TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman disagrees with the student’s proposal for the coffeehouse. Explain the proposal and the reasons she gives for disagreeing with it.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。为了提高发言的表达能力，建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。此外，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个相对连贯和有组织的回答，并在一定程度上说明了女生不同意男生观点的原因。但是，在解释女生不同意男生观点的原因时，可以更详细地描述这些原因，以便更好地支持自己的观点。例如，在谈到咖啡馆晚上人多时，可以具体描述一下晚上咖啡馆的氛围和学生们在那里做什么。总之，为了提高话题发展能力，请尝试在回答中提供更多细节和例子。

5.语言使用

Original: In the letter, the students think that the school should close the cafe house for four reasons. First, the cafe house is empty and it is not a good place to meet other people. Secondly, the lighting is poor there so that it is not a good place to study. But in the listening, the woman disagrees with him. First, there is not many people in the daytime, but in the evening many students go to the cafe house to get together for relax because they are busy in the daytime. Secondly, the lighting used to be very poor but the school has changed the lighting system and now the light here is as good as library and every table has a bright light too. Thank you.

Corrected: In the letter, the students a student (原文中只提到一个学生的观点) thinks that the school should close the cafe house the coffeehouse (保持用词一致) for two reasons. First, the cafe house it (避免重复使用相同词汇) is empty and it is not a good place to meet other people. Secondly, the lighting is poor there so that it is not a good place to study. However, in the listening, the woman disagrees with him. First, there areis not many not many people during (语法错误，应使用复数形式) the daytime, but in the evening many students go to the coffeehouse to get together for relax socialize and unwind (使用更高级的词汇) because they are busy in the daytime. Secondly, the lighting used to be very poor, but the school has changed the lighting system, and now the light here is as good as library in the library (语法错误，应使用正确的介词短语), and every table has a bright light too. Thank you.

Revised (140 words): In the letter, a student thinks that the school should close the coffeehouse for two reasons. First, it is empty during the day, making it an unsuitable place to meet other people. Secondly, the poor lighting makes it an unfavorable place to study. However, in the listening, the woman disagrees with him. She argues that there are not many people during daytime hours because students are busy with classes and jobs. In contrast, many students visit the coffeehouse in the evening to socialize and unwind after a long day. Furthermore, she mentions that although the lighting used to be inadequate, recent renovations have improved it significantly. Now, the lighting is as good as in the library, with every table having a bright light. Therefore, she believes that closing the coffeehouse is not necessary.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Letter
    - Student's proposal
      - Close coffeehouse
      - Reasons: empty, poor lighting
  - Listening
    - Woman's disagreement

- Body
  - Woman's first disagreement
    - Daytime vs evening
      - Busy during daytime
      - Socialize and unwind in the evening
  - Woman's second disagreement
    - Lighting improvement
      - Recent renovations
      - Comparable to library lighting

- Conclusion
  - Woman's belief
    - Closing coffeehouse unnecessary

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should focus on proper pronunciation of words and appropriate pauses between sentences.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the speaker could improve the topic development by elaborating more on the reasons why the woman disagrees with the proposal. For instance, mentioning specific examples of how students use the coffeehouse during nighttime would strengthen the argument. Additionally, providing more context about the renovations that improved the lighting would also enhance the response.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: The student proposed the school to close campus coffee. The student proposed that the school close the campus coffeehouse. (Changed the sentence structure for clarity and natural flow) Firstly, because it is often empty, so there is not a good place to meet people. Firstly, he argued that it is often empty and not a good place to meet people. (Improved sentence structure and clarity) Additionally, the student also stated that the lighting there is very poor, so it's not a good place to study. However, the woman disagreed with this statement because she said that the students are very busy during day time with classes, so they only have time during the night time to go to a coffee house. At that time, they can eat and drink at the coffee house. Secondly, she said that the lighting in the coffee house is as good as library, so she disagreed with this proposal.

Revised Answer (140 words): The student proposed that the school close the campus coffeehouse. He argued that it is often empty and not a good place to meet people. Furthermore, he mentioned that the lighting is inadequate for studying. However, the woman disagreed with his proposal for two reasons. She explained that students are usually busy during daytime hours attending classes and other activities; therefore, they only have time to visit the coffeehouse at night. During nighttime hours, students can relax, socialize, and enjoy food and beverages at the coffeehouse. Additionally, she pointed out that recent renovations have significantly improved the lighting in the coffeehouse, making it comparable to that of the library. Consequently, she believes that closing down the coffeehouse would be an unwarranted decision.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Close campus coffeehouse
  - Reasons: empty, poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Busy students during daytime
  - Nighttime usage: socializing, food, beverages
  - Improved lighting after renovations
  - Comparable to library lighting

7.Key Words