TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample:

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could use some improvement. The speech is not very fluid, and there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow. Additionally, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more fluidly and work on their pacing to reduce unnecessary pauses. Pronunciation should also be focused on to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4.Topic Development The topic development in the response needs improvement as well. The speaker does provide some reasons for the woman's disagreement with the proposal, but the connections between ideas are not very clear, and there is a lack of sufficient support or examples. To enhance topic development, the speaker should work on creating a more coherent and well-organized response by clearly connecting ideas and providing more support or examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The letter writer proposed that sports should be banned from law in front of the glass of the dining hall. The author of the letter proposed banning sports on the lawn in front of the glass windows of the dining hall. (Changed "letter writer" to "author of the letter" and rephrased for clarity) But the woman disagrees with this proposal. However, the woman opposes this idea. (Changed "disagrees" to "opposes" for better vocabulary) She thinks that's not helpful and she's not sure that it will accomplish anything. She believes it is unhelpful and doubts its effectiveness. (Rephrased for better sentence structure and vocabulary)

Revised Answer (140 words): The author of the letter proposed banning sports on the lawn in front of the glass windows of the dining hall. However, the woman opposes this idea. She believes it is unhelpful and doubts its effectiveness. Here are some reasons: First, everyone crosses the lawn every day because it is centrally located. So, even if students are not allowed to play sports on the lawn, they would still cause damage to it. Additionally, foot traffic between classes is quite busy, forcing students in a hurry to walk on the lawn instead of using sidewalks. Lastly, gyms and fields are situated at the edge of campus, making it inconvenient for students to engage in quick sports activities between classes.

6.Mind Map

- Author's proposal
  - Ban sports on lawn
  - Dining hall glass windows

- Woman's opposition
  - Unhelpful
  - Doubts effectiveness

- Reasons
  - Central location of lawn
    - Damage from foot traffic
  - Busy foot traffic between classes
    - Students walking on lawn instead of sidewalks
  - Gyms and fields at campus edge
    - Inconvenient for quick sports activities between classes

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

22. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。但是，发言者在一些地方使用了不恰当的词汇，如“drunk food”应为“junk food”。此外，发言者在发音方面也存在一定的问题，如将“hurt”发音为“heart”。建议发言者在练习口语时注意词汇的准确性和发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于阅读材料和听力材料的观点进行了总结，并给出了两个原因来支持男生的观点。然而，在论述过程中，发言者没有充分展开论述，使得论点显得略显简单。建议发言者在练习时尝试更深入地阐述论点，并在适当的地方加入例子或具体细节以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter proposed that schools should stop serving drunk junk ("drunk" 改为 "junk"，因为这里讨论的是垃圾食品而不是醉酒) food in the dining hall because it can help students more become (删除 "more"，添加 "become"，使句子更通顺) healthier and help them save money. The man in the conversation disagreed with the proposal. Firstly, he thinks many people are healthier. Eating drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food occasionally will not cause some bad influence. For example, at the end of the semester, when students finish paper their papers (将 "paper" 改为 "their papers"，使句子更通顺且表达更清晰) and study, it will be very nice to have some drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food. And secondly, if the school closes the drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food serving, students have to buy the drunk junk (同上，将 "drunk" 改为 "junk") food out of the campus, which is more expensive, so the students will cost more. As you can see, those are two reasons why the man in the conversation disagreed with the proposal.

Revised (140 words): The letter proposed that schools should stop serving junk food in the dining hall because it can help students become healthier and save money. The man in the conversation disagreed with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, he believes that many people are already healthy, and consuming junk food occasionally will not have a significant negative impact on their health. For instance, at the end of the semester, when students are busy finishing their papers and studying, it would be enjoyable to have some junk food as a treat. Secondly, if the school stops offering junk food, students would have to buy it off-campus, which is more expensive. Consequently, this would lead to increased expenses for students rather than saving money. These are the two reasons why the man in the conversation disagreed with Mary's proposal.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter's proposal
  - Man's disagreement

- Reason 1
  - Occasional junk food consumption
  - End of semester example

- Reason 2
  - Off-campus purchases
  - Increased expenses

- Conclusion
  - Two reasons for disagreement

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses and some punctuation problems. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or support to strengthen their argument. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their points and providing more detailed explanations or examples to better support their ideas.

5.Language Use

In the listening, they disagree discuss ("disagree" is not incorrect, but "discuss" is more accurate and natural) with the student's suggestion about the professor's evaluations for two reasons. First of all, even the student's suggestion believes that teachers or professors can be motivated to improve more teaching skills through the available teaching evaluations. However, the girls in the listening argue that teachers would be unhappy because they think their teaching styles are being published posted ("posted" is more appropriate for online content) on the Internet. By the way, they will not be changed or browsed because they think there are so many negative criticisms on the Internet about the evaluations. So nothing happened will change (use future tense to match context). And the second reason is the suggestions believe that it's beneficial for prospective students because they can get more information and make a more informed decision about which class to take. However, the girls disprove that the students who finish these evaluations are at the end of the class and they are hard to leave in a hurry to leave (clarifies meaning). So the evaluations are unspecific, unhelpful, and unuseful.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the listening, two students discuss a suggestion regarding professor evaluations. The first reason for their disagreement is that although the suggestion posits that professors can improve their teaching skills through evaluations, the students argue that professors would be unhappy with their teaching styles being posted online. They believe that professors might not read or be influenced by these evaluations due to negative criticism, so nothing will change. The second reason is that while the suggestion claims it's beneficial for prospective students to make informed decisions about classes, the students counter that those who complete evaluations are often in a hurry to leave at the end of class. As a result, the evaluations tend to be unspecific and unhelpful, rendering them ineffective for both professors and future students.

