TOEFL TPO 52 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the idea expressed in the newspaper. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result in inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should focus on proper punctuation usage and work on accurate pronunciation to avoid spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details or examples to further support the woman's opinion. To enhance topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons behind the woman's disagreement with the proposal and provide more concrete examples of how other professions could be influential speakers at the graduation ceremony.

5.Language Use

The student proposed that they should have a business leader for the graduation ceremony because a business leader is always means for professional success and this will reinforce the community that their program is the best and the biggest program of the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she thinks business people always come for the graduation ceremony. They should have other occupations and also influential jobs to speak for the graduation ceremony like teachers. Secondly, she thinks that the program is already quite big and well-known and it doesn't need to have a business leader on the ceremony to attract extra attention. However, the education of the student is very important.

The student proposed that they should have a business leader prominent business figure for the graduation ceremony because a business leader prominent business figure always means symbolizes professional success(changed "means" to "symbolizes" for better word choice), and this will reinforce(added comma for clarity) to the community that their program is the best and biggest in the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she believes(changed "thinks" to "believes" for variety) that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies(clarified context). They should invite speakers from other influential professions, such as teachers. Secondly, she contends that since the program is already well-established and widely recognized, it doesn't require a business leader at the ceremony to garner additional attention. Instead, she emphasizes the importance of focusing on students' education.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student proposed that they should have a prominent business figure for the graduation ceremony because such a figure symbolizes professional success, and this will reinforce to the community that their program is the best and biggest in the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she believes that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies and suggests inviting speakers from other influential professions, such as teachers. Secondly, she contends that since the program is already well-established and widely recognized, it doesn't require a business leader at the ceremony to garner additional attention. Instead, she emphasizes the importance of focusing on students' education and believes that showcasing other professions would provide a more diverse and enriching experience for graduates.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Prominent business figure
  - Symbolizes professional success
  - Reinforce program's reputation

- Woman's disagreement
  - Business people always speak at ceremonies
  - Invite other influential professions (e.g., teachers)

- Program's current status
  - Well-established and widely recognized
  - Doesn't require additional attention from a business leader

- Emphasis on students' education
  - Showcasing other professions for diversity and enrichment

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语速和语调基本上是清晰流畅的，但偶尔会有些停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。此外，尝试改善发音准确性以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 Regarding topic development, the speaker provided a coherent response and mentioned the woman's disagreement with the idea of inviting business leaders to the graduation ceremony. However, the response could be better organized by clearly stating the woman's opinion and then elaborating on her reasons for holding that opinion. To improve, the speaker should focus on providing more specific examples from the listening passage to support their points, such as mentioning how inviting a local teacher could draw attention to the education program. This would make the response more well-rounded and persuasive.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading text says that the businessmen should be invited to the graduate ceremony more because of their success, and for instance, it would enhance the community for the business. The reading passage suggests that business leaders should be invited to the graduation ceremony due to their success, which would benefit the business community.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，同时保持语法准确性。）

But the woman in the lecture disagreed with that. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea.（用词更准确，表达更自然。）

She thinks that there are already plenty of businessmen being invited to the ceremony because it is always the businessmen do it, and she wants to invite some teachers to participate in this. She believes that many business leaders have already been invited to such ceremonies and suggests inviting teachers instead.（简化句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

And that will make the teachers more properly train our students in it. This would highlight the importance of teachers in shaping students' education.（改进句子结构和用词，使表达更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage suggests that business leaders should be invited to the graduation ceremony due to their success, which would benefit the business community. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this idea. She believes that many business leaders have already been invited to such ceremonies and suggests inviting teachers instead. This would highlight the importance of teachers in shaping students' education. The woman also argues that the business program is already well-known and does not need additional publicity from a graduation speaker. On the other hand, the education program could benefit from the increased attention that a local teacher's speech would bring. In conclusion, the woman's opinion is that inviting a teacher to speak at the graduation ceremony would provide more variety and help promote the university's education program.

6.思维导图

- Reading Passage
  - Business leaders
  - Graduation ceremony
  - Success
  - Benefit business community

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the idea
  - Many business leaders already invited
  - Suggests inviting teachers instead
  - Importance of teachers in education

- Education Program
  - Needs more attention and publicity
  - Local teacher's speech would help promote the program

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the points made. To strengthen topic development, the speaker should consider incorporating more detailed explanations or examples to further illustrate their points and make their argument more persuasive.

