TOEFL TPO 29 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 26

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速稳定，仅有少量停顿。但是，有些地方的标点使用不当，导致了不恰当的停顿。此外，部分拼写错误是由于发音不准确造成的。建议发言者在练习时注意提高发音准确性，并在适当的地方停顿。

4.话题发展 The speaker provided a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The summary of the proposal, the woman's opinion, and the reasons for her opinion were all well-explained. To improve further, the speaker could focus on refining their language use and delivery to make their response even more polished and fluent.

5.语言使用

Original: The proposal suggests removing these old bicycles and disposing of them to free up space, because these bicycles have been forgotten by their owners. The woman strongly supports this viewpoint for two reasons. First, she says that these bicycles are in poor condition as they are missing parts or are lost. Secondly, she suggests the university could attach notes requesting students to remove these bicycles within two weeks or will be removed by security. Second, she mentions that in front of the dining hall, the area is always crowded with these old bicycles, making it difficult to find a parking space for their bikes. Additionally, she often has to park her bike at another building and then walk to the dining hall.

Corrected: The proposal suggests removingeliminating these old bicycles and disposing of them to free up space, because these bicycles have been forgotten by their owners. The woman strongly supports this viewpoint for two reasons. First, she says that these bicycles are in poor condition as they are missing parts or are losthave been abandoned(因为“失去”一词在这里不太合适，应该使用“被遗弃”以更准确地描述这些自行车的状态). Secondly, she suggests the university could attach notes requesting students to remove these bicycles within two weeks or will be removedthey will be removed by security. Second,Furthermore,(为了避免重复使用"Secondly"，可以使用"Furthermore"来表示进一步的论点) she mentions that in front of the dining hall, the area is always crowded with these old bicycles, making it difficult to find a parking space for their bikes. Additionally, she often has to park her bike at another building and then walk to the dining hall.

Revised (140 words): The proposal suggests eliminating these old bicycles and disposing of them to free up space, as they have been forgotten by their owners. The woman strongly supports this viewpoint for two reasons. First, she states that these bicycles are in poor condition, as they are missing parts or have been abandoned. Secondly, she suggests that the university could attach notes requesting students to remove these bicycles within two weeks; otherwise, they will be removed by security. Furthermore, she mentions that the area in front of the dining hall is always crowded with these old bicycles, making it difficult for students to find parking spaces for their bikes. As a result, she often has to park her bike at another building and walk to the dining hall, which highlights the need for action on this issue.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Eliminate old bicycles
  - Dispose of them
  - Free up space

- Woman's opinion
  - Strongly supports
  - Reasons
    - Poor condition
      - Missing parts
      - Abandoned
    - University action
      - Attach notes
      - Two-week deadline
      - Security removal
    - Crowded area
      - Dining hall
      - Difficulty finding parking spaces
      - Parking at another building and walking

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3.5

• Topic Development: 3.5

• Language Use: 3.5

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 27

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are a few instances where the speaker could improve their delivery by avoiding unnecessary pauses and ensuring accurate pronunciation of certain words. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more smoothly and focus on proper pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively summarizes the proposal and explains the woman's opinion and reasons for holding that opinion. To further improve topic development, the speaker could provide more specific details from the listening passage to strengthen their argument, such as mentioning the man's initial concern about fairness or emphasizing the inconvenience caused by the lack of available bike parking spaces.

5.Language Use

Original: A student suggests the university to remove bikes that haven't been touched for a long time from the bike racks, since their owners probably forget their existence. Additionally, more space will be made available for students who are actually using bikes and need places to park. The woman in the conversation agrees with this suggestion.

Corrected: A student suggests proposes to the university to remove bikes that haven't been touched for a long time from the bike racks, since their owners probably forget have forgotten their existence. Additionally, more space will be made available for students who are actually using bikes and need places to park. The woman in the conversation agrees with this suggestion.

Reasons/Explanations: "suggests" should be replaced with "proposes to" for a more natural-sounding language style. "forget" should be changed to "have forgotten" to maintain proper grammar.

Revised Answer (140 words):

A student proposes to the university to remove bicycles that have not been used for an extended period from the campus bike racks, as their owners have likely forgotten about them. This action would create additional parking spaces for students actively using bicycles and requiring parking spots. The woman in the conversation supports this proposal.