6.Mind Map

- Listening
  - Discussion
  - Professor evaluations

- Disagreement Reasons
  - Unhappy professors
    - Teaching styles posted online
    - Negative criticism
  - Ineffective evaluations
    - Students in a hurry to leave
    - Unspecific and unhelpful feedback

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of discussion points
  - Conclusion on ineffectiveness of evaluations

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3.5

• Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

• 26

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。建议练习更流畅的发音和自然的语调，以便在讲话时保持一致的速度。此外，注意在适当的地方暂停，以避免不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以进一步改进。在解释女性观点时，请确保提供足够的支持或示例，以便更清楚地阐述她的立场。同时，在总结时，请尝试使用更多连接词，以使观点之间的联系更加明确。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter insists that school should put the career fair at the beginning of the school years. However, the woman in the conversation disagreed with this decision. Firstly, according to the letter, it said that many students have found the job, so the career fair is not reasonable. The woman pointed out that many students are not sure what to do in the future. They need time to organize or figure out the careers they are interested in. So, putting the fair at the end is more reasonable. Secondly, according to the letter, it is inconvenient for students to take part in this fair because they are busy. However, the woman said that taking part in this fair is just talking to get information. It won't waste too much time.

Corrected: The letter insists suggests (“insists”表示坚持，但在这里“suggests”更自然) that school the university (使用“the university”更具体) should put hold (“hold”更适合描述举办活动) the career fair at the beginning of the school years. However, the woman in the conversation disagreed with this decision. Firstly, according to the letter, it said that many students have found the job jobs (应使用复数形式“jobs”), so the career fair is not reasonable. The woman pointed out that many students are not sure what to do in the future. They need time to organize or figure out the careers they are interested in. So, putting the fair at the end is more reasonable. Secondly, according to the letter, it is inconvenient for students to take part in this fair because they are busy. However, the woman said that taking part in this fair is just talking to get information. It won't waste too much time.

Revised (140 words): The letter suggests that the university should hold the career fair at the beginning of the school year. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this proposal. Firstly, she argues that many students are uncertain about their future career paths and need time throughout the year to explore their interests and options. Therefore, holding the fair at the end of the year is more beneficial for them. Secondly, although the letter claims that it is inconvenient for busy students to attend the fair, the woman contends that participating in it only involves gathering information through casual conversations, which does not require a significant amount of time. Thus, she believes that students can easily fit it into their schedules despite their other commitments.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter's suggestion
  - Woman's disagreement

- First point
  - Uncertainty about future careers
  - Time needed for exploration

- Second point
  - Inconvenience for busy students
  - Woman's counterargument: casual conversations, not time-consuming

- Conclusion
  - Woman's belief: end-of-year career fair is more beneficial and manageable for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流畅度和语速基本一致，偶尔出现停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以及提高发音准确性。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者的回答内容较为连贯和有组织，观点之间的联系清晰，并提供了足够的支持和例子。为了进一步提高话题发展能力，建议发言者在总结观点时更加简洁明了，并尝试使用更多的连接词来增强观点之间的联系。

5.语言使用

原文：The letter proposes that school will hold a student art club and it will not count toward degree and it will organize some trip to local art museum with half half price and the man likes this idea because first he loves art very much and in this way he can concentrate on his chemistry program and relax through the art club without any great or some test and second the museum is pretty expensive especially for students who don't have much money therefore the school art club can provide an opportunity for them to see more great arts more easily therefore the man likes this idea

修改后：The announcement states that the university will establish a Student Arts Club, which will not count towards a degree. The club will also organize trips to local art museums at half-price admission. The man appreciates this initiative because, firstly, he is passionate about art, allowing him to focus on his chemistry studies while enjoying the art club without worrying about grades or exams. Secondly, since museum visits can be costly, particularly for students with limited budgets, the club offers an affordable opportunity for them to appreciate more exceptional artwork with ease. Consequently, the man supports this idea.（修改原因：使用更高级的词汇，改进语法，让陈述自然流畅，平滑过渡，以及强有力的结论。）

修改建议及解释：（将“letter”改为“announcement”，因为这是关于公告的回答；将“school”改为“university”，以保持一致性；将“half half price”改为“half-price admission”，使表达更准确；将“great or some test”改为“grades or exams”，以提高语言准确性；将“great arts”改为“exceptional artwork”，使用更高级的词汇。）

修订后的回答（140字）：

The announcement states that the university will establish a Student Arts Club, which will not count towards a degree. The club will also organize trips to local art museums at half-price admission. The man appreciates this initiative because, firstly, he is passionate about art, allowing him to focus on his chemistry studies while enjoying the art club without worrying about grades or exams. Secondly, since museum visits can be costly, particularly for students with limited budgets, the club offers an affordable opportunity for them to appreciate more exceptional artwork with ease. Consequently, the man supports this idea.

