TOEFL TPO 74 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize, the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they Challenge the specific arguments presented in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：3 连贯与衔接：3 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，你的文章回答了题目要求的问题，但在一些地方需要改进。首先，在文章中，你应该更明确地指出听力材料是如何挑战阅读材料中的观点的。此外，尝试更详细地解释听力和阅读材料之间的差异，以便更清楚地表达你的观点。

示例1： 原文：“In fact, in 1930s, the owner of the Mystery Hili moved the stones for the purpose of making the stone much more similar to the ancient England Stonehenge.” 改进：“The professor in the lecture pointed out that the owner of Mystery Hill in the 1930s moved many stones to make it resemble England's Stonehenge, thus challenging the reading's claim about their original arrangement.”

示例2： 原文：“However, it can also just because of planting activities, like scratches made by metal plot.” 改进：“The lecturer argued that these marks are likely accidental scratches made by farming equipment, such as a metal plow, which contradicts the reading's assertion that they are early European writing.”

4.文章结构与组织 在文章结构和组织方面，你需要进行一些调整。首先，在引言部分简要介绍听力和阅读材料的主题，并说明它们之间存在争议。然后，在正文部分，为每个观点分配一个段落，并使用恰当的过渡词和短语来连接这些段落。最后，在结论部分总结文章的主要观点。

示例1： 原文：“In the reading passage, it mentioned that there were several features of Mystery Hill could support that Europeans were presented in North America earlier than when we believed.” 改进：“The reading passage presents evidence suggesting that Europeans were present in North America earlier than previously believed, based on certain features of Mystery Hill. However, the lecture challenges these claims by providing counterarguments.”

示例2： 原文：“Firstly, There is much similarity between the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill and some famous stone structure in Europe.” 改进：“Firstly, the reading passage claims that the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill is similar to some famous stone structures in Europe. However, the lecture disputes this by stating that...”

5. 语法批改

In the reading passage, it mentioned that there were severalfeaturesseveral features(misspelling) of Mystery Hill could support that Europeans were presented in North America earlier than when we believed.

Firstly, There is much similarity between the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill and some famous stone structure in Europe. However, in the lecture, the professor argued that some of the upright standing stone structure we see today may have some difference between the positions they stand now and the position they stood when they were built. In fact, in 1930sin the 1930s(Missing definite article in the date), the owner of the Mystery HiliHill(misspelling) moved the stones for the purpose of making the stone much more similar to the ancient England Stonehenge. Therefore, it may attractedattract(Non-infinitive verb after modal verbs) more customers,

Secondly, the writer stated that the researches have found out an early type of European writing carved on a large flat stone which was findfound(Agreement: 'been' or 'was' + past tense) at Mystery Hill. However, the professor argued that it is not a conclusive evidence. There waswere(Detects potentially wrong usage of "was") also curved lines, although the straight lines themselves may look like a simple writing style. However, it can also just because of planting activities, like scratches made by metal plot. It makes sense since the area has been used for planting.

Thirdly, (Two consecutive spaces)the large stone at Mystery Hill were quarried and reshaped in a same way as Europeans used many years ago. However, the lecture stated that this kind of tools and methods were also used by Americans. There is another discovery which has small jewelry on them (Two consecutive spaces)which was used by native AmericansNative Americans(Checks upper/lower case spelling of some proper nouns) for decoration. We can ensuredensure(Non-infinitive verb after modal verbs) that it was made by native AmericansNative Americans(Checks upper/lower case spelling of some proper nouns), while it has similar scratches made by tools on it as the large stone.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage presents several arguments to support the idea that Europeans were present in North America earlier than previously believed, based on certain features of Mystery Hill. However, the lecture challenges these arguments with counterpoints.

Firstly, the reading passage highlights the similarity between the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill and some well-known European stone structures. Nevertheless, the lecture contends that the current positions of these upright standing stones may not be their original placements. The professor explains that during the 1930s, Mystery Hill's owner possibly moved these stones to make them resemble England's famous Stonehenge, thus attracting more tourists and generating profit.