She believes it is a safe assumption because many of these bikes are rusty or have missing parts, indicating they have been abandoned. To address any concerns, she suggests that the university could attach a two-week notice on each bike, giving owners an opportunity to claim them before removal. Furthermore, she emphasizes the difficulty of finding available parking spaces near popular locations like the dining hall and explains that she often has to park her bike at another building and walk due to limited parking options.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Remove unused bikes
  - Free up parking spaces

- Woman's opinion
  - Agrees with proposal
  - Reasons:
    - Safe assumption (rusty, missing parts)
    - Two-week notice suggestion
    - Parking difficulty (dining hall example)

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of the speech. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace and minimizing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples and support for the points made. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on key points and incorporating more detailed examples to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: Some students proposed that the university should remove old bicycles from the bicycle racks since their owners have already forgotten them and it could free up those spaces for someone who really need to park their bicycles and the women really think this assumption is quite essential and safe since there are numerous bicycles have been left for years and those security members could notify students before removing those bicycles. Some students proposed that the university should remove old bicycles from the bicycle racks because their owners have apparently forgotten them, and this would free up space for those who genuinely need to park their bikes. The woman believes that this assumption is reasonable and safe, as numerous bikes have been abandoned for years. She suggests that security personnel could notify students before removing the bikes. (Changed "since" to "because" for better flow, corrected grammar, and rephrased sentences for clarity)

What's more the women specifically take the dining hall as an example. Furthermore, the woman specifically cites the dining hall as an example. (Corrected grammar and rephrased sentence for clarity)

There are a lot of students could not find spaces to park their bicycles so that they need to park their bicycles in another building instead of walk over to the dining house. Many students cannot find spaces to park their bikes, forcing them to park in another building and walk to the dining hall. (Simplified sentence structure and corrected grammar)

It's really a waste of time so clean up those bicycles and provide spaces for students is quite essential. This is a waste of time, so clearing the bike racks and providing spaces for students is crucial. (Corrected grammar and rephrased sentence for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): Some students proposed that the university should remove old bicycles from the bicycle racks because their owners have apparently forgotten them, and this would free up space for those who genuinely need to park their bikes. The woman believes that this assumption is reasonable and safe, as numerous bikes have been abandoned for years. She suggests that security personnel could notify students before removing the bikes. Furthermore, the woman specifically cites the dining hall as an example. Many students cannot find spaces to park their bikes, forcing them to park in another building and walk to the dining hall. This is a waste of time, so clearing the bike racks and providing spaces for students is crucial.

6.Mind Map

• Proposal

  • Remove old bicycles
  • Free up space

• Woman's opinion

  • Reasonable and safe assumption
  • Security personnel notification

• Example

  • Dining hall
  • Lack of parking spaces
  • Inconvenience

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there is room for improvement in pronunciation and reducing pauses. To enhance delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more naturally and focus on accurate pronunciation of words.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific details from the listening passage to support their points. Additionally, the speaker should ensure that they accurately summarize the proposal in the letter before stating the woman's opinion. Practicing paraphrasing and summarizing key points from both the reading and listening passages will help improve topic development.

5.Language Use

Original: The letter suggests that universities should remove old bicycles from campus parking lots. The woman agrees with the proposal. First, the woman points out that some bicycles have missing parts, or they are so rusty since they have been outside for a long time, which makes it more difficult for them for future use. And probably it's because they are forgotten by their owners. The university already attached notes to tell the owner to take their bicycles, otherwise they will be removed in two weeks before as a sign for them. Second, the woman stressed that there aren't any parking places for students who ride their bicycles, especially in front of a dining hall, as they have to move to another student for parking, as this will free up space.

Corrected: The letter suggests that universities should remove old bicycles from campus parking lotsracks(more accurate term). The woman agrees with the proposal. First, the woman points out that some bicycles have missing parts, or they are so rusty sincebecause(improves sentence flow) they have been outside for a long time, which makes it more difficult for them for future useto be used in the future(improves sentence structure). And probably it's becauseThis is likely because(improves sentence flow) they are forgotten by their owners. The university already attached notescould attach notes(corrects tense) to tell the owner to take their bicycles, otherwise they will be removed in two weeks before as a sign for themwithin two weeks as a warning(improves clarity). Second, the woman stressed that there aren't any parking places for students who ride their bicycles, especially in front of a dining hall, as they have to move to another student for parkingpark at another building(improves clarity), as this will free up space.

Revised (140 words): The letter suggests that universities should remove old bicycles from campus racks. The woman agrees with the proposal. First, she points out that some bicycles have missing parts or are extremely rusty because they have been outside for a long time, making it difficult for them to be used in the future. This is likely because they have been forgotten by their owners. The university could attach notes to inform the owners to remove their bicycles; otherwise, they will be removed within two weeks as a warning. Second, the woman emphasizes the lack of available parking spaces for students who ride their bicycles, particularly in front of the dining hall. She suggests that removing these abandoned bikes would free up space and allow students to park closer to their desired locations.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Remove old bicycles from campus racks

- Woman's opinion
  - Agrees with proposal

- Reasons
  - Bicycles in poor condition
    - Missing parts, rusty
    - Likely forgotten by owners
  - Lack of parking spaces
    - Especially near dining hall
    - Removing abandoned bikes frees up space

- Suggested solution
  - University attaches notes to bikes
  - Owners given two weeks to remove bikes or they will be removed by the university