6.思维导图

- Announcement
  - University
  - Student Arts Club
  - Not count towards degree
  - Trips to local art museums
  - Half-price admission

- Man's opinion
  - Appreciates the initiative
  - Reasons:
    - Passionate about art
    - Focus on chemistry studies
    - No worries about grades or exams
    - Costly museum visits
    - Affordable opportunity for students
    - Appreciate exceptional artwork with ease

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，整体上说得比较清楚，但有时会出现停顿。建议在练习时注意语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但可以进一步加强观点之间的联系和支持。建议在练习时关注如何更清晰地表达观点，并提供更充分的支持或例证。

5.语言使用

Original: The email suggested that the geological field trip should change to a city's history museum because there are more kinds of rocks and if the weather is bad, it's hard for students to go out. The woman in the conversation totally disagreed with this email. Firstly, she thinks that if that happens, students will lose valuable experience to find identical rocks using the knowledge in the class. What's more, they will miss the nature contact. Secondly, the woman pointed out that because they study all year inside, many students want to being outside to breathe the fresh air and doing some exercises, which is really exciting for them.

Corrected: The email suggested that the geological field trip should change to a city's history natural history museum because there are more kinds of rocks and if the weather is bad, it's hard for students to go out. The woman in the conversation totally disagreed with this email. Firstly, she thinks that if that happens, students will lose valuable experience to find identical rocks in finding and identifying rocks using the knowledge in from the class. What's more, they will miss the nature contact contact with nature. Secondly, the woman pointed out that because they study all year inside, many students want to being be outside to breathe the fresh air and doing do some exercises, which is really exciting for them.

(将“history”改为“natural history”，因为原文中提到的是自然历史博物馆。将“to find identical rocks”改为“in finding and identifying rocks”，以更准确地表达女士的观点。将“in”改为“from”，使句子更通顺。将“the nature contact”改为“contact with nature”，以更自然地表达观点。将“being”改为“be”，使句子结构正确。将“doing”改为“do”，使句子结构正确。)

Revised (140 words): The email suggested that the geological field trip should change to a city's natural history museum because there are more kinds of rocks, and if the weather is bad, it's hard for students to go out. The woman in the conversation completely disagreed with this email. Firstly, she thinks that if that happens, students will lose the valuable experience of finding and identifying rocks using the knowledge from the class. Moreover, they will miss contact with nature. Secondly, the woman pointed out that since they study indoors all year, many students want to be outside to breathe fresh air and do some exercises, which is genuinely exciting for them. Overall, the woman believes that changing the field trip location would deprive students of essential hands-on experience and outdoor activities they eagerly anticipate.

6.思维导图

- Geological Field Trip Change
  - City's Natural History Museum
    - More kinds of rocks
    - Bad weather alternative
  - Woman's Disagreement
    - Valuable experience
      - Finding and identifying rocks
      - Knowledge from class
    - Contact with nature
    - Outdoor activities
      - Fresh air
      - Exercise
      - Excitement for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答相对清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议同学在练习口语时注意保持连贯性和一致的语速，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上涵盖了听力材料中的关键信息，并提供了一定程度的支持和例证。但在组织结构上还有改进空间。建议同学在练习时更加注重逻辑性和条理性，确保回答内容之间有明确的联系，并尝试提供更多相关细节以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The announcement talks about that school will cancel TV news program in school because fewer viewers on this program and young people would like to work with online technologies. The man in the conversation totally disagreed with this decision. Firstly, he said that in order to solve the less audience problem, this program can add many interesting contents such as events on school and interviewing local restaurants. Secondly, the man said that this program helps them get jobs in the future because they need many time to train to use the equipment. However, the online technology is easy to learn, so it's more reasonable for students to learn this TV show news program.

Corrected Answer: The announcement talks about states (改为更正式的词汇) that school the university (使用更具体的词汇) will cancel TV news program in school the TV news program because fewer viewers on this program of declining viewership (更简洁的表达) and young people would like to work with online technologies. The man in the conversation totally disagreed with this decision. Firstly, he said that in order to solve the less audience problem decreasing audience issue, (更准确的表达)this program can add many interesting contents such as events on school and interviewing local restaurants. Secondly, the man said that this program helps them get jobs in the future because they need many time a lot of time (语法错误) to train to use the equipment. However, the online technology is easy to learn, so it's more reasonable for students to learn this TV show news program.

Revised Answer (140 words): The announcement states that the university will cancel the TV news program due to declining viewership and students' preference for working with online technologies. The man in the conversation strongly disagreed with this decision. He argued that to address the decreasing audience issue, the program could incorporate more engaging content, such as covering school events and interviewing local restaurants. Furthermore, he mentioned that participating in this program would help students secure jobs in the future, as they require extensive training to operate the equipment involved. In contrast, online technologies are relatively easy to learn independently. Therefore, it is more beneficial for students to gain experience through the TV news program.