Secondly, the reading passage states that researchers discovered an early type of European writing carved on a large flat stone at Mystery Hill. Contrarily, the professor argues that this is not conclusive evidence as these straight lines might appear like a simple writing system but could also be accidental scratches caused by farming equipment since the area was used for agriculture.

Lastly, according to the reading passage, large stones at Mystery Hill were quarried and reshaped using methods similar to those employed by Europeans many years ago. However, the lecture asserts that such tools and techniques were also utilized by Native Americans. The professor cites another discovery: small jewelry pieces adorned by Native Americans as decorations. These items bear similar tool marks as those found on large stones at Mystery Hill, suggesting that both artifacts were created using identical tools and methods by Native Americans. (252 words)

Section Title: 7. Article Revision

In the reading passage, it is mentioned that there were severalfeatures several features of Mystery Hill could support the idea that Europeans were presented present in North America earlier than when we previously believed. However, the lecture provides counterarguments to challenge these claims.

Firstly, There is much the reading passage points out the similarity between the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill and some famous European stone structure in Europe. However, in the lecture, the professor argued that some of the structures. In contrast, the lecture argues that the current positions of these upright standing stone structure we see today stones may have some difference between the positions they stand now and the position they stood when they were built. In fact, not be their original placements. The professor explains that in the 1930s, the Mystery Hill's owner of the Mystery Hili likely moved the stones for the purpose of making the stone much these stones to make them resemble England's renowned Stonehenge, thus attracting more similar to the ancient England Stonehenge. Therefore, it may attracted more customers, visitors and generating revenue.

Secondly, the writer stated that the researches have found out reading passage states that researchers discovered an early type of European writing carved on a large flat stone which was find at Mystery Hill. However, On the other hand, the professor argued that it contends that this is not a conclusive evidence. There was also curved lines, although the evidence as these straight lines themselves may might look like a simple writing style. However, it can system but could also just because of planting activities, like be accidental scratches made by metal plot. It makes sense caused by farming equipment since the area has been was used for planting. ¶ Thirdly, the agriculture.

Lastly, according to the reading passage, large stone stones at Mystery Hill were quarried and reshaped in a same way as using methods similar to those employed by Europeans used many years ago. However, the lecture stated that this kind of asserts that such tools and methods techniques were also used by utilized by Native Americans. There is The professor cites another discovery which has discovery: small jewelry pieces adorned by Native Americans as decorations. These items bear similar tool marks as those found on them which was used by native Americans for decoration. We can ensured that it was made by native Americans, while it has similar scratches made by large stones at Mystery Hill, suggesting that both artifacts were created using identical tools on it as the large stone.and methods by Native Americans.

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Reading passage: Europeans in North America earlier than believed
  - Lecture: Challenges these arguments

- Argument 1: Stone arrangement
  - Reading passage: Similar to European stone structures
  - Lecture: Stones possibly moved in the 1930s for tourism purposes

- Argument 2: Early European writing
  - Reading passage: Carved on a large flat stone at Mystery Hill
  - Lecture: Could be accidental scratches from farming equipment

- Argument 3: Quarrying and reshaping methods
  - Reading passage: Similar to European methods
  - Lecture: Native Americans used the same tools and techniques

- Conclusion
  - Lecture challenges the reading passage's arguments effectively

9. Keywords

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯性和衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

总体来说，你的文章在任务完成度方面表现不错，但仍有改进的空间。首先，在总结听力部分时，需要更详细地解释讲座中提到的观点以及它们是如何挑战阅读材料中的论点的。此外，在引用听力内容时，尽量使用更准确的词汇和表达。

示例1： 原文：Moreover, the author puts forward that there is a large flat stone which appears to have an early type of European writing carved into it at Mystery Hill. By the contrary, the lecturer retorts that those marks were not carved by European. 改进：Moreover, the author points out that a large flat stone at Mystery Hill has an early type of European writing carved into it. In contrast, the lecturer argues that these marks are not ancient European writing but rather accidental scratches made by farming equipment.