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰、流畅的，语速适中，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，如“the old man likes the idea”，应该是“the woman likes the idea”。建议在发音和语调方面多加练习，以便更好地表达自己的观点。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是连贯、有条理的，观点之间的联系也比较清晰。但在总结提案时，可以更明确地指出提案是要求大学移除那些长时间未动过的自行车。此外，在解释女生观点时，可以提到她建议大学在移除前给车主留出两周时间来处理自行车。建议在组织和呈现观点方面多加练习，以便更好地回答问题。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, a student suggests the university should remove the old bicycles from campus racks. A student suggests that the university should remove old bicycles from campus racks.（将“the old bicycles”改为“old bicycles”，使句子更自然。）

Original: This is because they will not be missed by anyone. This is because no one will miss them.（将句子改为主动语态，使表达更自然。）

Original: And besides, it can help to free up space on the racks. Additionally, this can help free up space on the racks.（将“And besides”改为“Additionally”，使句子更连贯。）

Original: The old man likes the idea. The woman agrees with the idea.（将“the old man”改为“the woman”，纠正错误。）

Original: For the first reason, those bicycles are in a very bad condition. Firstly, those bicycles are in poor condition.（将“in a very bad condition”改为“in poor condition”，使表达更自然。）

Original: Some are missed parts and others are rusty. Some are missing parts, and others are rusty.（将“missed parts”改为“missing parts”，纠正错误。）

Original: So the university will easily remove them. Thus, the university can easily remove them.（将“will”改为“can”，使句子更自然。）

Original: And besides, there are lots of them are parked in the front of the dining hall. Moreover, many of them are parked in front of the dining hall.（将“And besides”改为“Moreover”，使句子更连贯；将“lots of them are”改为“many of them are”，使表达更自然。）

Original: So there is no space for others to park in the front of the dining hall. As a result, there is no space for others to park in front of the dining hall.（将“in the front”改为“in front”，使表达更自然。）

Original: The woman always has to lock her bicycle on the other buildings and walk to the dining hall. The woman always has to lock her bicycle at other buildings and walk to the dining hall.（将“on”改为“at”，使表达更自然。）

Revised answer (140 words):

A student suggests that the university should remove old bicycles from campus racks. This is because no one will miss them. Additionally, this can help free up space on the racks. The woman agrees with the idea. Firstly, those bicycles are in poor condition. Some are missing parts, and others are rusty. Thus, the university can easily remove them. Moreover, many of them are parked in front of the dining hall. As a result, there is no space for others to park in front of the dining hall. The woman always has to lock her bicycle at other buildings and walk to the dining hall. For these reasons, the woman likes the idea.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Remove old bicycles
  • Free up space on racks

• Woman's opinion

  • Agrees with the idea
  • Reasons
    • Bicycles in poor condition
    • Missing parts and rusty
    • Limited parking space in front of the dining hall

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and minimize unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help to avoid spelling errors in the response.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on key points and providing more concrete evidence or examples to strengthen their argument.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: Some students proposed that the university should remove those old bicycles from the bicycle racks since their owners already forgotten them and it could clean up space for someone who really need to park their bicycles. Some students proposed that the university should remove the old bicycles from the bicycle racks, as their owners have already forgotten them, and this would free up space for those who genuinely need to park their bicycles. (Corrected grammar and sentence structure)

And the women think it's such a safe assumption since numerous bicycles have already been left for years. The woman believes this is a reasonable assumption, given that numerous bicycles have been abandoned for years. (Improved sentence structure and vocabulary)

And the security members could note those owners before removing those bicycles. Additionally, security personnel could notify the owners before removing the bicycles. (Enhanced vocabulary and sentence structure)

And the women especially take the dining hall for example. The woman specifically mentions the dining hall as an example. (Clarified sentence structure)

They often hard to find spaces to park their bicycles and they need to park to another buildings and walk over to the dining halls. Students often struggle to find parking spaces for their bicycles, forcing them to park at other buildings and walk to the dining hall. (Improved grammar, sentence structure, and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

Some students proposed that the university should remove the old bicycles from the bicycle racks, as their owners have already forgotten them, and this would free up space for those who genuinely need to park their bicycles. The woman believes this is a reasonable assumption, given that numerous bicycles have been abandoned for years. Additionally, security personnel could notify the owners before removing the bicycles. The woman specifically mentions the dining hall as an example. Students often struggle to find parking spaces for their bicycles, forcing them to park at other buildings and walk to the dining hall. This situation highlights the need for the university to take action and remove abandoned bicycles, ensuring that active cyclists have access to convenient parking spaces on campus.

6. Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Remove old bicycles
  - Free up space

- Woman's opinion
  - Reasonable assumption
  - Abandoned bicycles

- Security personnel
  - Notify owners

- Dining hall example
  - Parking struggle
  - Park at other buildings

- Need for action
  - Convenient parking spaces

7. Key Words