6.思维导图

- Announcement
  - University
  - Cancel TV news program
  - Declining viewership
  - Preference for online technologies

- Man's disagreement
  - Solution: engaging content
    - School events
    - Local restaurant interviews
  - Benefits for future jobs
    - Extensive training required
    - Equipment operation
  - Online technologies vs. TV news program
    - Easy to learn independently
    - More beneficial to gain experience through TV news program

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较快，有时会出现不恰当的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意语速和停顿的控制，以便更清晰地表达自己的观点。此外，尝试提高发音准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于大学计划建立一个无声房间（写作中心）进行了较好的阐述，并提到了男子安妮对此表示支持。然而，在回答中并未提及阅读和听力部分的具体内容。建议发言者在练习时注意在回答中涵盖阅读和听力部分的关键信息，以便更全面地回答问题。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Okay, so the university is planning to build a silent room, a writing center. The university plans to build a silent room, also known as a writing center.（将口语化的表达改为书面语，使其更正式。）

That is because the school doesn't have any other places for students to concentrate, and the writing center will be equipped with a computer but with no internet. This is because there are no other places in the school for students to focus, and the writing center will be equipped with computers without internet access.（改进了句子结构和词汇，使其更清晰。）

However, Anne, the man, likes the idea very much. However, the man named Anne likes the idea very much.（修正了表达方式，使其更自然。）

He thinks that the library he often goes to, he often got distracted because a lot of students whisper there. He thinks that in the library he frequently visits, he often gets distracted due to many students whispering there.（改进了句子结构，使其更流畅。）

And he thinks that it is good to have such a strict rule that students cannot speak in the writing center. He also believes that having a strict rule prohibiting students from speaking in the writing center is beneficial.（改进了句子结构和词汇，使其更清晰。）

That is good for him to focus. This helps him to concentrate better.（改进了句子结构，使其更简洁。）

But he thinks that it is not good to do not have online searching service. However, he thinks that not having an online search service is a disadvantage.（改进了句子结构和词汇，使其更清晰。）

Because if he wants to write a paper, he wants to have more information, it will be a waste of time to go somewhere else. This is because when writing a paper, he needs more information, and going elsewhere for it would be time-consuming.（改进了句子结构，使其更流畅。）

Revised Answer (140 words): The university plans to build a silent room, also known as a writing center. This is because there are no other places in the school for students to focus, and the writing center will be equipped with computers without internet access. However, the man named Anne likes the idea very much. He thinks that in the library he frequently visits, he often gets distracted due to many students whispering there. He also believes that having a strict rule prohibiting students from speaking in the writing center is beneficial. This helps him to concentrate better. However, he thinks that not having an online search service is a disadvantage. This is because when writing a paper, he needs more information, and going elsewhere for it would be time-consuming.

6.思维导图

- University plans
  - Silent room
  - Writing center

- Reasons for the plan
  - No other places to focus
  - Equipped with computers without internet access

- Man named Anne's opinion
  - Likes the idea
  - Library distractions: students whispering
  - Strict rule: no speaking in the writing center
  - Helps him concentrate better

- Disadvantage
  - No online search service
  - Time-consuming to find information elsewhere when writing a paper

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 2 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较快，句子之间的连接不够流畅。建议发言者在练习时注意语速，适当放慢，并在句子之间加入适当的停顿，以提高整体表达的清晰度。此外，注意正确发音单词，避免因发音不准确而导致的拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对阅读和听力材料进行了简要概述，但未能充分展示两者之间的关系。建议在回答中更明确地指出阅读和听力材料中的观点差异，并提供更多具体细节和例子来支持自己的观点。同时，注意组织语言结构，使回答更加连贯和有条理。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The author of the reading suggested the university to cancel the poetry reading club because there is nobody would like to attend the meeting at weekends and people could borrow poetry cd from library but the female speaker didn't agree with his opinions because she thinks that it is not as a matter of fact that many students are interested in participate the poetry reading but they don't know where the when the meeting is and another example is that the feeling of live poetry reading is different from the poetry recordings

Corrected Answer: The author of In the reading, suggested it was suggested for the university to cancel the poetry reading club because there is nobody would like to attend no one wanted to attend the meeting at weekends and people could borrow poetry cd CDs from library the library. However, the female speaker didn't agree with his opinions this suggestion because she thinks that, as a matter of fact, many students are interested in participate participating in the poetry reading, but they don't know where or when the meeting is. Another example is that the feeling of live poetry reading is different from listening to poetry recordings.

(原文中的“author”应改为“reading”，因为这里讨论的是阅读材料。同时，将“there is nobody would like to attend”修改为“no one wanted to attend”，使句子更加通顺。此外，将“participate”改为“participating in”，以符合语法规则。)

Revised Answer (140 words): In the reading, it was suggested for the university to cancel the poetry reading club because no one wanted to attend the meetings on weekends, and people could borrow poetry CDs from the library. However, the female speaker in the listening disagreed with this suggestion. She believes that many students are actually interested in participating in the poetry reading club, but they are not aware of the meeting's time and location. She also mentioned that attending a live poetry reading provides a unique experience that cannot be replicated by listening to poetry recordings. Therefore, she argues that the university should not cancel the poetry reading club and should instead work on promoting it more effectively to attract interested students.

