TOEFL Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using the examples given in the lecture,explain two ways animals navigate

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 4

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 26

3.表达 从发音角度来看，整体表达清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高发音，请注意以下几点：1) 注意句子的停顿，不要在不需要的地方停顿；2) 注意发音的准确性，避免出现拼写错误。练习这些方面将有助于提高您的口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 The topic development aspect of the response is well-done, as it provides a coherent and well-organized response with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from the lecture. To further improve, you could consider adding more details from the lecture to strengthen your examples, such as mentioning that mallard ducks travel at night and that each stream has its own specific smell due to chemicals released by soil and plants. Overall, the topic development is strong, and with a few minor adjustments, it could be even better.

6.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading passage discusses how animals navigate long distances for breeding or finding food using various methods, particularly sight and smell. The lecture discusses how animals navigate long distances for various reasons, such as breeding or finding food, using different methods like sight and smell. (将“reading passage”更正为“lecture”，使句子更自然。同时，调整句子结构以提高语言流畅性。) The first example involves a type of bird, and these birds navigate by observing their surroundings, particularly the stars in the sky. The first example involves mallard ducks, which navigate by observing their surroundings, especially the stars in the sky. (明确提到“mallard ducks”，使句子更具体。) When the weather turns cold, they migrate south, and during this journey, they use the stars to identify their location and guide their direction. The second example is salmon, a type of fish that lays eggs in freshwater streams. They use their sense of smell to detect specific chemical cues from the water, which help them locate the exact stream where they were born. By following this unique sense, salmon are able to return to their birthplace and lay their eggs.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The lecture discusses how animals navigate long distances for various reasons, such as breeding or finding food, using different methods like sight and smell. The first example involves mallard ducks, which navigate by observing their surroundings, especially the stars in the sky. These ducks travel at night and rely on star patterns to determine their location and guide their direction as they migrate south during colder weather. The second example is salmon, a type of fish that lays eggs in freshwater streams. Each stream has its own specific smell due to chemicals released by soil and plants. Salmon use their sense of smell to detect these unique chemical cues from the water, which help them locate the exact stream where they were born. By following this distinct scent, salmon are able to return to their birthplace and lay their eggs, ensuring the continuation of their species.

7.思维导图

- Lecture
  - Animals navigate
    - Reasons
      - Breeding
      - Finding food
    - Methods
      - Sight
        - Example: Mallard ducks
          - Observe stars in the sky
          - Migrate south during colder weather
      - Smell
        - Example: Salmon
          - Lay eggs in freshwater streams
          - Unique chemical cues from water
          - Return to birthplace to lay eggs

8.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从发音方面来看，整体上讲得比较清楚，但有些地方需要改进。例如，“site”应该是“sight”，“smile”应该是“smell”。此外，有些词语之间的连接不够流畅，需要加强练习。建议多加练习，提高发音准确度和语言流畅度。

4.话题发展 The response provides a coherent and well-organized explanation of the two ways animals navigate, using the examples of mallard ducks and salmon from the lecture. However, there are some inaccuracies in the retelling of the examples, such as mentioning "a kind of birds" instead of specifying mallard ducks and not clearly explaining how salmon use their sense of smell to navigate. To improve topic development, ensure that you accurately retell the examples from the lecture and provide clear explanations of how each animal uses its specific method of navigation.

6.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading passage talks about how animals navigate to long-distance travel in order to breed or find food, and there are several ways, especially by using sight and the smile. The reading passage discusses how animals navigate long distances for breeding or finding food, using various methods, particularly sight and smell. (将“smile”更正为“smell”，使句子更自然。)

The first example is a kind of birds, The first example involves a type of bird, (使用“involves”和“type of bird”使句子更自然。) and these birds will navigate by what they see, especially the stars in the sky. and these birds navigate by observing their surroundings, particularly the stars in the sky. (使用“observing their surroundings”使句子更自然。)

And when the climate becomes cold, they will fly to the south, When the weather turns cold, they migrate south, (使用“weather turns cold”和“migrate south”使句子更自然。) and during this trip, they will look at the stars to recognize a location in order to help guide themselves. and during this journey, they use the stars to identify their location and guide their direction. (使用“journey”和“guide their direction”使句子更自然。)

And the other, the second example is salmon, which is a fish, The second example is salmon, a type of fish, (使用“a type of fish”使句子更自然。) and they lay eggs in freshwater streams, and it will present a... that lay eggs in freshwater streams. They use their... (使用“that lay eggs”和“they use their”使句子更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage discusses how animals navigate long distances for breeding or finding food, using various methods, particularly sight and smell. The first example involves a type of bird, such as the mallard duck, and these birds navigate by observing their surroundings, particularly the stars in the sky. When the weather turns cold, they migrate south, and during this journey, they use the stars to identify their location and guide their direction. The second example is salmon, a type of fish that lay eggs in freshwater streams. They use their keen sense of smell to detect specific chemical cues from the water, which helps them locate the exact stream where they were born. By following these unique scents, salmon are able to return to their birthplace and lay their eggs, ensuring the continuation of their species.

7.思维导图

- Animals Navigation
  - Sight
    - Mallard ducks
      - Observe surroundings
      - Stars in the sky
      - Migrate south during cold weather
  - Smell
    - Salmon
      - Lay eggs in freshwater streams
      - Keen sense of smell
      - Detect chemical cues from water
      - Locate birthplace stream

8.关键词