TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语速不够流畅，有时会出现停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意语速的控制，尽量保持一致的速度，避免不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在发音方面也需要改进，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者的回答基本上是连贯和有组织的，能够明确地表达观点，并提供了一定的支持和例证。但是，在描述对话中女士的观点时，发言者错误地将“old man”作为对话中男士的代称。建议在总结对话内容时注意准确描述参与者。此外，在解释女士观点原因时，可以更详细地说明她提到的学生责任感以及资源浪费问题。

5.语言使用

Original: The letter said universities should ban bikes in the center of their campus, because firstly the sidewalks connecting the academic buildings have been narrowed, so it is not so safe for students to work there because there is a little room, and in order to fill the room for students, students who ride their bikes have to pay a fine. In the conversation, the old man disagreed with the opinion, because firstly, he thinks students can work there anyway, and they are able to go through it without any problems, they also have some responsibilities, so they don't need the room. Secondly, he thinks campus security has to stand all the time, it is a waste of campus resources and a waste of campus security time, so it is not a good idea.

Corrected: The letter said universities should ban bikes in the center of their campus, because firstlyfirst, the sidewalks connecting the academic buildings have been narrowednarrow, so it is not so safe for students to workwalk there because there is a littlelittle room(删除“a”，使语句更自然). In order to fillcreate room for students, those who ride their bikes should pay a fine. In the conversation, the old manman disagreed with the opinion, because firstly, first, he thinks students can workwalk there anyway, and they are able to go through it without any problems(改为“walk”，与原文保持一致). They also have some responsibilities, so they don't need the room. Secondly, he thinks campus security has to stand all the time, which is a waste of campus resources and campus security's time(添加逗号，使语句更流畅), so it is not a good idea.

Revised (140 words): The letter proposed that universities should ban bikes in the center of their campus. The main reason was that the narrow sidewalks connecting academic buildings make it unsafe for students to walk due to limited space. To enforce this rule, students who ride their bikes should pay a fine. However, in the conversation, the man disagreed with this proposal. He argued that most students can walk in that area without any issues and are responsible enough to navigate safely. Therefore, additional space is unnecessary. Furthermore, he pointed out that having campus security monitor this area constantly would be a waste of resources and their time. Thus, he concluded that implementing such a rule would not be a good idea.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Ban bikes in the center of campus
  - Narrow sidewalks
  - Unsafe for students to walk
  - Enforce rule with fines

- Conversation
  - Man's disagreement
    - Students can walk safely anyway
    - Responsible behavior
    - Unnecessary additional space
    - Campus security monitoring is a waste of resources and time
  - Conclusion: Not a good idea

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some areas where the speaker could improve. For instance, the speaker should work on reducing unnecessary pauses and ensuring that their pronunciation is accurate to avoid any confusion. Additionally, the speaker should focus on maintaining a natural tone throughout their response.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of topic development. The speaker should ensure that they fully address all aspects of the question and provide more specific examples or details to support their points. This will help to create a more comprehensive and persuasive response.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The student proposed that the university need to ban bikes in the center of the campus, because there's no room for students who still walk into the classes and it is unsafe for them, so the students who still ride the bikes need to pay a fine. The student proposed that the university should ban bikes in the center of campus, as there is limited space for students walking to class, making it unsafe. Therefore, those who continue to ride bikes should be fined. (Changed "need" to "should" for better grammar; rephrased sentence for clarity and conciseness)

In the listening, however, the woman doesn't like this idea. In the listening passage, however, the woman disagrees with this idea. (Rephrased for better clarity and formality)

First, she believed that the university only need to put few signs politely asking the students to walk their bikes, First, she believes that the university only needs to place a few signs politely asking students to walk their bikes, (Corrected verb tense and grammar; added "a" before "few")

because most of the students are responsible and they already do it. because most students are responsible and already do so. (Removed unnecessary words; replaced "it" with "so" for clarity)

This is only for those who don't. This would be aimed at those who don't. (Rephrased for better clarity)

Besides, she believed that this enforcement won't work. Additionally, she believes that this enforcement would not be effective. (Changed "besides" to "additionally"; corrected verb tense; rephrased for better clarity and formality)

It is a waste of resources for the campus security to stand there all the day to watch the situation. It would be a waste of resources for campus security to monitor the area all day. (Rephrased for better clarity and conciseness)