6.思维导图

- Reading
  - Suggestion: Cancel poetry reading club
  - Reasons: No attendance, poetry CDs available in the library

- Listening
  - Female speaker's disagreement
    - Many students interested
      - Unaware of meeting time and location
    - Live poetry reading experience
      - Different from poetry recordings

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of reading and listening points
  - Female speaker's arguments against cancellation
  - Suggestion: Promote the club effectively to attract students

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of speech. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and minimize unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on accurate pronunciation to avoid spelling errors in their response.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on their ideas and providing more concrete evidence to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

The university plans to discontinue close the East Campus Cafeteria next year due to fewer student usage low student usage("fewer" should be replaced with "low" for a more natural-sounding phrase), but they don't have immediate plans for the building even though they have a lot of options about that. In a lesson conversation(replace "lesson" with "conversation" to accurately describe the context), however, the man disagrees with this idea. Firstly, he claimed that it is inconvenient for the students who have a lot of classes in the East Campus. For example, the older science classrooms and science labs are located in the East Campus, but the students don't have enough time to take buses to the West Campus to have a meal between the classes and take the bus back. So they need to have snacks all the day day long(replace "the day" with "day long" for a more natural-sounding phrase) instead of having a good meal in the cafe. Besides, if the university doesn't know what they gonna do are going to do(replace informal language "gonna do" with formal language "are going to do") with the building, they will just turn it worse. Just at the fitness center, they used to plan to turn it an into an(add "into" for proper grammar) art gallery, but now they leave it empty for over a year.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to close the East Campus Cafeteria next year due to low student usage, but they don't have immediate plans for the building even though they have many options. In a conversation, the man disagrees with this idea. He claims that closing the cafeteria is inconvenient for students with many classes on East Campus. For instance, science classrooms and labs are located there, and students don't have enough time to travel to West Campus for meals between classes. They would need to rely on snacks all day long instead of having proper meals at the cafeteria. Furthermore, if the university doesn't know what they are going to do with the building, it may worsen the situation. Similar to the fitness center, which was supposed to be converted into an art gallery but remains vacant after a year.

6.Mind Map

• University's decision

  • Close East Campus Cafeteria
  • Low student usage
  • No immediate plans for building

• Man's disagreement

  • Inconvenience for East Campus students
    • Science classrooms and labs
    • Limited time between classes
    • Snacks vs. proper meals
  • Uncertainty about building's future
    • Fitness center example
    • Vacant buildings on campus

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，回答的语言流畅度较好，但仍有部分不太自然的地方。建议在练习时注意保持一致的语速和适当的停顿。此外，尝试提高发音的准确性以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在解释动物冲突解决过程时可以更详细地描述。例如，在描述蛇争夺食物的过程中，可以提到它们如何通过非暴力方式解决问题。此外，在回答中加入更多关于阅读和听力材料的信息，以便更全面地回答问题。

5.语言使用

原文：Agnostic behavior Agonistic behavior (词汇错误，应为“Agonistic behavior”) is the activity animals engaged when resolving conflicts over resources. In the lecture, the professor gives an example of it. When there are two snakes called rattlesnakes who are standing in front of the same hole, both of them try to gain the food from that hole. So they start to face each other and lift their body up. The one seems to try to be as tall as possible, and so they started to push each other and try to gain control. What's interesting about it is that none tried to bite each other. So afterwards, when one snake pushed the other one to the ground and gained absolute control, he didn't bite the other snake, instead, it released it. So the lost one basically sneaked away while the winning one went down for the food.

修订版（140词）：

Agonistic behavior is a strategy animals use when resolving conflicts over resources. In the lecture, the professor provides an example involving two rattlesnakes competing for food in a hole. The snakes confront each other and raise their bodies, attempting to appear taller than their opponent. They then engage in a pushing contest to establish dominance without resorting to biting or causing harm. Interestingly, once a snake establishes dominance by pushing its rival to the ground, it does not bite or attack; instead, it releases its opponent. The defeated snake slithers away while the victorious one claims the food resource.

Answer statistics: {"words": 140, "unique_words": 96}

6.思维导图

• Agonistic behavior

  • Strategy
  • Resolving conflicts

• Rattlesnakes example

  • Competing for food
  • Confrontation
  • Dominance without harm

• Outcome

  • Release of defeated snake
  • Claiming food resource

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 26

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。建议在练习发音时注意一些容易混淆的单词，例如 "scaffolding" 应为 "sculpting"。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但可以进一步优化。在解释女生观点时，可以更明确地指出她认为减少课程规模会导致许多艺术专业学生无法参加这门课程。此外，在提到学生愿意为自己购买雕塑用品时，可以更具体地说明这将解决部门预算问题。总之，尽量提供更多细节和例子来支持观点，并确保内容紧密相关。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, the university plans to reduce the size of art class because now the interaction is very limited between students and the professor. Also, scaffolding supplies is too expensive and the university can't afford that. Well, the university plans to reduce the size of the art class because currently, the interaction between students and the professor is very limited. Also, sculpting supplies are too expensive, and the university can't afford them.（将 "scaffolding" 改为 "sculpting"，因为这是正确的词汇。同时，调整了句子结构以使其更自然。）（将 "scaffolding" 改为 "sculpting"，因为这是正确的词汇。同时，调整了句子结构以使其更自然。）

But the woman doesn't agree with this idea. First, he thinks this class is very important for some students who major in art. However, the woman disagrees with this plan. Firstly, she believes that this class is crucial for students majoring in art.（将 "he" 改为 "she"，因为指代的是女生。同时，使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）（将 "he" 改为 "she"，因为指代的是女生。同时，使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

