinks”改为“believes”，使句子更自然；将“play at indoor places”改为“perform in indoor venues”，使句子更准确。）

This is because people is very crowded. This is because the area can become very crowded.（将“people is very crowded”改为“the area can become very crowded”，使句子更清晰。）

They walk on the grass, so the grass could be damaged. As a result, the grass might get damaged due to people walking on it.（将原句改写，使句子更自然。）

So the woman didn't agree with this proposal. Therefore, the woman did not agree with this proposal.（将“didn't”改为“did not”，使句子更正式。）

修订版（140词）：

In the passage, the student proposed that the university should invite a music band to play on the lawn so that students could relax and enjoy the recently improved lawn. In the conversation, the woman disagreed with this proposal, stating that she believes the timing is not appropriate. This is because students are usually reading and studying during this time. They may be distracted by the music. Furthermore, she believes that the band should perform in indoor venues. This is because the area can become very crowded. As a result, the grass might get damaged due to people walking on it. Therefore, the woman did not agree with this proposal.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Invite music band
    - Play on the lawn
    - Students relax
    - Recently improved lawn

- Woman's disagreement
    - Inappropriate timing
        - Students studying
        - Distraction
    - Indoor venues
        - Crowded area
        - Grass damage

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，回答的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了问题所需的信息，但在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待加强。建议在练习时注意将观点和原因进行更清晰的组织和连接，以提高话题发展的质量。

5.语言使用

Original: The letters address that inviting a new jazz band to the campus to have a free play for the students to let them be relaxed during the afternoon and between the class and activities. The letter suggests inviting a new jazz band to perform on campus for free, allowing students to relax during the afternoon and between classes and activities. (建议将句子结构进行调整，使其更加清晰。)

Original: It would be freely on the open ground near the student center, which be recently improved. The concerts would take place on the open lawn near the recently improved student center. (修改句子结构和语法错误。)

Original: The girl disapproved about the letter because he thinks it ignores some problems may create. The girl disapproves of the proposal because she believes it overlooks potential issues. (调整句子结构，修正性别代词错误。)

Original: Firstly, it's not the best time to play the music because students are studying and writing at that time. Firstly, it's not the ideal time for music as students are studying and working on assignments during that period. (使用更高级的词汇，调整句子结构。)

Original: It's a kind of distracting activities with music in the background. Having background music can be distracting for them. (简化句子结构，使其更自然。)

Original: It should be in the evening. An evening concert might be more suitable. (使用更高级的词汇。)

Original: Secondly, it should be an indoor concert since a bunch of students will hang out in that area. Secondly, an indoor venue is preferable as many students will gather in that area. (使用更高级的词汇，调整句子结构。)

Original: The audience walking around on the ground will harm the grass and eventually killing them. The audience walking on the lawn could damage the grass and eventually kill it. (修正语法错误，调整句子结构。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The letter suggests inviting a new jazz band to perform on campus for free, allowing students to relax during the afternoon and between classes and activities. The concerts would take place on the open lawn near the recently improved student center. The girl disapproves of the proposal because she believes it overlooks potential issues. Firstly, it's not the ideal time for music as students are studying and working on assignments during that period. Having background music can be distracting for them. An evening concert might be more suitable. Secondly, an indoor venue is preferable as many students will gather in that area. The audience walking on the lawn could damage the grass and eventually kill it.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Jazz band
  • Free concerts
  • Afternoon
  • Open lawn

• Girl's opinion

  • Disapproves
  • Overlooks issues
    • Timing
      • Studying and assignments
      • Distracting background music
      • Evening concert suggestion
    • Venue
      • Indoor preference
      • Lawn damage

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议发言者注意保持语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在发音方面也需要加强练习，以避免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对于问题的回答较为完整，能够概括提案的内容并说明女士对提案的看法及原因。然而，在组织结构上还有待加强。建议发言者在回答问题时更加注意逻辑性和条理性，尝试使用连词和过渡词来使回答更加流畅。同时，在给出原因时可以尝试使用举例子或具体情景来支持观点，使回答更有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: A student proposes that the university could invite a jazz band to play free concerts on campus in the afternoon. Although the woman thinks it's a good idea, she points out that there are several problems. First, afternoon is not the best time to play music. Students don't have time to listen to them, they need to study, they need to read, they need to focus on their classes, and it would be distracting if there are loud music at the background. Evening should be a better choice. Second, she mentions that indoors could be better because the audience would walk over the grass and the crows could let the grass to die. The grass would become mad, actually.

Corrected Answer: A student proposes suggests (建议使用suggests替换proposes，使语言更自然) that the university could invite a jazz band to play free concerts on campus in the afternoon. Although the woman thinks it's a good idea, she points out that there are several problems. First, afternoon the afternoon (加上the使语句更自然) is not the best time to play music. Students don't have time to listen to them; they need to study, read, and focus on their classes, and it would be distracting if there are is (使用is替换are，使语法正确) loud music at in the (使用in the替换at，使语句更自然) background. Evening The evening (加上The使语句更自然) should be a better choice. Second, she mentions that indoors an indoor venue (使用an indoor venue替换indoors，使语言更具体) could be better because the audience would walk over the grass and the crows crowd (使用crowd替换crows，纠正拼写错误) could cause the grass to die. The grass would become mad muddy, actually. (使用muddy替换mad，纠正拼写错误并使语句更自然)