5.Language Use

Original: The newspaper stressed that the university should invite a business leader to be graduation speakers. The newspaper emphasized that the university should invite a business leader as the graduation speaker. (Changed "stressed" to "emphasized" and "to be graduation speakers" to "as the graduation speaker" for better sentence structure and clarity.)

Original: First, he points out that although business leaders represent the meaning of professional success, the graduation ceremony always invites business leaders. First, she points out that even though business leaders embody professional success, they are consistently invited to speak at graduation ceremonies. (Corrected pronoun from "he" to "she," rephrased for clarity and improved sentence structure.)

Original: Moreover, teachers who are influential and place an important role in real world can also be an excellent alternative for students to invite. Furthermore, influential teachers who play a significant role in the real world could also be excellent alternatives for students to consider inviting. (Improved sentence structure and word choice.)

Original: Second, the woman emphasizes that advertising business programs cannot attract more students as they are already well-known, but advertisements on teacher training programs will be more efficient for students to attract more teachers to enroll in these programs. Second, the woman emphasizes that promoting business programs may not attract more students since they are already well-known; however, advertising teacher training programs could be more effective in attracting prospective teachers to enroll. (Improved sentence structure and clarity.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The newspaper emphasized that the university should invite a business leader as the graduation speaker. The woman disagrees with this suggestion. First, she points out that even though business leaders embody professional success, they are consistently invited to speak at graduation ceremonies. Furthermore, influential teachers who play a significant role in the real world could also be excellent alternatives for students to consider inviting. Second, the woman emphasizes that promoting business programs may not attract more students since they are already well-known; however, advertising teacher training programs could be more effective in attracting prospective teachers to enroll. By considering these points, the university could diversify its choice of graduation speakers and better showcase its various programs, ultimately achieving a more balanced and engaging ceremony for all attendees.

6.Mind Map

- Disagreement
  - Business leaders consistently invited
  - Influential teachers as alternatives

- Reasons
  - Business programs already well-known
  - Teacher training programs need promotion

- Suggestion
  - Diversify graduation speakers
  - Showcase various programs

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度较好，但仍有一些不必要的停顿。建议发言者继续练习，提高语速和连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意正确发音，避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论据方面还有待加强。建议发言者在回答问题时更加关注逻辑性和条理性，明确表达观点，并给出更具说服力的例子和论据来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The woman opposes the proposal for two reasons. First of all, she thinks the university always invites business executives to give a speech, but other professionals can't be as influential. The woman opposes the proposal for two reasons. First of all, she believes that the university consistently invites business executives to deliver speeches, while other professionals who could be equally influential are overlooked.（建议使用更自然的表达方式，并使用更高级的词汇。）

And she suggests the campus to invite teachers, for example. For instance, she suggests that the university should consider inviting teachers.（改进句子结构，使其更自然。）

What's more, she thinks the business program in this university is big enough, Furthermore, she believes that the business program at this university is already well-established,（使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

and some other department also needs attention, and that other departments also require attention,（改进句子结构，使其更自然。）

like the university can ask professionals in educational background to give a speech, such as inviting professionals with an educational background to deliver speeches,（改进句子结构，使其更自然。）

and that will be contributing to the educational program in the school, which is also a great one. which would contribute to the promotion of the university's education program, which is also exceptional.（使用更高级的词汇和更自然的表达方式。）

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman opposes the proposal for two reasons. First of all, she believes that the university consistently invites business executives to deliver speeches, while other professionals who could be equally influential are overlooked. For instance, she suggests that the university should consider inviting teachers. Furthermore, she believes that the business program at this university is already well-established, and that other departments also require attention, such as inviting professionals with an educational background to deliver speeches, which would contribute to the promotion of the university's education program, which is also exceptional.

6.思维导图

- Woman's Opinion
  - Opposes proposal
  - Two reasons
    - Consistent invitation of business executives
      - Overlooking other influential professionals
        - Example: Teachers
    - Business program well-established
      - Other departments require attention
        - Example: Education program
          - Inviting professionals with educational background
          - Promotion of the university's education program

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

作为一名托福老师，从表达方面来看，这位考生的发言较为清晰，语速稳定，但偶尔有停顿。建议考生在练习时注意提高发音准确性，避免不必要的停顿，以提高整体表达能力。

4.话题发展 The speaking answer provides a clear opinion of the woman and explains her reasons for holding that opinion. However, it could be more coherent and well-organized by connecting the ideas more effectively and providing more specific examples or support for the woman's opinion. To improve, the speaker should focus on creating a more logical flow of ideas and elaborating on the reasons given by the woman in the conversation.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The policy that the university should invite a business leader to speak at this year's graduation ceremony. The woman disagrees with the idea of inviting a business leader to speak at the graduation ceremony. (原文没有明确表示女士的观点，修改后更清晰地表达了女士的观点。)

Corrected Answer: The woman disagrees with the idea of inviting a business leader to speak at the graduation ceremony.