And if the class size is reduced, many students will lose the ability to take that class. And many students will be willing to take that class even with limited available attention. If the class size is reduced, many students will not have the opportunity to enroll in it. Moreover, numerous students would still be willing to take the class despite receiving limited attention from the professor.（使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）（使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

Plus, because this class is very important for our students, students are willing to pay for their own scaffolding supplies, so it's not a problem. Furthermore, since this class is essential for art students, they would be willing to purchase their own sculpting supplies, eliminating the budget issue.（将 "scaffolding" 改为 "sculpting"，因为这是正确的词汇。同时，使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）（将 "scaffolding" 改为 "sculpting"，因为这是正确的词汇。同时，使用了更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to reduce the size of the art class because currently, the interaction between students and the professor is very limited. Also, sculpting supplies are too expensive, and the university can't afford them. However, the woman disagrees with this plan. Firstly, she believes that this class is crucial for students majoring in art. If the class size is reduced, many students will not have the opportunity to enroll in it. Moreover, numerous students would still be willing to take the class despite receiving limited attention from the professor. Furthermore, since this class is essential for art students, they would be willing to purchase their own sculpting supplies, eliminating the budget issue.

6.思维导图

- University's Plan
  - Reduce class size
  - Limited interaction
  - Expensive sculpting supplies

- Woman's Disagreement
  - Crucial for art students
  - Limited opportunity to enroll
  - Willing to take class despite limited attention
  - Willing to purchase own supplies

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语音较为清晰，流畅度尚可，但偶尔有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意以下几点：1）在练习时，尽量保持语速的稳定性；2）在适当的地方停顿，以便更好地表达观点；3）注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。通过以上建议的实践，相信发言者能够在表达方面取得更好的效果。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容较为连贯和有组织，观点之间的联系也比较明确。但仍有提升空间。建议发言者在练习时注意以下几点：1）尝试使用更多的连接词和短语来增强观点之间的联系；2）在解释原因时，可以提供更具体的例子或详细信息来支持观点；3）注意回答问题时要简洁明了，避免过多的重复。通过以上建议的实践，相信发言者能够在话题发展方面取得更好的效果。

5.语言使用

原文：A student proposed that the campus should install green roof on the campus library for two reasons. The first one is it can provide a layer of insulation to maintain the building's temperature. The second one is since it's an urban campus, it can provide a nice option for students to study outdoors. In the conversation, the girl disagreed with this idea for two reasons. The first one is it will become a financial burden since the old building is too old and the school needs to build new structures and change material to repair it. And the second one is it is hard to maintain it. Our coast, other coast will become a burden and it's traffic noisy outside. It will be hard to...

修改后：A student proposed installing a green roof on the campus library for two reasons. The first reason is that it can provide insulation to regulate the building's temperature. The second reason is that, being an urban campus, it offers a pleasant option for students to study outdoors. In the conversation, the woman disagreed with this idea for two reasons. The first reason is that it would become a financial burden since the old building requires new structures and material changes for repairs. The second reason is that maintenance would be difficult. Additional costs would become burdensome, and there's significant traffic noise outside, making concentration challenging.（修改了句子结构，词汇和语法，使表达更自然流畅。）

修改建议及解释： 1）将 "install green roof on" 修改为 "installing a green roof on"（使用动名词形式，并添加定冠词。） 2）将 "The first one is" 修改为 "The first reason is that"（使用更准确的表达方式。） 3）将 "since it's an urban campus" 修改为 "being an urban campus"（使用更自然的连接词。） 4）将 "the girl" 修改为 "the woman"（使用更恰当的称呼。） 5）将 "it will become a financial burden since the old building is too old" 修改为 "it would become a financial burden since the old building requires new structures and material changes for repairs"（使用条件句，并提供更详细的信息。） 6）将 "it is hard to maintain it. Our coast, other coast will become a burden and it's traffic noisy outside." 修改为 "maintenance would be difficult. Additional costs would become burdensome, and there's significant traffic noise outside, making concentration challenging."（修改句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

140字修改版：

A student proposed installing a green roof on the campus library for two reasons. The first reason is that it can provide insulation to regulate the building's temperature. The second reason is that, being an urban campus, it offers a pleasant option for students to study outdoors. In the conversation, the woman disagreed with this idea for two reasons. The first reason is that it would become a financial burden since the old building requires new structures and material changes for repairs. The second reason is that maintenance would be difficult. Additional costs would become burdensome, and there's significant traffic noise outside, making concentration challenging.

6.思维导图

- Green roof proposal
  - Insulation
  - Urban campus outdoor study space

- Woman's disagreement
  - Financial burden
    - Old building
    - New structures and material changes
  - Maintenance difficulty
    - Additional costs
    - Traffic noise

7.关键词

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在表达方面，整体上讲得比较清楚，但仍有一些不太流畅的地方。建议在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展

在话题发展方面，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的。但可以考虑在提供支持或举例时更加详细和具体，以便更好地支持观点。同时，在连接不同观点时可以使用更多的过渡词汇，使得回答更加流畅。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: While the university is planning to require students to consult an academic advisor before register for a class, first of all, recently, many students choose the wrong class with wrong level. Besides, talking to an advisor before choosing class can help the students with career goals. In the conversation, the man likes an idea. First of all, he says that it will be easier for students to pick the right course and avoid the mess that students choose what they want but not what they need. Besides, he says that knowing the class before taking the class benefits the students of their future. For example, once he wanted to take a class called rock and roll, but the professor says it will not be very helpful for his public policy major, so he quit.