示例2： 原文：Finally, the author has a belief that the method of how the lare stones were quarrified and reshaped are not associated with ancient Native Americans. 改进：Finally, the author believes that the methods used to quarry and reshape the large stones at Mystery Hill are not associated with ancient Native Americans but rather with Europeans.

4.文章结构与组织 在文章结构和组织方面，你需要注意以下几点：首先，确保每段都有明确的主题句和支持细节。其次，使用恰当的过渡词和短语来连接不同的观点和段落。最后，确保文章有一个清晰的结论。

示例1： 原文：To begin with, the auhtor claims that the way how the stones at Mystery Hill are arranged is similar to some structures in Europe. 改进：To begin with, the author claims that the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill is similar to some well-known stone structures in Europe.

示例2： 原文：On the other side, the lecturer refutes that the new research found by archeologists has made a strong evidence that there is no doubt that those large stones at Mystery Hil are clearly made by Native American. 改进：On the other hand, the lecturer counters this argument by presenting new research findings from archaeologists, which provide strong evidence that those large stones at Mystery Hill were indeed created by Native Americans.

5. 语法批改

The author in the reading believes that the stones of Mystery Hill are associated with European, while the lecturer in the listening presents an opposite opinion. To begin with, the auhtorauthor(misspelling) claims that the way how the stones at Mystery Hill are arranged is similar to some structures in Europe. However, the lecturer rebuts that the position where the stones at Mystery Hill are arranged is not original. The stones had already been moved away, which is used to attract more tourists to get more financial profits. Moreover, the author puts forward that there is a large flat stone which appears to have an early type of European writing carved into it at Mystery Hill. By the contrary, the lecturer retorts that those marks were not carved by European. More likely, they were left by the farmers for a long time. Finally, the author has a belief that the method of how the larelair(misspelling) stones were quarrifiedqualified(misspelling) and reshaped are not associated with ancient Native Americans. On the other side, the lecturer refutes that the new research found by archeologists has made a strong evidence that there is no doubt that those large stones at Mystery HilHis(misspelling) are clearly made by Native American.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The author in the reading asserts that the stones of Mystery Hill have European origins, while the lecturer in the listening presents a contrasting viewpoint.

Firstly, the author claims that the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill is similar to some structures in Europe. However, the lecturer counters this by stating that the current positions of these stones are not original. They were likely moved to attract more tourists and generate financial profit.

Furthermore, the author mentions a large flat stone at Mystery Hill with what appears to be an early type of European writing carved into it. In contrast, the lecturer argues that these marks were not created by Europeans but were likely left by farmers over time.

Lastly, the author believes that the methods used to quarry and reshape large stones at Mystery Hill are not associated with ancient Native Americans. On the other hand, the lecturer refutes this claim by citing new research from archaeologists that provides strong evidence supporting Native American origins for these large stones at Mystery Hill. (176 words)

The author in the reading believes that the stones of Mystery Hill are associated with European, asserts that the stones of Mystery Hill have European origins, while the lecturer in the listening presents an opposite opinion. a contrasting viewpoint (Changed "opposite opinion" to "contrasting viewpoint" for better word choice).

To begin with, the auhtor Firstly, the author claims that the way how the stones at Mystery Hill are arranged arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill is similar to some structures in Europe. However, the lecturer rebuts that the position where the stones at Mystery Hill counters this by stating that the current positions of these stones are arranged is not original. The stones had already been original (Rephrased for clarity). They were likely moved away, which is used to attract more tourists to get more and generate financial profits. profit (Revised for better sentence structure).

Moreover, the author puts forward that there is Furthermore, the author mentions a large flat stone which at Mystery Hill with what appears to have be an early type of European writing carved into it at Mystery Hill. By the contrary, the lecturer retorts that those it. In contrast, the lecturer argues that these marks were not carved by European. More likely, they created by Europeans but were likely left by the farmers for a long time. over time (Changed "By the contrary" to "In contrast" for better transition).

Finally, the author has a belief that the method of how the lare stones were quarrified Lastly, the author believes that the methods used to quarry and reshaped reshape large stones at Mystery Hill are not associated with ancient Native Americans. On the other side, hand, the lecturer refutes that the this claim by citing new research found by archeologists has made a from archaeologists that provides strong evidence that there is no doubt that those supporting Native American origins for these large stones at Mystery Hil are clearly made by Native American.Hill (Improved sentence structure and clarity).