Revised Answer (140 words): A student suggests that the university invite a jazz band to perform free concerts on campus in the afternoon. Although the woman agrees it's a good idea, she highlights several issues. Firstly, she believes the afternoon is not an ideal time for music performances, as students are busy studying, reading, and focusing on their classes. Loud music in the background would be distracting for them. She suggests that the evening would be a more suitable time for such events. Secondly, she recommends an indoor venue instead of an outdoor location, as having a large crowd walking on the grass could damage it and eventually turn the area muddy. By considering these factors, the university can make better arrangements for the proposed jazz concerts.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Afternoon

- Woman's opinion
  - Good idea
  - Issues
    - Timing
      - Afternoon not ideal
      - Evening better
    - Venue
      - Indoor preferred
      - Grass damage and mud

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，这位考生的发言相对清晰，语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。建议考生在练习时注意提高语言流利度，减少不必要的停顿，并注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, summarizing the proposal and stating the woman's opinion about it. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific examples or details from the listening passage to support the woman's opinion. Additionally, the speaker should work on making clearer connections between ideas to enhance the overall coherence of the response.

5.语言使用

Original: In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with it because there are some problems. First, the woman said the best time should not be in the afternoon because the students will be reading and studying in the afternoon and it's really distracting if there is music. But she thinks that evening would be a good time. Second, the concert should be indoor because the lawn is a great area but if there are more and more students hanging out there, the grass will die and finally that place will turn into mud so the environment will get worse. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with this letter.

Corrected: In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with it the proposal because there are some problems. First, the woman said she mentions that the best time should not be in having concerts during the afternoon because is not ideal as students will be reading and studying,; it's really distracting if there is music. But she thinks that evening would be a good time. Second, the concert should be indoor an indoor venue would be better for concerts, because although,; the lawn is a great area,; if there are more and more students hanging out there, the grass will die and eventually,; that place will turn into mud,; so the environment will get worse. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with this letter.

(将“it”改为“the proposal”，使句子更清晰。将“the woman said”改为“she mentions”，使语言更自然。将“the best time should not be in”改为“having concerts during”，使句子更简洁。将“because”改为“is not ideal as”，使句子更连贯。在逗号处添加分号，使句子结构更清晰。将“the concert should be indoor”改为“an indoor venue would be better for concerts,”，使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the letter, the student suggests that the university should invite a jazz band to play some free concerts on campus in the afternoon. The woman in the conversation disagrees with the proposal due to several concerns. Firstly, she mentions that having concerts during the afternoon is not ideal as students will be reading and studying; it would be really distracting if there is music playing. Instead, she believes that evenings would be a more suitable time for such events. Secondly, she argues that an indoor venue would be better for concerts; although the lawn is a great area, if more students start hanging out there, the grass will eventually die and turn into mud, resulting in a deteriorated environment. In conclusion, the woman disagrees with the letter's proposal for these reasons.

6.思维导图

- Letter Proposal
  - Jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Afternoon

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Concerns
    - Afternoon concerts: distracting for studying students
    - Evening concerts: more suitable
    - Indoor venue: better for concerts
      - Lawn area issues:
        - Grass damage
        - Environmental deterioration

- Conclusion
  - Woman disagrees with letter's proposal due to concerns

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言较为清晰，但在某些地方存在适当的停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者在练习时注意保持连贯流畅的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在某些地方可以进一步加强。建议在练习时更加关注如何将观点和例子更紧密地联系起来，以便更好地支持论点。同时，在提供论据时尽量使用具体的例子，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The letter declared that Ben was invited to have a concert on the campus floor for some reasons. The letter proposed that a jazz band should perform a concert on the campus lawn for several reasons. (将“Ben”改为“a jazz band”，将“campus floor”改为“campus lawn”，使句子更准确地描述了提议。) First, the campus floor is quite near the student center, so it's convenient. First, the campus lawn is close to the student center, making it convenient. (将“campus floor”改为“campus lawn”，使句子更符合原文。) Second, because students on the campus floor during the day and the floor was improved, Second, since many students are on the campus lawn during the day and it has been improved, (将“campus floor”改为“campus lawn”，并完善句子结构，使其更清晰。) but the female student disagreed with the letter for two reasons. The first reason is that the time is not suitable, because the concert will distract some students who are reading or having classes, ; the proper time she thinks might be evening. she believes a more appropriate time would be in the evening. (使用更高级的词汇和语法结构，使句子更自然。) The second reason is the location is not suitable. The indoor concert will be a good choice because outdoor concert will make the floor muddy. An indoor concert would be a better option, as an outdoor concert could turn the lawn muddy. (使用更高级的词汇和语法结构，使句子更自然。)

修订版（140字）：

The letter proposed that a jazz band should perform a concert on the campus lawn for several reasons. First, the campus lawn is close to the student center, making it convenient. Second, since many students are on the campus lawn during the day and it has been improved, it would be an ideal location. However, the female student disagreed with the proposal for two reasons. The first reason is that the time is not suitable, as the concert will distract some students who are reading or having classes; she believes a more appropriate time would be in the evening. The second reason is that the location is not suitable. An indoor concert would be a better option, as an outdoor concert could turn the lawn muddy.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Jazz band concert
  - Campus lawn
  - Reasons
    - Close to student center
    - Many students present during the day
    - Improved lawn

- Female student's disagreement
  - Unsuitable time
    - Distracting for studying students
    - Evening as a better option
  - Unsuitable location
    - Indoor concert preferred
    - Outdoor concert could damage lawn and make it muddy

7.关键词