Corrected Answer: While the university is planning considering (planning 改为 considering，使语言更自然) to require students to consult an academic advisor before register registering (register 改为 registering，使语法正确) for a class, first of all, recently, many students choose have chosen (choose 改为 have chosen，使时态一致) the wrong class with wrong level. Besides, talking to an advisor before choosing class a class (class 前加 a，使语法正确) can help the students with career goals. In the conversation, the man likes agrees with (likes 改为 agrees with，使语言更自然) the idea. First of all, he says that it will be easier for students to pick the right course and avoid the mess that students choose what they want but not what they need. Besides, he says that knowing the class before taking the class benefits the students of in (of 改为 in，使语法正确) their future. For example, once he wanted to take a class called rock and roll, but the professor says said (says 改为 said，使时态一致) it would not be very helpful for his public policy major, so he quit.

Revised Answer (140 words): The university is considering requiring students to consult an academic advisor before registering for a class since many students have recently chosen classes at inappropriate levels. Consulting an advisor can help students align their course selections with their career goals. In the conversation, the man agrees with this idea, stating that it would make it easier for students to select suitable courses and avoid enrolling in classes that do not meet their needs. He also mentions that being informed about a class before taking it can benefit students in their future endeavors. For instance, he once considered enrolling in a rock and roll class, but his professor advised him against it as it would not be beneficial for his public policy major, so he decided not to take it.

6.思维导图

- University's Consideration
    - Require consultation with academic advisor

- Reasons
    - Students choosing wrong classes
    - Align course selection with career goals

- Conversation
    - Man agrees with the idea
        - Easier course selection
        - Avoid unnecessary classes
        - Informed decisions for future benefits
    - Personal experience
        - Rock and roll class not beneficial for public policy major

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数: 23

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方需要改进。请注意正确发音单词，以及在适当的地方暂停。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，避免过多的停顿。练习朗读和模仿母语者的发音可以帮助提高这方面的表现。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有条理的，但可以进一步完善。在解释为什么小班课对学生更有益时，可以提供更多具体的例子和细节。同时，在谈论到达州立大学不便的问题时，可以更详细地说明这对学生产生的影响。通过增加这些信息，你的回答将更加完整和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The university's decision is about cancelling the Human Department's poetry course. The university has decided to cancel the Humanities Department's poetry course.（将“Human Department”改为“Humanities Department”，使句子更自然。）

This is because the course is declining enrollment and high absence. This is due to declining enrollment and high absenteeism in the course.（将“is declining enrollment”改为“due to declining enrollment”，使句子更自然。同时，将“high absence”改为“high absenteeism”以提高词汇水平。）

Secondly, it will publish a similar course at nearby state universities. Additionally, a similar course will be offered at nearby state universities.（将“publish”改为“offered”，使句子更自然。）

The boy is against the decision because he thinks that small size class can get more attention from professor and thus he can get feedback from them and then he will get an individualized feedback to improve his poetry. The student disagrees with the decision, arguing that smaller class sizes allow for more attention from the professor, leading to personalized feedback that helps improve their poetry skills.（重新组织句子，使其更自然且连贯。）

And second, he thinks the substitution is not necessary because it will take students more than an hour on the bus and students cannot afford cars. Furthermore, he believes that offering a similar course at a different university is not a viable solution, as it would require students to travel for over an hour by bus, and most students cannot afford cars.（重新组织句子，使其更自然且连贯。）

修订版（140字）：

The university has decided to cancel the Humanities Department's poetry course due to declining enrollment and high absenteeism. Additionally, a similar course will be offered at nearby state universities. The student disagrees with the decision, arguing that smaller class sizes allow for more attention from the professor, leading to personalized feedback that helps improve their poetry skills. Furthermore, he believes that offering a similar course at a different university is not a viable solution, as it would require students to travel for over an hour by bus, and most students cannot afford cars.

6.思维导图

• University's decision

  • Cancel poetry course
    • Declining enrollment
    • High absenteeism
  • Offer similar course at state universities

• Student's disagreement

  • Benefits of smaller class sizes
    • More attention from professor
    • Personalized feedback
  • Inconvenience of alternative option
    • Long travel time by bus
    • Students cannot afford cars

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意以下几点：1）尽量减少不必要的停顿，让语言更加流畅；2）注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。请继续努力提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但仍有提升空间。建议发言者在回答问题时注意以下几点：1）确保在回答中明确提出观点，并对其进行充分支持或举例说明；2）在表述过程中保持逻辑清晰，让听众更容易理解。请继续努力提高话题发展能力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading is about a proposal in which the contemporary literary classes shouldn't be a requirement for students. The reading passage discusses a proposal suggesting that contemporary literature classes should not be mandatory for students. (原句表述不够准确，修改为更自然的表达方式) The man listening disagrees with that for two reasons. The man in the listening passage disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. (改进了表达，使其更清晰明了) First of all, he thinks that if students read on their own, they may not analyze materials or think critically. They may just read for fun. However, if they read in classes, they need to think about how to write a paper or have discussions with their classmates. Moreover, he thinks that it is rare that students will not graduate on time. If students change their major, they have more work to do. However, in most cases, this is manageable and students can graduate on time.