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman expresses her disagreement with the idea of inviting a business leader to speak at this year's graduation ceremony. She believes that other professions, such as teachers, can also be considered influential and successful. She argues that the university should consider having someone from another profession speak since business leaders always do it. Additionally, she thinks that the business program is already quite big and well-known, so it doesn't need the extra attention or free advertising that a graduation speaker would bring. Instead, she suggests that the education program could benefit from the free publicity, as it is a great teacher training program but not as well-known. Having a local teacher as a speaker could draw attention to it and help promote the education program at the university.

6.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - Inviting business leader

- Other professions
  - Teachers
  - Influential and successful

- Business program
  - Already big and well-known

- Education program
  - Benefit from free publicity
  - Local teacher as speaker

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 话题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少停顿。同时注意一些发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在提到与教育相关的观点时，可以更详细地说明为什么教育专业也应该有机会在毕业典礼上发言。此外，在总结时可以更明确地指出女生的观点和原因。为了提高话题发展能力，建议多加练习并尝试使用更多的连接词和例子来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original: In the ratings, In the conversation, the students proposed that the school should let business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies because they are successful and influential and they can advertise in the school's business program. The woman in the conversation doesn't agree with this proposal. She thinks that for the first reasons, there is always business students who speak at the ceremonies and it is not fair because other professions are also successful, like educational or teachers. They don't have the chance to speak at the ceremonies. And the second reason is that the business program in the school is already big and well-known. It doesn't really need any advertising. But there are educational programs that are really good but not well-known by lots of people. They are the programs that should be advertised.

(将“ratings”改为“conversation”，因为这里是在讨论一封信，而不是评分。)

Revised (140 words):

In the conversation, students proposed inviting business leaders to speak at graduation ceremonies due to their success, influence, and ability to promote the school's business program. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. She believes that firstly, it's unfair as business speakers always dominate these events, while other successful professionals like educators don't get a chance to speak. Secondly, she argues that the already prominent business program doesn't need further advertising, whereas lesser-known but high-quality educational programs could benefit from increased exposure. Thus, she suggests giving other professions an opportunity to speak at graduation ceremonies to promote a more diverse range of programs.

6.思维导图

• Conversation
  • Business leaders
    • Success
    • Influence
    • Promote business program
  • Woman's disagreement
    • Unfairness
      • Dominance of business speakers
      • Other successful professionals (educators)
    • Advertising needs
      • Prominent business program
      • Lesser-known educational programs

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方有不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高语音连贯性和减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的阐述，提出了与女士观点相关的理由。然而，在组织结构上还有改进空间。建议发言者在练习时注意明确表达观点，并在给出理由时保持条理清晰。同时，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来增强论述之间的联系。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: opinion in the letter. The woman expresses her opinion on the idea presented in the letter. (修改了句子结构，使其更自然) The woman they said there is always a business person to speak in the year's graduation ceremony and it's time to have a change. Maybe they can give the chance to other influential jobs such as teachers. As for the statement that in the letter that the business person can reinforce business program, the woman states that the business program was already big and doesn't need to be improved by the free advertisement. However, education, because it's not well known, it can benefit greatly from this free advertisement and gain popularity.

Revised Answer: The woman expresses her opinion on the idea presented in the letter, stating that there is always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies, and it's time for a change. She suggests giving opportunities to other influential professions, such as teachers. Regarding the statement in the letter about a business person reinforcing the business program, she argues that since it is already well-established, it doesn't need further improvement through free advertisement. On the other hand, she believes that education, being less well-known, could greatly benefit from this exposure and gain popularity.

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman disagrees with the idea presented in the letter and believes it's time for a change since there is always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies. She suggests considering other influential professions like teachers for this role. She argues that although having a business leader as a speaker might reinforce the business program, it is already well-established and doesn't need further improvement through free advertisement. Instead, she believes that education, being less well-known, could greatly benefit from this exposure and gain popularity. By inviting a local teacher as a speaker, the university could draw attention to its education program, which would be a more effective use of the opportunity.

6.思维导图

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the letter
  - Time for a change

- Other professions
  - Teachers as speakers

- Business program
  - Already well-established
  - Doesn't need free advertisement

- Education program
  - Less well-known
  - Could benefit from exposure

7.关键词