8. Mind Map

9. Keywords

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Section Title: 6. Article Revision

The author in the reading asserts that the stones of Mystery Hill have European origins, while the lecturer in the listening presents a contrasting viewpoint.

Firstly, the author claims that the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill is similar to some structures in Europe. However, the lecturer counters this by stating that the current positions of these stones are not original. They were likely moved to attract more tourists and generate financial profit.

Furthermore, the author mentions a large flat stone at Mystery Hill with what appears to be an early type of European writing carved into it. In contrast, the lecturer argues that these marks were not created by Europeans but were likely left by farmers over time.

Lastly, the author believes that the methods used to quarry and reshape large stones at Mystery Hill are not associated with ancient Native Americans. On the other hand, the lecturer refutes this claim by citing new research from archaeologists that provides strong evidence supporting Native American origins for these large stones at Mystery Hill.

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 3

• Organization: 3

• Coherence and Cohesion: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 20

3.Task completeness The essay addresses the main points of the lecture and reading passage, but it could be improved by providing more specific details and examples from both sources. Additionally, the essay should focus on how the lecture challenges the arguments presented in the reading passage.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Include more specific details from both the lecture and reading passage.

• Clearly explain how each point made in the lecture challenges the arguments presented in the reading passage.

Examples:

1. Instead of saying "the alignment is formed not longer ago," provide a clearer explanation such as "the lecturer argues that the current alignment of stones at Mystery Hill may not be original, as historians suspect that a private owner moved many of them in an attempt to attract tourists."

2. Instead of saying "the lines actually was caved by accidentally," write "the lecturer contends that these marks are likely accidental scratches made by farming equipment rather than ancient European writing."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, it could be improved by better organizing each paragraph to focus on a specific point from the lecture and how it challenges an argument from the reading passage. Clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs should also be present.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Focus each paragraph on a specific point from the lecture and explain how it challenges an argument from the reading passage.

• Use clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs to improve coherence.

Examples:

1. Begin each body paragraph with a clear topic sentence that states which argument from the reading passage is being challenged by a point made in the lecture.

2. Use transition words or phrases such as "however," "on the other hand," or "in contrast" to show the relationship between the arguments in the reading passage and the points made in the lecture.

5. Grammar

The reading and the lecture are both about the similarities between the Mystery Hill and European monuments. While the author of the article argues that the builders of Mystery Hill were inspired by European monuments, the lecturer disputes the claims mentioned in the article. Her position is that the similarities isare(Detects potentially wrong usage of "is") just coincidentally occurred.

First of allFirst(first of all (first)), according to the reading, the author useuses(punctuation + singular noun + plural verb) the similarities between the two's arrangement to support the idea. The article mentions that the alignment between the large stones and the astronomical events is in precisely the same way. This argument is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that the alignment is formed not longerno longer(not longer -> no longer) ago. Additionally, she points out that the stones are moved by the owner rather than the builder to attract more tourists.

Secondly, the author suggests the writing system is linked to very old Europe. The article notes that therethere are(Detects missing verb in "there is/are") caved straight lines on the stones shared with Irish people in Europe. The lecturer, however, asserts that the lines actually waswere(Detects potentially wrong usage of "was") caved by accidentally. She goes on to say that the remains isare(Detects potentially wrong usage of "is") left by farming process.

Finally, the author puts forth the idea that the quarried large stones, altered by hammering and burning, are similar to the activities in Europe. The author contends that there were no such method associated with ancient Native Americans. In contrast, the lecturer's stance is the quarrying is clearly made by Native American. She says that the jury of same type of marks have appeared early through other evidences.

Section Title: 6. Revised Essay

The reading and the lecture both discuss the similarities between Mystery Hill and European monuments. While the author of the article argues that the builders of Mystery Hill were inspired by European monuments, the lecturer disputes these claims, asserting that any similarities are merely coincidental.