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage discusses a proposal suggesting that contemporary literature classes should not be mandatory for students. The man in the listening passage disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. First, he believes that when students read independently, they might not analyze the material or develop critical thinking skills, as they may only read for entertainment purposes. In contrast, when students participate in literature classes, they are required to engage in activities such as writing papers and discussing ideas with peers. Furthermore, the man argues that it is uncommon for students to fail to graduate on time due to changing majors. Although changing majors can result in additional coursework, most students can manage the workload and still graduate within the expected timeframe.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Proposal
    - Contemporary literature classes not mandatory

- Listening Passage
  - Man disagrees
    - Reason 1: Independent reading vs. class participation
      - Analyzing material
      - Critical thinking skills
      - Writing papers
      - Discussing ideas with peers
    - Reason 2: Graduation on time
      - Changing majors
      - Additional coursework manageable

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方需要改进。建议在练习发音时注意语速和停顿，以便更流畅地表达观点。同时，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以进一步加强。在描述男子对家庭日活动的看法时，可以更详细地说明他的观点和原因。此外，在提供关于学术项目和日常生活方面的信息时，可以给出更多具体的例子来支持观点。总之，通过提供更多详细信息和例子，可以使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: The announcement mainly talks about a family day event that allows parents and students both to visit the campus. The announcement primarily discusses a Family Day event, enabling both parents and students to visit the campus.（将"mainly talks about"改为"primarily discusses"，使表达更自然。同时，调整句子结构以提高语言流畅度。）

Original: The men in the conversation greatly agree with this decision. The man in the conversation strongly agrees with this decision.（将"men"改为"man"，因为只有一个男子在谈话中。将"greatly agree"改为"strongly agrees"，使表达更自然。）

Original: Firstly, according to the announcement, school said that parents and students can get familiar with the academic programs. First, according to the announcement, the school states that parents and students can become familiar with the academic programs.（将"school said"改为"the school states"，使表达更自然。同时，将"get familiar with"改为"become familiar with"以提高语言流畅度。）

Original: The men's mothers want to know the classes the men will take, and his father wants to know the extra programs for the men, and the men want to know both. The man's mother wants to know about the classes he will take, his father is interested in additional programs available for him, and he wants to learn about both.（调整句子结构以提高语言流畅度，并将"the men"改为"he"。）

Original: Secondly, the man is willing to know the daily lives in the campus because he will spend a lot of time on them, and his parents want to know his living condition and eating condition too. Secondly, the man is eager to learn about daily life on campus since he will spend a significant amount of time there, and his parents are also curious about his living and eating conditions.（将"willing to know"改为"eager to learn about"，使表达更自然。同时，调整句子结构以提高语言流畅度。）

Revised answer (140 words):

The announcement primarily discusses a Family Day event, enabling both parents and students to visit the campus. The man in the conversation strongly agrees with this decision. First, according to the announcement, the school states that parents and students can become familiar with the academic programs. The man's mother wants to know about the classes he will take, his father is interested in additional programs available for him, and he wants to learn about both. Secondly, the man is eager to learn about daily life on campus since he will spend a significant amount of time there, and his parents are also curious about his living and eating conditions. This event provides an excellent opportunity for families to gain insight into various aspects of university life, ensuring a better understanding of their children's experiences.

6.思维导图

- Family Day Event
  - Parents and students
    - Visit campus
  - Man's opinion
    - Strongly agrees
      - Academic programs
        - Mother: classes
        - Father: additional programs
        - Man: both
      - Daily life on campus
        - Living conditions
        - Eating conditions

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 26

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。建议在练习时注意连贯性和自然的停顿，以提高整体表达效果。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了阅读和听力材料的主要信息，组织结构也较为清晰。但可以在提到学生运动员的好处时给出更具体的例子，以增强说服力。同时，尝试使用更多的连接词来使回答更连贯。

5.语言使用

Original: The university plans to have a summer sports program for little kids young children(“little kids”这个说法较为口语化，建议改为“young children”以显得更正式). It gives college students a chance to work with the kids and the income can be used to improve the sports equipment. The woman likes the plan. She thinks it's a good idea for the kids and the students athletes student athletes(应该是“student athletes”，而不是“students athletes”) because it gives them exercise opportunities and a real coaching experience. And a lot of students want to become coaches after they graduate. She is also happy that the money can help to add more seats for the fans. The guy is also excited for the new bleachers and stuff. He says it sounds like a good idea.

Revised (140 words): The university plans to launch a summer sports program for young children, providing college students with an opportunity to work with these children while generating revenue to improve sports facilities. The woman appreciates this initiative, as she believes it benefits both young children and student athletes by offering them practical coaching experience, which many students aspire to pursue after graduation. Furthermore, she is pleased that the funds raised can be utilized to increase seating capacity for spectators. The man shares her enthusiasm, expressing excitement about the prospect of new bleachers and other improvements, ultimately agreeing that it is an excellent idea.

6.思维导图

- Summer Sports Program
  - Young children
  - College students
    - Work with children
    - Coaching experience
  - Revenue
    - Improve sports facilities
    - Increase seating capacity

- Woman's opinion
  - Benefits for children and student athletes
  - Funds for facility improvements

- Man's opinion
  - Excitement for new bleachers and improvements

7.关键词