TOEFL TPO 75 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example of the lecture illustrates the technique of behavioral exposure.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve their delivery by avoiding repetition of certain phrases, such as "the professor" and "Tommy." Additionally, the speaker should work on varying their sentence structure to create a more engaging and natural flow. To improve, the speaker can practice speaking aloud and focusing on maintaining a steady pace while incorporating varied sentence structures.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The example of Tommy moving to a new neighborhood and gradually overcoming his fear of talking to other children effectively illustrates the technique of behavioral exposure. However, the speaker could further develop their response by elaborating on how the gradual increase in Tommy's interactions with the neighborhood kids helped him build confidence and overcome his fear. To improve topic development, the speaker can focus on providing more detailed explanations and examples to support their main points.

5.Language Use

Behavioral exposure is a technique teaching used to teach ("used to teach" is more natural and grammatically correct) children how to overcome their fears by gradually throwing introducing ("introducing" is a more appropriate word choice than "throwing") them something to challenging situations ("to challenging situations" provides clarity and context). In that lecture, the professor provides an example of his son Tommy. When he was eight years old, they moved to a new neighborhood and at the beginning Tommy was afraid to go out to talk to the neighborhood's kids. But one evening the professor took him out and when they passed the kids, the professor asked him to probably simply ("simply" is a better word choice than "probably") say hi to the kids and Tommy did. On their way back, the professor talked to Tommy again, asking him to say hi proactively. Tommy did so. By doing this gradually, having Tommy to be proactively throwing himself proactively engage with ("proactively engage with" is a more natural and accurate phrase) the kids, they become friends finally.

Revised Answer (140 words):

Behavioral exposure is a technique used to teach children how to overcome their fears by gradually introducing them to challenging situations. In the lecture, the professor shares an example of his son Tommy, who was initially afraid to interact with the neighborhood kids after moving to a new area. One evening, the professor encouraged Tommy to simply say hi to the kids as they passed by, which he did. On their way back, the professor asked Tommy to proactively greet the kids again. By gradually having Tommy proactively engage with the children, he was able to overcome his fear and eventually become friends with them. This example effectively demonstrates how behavioral exposure can help children build confidence and face their fears through incremental steps and positive experiences.

6.Mind Map

- Behavioral exposure
    - Technique
        - Overcome fears
        - Gradual introduction
    - Example
        - Tommy
            - New neighborhood
            - Afraid of interaction
        - Professor's encouragement
            - Saying hi
            - Proactive greeting
    - Outcome
        - Overcoming fear
        - Making friends

7.Key Words