Firstly, the author cites the arrangement of stones at Mystery Hill as evidence for a connection to European monuments, specifically mentioning their alignment with astronomical events in a manner similar to Stonehenge. However, the lecturer challenges this argument by stating that these alignments were not present in their original positions. She further explains that many stones were likely moved by a private owner in the 1930s to make Mystery Hill resemble Stonehenge and attract more tourists.

Secondly, the author suggests that an early type of European writing found on a large flat stone at Mystery Hill indicates a link to ancient Europe. The article notes that this writing system, consisting of straight lines, was used by Irish people around 1,500 years ago. Contrarily, the lecturer asserts that these lines were most likely created accidentally by farming equipment rather than being intentional carvings from ancient Europeans.

Lastly, the author posits that quarrying methods used at Mystery Hill are similar to those practiced in Europe long ago and not generally associated with ancient Native Americans. In contrast, the lecturer contends that there is clear evidence suggesting Native Americans were responsible for quarrying at Mystery Hill. She explains that smaller stone objects such as jewelry found at the site bear similar tool marks as those on larger stones, indicating that both were crafted using identical hammering techniques employed by Native Americans. (278 words)

The reading and the lecture are both about discuss the similarities between the Mystery Hill and European monuments. While the author of the article argues that the builders of Mystery Hill were inspired by European monuments, the lecturer disputes the claims mentioned in the article. Her position is that the these claims, asserting that any similarities is just coincidentally occurred. are merely coincidental (revised for clarity).

First of all, according to the reading, Firstly, the author use the similarities between the two's cites the arrangement to support the idea. The article mentions that the of stones at Mystery Hill as evidence for a connection to European monuments, specifically mentioning their alignment between the large stones and the with astronomical events is in precisely the same way. This a manner similar to Stonehenge. However, the lecturer challenges this argument is challenged by the lecturer. by stating that these alignments were not present in their original positions (clarified meaning). She claims that the alignment is formed not longer ago. Additionally, she points out that the further explains that many stones are were likely moved by the a private owner rather than the builder to in the 1930s to make Mystery Hill resemble Stonehenge and attract more tourists. tourists (added specific details).

Secondly, the author suggests the that an early type of European writing system is linked to very old found on a large flat stone at Mystery Hill indicates a link to ancient Europe. The article notes that there caved this writing system, consisting of straight lines on the stones shared with lines, was used by Irish people in Europe. The lecturer, however, around 1,500 years ago. Contrarily, the lecturer asserts that the these lines actually was caved by accidentally. She goes on to say that the remains is left were most likely created accidentally by farming process. equipment rather than being intentional carvings from ancient Europeans (corrected "caved" to "created" and clarified meaning).

Finally, Lastly, the author puts forth the idea that the quarried large stones, altered by hammering and burning, posits that quarrying methods used at Mystery Hill are similar to the activities those practiced in Europe. The author contends that there were no such method Europe long ago and not generally associated with ancient Native Americans. In contrast, the lecturer's stance lecturer contends that there is the clear evidence suggesting Native Americans were responsible for quarrying is clearly made at Mystery Hill (clarified meaning). She explains that smaller stone objects such as jewelry found at the site bear similar tool marks as those on larger stones, indicating that both were crafted using identical hammering techniques employed by Native American. She says that the jury of same type of marks have appeared early through other evidences.Americans (added specific details).

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Mystery Hill and European monuments similarities
  - Author's argument: builders of Mystery Hill were inspired by European monuments
  - Lecturer's counterargument: similarities are coincidental

- Stone Arrangement
  - Author: alignment with astronomical events, like Stonehenge
  - Lecturer: alignments not original, stones moved by private owner in the 1930s

- Writing System
  - Author: early European writing found on a large flat stone, used by Irish people around 1,500 years ago
  - Lecturer: lines likely created accidentally by farming equipment

- Quarrying Methods
  - Author: similar to those practiced in Europe, not associated with ancient Native Americans
  - Lecturer: evidence suggests Native Americans responsible for quarrying at Mystery Hill, identical hammering techniques used on small and large stones

9. Key Words