They have more important activities to do. They have more important tasks to perform. (Rephrased for better word choice)

This won't be a good use of time for them. This would not be an efficient use of their time. (Rephrased for better clarity and formality)

Moreover, students won't like this idea either. Furthermore, students would not appreciate this idea either. (Changed "moreover" to "furthermore"; rephrased for better formality)

That's the woman's reason. Those are the woman's reasons. (Changed "that's" to "those are" for better clarity and formality; corrected plural form)

Revised Answer (140 words): The student proposed that the university should ban bikes in the center of campus, as there is limited space for students walking to class, making it unsafe. Therefore, those who continue to ride bikes should be fined. In the listening passage, however, the woman disagrees with this idea. First, she believes that the university only needs to place a few signs politely asking students to walk their bikes, because most students are responsible and already do so. This would be aimed at those who don't. Additionally, she believes that this enforcement would not be effective. It would be a waste of resources for campus security to monitor the area all day. They have more important tasks to perform. This would not be an efficient use of their time.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Ban bikes in center of campus
  - Limited space for walking students
  - Unsafe conditions
  - Fines for rule violators

- Woman's disagreement
  - Polite signs instead of ban
  - Responsible students already walk bikes
  - Enforcement not effective
  - Waste of resources for campus security
  - Students would not appreciate the idea

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 2 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

17. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语速较快，有时会出现不恰当的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意语速和停顿的控制，以便更清晰地表达自己的观点。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于提案和女士的观点进行了总结，但在解释女士观点的原因时，表述不够清晰和有条理。建议在练习时注意组织思路，确保在解释原因时能够提供充分的支持和例子。同时，注意使用恰当的连接词，使得观点之间的联系更加明显。

5.语言使用

原文：The university should ban bikes in the center of our campus, because firstly, the sidewalks connecting the academic buildings have been narrowed, so it is not so safe for students who are working there, because there is little room, and to ensure the rule, so students should pay a fine to them. The university should consider banning bikes in the center of campus due to safety concerns. The narrow sidewalks connecting academic buildings pose a risk for students walking in the area, as there is limited space. To enforce this rule, students caught riding their bikes in this area could be fined.（原文中的表述较为紧凑，建议将句子拆分，以便更清晰地表达观点。同时，注意使用更为正式的词汇。）（在修改后的版本中，我们将句子进行了拆分，并使用了更正式的词汇。）

In the conversation, the woman disagreed with the opinion, because firstly, she thinks students can solve any problems, so they can go through these problems, and don't need to worry about their safety. In the conversation, the woman disagrees with the proposal as she believes that most students already walk their bikes and can navigate through any potential issues without compromising safety.（原文中的表述较为简化，建议使用更具体的描述来解释女士的观点。）（在修改后的版本中，我们使用了更具体的描述来解释女士的观点。）

Second, it will waste campus security, because they don't understand all the time, so it is wasting their time and wasting campus resources, and it can use other ways to make it more easier, so it is necessary. Secondly, she argues that enforcing the ban would be a waste of campus security resources as officers have more important tasks to attend to. Instead, she suggests implementing alternative measures such as posting signs asking students to walk their bikes in the area.（原文中的表述较为混乱，建议重新组织句子结构，并使用更恰当的词汇。）（在修改后的版本中，我们重新组织了句子结构，并使用了更恰当的词汇。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university should consider banning bikes in the center of campus due to safety concerns. The narrow sidewalks connecting academic buildings pose a risk for students walking in the area, as there is limited space. To enforce this rule, students caught riding their bikes in this area could be fined. In the conversation, the woman disagrees with the proposal as she believes that most students already walk their bikes and can navigate through any potential issues without compromising safety. Secondly, she argues that enforcing the ban would be a waste of campus security resources as officers have more important tasks to attend to. Instead, she suggests implementing alternative measures such as posting signs asking students to walk their bikes in the area.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Ban bikes in the center of campus
  - Narrow sidewalks
  - Safety concerns
  - Fines for rule enforcement

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Most students walk their bikes
  - No significant safety issues

- Alternative measures
  - Posting signs
  - Walking bikes in the area

- Campus security resources
  - More important tasks
  - Waste of resources if enforcing ban

7.关键词